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Imagine that you are travelling and want to write an email to tell your friend, Michelle, about it.

👀Read the information below and complete the sentences.

a) My email will be (polite/personal) and (formal/informal) because …

b) I will use ….... to describe the place vividly.

c) In my first paragraph I will talk about ..........

d) In my main paragraph(s) I will describe ………

e) In my final paragraph I will tell Michelle …..

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Hey Michelle,

I'm having a vacation on (in) my dad's hometown, Kalaw. Even though I'd visited for many several times, there's still new places to explore. It's completely marvelous.

I've been here since Friday, so I've already visited almost all the places. You know there are lots of adorable coffee shops which are opened in jet cars. It'll be extremely awesome if you are also with me here due to having many places to hangout (hang out). I went to (a) garden called "Maw Myay Oo", this morning and there are many fascinating and exquisite views. Additionally, I tried dozens of traditional foods that can't count, too. The tastes are splendid, and I couldn't even stop eating. I'm absolutely sure you will be floating on air when you touch all the foods with your tongue. I've got this feeling just this morning, so I'm (a) hundred percent s sure you also will be due to being crazy about the food.

Furthermore, there's their traditional festival every year. Although, I can't catch (up) with that (at) on this time when I'm here. Kalaw is exactly stunning, and I can be chill out with (in) cool weather. It always can get cold in every season in Kalaw. There are many things and food s to buy and try either. I'll buy some souvenirs to make you all thrilled, so let other guys know about this case.

I'm remarkably certain that place will be next vacation where our gang will visit next summer. I do take photos a lot with fairly delightful views in every place I arrived (T). I'll send all the photos of me, views, and foods to make you guys elated. I'll come back on next week.

See you in a fortnight, dude!

A part of you,

Hsu

Teacher Mar Lar Oo's comment:

Excellent work, dear Hsu Pyae. You can follow the instructions in detail. I appreciate that you attached a breathtaking picture to this email. There are some errors in the highlighted areas. Can you please check them and improve your email? Overall, great job!

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Hi there,

Long time no talk Michelle. I haven’t hard (SP) of you anything. I wrote this mail because I remembered when you said year-9 you want (T) to travel and face a lot of adventures with me. I am sure you are using this mail or not but I hope you will get it. This time I went (to) Zwekabin Mount. I am not traveling alone I went there with a climbing group.

In this traveling everything is not easy as well. All of the things we need (T) to do because we went ourself (SP), with our legs, and only with a bag. This is my first time so I’m the fresher traveler and got plenty of drained. Burned the sweat out and I felt like I was going to got fever (G). But in (at) the end of the trip, I totally felt better and relaxed. I had a thought “traveling without luxuries things is extremely difficult but keeping in touch with nature can’t replace with others”. For the photo, I saved it from Facebook. The reason is I didn’t take any photo (photos) my apologize (G).

If you ask will you travel next time like this?. I will say “Yes, I will.” Next time I want to go together with you. I will contact you before I go.

Bests,

Your friend Lauren

Teacher Mar Lar Oo's comment:

Well-written email, dear Lauren. You can follow the instructions in detail. I appreciate that you attached a breathtaking picture to this email. There are some mistakes. Can you check them and improve your email? Overall, fantastic work!

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Hi Michelle,

I am writing this from a Cafe near Old Trafford Stadium, Manchester. I am now being in Manchester for a week as I am travelling (on) a vacation with my friends. As you know, I am very interested in football match(es) and playing. One of my dreams is to visit here, Old Trafford. This stadium is really, really big and glorious. I feel the greatness of the stadium even though I haven't entered to it.

Manchester is a major city in the northwest of England and famous in football because of two Manchester clubs (City and United) won Europe achievements. It also has fine and cool weather unlike our country's. The transportation system is absolutely great. The view of the ancient buildings is stunning.

The only irritation is the price. Everything here is really expensive. It is not really convenient for me to travel (to) Europe and I will consider (it) next time. However, it is glad to be here near Old Trafford.

I will stop my letter here as I can miss the coming Manchester United Match. See you!

Yours sincerely,

MC

Teacher Mar Lar Oo's comment:

Good job, dear Ko Myo Chit (MC). You can follow the instructions in detail. There are some mistakes. Can you check them and improve your email? Overall, fantastic work!

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Hello Michelle,

I hope you're doing well! I'm writing to tell you about my amazing time here in Paris which is more stunning than I expected.

I've visited some of the most famous landmarks. The place where I visited yesterday is the Eiffel Tower. Standing at the top of the tower and watching the whole city view was breathtaking. This feeling is like I was in the movies because the view was like a magical scene. The weather has been perfect, with cool autumn breezes and sunny skies, which makes wandering around the city even more enjoyable.

