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Tourism has changed around the world.Identify the reasons and explain what impact globalization has had on tourism

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his essay focuses on two contributing factors,  transportation and information technology(IT). The progresses of those two aspects globally have significant impact on tourism, even though there still are some negative effects need to be addressed ,it enhances the comprehensive ability of countries to a great extent and has positive effect on tourism industry.

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Useful for my introduction:give a general background to introduce my main topic

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Useful for my introduction:give a general background to introduce my main topic

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Useful for my first aspect: transportation. This article offer a similar idea with my main supporting ideas.

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Draft Short essay feedback_Portfolio Hui Duan (002)

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There are significant improvement in my final essay,compared with first draft.Firstly, in my first draft, the words are insufficient, which can not meet the requirement,even can not have the whole structure, so I add some parts in final one. Furthermore, I have several wrong citations,because I just use other author’s words directly but not paraphrase,which could be viewed as plagiarism.Thus,in final essay,I correct the mistake,use the in-text citation and give some explanation.Meanwhile, I add the reference list in final essay, which is not included in first draft. Those two are obvious progresses for me.According to the feedback that the link between paragraphs is unclear, I think it means that the draft lacks some linking words and linking sentence to explain the relationship between each paragraph,so I complete this part in final one.In my opinion,the feedback from tutor can offer effective suggestions for our final essay, we can revise our article according to it.