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Benjamin Franklin learned many important lessons first from his mom then his dad during.
Baby Thesis:
1. To begin with Benjamin Franklin learned an important lesson from his mom.
2. In addition with the lessons Benjamin Franklin learned there was one he never forgot that his dad told him.

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Benjamin Franklin learned some important life lessons, such as spending money wisely and asking before doing something.
baby thesis #1
One life lesson that Benjamin Franklin learned is that he had to spend his money wisely.
Baby thesis#2
Another life lesson Benjamin Franklin learned is that he needed to ask before doing something.

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Benjamin Franklin went through though times and learned lessons on the way. He learned to use your money wisely and to look where you are going before you do it.
1.Use your money wisely
2.Look where you are going before you do it

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There are two life lessons that Benjamin learned and those were don't waste your money and don't take something that isn't yours
1.The first life lesson is don't wast your money
2.The second life lesson is don't take something that isn't yours.

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Benjamin Franklin learned that money can be used to cheat and and don't take things you just randomly.
#1 Benjamin Franklin learned that you should ask before you buy.
#2  Benjamin also learned ask what you're doing is okay.=?

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Thesis-Benjamin Franklin had learned from his  experiences to spend money wisely, also to not take things without asking.

BT1- Benjamin Franklin as a child learned to spend money wisely.
BT2- Another example is that Benjamin had learned not to take things before asking.

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Thesis-Benjamin has made many mistakes as a kid. Like with money, and ask before you take.
1. Benjamin should use his money wisely next time
2. Benjamin should not take what is not his

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Thesis: Benjamin Franklin learned a great deal of life lessons,but I am going to talk about his life lessons are to use money wisely and ask before you do/take.

Baby Thesis #1: You should use money wisely so you don't lose all of it

Baby Thesis #2: You should always ask before you do/take something

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Thesis: Benjamin Franklin learned life lessons as a child like, not taking a persons things without asking for permission and taking responsibility with money that is given to you.

Baby thesis #1: One of Franklins lessons was to not take something from someone without their permission.

Baby thesis #2: Another one of Franklins lessons was to be responsible with money.

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Benjamin Franklin learned many important lessons first from his mom and his dad during his young life.

Don't forget to include your two baby thesis statements.

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Benjamin Franklin made mistakes like, wasting  money stealing.
Baby thesis 1: Benjamin Franklin once made the mistake of using money foolishly.
Baby thesis 2: Benjamin Franklin also stole without knowing it

Make sure your thesis statement is a complete sentence that supports an idea (that Benjamin Franklin learned lessons through his life experiences) and gives the reasons/examples to support that idea. Also, remember to use transition words before your baby thesis statements.

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Thesis: Benjamin franklin had a great childhood however his mom and dad had to teach him a few lessions in life.
BT: His Mom played an important role in Benjamins life.
BT: Benjamins father never set out to teach him something however he was abl to guide him.

Some error in capitalization. Also, make sure you've included enough words from the prompt in your thesis statement. :)  Reviewed by Tegan

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1. There are two life lessons that Benjamin learned and those were don't trust someone you don't know  and don't take something that isn't your's.
2. The first life lesson is don't trust someone you don't know.
3. The second life lesson was don't take something that isn't your's.:

There are some errors in verb agreement( is/was). Also, make sure that you don't lose sight of what the prompt is asking you to do. You are to write about the lessons that Benjamin Franklin learned from his experiences in his life. Your baby thesis statements don't show me that you'll be talking about Benjamin Franklin.

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Thesis: Even if you want something that is not yours don't take it and make good decisions in life.
Baby thesis #1: Benjamin Franklin once took something from someone else without them knowing.
Baby thesis #1: Benjamin Franklin once had a life lesson to be responsible and make good choices.

The thesis statement must address/use words from the prompt. Also, don't forget to include the transition words/phrases before each baby thesis.

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1.The lessons that Benjamin Franklin learned was to be more responsible with his money and don't mess with other peoples belongings and to be honest.

2. To begin with,one lesson is to be responsible with his money.

3.In addition,another lesson is to not mess with other people's belongings and to be honest.

Error in verb tense (was/were). Your baby thesis statements should give the audience a clear "picture" of what each paragraph will be about. Think of your baby thesis as the "main idea". The audience is left with questions right now- like, what about a lesson? Whose lesson?