I’m taking lots of photos and will share them with you soon! Let me know how things are going with you. Can’t wait to catch up when I’m back!

Yours sincerely,

Su wai (Wai)

Teacher Mar Lar Oo's comment:

Perfectly written email, dear Su Wai. You can follow the instructions in detail. There is just one mistake. Can you check it? Overall, fantastic work!

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Hi, Michelle

I'm currently now (no need to add two words) in Maungmakan beach. It's one of the most famous beaches in Dawei. I'm writing to share about our memorable holiday so that you can also plan to visit there.

It's really really fantastic to visit there. Seafoods are fairly in good price. I also feel (an) amazing vibe to swim in the sea. The beach is remarkably long so I ride the bike in the evening. We also do play football here. The gloaming sight is also absolutely awsome (spelling).

Well, it's enough to share. We'll keep our trip to Myaw Yit Pagoda tommorrow. (spelling)

Your bestie,

Zaw Win Aung

Teacher Mar Lar Oo's comment:

Well done, Ko Zaw Win. You can follow the instructions to some extent. It would be better if you extend your email with the structure. There are some errors in the highlighted areas. Can you please check them and improve your email? Please make sure to double-check your work after you have finished writing. Overall, great job!

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I hope you're doing well and I'm (capital letter: I'm) writing this from Bangkok. Bangkok is really really large nd (and) lovely. It's been an incredible experience so far . The city is full with (of) colorful tuk-tuks and street food of thiland (Spelling & capital letter: Thailand) and satay filling the air whatever (wherever) you go. It is such a unique blend of chaos and charm.

Yesterday,(P)I visited the Grand Palace, and it was extremely stunning. The golden tempales (spelling: temples) and the details are like something out of a fairystyle.I also took a boat rise (ride) along the Chao Phraya River ,(P)which gave me a perfect view of (the) Bangkok River and ancient temples like Wat Arun.

The Chatuchak Market is also famous in Bangkok. It is the highlight of Bangkok and it's huge.(P)There are a lot of thrift shops and people are selling everything from clothes to antiques. I spent hours walking around and I feel like I love Bangkok a lot.

Next up,(P)I planning to go to Maldives.I 've heard it's more peaceful and absolutely breathtaking. I will spend my time on Maldives's beaches.I 'll keep you posted on how it goes!

Take care and talk soon!

Your (Yours) sincerely,

SUU.

Teacher Mar Lar Oo's comment:

Good job, dear Suu Myat. I can see your efforts. Your email is well-structured. You can follow instructions thoroughly. However, there are a lot of grammatical and punctuation errors in the highlighted areas. Can you edit and improve your email? Overall, good job!

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Hi Michelle,

I'm writing this from a restaurant in an urban area of Vietnam called, Sapa - that's about 5hrs road trip from Hanoi. It's becoming the most visited site because of its extremely awesome geological conditions.

This place is well known as the tourist site of Hanoi because of its so amazing nature views (natural views). You will have a peaceful moment when you there. It has absolutely surprising things such as enormous statues and man-made decorations to attract more travellers.

One bad thing is that as it is located on the mountain, you will face the cold weather and health problems of standing in high sea level for example - you can't hear anything for a while because of the atmosphere's pressure changes.

Eventhough (Even though), it is not (a) well-developed area, I would like to invite you to visit there once. Tomorrow, I'm heading to Bangkok. Wish me all the best.

Yours Sincerely,

Swe Swe Nwe

Teacher Mar Lar Oo's comment:

Great work, Ma Swe Swe. You can follow the instructions in detail. There are some mistakes. Can you check them and improve your email? Overall, fantastic work!

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Hi Michelle,

I'm writing this from Su Thaung Pyae Library, which is a famous pagoda located in my hometown. Yes!! I'm in my hometown now. How fantastic! I got a long break from my job, so I decided to come back to my home.

Comparing the last 15 years to now, there are many differences here. There are many trees, and they are extremely beautiful. When I go for a morning walk, I can see the sunrise with green mountains and the Chindwin River. I wanna show you if I have a chance.

One thing is that people are still throwing garbage in the middle of the street. It is quite terrible. Except that I love everything about my town.

Next week, I'm gonna visit Bagan and I'll text you when I arrive there. Love you girl and wish me luck!

Your Lovely Friend,

Lwin Thapyae Oo

Teacher Mar Lar Oo's comment:

Well-written email, dear Lwin. You can follow the instructions in detail. I appreciate that you attached a breathtaking picture to this email. No major or minor errors are found. Overall, fantastic work!

