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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1jY2KtgF0qXtCC2NN1b_-8KAG5ceYtLQONTsmxTj2Tp8/edit?tab=t.0

REQUEST: Can you help me with my ending? I think it's a little too short and ends abruptly. Does it explain what I learned well?

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https://docs.google.com/presentation/d/1vGsu-y2r51DJa7Owl53rjdHyA0KbUsnCUE_uR_ofIc0/edit?usp=sharing

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1a7ROAalOqXEVwEfFWkNoIVIDk8sevaULZ0q37UWPf3c/edit?usp=sharing

REQUEST: Can you help me by providing ideas on how I can add more details to the middle of my story?

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1wkrToWWhelDwEMTdP2xdPmsgl_YYtoKvSblDDAFh1mk/edit?tab=t.tk3f7dwpej5y

My request: Any snapshots or thoughtshots I can add to make my story bigger? I want my story to be a bit more engaging for others to read.

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REQUEST: Did my snapshots really explode the moment? Or do I need to add more detail? Or were my snapshots really clear enough

Did my ending really finish it and conclude it? Or doesn't need to be clearer and more detailed.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/177soi-zBtX7m8UVvUq1t94p1NqzCX09gWpkH30Ehgho/edit?usp=sharing

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Request: How can I make my hook better. https://docs.google.com/document/d/1HeqBX_KGC2MyAoxxEaTPTWRqtrPsN47XAi6G3LcEQTc/edit?tab=t.tk3f7dwpej5y

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Here's the link,

https://docs.google.com/document/d/10UARDX8XwZodt_odkLfMd6lN36-quZnpk8ZJW9_Z1fs/edit?tab=t.tk3f7dwpej5y

Request:

My hook is not that exciting. Can anyone help with that?

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/10IiexSP1YSAj08gWsS4eEOtfRPj4p4nz2gGetg0iaKc/edit?tab=t.tk3f7dwpej5y

REQUEST~ can you please help me make more though shots? or give me ways i can make my story longer?

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1jqaEnyV-pI83pt8fxivRc_2gwvXooykH_phFR1HlZI8/edit?tab=t.tk3f7dwpej5y

Request- My ending is short, so I would like some ideas on how to end it better, and I forgot to mention in the video, but I would also like feedback for my hook.

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Feedback Request: I would like to make my turning point clearer and add more snapshots because I have multiple thought shots. Also I would like to create a better title.

The link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1jV-bESk0GkJcztZ9vSw3lSX76KXVlnpRUEU7U5Nl0Ag/edit?usp=sharing

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1aCRrYil9EYcUBS2Z6IXEGfhQIJjtAss2F2KmGOC7p9c/edit?tab=t.tk3f7dwpej5y

Request: I feel like my ending part is too short, only being 1 sentence. Can you help me make it longer

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1rBARvoK21XbgijBdunFkjoelXsfXDjn9e3YSGNVmBEo/edit?tab=t.tk3f7dwpej5y

Request for feedback: I think my ending reflection on my turning point 2nd draft was a little short. Do you think I should incorporate my ending reflection from my first draft into my current reflection? Or should I just make my reflection clearer?

I am open to the suggestions that you guys have for me.

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1mjohJIVaply2l6Bo17UisrTq5O6vtjR8CEOBTtsaLAc/edit?usp=sharing

Request: I need help on how I can incorporate a snapshot into the middle of my story so that it is a little more exciting.

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I am looking for feed back on a better hook and anything else to add more https://docs.google.com/document/d/1GAURfFnk2hPAXNhJIufsynzIJncvMiepsUYLAxVtS6k/edit?tab=t.tk3f7dwpej5y

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Drafts

I am looking for ways or suggestions I could improve my hook sentence, cause it doesn't seem interesting or engaging to the reader, it's almost kind of dry. Any feedback to help would be appreciated!

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1v0StrlHPZFW0IYX5wWZ19yLwuHwPYqiD4l8fw07hWwM/edit?usp=sharing

REQUEST: My ending is a bit short, so I was wondering if I need more details, and my other request is how I can add more snapshots and thoughtshots. Can you also give me suggestions on stronger hooks for my story?

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Request~ please give me feedback on my hook and how could I make my righting shorter?

Link-https://docs.google.com/document/d/1mvu71r-esur3YGSfD08Ee-D_eTqQHSq-eshS-Fe8Vl0/edit?usp=sharing

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Request: I need help on a stronger ending. And can you help me on a stronger hook to bring more into action.https://docs.google.com/document/d/1TJtWsllIJCE6vPraT3fC1Jz91415k7X0Nhu8XoLST4A/edit?tab=t.tk3f7dwpej5y

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REQUEST: What can I remove from my writing to make it shorter? Are there any details that I don't need to include? Are there any details I should extend?

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1uCipZYBB2EKca3tQTVrkSYDpBs2YhXdLyCcwsO2xv60/edit?usp=sharing

(Make sure to go to the second draft.)

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Can I have help with the turning point paragraph in the middle (it's highlighted). Ty yall!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/158X_IfIYd9yimEXALI61Oix6L4AJrN2McSo__xCGHyw/edit?tab=t.tk3f7dwpej5y

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1lnmaklfC6ShLi8o7q0qP8LRAKd1No-rV/edit?usp=sharing&ouid=111764002666150438401&rtpof=true&sd=true

Go to Second Draft please:

Request: could you please provide any tips or suggestions on how I can improve my essay? I feel my ending is a bit short and my grammar could be better overall. thanks

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ln3KSyUVz4c0HdshI_QkpKY0IAHhL-3mBkufynG5lSo/edit?tab=t.0

My request- Please tell me if I need any adjustments and my hooks.

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1UnMmmlqeRCTG3-4GkK0il8PlEPBudsUV2BcJzM1bDCg/edit?usp=sharing

REQUEST: Could you help me with making a hook in the beginning, so that the readers get intrigued with what their reading and start wanting to read more?