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thesis:when Benjamin was young he made mistakes and learned many lessons from them like to use money wisely.

baby thesis:

Your thesis should give two reasons/ examples, so you just need to add one more. Also, make sure you've used enough words from the prompt in your thesis statement.

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Benjamin Franklin learned many lessons as a kid. these lessons include....

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Benjamin Franklin learned from his experiences in life that you should spend your money wisely and that you should not take something that is not yours.

BT1- One lesson that Benjamin Franklin learned is not to spend money in an unwise way.

BT2- Another lesson Benjamin Franklin learned is not to use something that is not yours.

Blake, great thesis statement! Nice job using words from the prompt and specifying the two points/reasons that support the idea that Benjamin Franklin learned lessons from his life experiences.

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Thesis-Benjamin has made many mistakes as a kid. Like with money, and ask before you take.
1. Benjamin should use money wisely
2.do not take what is not yours

Must always use complete sentences. Don't forget the transitional phrases! :)

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1. Benjamin Franklin learned a lot of valuable lessons during his experiences in life.
2.  He learned to be wise with his money.
3. He learned not to take what doesn't belong to him.

Don't forget to include transitional phrases before each baby thesis statement.

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1. Benjamin Franklin  learned lessons throughout his life which are to be more responsible and learned to spend money more wisely.
2. To begin with, Benjamin learned how to be more responsible.
3. In addition, he learned to spend money more wisely.

Verb tense error (which are) needs to be fixed.

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Ben learned not to steal and to spend his money wisely

baby 1# Ben learned to not steal
baby 2 # Ben learned to spend his money wisely

The thesis statement must include words from the prompt. The baby thesis statements must be complete sentences with transitional phrases.

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Thesis: Benjamin learned that the cost may not always be what it seems and don't things that don't belong to you.
Baby thesis #1
The cost may not always be what it seems.
Baby Thesis #2
Taking leads no where good.

The thesis statement seems to be missing something, maybe the word "take" or "use"? Also, be sure to not lose sight of the prompt. Remember, this essay is about the lessons Benjamin Franklin learned. The baby thesis statements don't show me that you'll be talking about Benjamin Franklin and the lessons he learned.

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1.Benjamin Franklin went through though times and learned lessons on the way he learned that use your money wisely and look before you leap.
2.Use your money wisely
3.Look before you leap

The thesis statement is a run-on sentence and needs to be fixed with the proper punctuation, or needs to be condensed as there are words that repeat themselves. The baby thesis statements should be in the form of complete sentences. Don't forget to add the transitional phrases! :)

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Thesis-It seems to me that the lessons Benjamin Franklin learned from his experiences in life are very        important. In source one the lesson was don't spend all your money on something small , the lesson of passage two is think before you do.

BT1-In source one the lesson is not to spend all your money on something small.
BT2-Second he learned to think before he did

Make sure your baby thesis statements show your audience who you are talking about. Don't lose sight of the prompt, aka your task. :)

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T.D thesis: do you wonder what mistakes  did Benjamin Franklin did 

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T.D thesis: do you wonder what mistakes  did Benjamin Franklin did 

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baby thesis: what did Benjamin Franklin learned .

baby thesis : Benjamin

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Thesis-Although Benjamin was a wise person when he was a kid he didn't always make the wisest choices but he learned a lot of lessons from them .

Baby Thesis-When Benjamin was 7 he paid a little to much for a whistle so he learned to find out the price for items before you get them.

Baby Thesis-When Benjamin was a little bit older he decided to take some stones to make a wharf but when the workers came back they got mad the lesson Ben learned is that you should ask to take.

Missing an important piece of punctuation in your thesis. :) The baby thesis statements seem a little too detailed- I worry that you won't have enough evidence.

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1. Little Ben should not have payed so much for that little whistle .

2. Ben was in need of some thing because he had some money so a big boy had a whistle and Ben wanted it so he said i want your whistle i have some coppers i will give you these coppers for the whistle so they took the money and the whistle and lived on ...

3. Ben had many lessons in his life this is one he never forgot .

The thesis statement must address and include words from the prompt. The baby thesis statements should be formed from your main thesis statement.

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1.Benjamin Franklin learned some important lessons such as be wise with your money and ask before you take.
2.To begin with, Ben learned to be wise with is money.
3.In addition, he learned to ask before you take.

Nice transitional phrases!

