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-  problem with the food opening part, he already open the box but the close up scene shows him open the box again, see if you can fix that part, also since it’s only 2mins for the entire clip, maybe can add in the grab delivery scenes that you have if you can to make it better…the ending is quite open to imagination but the messaging is not very very clear about the results of drugs abuse

-Try to colour grade a bit more
- The texts can reduce font size..too big in your face
- And maybe use a san serif font
-The captions are too close to the bottom edge
- Maybe can move up higher a bit

- the ending message need to change

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Kevan - Art Director,Visual editor 1
Chloe-Visual editor 2
Nabilah-Scriptwriter
Umaiza-Sound Editor

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scene 1 :
shoot diff angles
-close up on face /hands
-show feelings /make scene dramatic

scene 2 :
-use b roll to show emotions
-shoot guy feeling frustrated (clenching fist or smtg/physical reaction to mother scolding)

scene 3 :
-use voice over of people rejecting him
-shoot him walking in the streets + voice overs(different voices)
-close up of him breaking down

scene 4 :
-shoot day and night
-close up of broom and leaves
-show him working hard in diff angles

scene 7 :
-throw rice against wall ?? in slow motion
-go back to scene with him back on the ledge(transition)
-show anger and regret
-eat halfway-throw
-bang table
(get more shots of everyt basically)

-use high frame rate
-slow motion