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Good practices: The teacher highlighted the mistake. There is detailed marking.
Bad: Written feedback - the tone a bit harsh. No affirmation. Did not apply the sandwich method (say how to improve at the end)
Suggest: Feedback to be phrased in a more positive way.

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Feeling:
- awareness and clear understanding of my mistakes as teacher pointed it out
- very anxious to see teacher to clarify my mistake
Good: clear feedback on technical feedback on technical mistakes. Gave reminders at the end and have the intention to follow up.
Bad: Harsh, some students may not like it. No positive reinforcements at all.

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Good practice:
Feedback is detailed and to the point, easy to understand.
Demonstrate with an example how to improve.
Poor practice:
Students can sense teacher’s anger in her comment. Comment could be more objective and factual.
AFI:
Not sure whether the comment is based on successful criteria for this writing task.

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1. Unsure of what the circles meant - what errors did I make?
2. 'Good attitude' - unsure of what was done well even though I received feedback, also unsure of what teacher meant by 'fragment'
3. Even though there were ticks, not sure what I did well since they were sometimes coupled with circles.

Gd Practice:
1. Encouraging comment at the end

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#1 Has a negative tone to the feedback, by questioning the student if he/she paid attention in class. May deter student from actually seeking help.

#2 Feedback is positive but superficial. Teacher identified mistakes but feedback provided doesn't let students know how they can improve.

#3 Positive tone in the feedback, reflects good rapport between student and teachers with personal inputs. No input about AOI.

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#1 discouraging and only list the negative points of essay, without saying how it can be improved.
#2 encouraging but did not tell student how to improve and what is wrong.
#3 personalized message and put her/himself in students shoes. But didn't correct grammatical errors

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Good practice: Specific descriptive feedback given (students may feel supported to improve their work)
Legible handwriting, students can read feedback given.
Poor practice: Some comments made are discouraging (too scared to see teacher for further feedback)

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+: easy to understand the marking and thinking behind it
-: no further feedback for improvement

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Good: Teacher’s comments are pleasant to read as they are encouraging. They are personal and the responses are valid to what the student wrote.

Showing Drill is a good way to guide the student to improve his points.

AFI: The teacher could have also corrected his grammar or spelling although the focus is on content. So that the student doesn't make the same mistakes. The teacher could have been more focused on how the student can improve his points by being more specific.

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Response #1
The feedback may be a bit too harsh and it feels like it’s too personal.
Certain parts such as scaffolding part is good as it is very specific.

Response #2
Feedback is motivating. However, I would be clueless as feedback only points out mistakes but no AFI

Response #3
As a student, I will feel good as teacher is playing close attention to me. However, the feedback given may not be enough to help. Response 1 has more scaffolding.

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#1- the feedback is presented in a way that is hard for student to understand. The teacher is also using a condescending tone that discourages the student

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The corrections are clear and specific and allow student to know exactly how to improve. Unfortunately, the ending comments might not have been the most encouraging and probably unneeded. Perhaps could incorporate the comments from article #3.

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If I were a student, I would be:
#1) hurt, I don’t want to care, I feel I will forget about it easily (not important to remember)
#2) too brief, I feel good, but confused (what do you mean by more)
#3) I would feel my efforts were acknowledged & I know how to improve.

Good practices:
Words of encouragement,
Specific feedback on how to improve

Practices that can be improved:
Too vague & some comments too harsh/demanding

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Insufficient feedback for students' further learning, actionable feedback is not clear
Encouraging, but it is not clear what students did well in
What is intent of marking? What is communicated to students? Only selected errors are pointed out in marking.

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- circles but did not elaborate on mistakes
- some kind comments --> encouraging.
funny? - gd? bad?

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Bad: The grammar mistakes were not addressed. Teacher trying to show affirmation but not addressing learning. Teaching students the wrong thing - 'Pretend you're in school after not getting enough sleep'. This gives students impression that its OK to not get enough sleep.
Good: Agree mentality on giving affirmation BUT maybe not on such a topic.

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Good practice:
Teacher's comments were  encouraging. She used phrases like " good attitude" and " good start"
-Students feel encouraged and motivated.
Bad practice:
1) The comments were too vague and not specific enough. Eg " I look forward to more".  Students may not be able to understand the requirements of the teacher and it may sound demanding.
2) Words used could be difficult for understand, eg " fragments"
3) Word choice, eg " funny" may have negative connotation
- Students will feel confused.

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#2

Feel good after reading the feedback below. However, not very sure how we can improve or correct our mistakes.

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Many errors not highlighted but it could be possible that marker is focusing on some (more serious areas) in the first draft.

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Good practices:  Encouraging tone for the 2nd and 3rd piece. Marking is more towards the content.
Bad practices: Quite a harsh tone of the feedback and straightforward, but marking is very specific on the mistakes.

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1. I understand my teacher's comments - they are specific and focused
2. I feel that my teacher is trying to connect with me through her feedback

Gd Practice:
1. Feedback is focused and actionable so I know what steps to take in future to improve my work

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#1

Detailed marking which can guide students to improve, but we may feel demoralised as a student.

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Good comments but they could be phrased more positively and more encouragingly.
Errors are circled and the correct form is written

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#3

Specific in identifying the errors or AFIs. Teacher trying to build rapport using the comments.

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#1

The student would feel unmotivated. The negative feedback is quite defeating and the comment “were you not paying attention” was unnecessary.

However, the feedbacks are quite factual. It also depends on the relationship between the teacher and students. If the teacher is known to be strict, then some of the comments are useful feedback for the students.

#2

Comments was very brief. Putting a tick on the statements is a good practise, gives students the feedback it is correct. However, we must be careful if the intention was to affirm the students, then tick might leave a wrong impression that the student is correct.

#3

Looks insulting but putting it in a nicer way. It depends on the relationship with the student. The showing drill is a good way for students to work on and improve.

If we combine the comments of #1 and #3 may be a good style. Telling students what to look out yet confidence building.

Try as much to not be personal when giving a feedback as a teacher