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Thesis-Even Benjamin Franklin messed up as a kid but he learned a lesson from his mistakes.These lessons include that nothing is truly useful if not truly honest and that spend your money wisely.
Baby thesis 1-It seems to me that one of the lessons that Ben learned is that nothing is truly useful if not truly honest.
Baby thesis 2-Their is no doubt that Ben learned to spend money wisely

The thesis statement is lacking clarity- the last sentence to be specific. Also, remember, that you're writing from the author's point of view in an informative essay, so we shouldn't be seeing the use of "I", unless we're making some kind of connection in efforts to elaborate- I would look at baby thesis #1. Also, make sure you're using the correct their, there, or they're. :)

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1. Benjamin Franklin learned many lessons from his experiences in life, he learned that wasting is bad and not to take what is not yours.
2. To begin with, Ben Franklin learned that wasting materials is bad.
3. In addition, Franklin learned to not take what is not yours.

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thesis- Benjamin Franklin learned lessons from his mom and his dad.
Baby thesis #1- to begin with Benjamin Franklin learned a valuable lesson from his mom.
baby thesis #2- Furthermore, Benjamin learned a l

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Thesis- There are many lessons you learn in life, such as Benjimin Franklin learned to use money wisley nd don't take something that is not yours

Baby thesis #1- To begin with, Benjimin Franklin learned a lesson of using oney wisley.

Bay Thesis #2- Furthermore, Benjimin Franklin learned anther lesson of to never take something that is not yours.

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Thesis: Some of Ben's life experiences taught him lessons, such as spending your money wisely and don't take things that aren't yours.
Baby Thesis #1: Ben's experiences taught him valuable lessons, like spending money wisely.
Baby Thesis #2: Benjamin's life lessons were taught through experiences, like not taking things that aren't yours.

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Thesis: Benjamin Franklin learned a great deal of life lessons,but I am going to talk about the whistle and the wharf.

Baby Thesis #1: One of the first life lessons was the whistle.

Baby Thesis #2: This is on of his older life lessons called the wharf.

Your thesis statement starts off very strong, but loses clarity after the conjunction. What were the lessons that Benjamin Franklin learned? He didn't learn "the whistle"- that's the title of the passage. Think about the message behind the lessons he learned to help you. :)

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Thesis:Life is full of lessons and Ben Franklin learned many lessons such as, to use money wisely and not to take something that is not yours.
Baby thesis 1:To begin with,Benjamin Franklin learned a lesson to use money wisely.
Baby Thesis 2: Furthermore,Ben Franklin alo learned to not to take something that is not yours.

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1. Benjamin Franklin learned lessons those lessons include check before you do something and do not take something that is not yours
2.One lesson he learned was to check before you do something
3.The other lesson he learned was do not take something that is not yours

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baby thesis 1---he learned that you should spend your money wisely
Baby thesis 2---he learned that you should always ask for permission before you take something

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Benjamin learned how to spend his money wisely

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Thesis:  Benjamin Franklin learned from his experiences in life because   of his mother and father.
Baby Thesis 1: To begin with,  Benjamin's mother helped him learn from his mistakes.
Baby Thesis 2:  In addition, Benjamin's father taught him lessons from his mistakes

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baby thesis #1
Benjamin Franklin learned that he had to spend his money wisely
Baby thesis#2
he also learned that you need to ask before he did something.
Thesis
as you can see, Benjamin Franklin learned some life lessons. H learned that he has to sped his money wisely and that he has to ask before he did something

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Thesis-People make mistakes, even Benjamin Franklin had to learn some lessons here and there while growing up. Examples are Trusting strangers, and taking things without asking.

BT1-As a kid Benjamin learned not to trust strangers.

BT2-Another example is when Benjamin took something without asking.

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Thesis: The lessons Benjamin Franklin has learned not to spend money selfishly and not to take things without permission.

Baby Thesis 1: you would never think Benjamin Franklin would spend money selfishly.

Baby Thesis 2: There is no doubt about it no one is perfect,  Benjamin Franklin is took something without someones permission first.

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Thesis: In Benjamin Franklin's childhood he learned some lessons like spending money wisely and asking before taking.

Baby Thesis 1: To begin with Benjamin Franklin learned to use money wisely.

Baby Thesis 2: In addition, Benjamin Franklin learned to ask before he takes.

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Mrs. Sboto [Place your name here in the title box]

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Mrs. Sboto [Place your name here in the title box]

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1. Type your thesis statement here.
2. Type your baby thesis # 1 here.
3. Type your baby thesis # 2 here.

Proper grammar, capitalization, and punctuation- as always! :)