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Loyalty: An example of loyalty is when Penelope  waits for Odysseus to return and does not give up on him.

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Feedback
Hook:  Always use one of our hooks.  Click here for the list!
Contemporary Example:  It would be kind of cool to do a skosh of research and find out how he taught himself and maybe how he felt about the rejection.
Personal Example:  Pick a representative moment, a specific time, and tell it to us like a story - action! description! dialogue!
Odyssey: Pretend your audience doesn't know the story and explain it to us. Give us your take on it!

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Overall:  You've essentially got your paper written.  A lot of GREAT ideas.
Below is a little feedback.
Hook:  Always use one of our hooks (click here to see the list!)
Contemporary Examples:  Kudos on having an example for both your definition and anti-definition!  Bulk up/"develop" these with details from research - what did King submit?  What did some of the rejections say? etc.  And it'd probably be pretty easy to find Steve's own words on his choice to reject treatment.
Odyssey Example:  was there ever a time when O was just plain stubborn?  I don't know, I'm just thinking it might be a fun addition.

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Hook:  Always use one of our hooks (click here to see the list!)

Example from Odyssey:  Not so much . . . ya' know . . . there yet.
Personal Example:  Pick a specific moment - a time this happened, then develop it, too, using storytelling techniques -  add dialogue, description, etc.

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Hook:  "Known for his crazy hair.."  I love it!
Definition:  since dictionary definitions aren't allowed - how would YOU define it?  (Though I like that definition you found a lot.  Could you add to it or clarify what some of those key terms mean?)
Personal Experience:  Remember to explain how this connects to "wisdom."
Conclusion:  "this great historic loop of mistakes" Hahahahahahah! Nice word choice!

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What is Victory
Hook: Victory is something very one needs to feel accomplished in day to day life, whether is is a little victory's or  a gigantic victory. definition: A triumph in a battle or advent. Anti definition: loss in a battle or advent. (Hey, Zakk! Mrs. V. here: The anti-definition should be a word that could easily be mistaken for victory - like "winning" or "serendipity" or such) personal example: Getting toilet paper at the store and winning an argument with my brother (So, in your essay, you'll tell these as stories - with action, description, dialogue, etc.).  Odyssey example: when Odysseus returns home and kills his wife's suitors. Current example: I don't think this qualifies as current, but Donald Trump winning the 2016 election despite all of the odds (it does indeed count - contemporary is just something that happened or is happening in this era! You'll need to do some research on this - maybe find some of what people said about how he couldn't possibly win, etc. and incorporate it into your essay.). conclusion: victory is important because with out it we would not have a complete life

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Topic:  Might be easier to pick one to focus on - mental OR physical.  Just a thought.
Personal example:  Pick a specific time - a story or two you can tell about a time when you dealt with "pain."
Odyssey Example:  This is a really solid choice.  O was likely experiencing both physical and mental pain here.  Take some time to develop or bulk this example up with description and explanation of how it relates to "pushing through"
Contemporary Example:  This would be easy to bulk up with research to add details and quotations.
Anti-definition: What could easily be confused with or mistaken for "pain"?

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What is Loyalty??????
Hook:  Always use one of our hooks (click here to see the list!)
Overall Feedback:  Looks like you've got all your elements together.
We are going to be adding at least one example to illustrate our anti-definition - in fact, finding one from research will be Monday's suggested task!

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Can you trust them?
Overall Feedback:  You're certainly on the right track.  Right now, most examples are still pretty doggone general.
Contemporary Example:  Find quotations, facts, details, and examples from research!
Odyssey Example:  Don't forget to explain how her actions = trust.
Personal Example:  Pick a specific time, a specific conversation or event and tell us the story.
Hook:  Always use one of our hooks (click here to see the list!)

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Audrey's Padlet

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Note:  The Whole Padlet Thing Not Up Your Alley?

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Note:  The Whole Padlet Thing Not Up Your Alley?

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If the "Padlet" thing doesn't work for your writing process, nooooo problem! You can just put it all together in a Doc and post the link to your Doc in a post right here on this page.

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3 - Share Your Padlet Link Right Here on This Page!

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3 - Share Your Padlet Link Right Here on This Page!

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Toss a link to YOUR Padlet by adding a post on this one (just make sure you're signed into Padlet, then double-click on a blank spot on this page)!
Just use the little linking icon at the bottom of the post.
When you click the "Share" button in the top right corner of your Padlet, just change the Privacy Settings to Public (click here to see how).
Then set your Visitor Permissions to Can Write - this way you can get feedback from me and your classmates right there on your Padlet!
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It's looking good so far!  Your personal example and contemporary example have gotta' be specific . . . like, research a particular celeb who felt lonely, read about why and what they said about it, then tell us what you found out.
For your personal example, tell us about "that one time when..." - a specific day when that happened.  Make it like a story, "I'd  plunked down on the couch in the basement, controller in hand, ready for a few hours of blasting through robot zombies..." etc.