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Sophie

good detailed research into topic

Maybe interview or do a questionnaire with women to help get more qualitative data

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Sophia

Really good research and examples, the topic is very interesting

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Sophia

You're explanation is really good and the concept of your FMP - I like how you're looking a the different perspectives of woman in each culture/race

I think doing interviews would be really useful for your FMP as it will give you more insight on women's experiences

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Sophia

good topic to work on and very clear idea of how to explore it and what you're doing

good opportunity to get data from people who identity as women for your work to help further it

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Muna

Really good presentation. i like the final outcome idea

Show research that supports your reason for this project/ final outcome ( e.g. how people can become parasocial, what age is this targeted towards, evidence/statistics )

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Muna

Interesting topic and concept, good context and explanation

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Muna

I think your final outcome is really cool of medicine packaging

I think you could also create an information leaflet about the medicine and posters/social media posts advertising it

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Elyse

good at explaining your idea and how it relates to you (more personal)

Very detailed research

Explain more about the audience ( who attends the festival, how your rebranding will attract the target audience and why)

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Elyse

I like how the theme is linked to childhood memories, there is a lot of good analysis through the poster and logo research

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Elyse

really well researched proposal with lots of it evidenced

look into brands/festivals that have been redesigned recently to help you

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Daisy

Good idea presented

Research artists that can help with your final idea

I think more primary research included

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Daisy

I liked how you used books as a research source - I think you could vary your research

Such as looking at movie/theatre performance posters

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Daisy

good primary research added to your presentation and a good presentation overall

look into how your idea/s will develop over the coming weeks

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Whitney

good clear plan of what you're doing

research and knowledge on your topic is evident

visit any relevant exhibitions

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Whitney

The concept is very good, and there was a good amount of context and research sources

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Whitney

I liked how you included possible outcomes that you're going to produce for FMP and the context of why you're doing this as your FMP

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Nia - untitled (Nostalgia?)

history of the art movement could be included for context (artists from that time)

Google maps could be used to see how Hong Kong has changed over the years

Haylee's feedback

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Nia - Childhood nostalgia

Good use of a large moodboard and a topic that hits close to home, I really think that you can cover the change in social situations in Hong Kong from the early 2000s to present day.

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Bertie - untitled (Make a house a home?)

Love the idea of food plans + models (think about drafts and trials + making it accurate, visit R2 and Geoff for help?)

material + machinery research would help (cost, size?)

might be a great idea to create client profiles for the different rooms and sketches to give an idea for style (could base them off real people)

Haylee's feedback

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BERTIE

GOOD - Consideration of art history and art movements is really good. It's fun that you're playing with 3D space as well - not just 2D media.

CONSTRUCTIVE CRIT. - show what materials you intend to use for your final piece.

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Jack - Food consumption

try viewing the project from a product design perspective; so look at similar products (maybe 3) and talk about ACCESSFMM (aesthetics, customer, cost, environment, safety, size, function, materials, manufacture)

Country consumption and how they differ

how does food consumption affect people (malnutrition + malnourishment, obesity etc)

Haylee's feedback

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Maya

Good research maybe expand more into the artistic part of your topic and see how you can visually tell this story and message

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Jack

Strong argument and a very interesting topic on how food affects our behaviour and the dark side to marketing and big brands. Would really like to see where this goes.

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Maya

Good concept and something that will definitely shine a light on mental health in society.

Good mindmaps show clear visuals.

Maybe more primary research

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JACK

GOOD - Really good research into brand identities regarding food, unhealthy food vs healthy food and packaging, promotion etc.

CONSTRUCTIVE CRIT. - Add images so that we get an idea of the kind of artists or designers that you're referencing.

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Maya

Unique idea and good examples of research

To improve add some visual examples of the graphics and some inspiration for this

Think about interviews as well

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Maya

-Good concept

-I like the idea of building a campaign with mock ups and posters

-Make a plan to ensure you get enough trials with all of the campaign aspects.

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Use of greek mythology, family trauma, and american gothic goes so well. I already talked about Beloved but a comic that deal with similiar themes Maus, good read

Also some comics/comic artists that have really good visual presentation

Junji ito, scud the disposable assasissin, berserk (modern gothic too), Gast, sam and max, watchmen

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Maya

I like the campaign idea! Nice moodboard!

Good knowledge on your audience and proposed primary research with the interviews. I like that you aim to use various types of sources instead of just the internet.

Maybe creating a social media account could help build a community for the cause? :)

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Lucas

Very strong concept, I love American Gothic so I'm excited to see where it goes. As for what can be improved I'm unsure what your final deliverable is however I still see a lot of promise in it and I'm sure it'll be great

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Good research on art style and artists, American Gothic style will make your illustration much more unique. To help yourself in your time management maybe produce a clear outline of when you intend to get things done. Maybe research different mediums to see whether physical mediums like watercolour might translate your theme great

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Lucas

Good range of research and enthusiasm for the topic. You seem to be well versed in both literary and film based mediums which is great!