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Hey Michelle,

Good morning,im (I'm) writing this Gmail in one of cafes (one of the cafes) that gives cozy vibes. (P) (please read punctuation rules thoroughly) I’m in Switzerland right now, (P) it is located in Europe and one of their key place. (P) This place is (has) (a) remarkable aesthetic and carrying (carrries) (a) high quality of life.(P) And, (P) after summer I’ll comeback (come back) to my hometown, (P) so we can roam around Pyin-Oo-Lwin.

This place is absolutely surreal and I can’t believe that my dream come true (G: came true) . (P) Other wise,(P) the things I enjoy is (are) as you know,Switzerland is (a) really good place and (I) feel like I’m touching with (the) nature.(P) I wish I could stay here and through my life with you. (P)Actually,(P)I miss you all the time like when I’m eating scrumptious foods without you.(P)It’s kinda giving me a betrayer mood.

As I mentioned about Switzerland,(P)the way they construct their buildings are (is) so cool.

Switzerland’s wind,(P)rain,(P)air,(P)flowers as well as their service are completely (P) satisfied (M?).(P)Moreover,(P)while I’m at the top of mountains,,(P)that is giving me memories form that movies I like the most "Crash Landing On You”.I also think "I wish I could found (T) (could + Vinf) my partner in here,(P)and want to feel our first date in Switzerland.(P)As a result,(P)I’m glad to travel here,(P)reduce stress and produce energy with motivation.There fore, to (I) strive harder more than as much I can.(P)I’ll take Swiss chocolate (V) for you as a present.

So,(P)let me end my letter here and I also booked my next trip to Lake Geneva.(P)The only one I want to say is take (is taking/ is to take) care of you health (your health) and don’t get injury again.(P)Have a nice day and don’t forget to receive treatment.(P)Bye ! (P)

Yours sincerely,

Ei Phyu

Teacher Mar Lar Oo's comment:

Well done, dear Ei Phyu. I can see your efforts. Your email is quite interesting. You can follow instructions thoroughly. However, there are a lot of grammatical and punctuation errors in the highlighted areas. Can you please check the punctuation rules? Can you edit and improve your email? Overall, good job!

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Hello, Dear Michelle,

Now, I am writing to you about my absoutely (spelling) marvelous holiday.

Actually, I am at kyaite Htee Yoe Padago, which (is) located in Kyaike Htoe, to do goodness and relax. To be honest, I came here without expect (expecting). This padago is existed (G) (exists) on (the) mountain, very cool and full (of) with fog. That makes me crazy as I like walking in the fog. This is not their pilgrimage season so you don't have to see many people and near buddha (Buddha) image was very quiet so you can hear (could hear) pin drop. In my hotel, there is (are) a few people so hotel's (hotel) stuff can take care (of) me a lot and I want to give recommend 99% super service to the hotel.

In (the) next coming 2 weeks, they are gonna start their pilgrimage season so there will be crowd people (M?). My friend who live(s) here said " You are lucky cause you came before pilgrimage season as their pilgrimage season is extremely appalling.

Next two day(s), I am going to visit kyaite htoe (capital letter) city. I already heard that kyaite htoe (capital letter) has a Sitting-Buddha Image which is (the) biggest one in the world. I am happy to come here and I am willing to come here again and I want you to join with me next time. Their weather is terrific fine.

Your buddy,

Boss Scott.

Teacher Mar Lar Oo's comment:

Well done, dear Scott. I can see your efforts. Your email is quite interesting. You can follow instructions thoroughly. However, there are a lot of grammatical and punctuation errors in the highlighted areas. Can you edit and improve your email? Overall, good job!

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Hey Michelle,

How have you been doing lately? Guess what?? I am now in Seoul, South Korea. I am writing this email from a cafe called Mova, a cozy cafe full of a variety of drinks, located in the center of the city. Can you believe it? It’s my first time here, and I’m so excited to tell you all about it. The energy here is just incredible, and the city is so vibrant.

It's been 2 days since I've been exploring South Korea with my family. Seoul is such an amazingly beautiful and modern city to visit. I spent the whole day exploring the streets of Myeongdong. The bustling shops, neon signs, and endless street food stalls made it such a lively experience. You’d love it here—the fashion is so trendy and the food is to die for! I also visited Gyeongbokgung Palace, and wow, it’s absolutely breathtaking. I even tried on a traditional Korean dress called hanbok. There are also cherry blossoms lining the streets and it is totally stunning. I wish you were here with me. I miss you, honey.

