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https://docs.google.com/document/d/13zvj76T9idrNKsEs0z11_NJCgIt9tAnpIqJIkjJp1YQ/edit?tab=t.0 Please give me feedback on my snapshots in the middle of the essay. Thanks!

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Hello can you see if my thought shots are good?

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1h58lJhKDAaBXimaWRmhrjLqg2ep-kB6Dumvb2robEQs/edit?tab=t.tk3f7dwpej5y

Hi guys, can I please get feedback to see if I have enough snapshots, and tell me if I have more, please.

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1RosJuwD9z7CRhOOG3xz3_TG-UR1qkrCYYoGgrbsqxMU/edit?usp=sharing

I request feedback for my turning point narrative. I need help on utilizing the snapshots better and more thoroughly.

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Eu1UYDtXxF3uoy1Ms3tkyb3eXq3fju9T5uuyfL7PeUU/edit?usp=sharing

Hi, I think I could use more feedback on my snapshots and thoughtshots because I think I could have added more detail. Thank you!

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I cant find anywhere to put thoughtshots and snapshots in it to make it longer. pls help!https://docs.google.com/document/d/1yZPr0oKUkQyrvDUXWdC6FHuvW9yxUhy4U8rZ3S9_gxg/edit?tab=t.poglnpd56ad3

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FIRST DRAFT: "Coming to Hawaii and Becoming a Priest" - Jacob Rivera

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FIRST DRAFT: "Coming to Hawaii and Becoming a Priest" - Jacob Rivera

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1yE5LiIHVC1lDcHGhERLKcF8hY2x5xwcJujSB4t9sEd0/edit?tab=t.tk3f7dwpej5y Can you please give feedback and see if I should have more snapshots and thoughtshots? Thanks.

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1DW4kN9tTqvblxMnmwbHOyVxAcf4KWOz7dxvw1tPfKYg/edit?usp=sharing

I just need feedback on whether my draft is good! But any questions, feel free to ask!

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1swqKNmCMs1BTzN449Z4lJpLWwkf8vfNvNVIEireWqes/edit?usp=sharing I really need everyone's thoughts and some suggestions one how to make it longer

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"How/why I changed clubs" -Kililani Akina

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"How/why I changed clubs" -Kililani Akina

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Hi, could I please get some feedback on my personal narrative? I want some advice on where and what snapshots and thoughtshots I should include. Thankyou! Let me know if you have any questions or any other feedback you would like to add.

Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1IAYJIL6KoPE6dc_3SNIC0pV9IhbOEBUWU1afyDB12_4/edit?tab=t.tk3f7dwpej5y

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Q2XKm6l960kc8Uy3KfPdmdytZ4GdzWMz/edit#heading=h.7cyz0iyh08st

Could I get some feedback on where I can add more snapshots, thought shots, or details?

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1H9T7PhfcOwXBH30D09OdjODxPFuR5jt08FKHEu8cJp8/edit?tab=t.tk3f7dwpej5y

In case you were wondering what the essay's plot is or what my essay is about, I tried to make it about how I was choosing between schools for middle school! I'm requesting feedback on my beginning and towards the middle of my essay, before the highlighted part. Hope this makes sense, thanks!

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I need someone to give me ideas for the snap-shots and thought-shots. Comment on any ideas you have for me.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1DMKOS89RoIwk2hLb7PBvl5UXfN_IavW2nOlGK8SVZ2I/edit?usp=sharing

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" Letting go of people, you can't hold onto" - Kiahni c 

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" Letting go of people, you can't hold onto" - Kiahni c 

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Just a quick summary- I want some feedback on how it sounds, if it makes sense, and if I should move some of the writing around, and also if I should go more into depth or not? Let me know! https://docs.google.com/document/d/1HavtrKpUJ51vzO7q-lKJlEiMsJ9t1a6skXyCiGWI8Ag/edit?usp=sharing

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My names Thalia, and my Personal Narrative is about how I felt lonely last year in 6th Grade. I would like feedback on figurative language I could use and if it is clear.

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"Why I Wanna Be A Nurse" -Kaimanahiwalani Kaleimamahu

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"Why I Wanna Be A Nurse" -Kaimanahiwalani Kaleimamahu

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I need feedback on how to fix my narrative.

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kaimanahiwalani kaleimamahu - Turning Point Narrative

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I need help putting another paragraph between my last and second-to-last paragraph.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/14yabG0wXp3dd2fKa5yBEIGAE4ZiUtVO3-FLlmDanaHc/edit?tab=t.tk3f7dwpej5y

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1U2PaJegDSEoPq9zh299BE1HuZwYa-10kQUsESwWQRHo/edit?usp=sharing

Hello Can you please tell me where I can put more snap-shots and thought-shots.

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Can I get some feedback, please? I don't think I have really good snapshots in the begining and at the end.

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Hi guys pls tell me if I have enough snapshots and details https://docs.google.com/document/d/1MT0CWYU3vPOK1obwA71FD2-KBVnP8i3QeEONX5pqn8o/edit?usp=sharing

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Hi, please give me feedback and let me know if I need more snapshots or thoughtshots. Thank you https://docs.google.com/document/d/1XQ5b-bMkIuE0D3xC5OiXu04OSBlnjJ0Lwjm3os6IFOs/edit?tab=t.tk3f7dwpej5y

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I would like some feedback on my snapshots and thoughtshots thank you

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1GHrCzJkax5OgqAgVmWQsi5oBxercuu9Bl94gpltOAqU/edit?tab=t.lz4g34hhi06