What is your final? What materials do you want to use to experiment with? What could be the disadvantages or limitations of using certain mediums e.g. time restraints / learning software etc.

Great project tho - super interesting but i dont expect any less :)

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Lucas

Gothic 👌💪 love the concept. I can definitely see your work in a gothic sense so really suits!

It’s great you want to experiment with different mediums and research from films and books will definitely help your illustration.

I cant wait to see your outcomes :)

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Lucas

i like the theme you choose and can see it ending up being a great end project.

the secondary research was strong and I liked the mood board you made.

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Lucas

Really interesting concept with great scope for research and experimentation

Think about some primary research

Nice clear vision and timetable

I like how you mixed classics and American gothic

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Lucas

-Good explanation of what the topics are

-Good images for inspiration

-What type of final outcome will you consider making?

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Sonny

I really like your idea a lot, you could look into y2K and other internet demographics fashion styles

Would always be cool to see someone drag on Elon Musk again and how he absolutely ruined that site

Ava

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Tinu - Consumption

Love the history and details, shows great understanding of the background of your idea - how will this be incorporated (fact file etc)?

If your FMP is about ads, try looking at how they are all presented (media, tv, billboards etc)

Try looking at rules and policies of consumption (produce, materials etc) and how consumption differs between countries (e.g. USA vs African Countries)

Haylee's feedback

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Sonny

Clear idea of what you want to do taking into account the sustainability of fashion.

Look into some primary research very cool concept :)

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Tinu - Overconsumption

Really strong pointers and what you're going to do with your FMP and I really look forward to what you create!

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Sonny

Good understanding of the context of your theme! Strong opinions which is always good to stem ideas off of!

Ethical concepts in mind such as sustainability is a good detail. Maybe look into your specific audience. Who do you want this project to speak to. Is it the general public? Teens? people who think the internet is damaging? is it just a piece of art you wanna put out there? Figuring this out can help you polish your final outcome to answer the needs of your chosen audience, cus its quite a broad topic, so you need to narrow it slightly.

Really interesting topic! :))

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Sonny

making posters and other things are a great way to show software use and skill.

good research into the them

maybe do a mood board to show your idea more visually

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sonny

personal connection to concept

solid ideas for final outcome

maybe go to fashion museums for research?

more research into internet culture and the state of it today, dead internet theory, bots just stealing designs and putting them on shirts

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TINU

GOOD - Really in depth research, great planning & production. The context about the history of consumerism has had a lot of work put into it.

CONSTRUCTIVE CRIT. - Maybe provide some artist inspirations so we know what kind of posters you intend to create.

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Sonny

Interesting concept with good potential for interviews

To improve try some primary research and specific examples

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Sonny

-I like the campaign idea and it's very uplifting for small artists and empowering. Fits the overarching theme well.

- Try getting a range of resources for your research stage.

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Hannah

Interesting topic and often very criticized as a man I really look forward to the outcome of this project. Also, the way you approach the project is great. Moreover more about the process and the design medium would be better.

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Ava

Strong concept, looking forward to seeing your creature designs. I think for the details I'd like to know what the final product will be aside from the designs, maybe a game trailer?

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Hannah

Very in detail, unique and interesting project concept, strong research too. Expand on your ideas connecting them to your research and how it will take form for your process and outcome.

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Bertie - Housing crisis

A strong point on a fact that has not had much light shone upon it and needs to be addressed. Good work on the suggestion of using sustainable materials to accentuate the environmental factor of architecture and interior design.

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Ava

great theme and depth of research on it, the concept is unique and intriguing

good research primary and secondary

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Ava

Interesting idea and I like how you are taking inspiration from New Zealand.

It’s good that you already have ideas about what you want it to look like

To improve add some research into how existing games have exploded character design

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Ava

Good use of primary and secondary research and clear understanding of what you want to do. Might be good to research New Zealand and Maui artists to influence your character designs.

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Ava

-The concept is unique and interesting with the pokemon aspect

-The research using books is good

-Try make a timeline to ensure you get enough trials

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Ava

I like the fact that your topic is relevant to today! Good understanding of ethics and your audience. Good range of research so far. I like your showcase of initial idea development.

A book diversifies your research which is great!

Is this going to be a 2D or 3D outcome? what sort of materials would you need to experiment with or execute the plan?

A timetable would be good :)

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Hannah

good topic to showcase!

You could research this idea further. I think that you could create some very powerful work through this topic. explain how you are going to investigate this topic through primary research and how you will carry this out. Clearly state what materials are needed for this project and what you will need to plan to meet these aims

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Ava

Interesting concept and I like the idea of going into character designs.