Next, I'm heading to the Namsan Tower for a night view of the city. Can't wait to see Seoul from above!!

Talk soon girl,

Stella

Teacher Mar Lar Oo's comment:

Perfectly written email, dear Stella. You can follow the instructions in detail. No major or minor errors are found. I love the way you put a GIF in your email. That's genius. Overall, fantastic work!

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Hi Michelle,

Good day!

I’m still in Myanmar. I’m writing this from a restaurant, is called Manaw restaurant.Here, they offered Kachin traditional foods and drinks. Besides this, there is a Manaw museum with park.

In the Manaw park, there is an extremely fantastic Manaw Poles, it made with stones and concrete, also it was painted colourful Manaw pattern. It was absolutely memorable. In the park , a lots of Kachin traditional's restaurants and I meet a lot of Kachin people, they are kind and friendly. Also I bought traditional dresses and taken a photo with them. I have attached a group photo to you.

The only frustrating thing is most of them can’t speak well Burmese language, so I have faced the difficulties when I’m ordering the dishes.

Tomorrow I will visit to my brother town. It will take about 4 hours from here. I will share with you more details after the visit.

Sincerely,

Mar Lar

Teacher Mar Lar Oo's comment:

Greatly written email, Ma Mar Lar. Your email is well-structured. You can follow instructions thoroughly. However, there are some errors in the highlighted areas. Can you please check the punctuation rules? Overall, very well done!

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Hey Michelle,

I am writing this from Cappadocia, Turkey. You might know that I am travelling. Cappadocia is such a great city and has wonderful places which are quite attractive for tourists. I arrived here yesterday, and now I am staying at a three stars hotel. If you have a long holiday, you should travel Cappadocia since here are lots of things you can do.

When I initially reached, I felt strange and nervous. But, people lived in Cappadocia are very warm and friendly. So, the night immediately changed the day and I felt like a native. I have recently visited a fairly attractive Goreme Open-air Museum, some underground cities in Cappadocia and Cave hotels. These hotels are absolutely ancient, unique and expensive. I took many photos and I will send you later.

I still have to visit some interesting places and ride a extremely thrilling balloon. You will see these balloon ride on internet. Now, I am here to try it. But the main disadvantage is price. Everything is expensive and I just left a few dollars.

I am waiting the pocket money from my parents to travel the rest things. Hope you will reply me.

Your bestie,

Steven

Teacher Mar Lar Oo's comment:

Such an excellent work, dear Steven. Your email is well-structured and realistic. You can follow the instructions in detail. However, there are some errors in the highlighted areas. Overall, very well done!

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Hey! Michelle,

Guess! where I am now. Have you checked the photos I sent in WhatsApp? I am writing this email while sitting at the beach of (in) Danang, Vietnam. I am visiting southern Vietnam with my sister for two weeks just to relax after my sister’s exam.

Today is our second day here. You know, the internet connection here is way too fast. How is the speed in Bangkok huh? The weather here is so cool and (the) beaches are really beautiful and fairly clean. I don’t see many Asian tourists wandering around the town when I am rolling around with a motor bike (motorbike) which was rented from a hotel. You know, everything here is surprisingly cheap compared to Bangkok. What I love most about it is that the town is less-crowded (less crowded) and it is easy to access every remarkable spot with reasonable entrance fees.

Yesterday, I visited some beaches of (in) Danang and Marble Mountain, which is a 30-minutes (30-minute) drive from my hotel. You will be utterly amazed when you see it as there are so many caves near that mountain and it was so much fun to hop-on (hop on) and hop-off (hop off) one cave after another and sometimes I felt like I was playing a treasure hunt game. At night, I was visiting a night market where seafood s are completely abundant.

Danang is absolutely a beautiful destination (WO) and I was right that I chose to visit this one first during (my) Vietnam trip. It was a good start haha. Beaches are sandy and white, food is cheap, (the) internet is booming, (the) weather is so fine, (the) town is clean and not pretty big.

The only disappointing thing is that locals are not heartily welcoming and not able to speak English fluently. So, I find it uneasy to communicate with them when ordering food and bargaining things.

That’s why I book everything in advance online such as hotels booking(s), bus tickets reservation and buying attractions tickets. Tomorrow, I am going to BaNa Hills (for) the whole day and I am excited to ride cable cars. I will call you through FaceTime. See Ya!

Yours,

Yamin

Teacher Mar Lar Oo's comment:

Great work, Ma YaMin. I can see your great efforts. Your email is quite intriguing. You can follow instructions thoroughly. However, there are some in the highlighted areas. Can you edit and improve your email? Overall, good job!

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