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The majority of problem in PolyU Campus is the low quality of food.According to Chang Lai Shung (2017),it is believed that the the food available in PolyU campus is cheap but in low quality.

In order to resolve the problem,Chang(2017) mentions that the changing of operators,or more frequent supervision on food quality is  <subject-verb agreement> feasible to improve food quality.

Comment:
1. Is it in APA citation style? See p.34 in Unit 2.
2.  Avoid using reporting phrase and reporting verbs in the same time.
3.  Which verb can collocate with 'problem'?

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The food available on The Hong Kong Polytechnic University (PolyU) campus are unhealthy. Restaurants offer canned meats and less vegetable. Therefore, food may cause  <good to use hedging> negative effect to PolyU student. <change to complex sentence>

In response to the problem mentioned above, the food suppliers are suggested to replace canned meats by fresh meats and provide more vegetables in each cuisine, acoording to Kwong  and Tse  (2017) <How should we use 'according to'?

Further comment:
You should include at lease a source in each body paragraph to support your claim.

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The food available on the Hong Kong Polytechnic University campus is not healthy enough. There is less vegetable in most cuisines according to Cheng Tsz Yau(2017). An abundant vegetable intake is considerable.

In response to the problem mentioned above, the canteen operators can provide cuisines with more vegetables. Therefore, students can have a more healthy diet.

Comment:
1. Is it in APA citation style? See p.34 in Unit 2.
2.  How should we use 'according to'?

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Unhealthy is the major problem for the food available in the Hong Kong Polytechnic University(PolyU) canteen. Some undergraduates commented <tense> that the meals in canteen offer little vegetable while including a considerable amount of <good phrase> fried food like fried chicken. According to Ng Tse Him(2017),the quality of food is poor as canned meats are included as a major component of the meals.

Comment:
1. Is it in APA citation style? See p.34 in Unit 2.

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The main problem of the food available in the Hong Kong Polytechnic University( PolyU) is the unhealthy food.For example,there are a lot of fried foods,which contains a great deal of fats,which may lead to obesity. According to Tang wing sze(2017), in the tea time,there are a lot of fried chicken and french fries,and less vegetable.

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The main problem of the food available in the Hong Kong Polytechnic University( PolyU) is the unhealthy food.For example,there are a lot of fried foods,which contains a great deal of fats,which may lead to obesity. According to Tang wing sze(2017), in the tea time,there are a lot of fried chicken and french fries,and less vegetable.

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Concerning the <use 'this' > problem, the school can provide more healthy diets,such as salad and sandwiches.

Comment:
Comment:
1. Is it in APA citation style? See p.34 in Unit 2.
2. There's an informal expression in paragraph 1.

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The major problem of the food provided in The Hong Kong Polytechnic University campus is lack of selections of cuisine. It could attribute to the monopoly of market in the canteen of campus(Cheung and Kong 2017).
According to Cheung and Ha (2017), she considered <avoid redundancy> to enlarge the competition of the market by introducing numerous organizations to the canteen.

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The food available in PolyU canteen is monopolized by the chained group, maxims <capital letter>.Therefore,the food price is expensive for the undergraduates.Cheung Yuen Si(2017)suggests < subject-verb agreement> that PolyU should allow more companies to organize the canteens.

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Many students always having meals in The Hong Kong Polytechnic University (PolyU), however there are still many places that can be improved. The main problem is the variety of food in PolyU is narrow, so that students have few selections. Tsang(2017) comments that most of the canteen in PolyU are sub-companies, so that all the food are more or less the same. Cheung(2017) also suggests that food choice in PolyU canteen is limited. In conclusion, the variety of food supply in PolyU is low.

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Many students always having meals in The Hong Kong Polytechnic University (PolyU), however there are still many places that can be improved. The main problem is the variety of food in PolyU is narrow, so that students have few selections. Tsang(2017) comments that most of the canteen in PolyU are sub-companies, so that all the food are more or less the same. Cheung(2017) also suggests that food choice in PolyU canteen is limited. In conclusion, the variety of food supply in PolyU is low.

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To improve this situation, Ha(2017) suggested that PolyU could introduce more food supplier into PolyU, the original food provider could also try to provide more types of food

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The food supplier in the Hong Kong Polytechnic University(PolyU) is monopoly. Maxim's is the main supplier of the PolyU mentioned by Cheung(2017) <Put the integral citation to the front>. According to Tsang, Kong and Ha (2017), the lack of competition among the food market leads to low quality of food and narrow choices.
To solve this problem, more food suppliers should be introduced to the food market of the PolyU. The

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Due to the only canteen operator in PolyU campus, the quality of the canteens is unsatisfied by many students. Cheung(2017) points out that "All canteens are  organised by the same company, Maxims." According to Lok(2017), the variety of food choices in the campus is not wide enough. Their comments indicate that the unacceptable quality of the canteens in PolyU needs to be improved.

In order to solve those problems, Cheung(2017) mentions that "Allowing more companies to operate the canteens is a possible way."

Comment:
Avoid using too many quotations.

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One of the problems of food provided on the Hong Kong Polytechnic University (Poly U) campus is unhealthy food. Cheng and Tse (2017) suggest <word choice: do they really 'suggest'?> that the dishes are lack of vegetables and too oily.
To promote healthy eating, Poly U could fine tune <use academic word> the meal such as providing more veggie <formality?> food choices

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1.using sources with researchers" initial interpretation could be a problem for undergraduates.
2.retaining the original meaning of the references is a challenge for undergraduates.

3.it is difficult for freshmen to quote references and keeping  <parallel pattern> the authors" ideas at the same time.

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1.Using sources to preserve authors' primary views <check collocation.  Can we use 'preserve views'?> is a considerable barrier to scholars <word choice: You've changed the meaning>.

2.Retaining the original meaning is a challenge to undergraduates.
3. It is difficult for students to cite references when keeping their initial idea.

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Using sources with their primary idea is commonly a major difficulty for students

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Using sources with their primary idea is commonly a major difficulty for students

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Retaining the original meaning of the sources is frequently a considerable challenge for undergraduates.

It is difficult to quote sources during maintaining the author's initial ideas <incomplete meaning: You haven't include 'students'

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1. Using sources could be a considerable challenge for undergraduate  <plural> to preserve authors' initial idea.

2. Retaining the original meaning of the sources is an enormous challenge faced by undergraduates.

3. It is difficult for freshmen to adopt references during <inappropriate use of 'during'> keeping sources' primary interpretation

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1. Using sources  with initial  interpretation is a challenge for students

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1. Using sources  with initial  interpretation is a challenge for students

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2. Retaining the original meaning of the sources is a <article> adversity <word choice for students.
3. It is difficult for students to quote references when maintaining sources' initial definition.

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1.Using sources with primary idea is challenging for undergraduates.

2.Retaining the original meaning of the information is a considerable problem for freshmen.

3.It is difficult for the young people studying at universities to maintain researchers' basic definition during applying <inappropriate use of during> information.

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1. Using sources whilst retaining sources' initial content are challenging for students.
2. Retaining the original meaning from the author is difficult for the undergraduates.
3. It is difficult for students to use sources while retaining their primary idea.

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Paraphrase your sentences with the following prompts.

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Paraphrase your sentences with the following prompts.

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1.       Using sources….

2.       Retaining the original meaning….

3.       It is difficult….