I really liked how you took into account the ethical design manifesto with culture and trying to present your work in a non offensive way.

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ava

cool concept very specific

take a look at the art book vermis, its like a players guide/artbook for a video game that doesn't exist, its more horror orientated but it seems similar to what you want to do, could take inspo from the format/style

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Hannah

I like that you are shredding light on a topic that is often dismissed and something women often have to "get on with".

Also, highlighting lots of common stereotypes and flipping them on its head, sounds like it could be an interesting collection of work.

Maybe try talking to a range of people and how much they know of this topic or women's menstrual health so that it's ethical still.

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Hannah

Well researched starting point- established different articles to look at, nuanced topic, flipping gender stereotypes, addressing deep rooted misogynistic structures

Narrow down goal and purpose

Sensitively address how you discuss and approach the way religion views periods (you mentioned how you may not be allowed into religious houses on your period)

Primary research- interview men and women on how they view periods

Freya

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Barbora - Paper planes

-clear planning

-Love how she explained her proposal

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TENZIN

GOOD - love the multimedia approach, alongside the personal link to Tibetan culture. The context of China invading Tibet is really important and hopefully this project will allow you to empower your Tibetan identity and fight against Tibetan erasure in China.

CONSTRUCTIVE CRIT - maybe develop the idea of your final concept further so you have a more concrete goal.

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Alex

Strong concept and passionate about the subject.

Clear understanding of what you want to do as an outcome alongside strong detailed research. Strong sketches got me interested in football fr fr.

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alex

good topic as you're personally invested

i like the idea of tying it to a current event like the euros

clear timeline and action plan

deeper look into football and society and its link with the working class, ik youre looking into european countries but it has a big relevance amongst working class people in latin america (argentina losing their minds for a week when they won the world cup and forgetting the country is in an economic spiral)

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Alex

Good theme with personal interest

It’s good that you have intentions of experimentation with different mediums

To improve maybe research some historical examples of the impacts of football as well as recent ones, and maybe ones from around the world

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Alex

the theme was very good

I liked the materials you are thinking of using

good use of primary and secondary research

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Alex

Interesting and certainly a lot to look into with the impact of football on society especially in terms of this country

Would be good to research into the history of how football is funded so heavily and footballers paid so muchwhile key workers are not. Advertisement and politics play into it

I remember my old teacher from Greece told me how during the huge uprising and social upheaval the undemocratic government would only play football and news on T.V. She said how both were used to distract and not talk about actual ongoing issues.

Focusing on the actual joy of the sport is nice to consider , removing all the nasty baggage of reality but its important to consider

Ava

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Freya

Good introduction to your project, including strong research relating to your concept. Explained your process clearly and sense of direction for it too.

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Alex

Good range of research starting points! Nice drawings and plan for using a range of materials. You are clearly enthusiastic about this project but make sure you can link it to the theme. This will probably come under either protest or empowerment.

Maybe organise a way to collect data from other people and their opinions on the topic. Did they agree with the harassment the three players faced or not? a questionnaire would be good to broaden your data so that its not just your own views

three books may be too big of a project in the time frame... make sure you have enough time to execute each well if you end up proceeding. :)

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Alex

Good project so far, I feel like it needs more detail on what the final product is going to be. Is it for posters? a magazine? a campaign? I saw you say you were printing it but I'm not sure what the overall product is

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Alex

-Strong research (primary and secondary)

-Clear timeline and plan

- How will you present your final outcome professionally?

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Tenzin

Really good start and love how you implement illustration into photography. Strong idea and really shines a light on what is happening to your people

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Jess:

Great topic, it is a large idea to explore with both the hiding/created shame of being a woman, and the punk unashamed imagery of modern women. Explore a range of techniques, both digital and physical/traditional, and a range of artists.

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Freya

You have informative research and discuss more niche questions within the topic of fast fashion, especially liked the calling out the hypocrisy of brands who celebrate International Women's Day and Pride Month.

How will you interpret fast fashion and your research into an illustration?

Also, maybe for primary research could reach out to small brands and ask about the impact of fast fashion on their businesses.

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Freya

The vision is great. Creating more awareness about this subject would be very helpful. As well as the in depth research that helps people understand the matter better. Moreover there are some very good examples.To improve there could be more about the mediums and the design process behind this ptoject.

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Freya

forming initial ideas - formulating first steps and methods - showing clear goals - clear research, extending research out of initial subject, looking at case studies - good planning

Do some further primary research, try do some interviews - explore what methods you could use for these - look at goal

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Tenzin - The land of God

Love to see you looking at your culture, it makes the project more personal to you and more important

Interviews to see how ppl feel about traditions etc would be a good idea for primary research

Haylee's feedback

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Freya

clear and informative research!

what could the posters include and how will they visually look? Could you go to a fast fashion shop and and investigate the quality side of the items as they are made cheaply? Are you aiming to make fast fashion stop or is it just to reduced the mass production as some people can only afford fast fashioned items- you could look at both sides to fast fashion?

