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it is not bad and helpful

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i give it a 8/10 because of how it was it was clear:)

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i give it a 8/10 because it had good suporting ideas to the controlling

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                  Ashley                                        i will give it a 10/10 because they give a lot of details and examples 

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                  Ashley                                        i will give it a 10/10 because they give a lot of details and examples 

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I give it a 8/10 because the introduction was really confusing ;

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because... it had the supporting evidence and the controlling idea

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I rate this essay an 8/10 because it had a good controlling idea and lots of evidence. It as also a little mixed up so I didn't really understand it. Other than that it was a very good story.

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7/10 , because there was a some word that were mis-spellled which i woudnt understand , then it was hrad for me to find the sentence

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I give it 8/10 because of the intro had one sentence that was not apart of the main idea

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I will give it a 8 out of a 10 . I know he or she can make a better essay this essay is good but I know that the writer can make it better

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I think the essay was good i would give it a 7 because it had good controlling ideas and good evidence i also think it was cool how he used real life examples it did although have it a little mixed up but overall it was a good eassy.

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I would give it a 7/10 because it had a good story and its focused and its clear.

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i give it a 8 out of ten because it needs a better ending

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i would give a 8/10 because the controlling idea always confuses me all the time

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i feel like the writer should have had a better hook

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i think its a 6/10 because everything was mixed up and it was getting really confusing

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I give it a 7/10 because it has its controlling idea and its supporting evidence

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Jenna: The controlling idea and the evidence makes it 6/10

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Jenna: The controlling idea and the evidence makes it 6/10

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I would give it a 7 out of 10 because the controlling idea was not very strong and the evidence would not persuade people.

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4 out  of 8 cuz it couldve been better

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I would give it a 8/10

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i think the essay was good i would give it a 4 as well it had a good controlling idea and good evidence i also think it cool how he used real life examples it did although have it a little mixed up but overall it was good.

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I think its a 9/10 because i don't really understand what were typing or learning about.

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I give it a 1/10 because it didnt have a side and it wasnt as clear

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i would give it a 8/10 because the controlling idea and the introduction was really confusing and it threw me off

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I give the essay about a 8 out of 10 because all the evidence was good and strong but the introduction was kind of confusing and they didn't pick a side

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4/5 cause it was really clear and strong accept for the first
paragraph

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I give this essay a 7/10 because i feel like the essay could of have more to it then just what it had.Also they couldve tried to put it in their own words.

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It gets a 7/10,good advice is given but the first paragraph is unclear and kind of changes topic.

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i will give it a 3 because the controlling idea wasn't that strong but the connecting sentence and evidence was

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I would give this a 0 out 10 it was trash, it was not entertaining

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Well i think that they need to work on the introduction because its a little confusing because they didn't pick a side.

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i think 8 because there is a lot of evidence 

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i think 8 because there is a lot of evidence 

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8/10
cause  it has evidence and controlling idea but the 1 paragraph is confusing.

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I would rate the story a 3 out of 4 just because of the beginning of the story and how nit bounced form idea to idea and didn just stick with one idea

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9.123456787/10
wasnt tooo wordy and had a good controlling idea and used real life events

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i would give it a 9/10 because its controlling idea is ok ,but it can be better. Also its evidance is very good.

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I think a 8 because it has good evidence and supports its controlling idea but it has this other sentence that does not belong there because it try's to tell you something else.

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I give this essay a 6/10 because it didnt pick a side and it wasnt clear. I also think that the author got its ideas from a book, and maybe a real life event that the author knew about.

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i think i give the essay 9.9/10 cause their was tons of evidence and it was really clear -_- >:o >:D XD

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l give the essay a 8/10 because it gave good evidence and good connecting sentences,but the the controlling sentence was kind of unclear to me.

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I think that it was ok but, it could have a better controlling idea.Over all the evidence  was strong. it deserves a 8/10

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I would give it a four out of five stars.I think the story was good ,but I didn't like the fact that the first paragraph was a little bit confusing on it's controlling idea.They got there first example from a book, and the last one from some type social studies class or some history text book.

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In my opinion this story was really well put together. In STAAR scoring I would give this story a 3. I would give it a 3 because of the beginning. I don really like how they put the beginning of the story together, because they jump around form idea to idea. But the evidence is really well put together and itś just good evidence in general

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I give it a 7 it was good not perfect but it was good. they got their examples from a book by Kimberly Bradley's 'THE WAR THAT SAVED MY LIFE' and history of Texas in 1901.

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i  would give it a 8/10 because the controlling idea wasn't very strong but the evidence was strong

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I would give my rating of this essay a 4/10 because it was very wordy and the controlling idea couldve been a little better.

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I rate this a 3 (in staar scores)
I think this because the first paragraph wasn't picking a side, it went from goals to not following goals back to goals.

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I would rate it a 8 because the essay was pretty focused except for the beginning, which really didn't pick a side, the examples were good pieces of evidence, though

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I think it is a 6.01 out of ten because the examples were good but at the beginning it was a little messed up because it wouldn't choose a side

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I would give this a 6.5 because this essay has good evidence, yet it need to pick a side wen it comes to their controlling idea. They could improve their grammar as well. Otherwise that, I think it's an okay essay.

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I think it's a 9/10 because, it had clear evidence supporting the controlling idea. The controlling idea was strong and supported all the evidence

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I think that this story is a 9.5. This is because the story has alot of evidence relevant to the controlling idea. This story picks a side has a  very clear focus.

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i think it was based on a real event. i give a 7

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olivia
it was not to wordy

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I think the controlling idea is strong  because of using real life events related to the controlling and its clear and picked a side,clear

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I think the controlling idea is strong  because of using real life events related to the controlling and its clear and picked a side,clear

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In my opinion I think the controlling is strong because its using real life events related to the controlling

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In my opinion I think the controlling is strong because its using real life events related to the controlling

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controlling idea.

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to me the story was well put in had  good facts in i like how it used real life events

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I will rate it a 8,because it tells example of how to achive goals or  how other people achive the goal,but only that its to much words in it so without to many words I will rate it a 10

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this essay is 10/10

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i think that the story is very strong in what its trying to say. it had a strong controlling idea and it had good evidence and examples for the controlling idea. they used a book and facts from a real life event to give evidence but remained on topic.

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I think it had all the the things you need to have an controlling idea.I had focused on 1 thing it was clear and it picked a side

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my rating of the essay is probably a 8/10 i chose that rating because the controling idea is very good it is focus , clear, and it has a picked side .the examples do really go with the essay becuase iits focused with the controlling idea

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I think that the essay was strong because it was very focus,clear, and it picked a side.

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as I read the essay i thought it was like 8/10 because it had real life events and thing she had done. It was also good

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10/10 amazing because he gets avery detal in the storry

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i think that the controlling idea was strong because it was focus clear and pick a side

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i think that they use real life events to do the essay

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I think that the story had a very strong, and it was very clear. 10/10

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they used real life events

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This essay was kind of confusing at the beginning but the rest of the essay was good. So I give it a 4 out of 5 star rating.