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I really liked your hook in your writing about phones! I learned so many new facts, such as 31% of children aged 8-10 have a cell phone.
Next time, try to add more details in your body paragraphs so we can learn even more.
Great job!! :)

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Great job on your body paragraphs! I learned so much about dog breeds, why dogs are important and I really liked your story.
Next time, try to explain and elaborate a little bit more. Great job! :)

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I liked how you added a lot of detail and used good examples. Something I think you can improve is your punctuation :)

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Good job on your hook and conclusion! Next time you could try to add more details to your writing to make it even better!

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Something I liked is how you included a lot of facts. Something I think you can improve is your capitalization :)

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I really like how you mentioned how dogs behave, I didn’t think about that! I really like how you used transition words to begin each paragraph, it made your essay flawless.
For the grow part, I think you did pretty good with it, but I think you could have read better, but I think you could also add a little more details.
Great job!

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I like Ireene essay is long and informtive, I know more dogs from Ireene essay.

Next time if you put hook like did you know at beginning  it will be great.

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I liked how you added a little humor into your book, because you made it seem like you were actually “interacting” with the reader.
Something I think you could work on is supposedly, you can’t put “but” at the beginning of a sentence. Many people make that mistake, and they don’t realize it! Great!

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I like Nate essay I learn that possum has 50 sharp teeth and possum can have 8 babies.

Next time you can try to read your essay louder and slowly.

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I liked your conclusion in your story about possums. Something I think you can improve is the words you choose to put in your sentences.

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Wow! You put so much detail in your body paragraph! I also liked your Amazing Fact in your Intro!

Something you could try to improve on is to make sure you can pronounce the words correctly.

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I think that you did great with facts, but a little detail won’t hurt! You sometimes read your words differently than what you wrote, so if someone was reading your essay, the grammar would not make too much sense to them. That’s fine, because you provided so many interesting facts, and provided tons of big words to uplevel your grammar!

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I like your hook I learn that giant panda eat 85 pounds of bamboo.

I think you can practice reading more before speaking.