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Maya

I really liked your presentation! You are clear with what you’re doing and how you plan to do primary research. I think you should look into more inspiration for you final outcome. Really well done

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Haylee

Really good start and good to develop your skillset in terms of character design, if you want to pursue that in the future.

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Jess

Really really strong idea, lots of scope for cool final project!!

could look at creating a fake spoof product as well as posters?

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Jess

Great research, backed with relevant imagery. You’ve tied together cultural and social ideas well but what you intend to create as an outcome could be finalised more clearly.

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jadaya

i think you could interview people who have migrated and ask how this has affected them - have they experienced any struggles, language barrier and if it affected their cultural heritage. for an alternative/ fresh perspective you could look into a book 'untethered soul' the author explored the meaning of 'self' and how we find who we are.

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HAYLEE

GOOD - I love the idea of a concept art book as the media form, great artist reseach. Really well thought out plot for the world you are creating.

CONSTRUCTIVE CRIT. - I don't have any !!

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Jadaya

concept is well thought out and shows clear direction. The book The Boy, the Mole, the Fox and the Horse could be helpful for illustration inspiration

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Naomi

Good research and historical context, i never thought about tattoos in such perspective. Well done presentation which covers all of required criteria

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BLESSING

GOOD - Really great planning and production, a lot of experimentation and problem solving. Really unique idea to manage design and create an event - very interactve and you're tapping into a niche underrepresented are within the university.

CONSTRUCTIVE CRIT. - Maybe refer to RaveLate as reference on how to presen and structure the event.

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Caitlin

Great concept, I think something that would really fit your project is 3D modelling. a render of your posters and general graphic design in a real looking Chinese restaurant would look amazing

(if you've never done 3D don't worry though)

other than that I feel it's very strong and I'm looking forward to seeing the final result

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Haylee

As part of your research maybe do a public interview ai vs “real” art would be cool.

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Jadaya

Amazing concept I love how your bringing a voice back to those who have been silenced,

find more research on these topics first hand accounts would be amazing!

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TOM

GOOD - Interesting idea that social media should just be called 'media' due to the lack of face to face aspect. Research from Ted talks is good because this secondary research is based on talks so you have to really engage with the subject. Also I like the juxtaposition between making an anti-social media campaign on social media. Also has a personal link to the subject.

CONSTRUCTIVE CRIT. - Show examples of previous artwork which is similar to the project you are going to create.

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Naomi

Really well put together presentation, beautifully laid out!!

could create a soundscape of tattoo noises? To accompany 2d work

Projector used to project tattoo design onto people?

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Naomi:

Really good topic with lots of rich history. With your first outcome idea of working with a nude mesh-like fabric with your designs printed on, you could look at creating a diverse range of mesh skin tones to make your work and the brand you theoretically create one that is ethically sensitive. Look at metaphors for imagery that would be targeted for a specific area of the body for a specific gender or for both.

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Caitlin

Emphasis on life of chinese immigrants and poster work to advertise such businesses along with research on diary like true to life comics is cool

If you want some references to comics like that, while not matching said theme, work as part of the same sort of communication

Maus

The pervert

The man with no talent

My lesbian experience with lonliness

Persepolis

(A lot of of these tackle heavy issues so warning)

Ava

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Caitlin

Love the idea of looking into Chinese Culture as a fellow mixed Chinese person :D

I like the visuals of what you are planning to do and the specific artists you're looking into.

Maybe plan out how you will make your outcomes and what you will use to make it (digital/physical).

Love the idea :)

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Naomi

I really like how clear you are with your idea of women in the tattoo industry and you made clear decisions of what you plan on doing as a final outcome

I think you could add some artists you are inspired by. Really well done!!!

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Isobel

The topic chosen is relevant and there is lots to talk about and discuss, so I like the idea of creating a book so that you can go into more depth with the topic through this!

The poster could be an advertisement for the book?

For research, you could interview a range of women where they have experience inequality or problems based on their gender.

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caitlin

unique concept and can produce interesting results

ideas shown for inspo are coherent and interesting

show ideas for specific aspects that you want to redesign

include timeline

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Isobel

thinking about final goal (not too set in stone) - exploration of designs which portray the same ideology - planning primary research, planning ways to research

Identify specific artists - look into more specific media and culture surrounding the subject, both figures and artwork - have a more narrowed down idea in which you can focus on

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Jadaya

unique development from your topic and very strong, varied research. good ideation of how the project may unfold.