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1:Used lots of paragraphs

1. Made more sentences

2. Used themes

3. More punctuation

4. Connect with other writers

5. I found more ways to write

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1. Action

2. Diolouge

3. Endin

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1: Elaboration: I included more detailthroughout the story.
2: Message: I included a theme/message in my story.
3: Conclusion: My conclusion had a theme and finished the story better.

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1. Description, I added more to make my reader feel in the moment

2. Elaborating, my story was longer then the first one

3. Setting, I told the reader were they were using details

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1. Description

2. Lead

3. Spelling

4. Inner thinking

5. Flashbacks

6. Staying in the moment

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Ryan Gottshall

1 craft

2 spelling
3 transition

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1.) Elaboration- I added more dialogue
2.)  I extended my story
3.)

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1. Description by using more detail

2. Spelling

3. Inner thinking

4. Flashbacks

5. Lead

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Kahsan y
I have more detail
And I have description

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1. Description I used better description by using better detail

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Trinity yorkey: I have more resources to help me use transitions words

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1.) I have elaborated a lot more. My post on-demand is much long than my pre- and is much more detailed and descriptive.

2.) My pre on-demand shows nor gives emotion, but my post on-demand shows my struggle while also giving the reader empathy.

3.) I’ve gotten better at not skipping parts I thought were “unimportant” when they really could have given intensity to the story.

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Maddie Meshey
1. I stayed in first person in my post on demand.

2. I told my post on demand bit by bit and described it more.

3. I have a stronger ending with a lesson and wrapped the story up better in my post on demand.

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Trinity yorkey:

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1. Action
No improvement. Still same (positive)

2. Dialogue
Good enough

3. Lead
Maks se .

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1. Lead I have edited a better start

2.description I have description it better

3.ending I have made my ending better

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My style was better

The words, sentences, were not all over the place, but in a place where it belonged (organization)

Dialogue, no dialogue in my pre, but a lot more in my post

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Now I use more resources to help me spell thing right

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1. Character interaction, how they act with each other and without each other
2. Emotion between the characters, expressing how they feel with each other
3. Slowing down small moment and showing the deeper meaning

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1. In the pre on demand there was not much description but on the post on demand I explained ore details on how I was feeling
2.in the pre on demand there wasn’t a lot of talking and in the post on demand there was more talking to show how i was feeling
3.on the pre on demand there it was shorter in text than my post on demand

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Lauren Fagan
1.) I have added more dialogue
2.)  I made my story longer
3.)

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Ryan Gottshall

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* My stories got much longer
* I made a more interesting lead
* I got better at my ending and had a really strong ending showing what my story was really about

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1. I have added better description
2. I used proper grammar
3. I did not quickly finish my ending so I would be done with it
4. My stories got much longer, instead of making it short

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1. Actions

2.

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1 my lead

2 grammar

3 my handwriting

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1. I used more description
2. More correct spelling
3. More dialogue

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2.

3.

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Lillian Moore
I have grown by ...
1. Using more description
2. I have use more inner thinking
3.  My lead
4. Stretching out the heart of the story

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Lauren Fagan
1.)

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Style
Organization
Introduction
I included more detail in the introduction,

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Ian Townsend

1: Elaboration I made my writing much more detailed and stretched out certain moments
2: Lead I started with action to interest the reader
3: Ending I used a tone and mode to set the end

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1. Dialogue
2. Authors Craft
3. Transitions
4. Elaboration
5. Punctuation