# data[].attributes.body
Original sentence:
I grew up in a small town in Malaysia, life is much simpler and relatively stress free, and I would like to retire there someday.

Sentence correction:
I grew up in a small town in Malaysia where/ in which life was much simpler and relatively stress free and I would like to retire there someday.

# data[].attributes.body
Original sentence:
In order to graduate on time with the rest of his peers, he had to read six modules in the last semester. Which was not an optimal condition for his studies.

Error type: Run on sentence (sentence fragment)

Sentence correction:
In order to graduate on time with the rest of his peers, he had to read six modules in the last semester, which was not an optimal condition for his studies.

# data[].attributes.body
After I met three new business associates for breakfast, I was rather amused last Saturday because each had a very different style of communicating in terms of body language and gestures.

-Yuki

I was rather amused last Saturday when I met three new business associates for breakfast because each had a very different style of communicating in terms of body language and gestures.

I was rather amused last Saturday by the three new business associates whom I met for breakfast, because each had a very different style of communicating in terms of body language and gestures.

# data[].attributes.headline
Lecture 4 Q6. I would like to know the reason he decided not to come.

# data[].attributes.subject
Lecture 4 Q6. I would like to know the reason he decided not to come.

# data[].attributes.body
I would like to know the reason why he decided not to come.

James

# data[].attributes.body
Alienation is noticable among people come from different cultural background.

It is wrong.

Alienation is noticable among people who come from different cultural background.

# data[].attributes.body
Add a ‘to’ after key

The person whom I was supposed to return the key to is not home

# data[].attributes.body
Most young men in Singapore who have finished their secondary education are enlisted for National Service at the age of nineteen.

# data[].attributes.headline
Lecture 3 Task 1 Q2. Even though many people do not like to face the fact racial discrimination is deeply rooted in their minds.

# data[].attributes.subject
Lecture 3 Task 1 Q2. Even though many people do not like to face the fact racial discrimination is deeply rooted in their minds.

# data[].attributes.body
Error Type: Two Main Verb (sentence fragment)

Correction: Many people do not like to face the fact that racial discrimination is deeply rooted in their minds.

James

# data[].attributes.body
Whenever I get into a situation which it is hard to make a decision, I try to look at it from different perspectives.

Correction: Whenever I get into a situation in which/ where it is hard to make a decision, I try to look at it from different perspectives.

# data[].attributes.headline
Lecture 4 Qn 8: This is the shop I brought the lovely doughnuts this afternoon. 

# data[].attributes.subject
Lecture 4 Qn 8: This is the shop I brought the lovely doughnuts this afternoon. 

# data[].attributes.body
correction: This is the shop where/ from which I brought the lovely doughnuts this afternoon.

~jerica

# data[].attributes.body
Original sentence: Summer is the time we like to travel because the weather is much more enjoyable and the days are longer.

Corrected sentence: Summer is the time when/ during which we like to travel because the weather is much more enjoyable, and the days are longer.

# data[].attributes.body
The people whom I have met them in my class are very friendly.

Correction: The people whom I have met in my class are very friendly.

# data[].attributes.body
From lecture 4 Post-viewing learning tasks Q2

Question: Decide whether the following sentences are correct or wrong. Correct the wrong ones.
"There are more than one in three marriages will end in divorce."

Answer: More than one in three marriages will end in divorce.

Reason for mistake: "There are" is redundant in this case. Removing the "there are" can still address the same meaning.

# data[].attributes.body
Original sentence: Although it was suitable at that time because of the war, poor productivity and so on. But we do not need this practice now.
Error type: run on error (sentence fragment)
Sentence correction: Although it was suitable at that time because of the war, poor productivity, and so on. But we do not need this practice now

poor productivity and so on, we do not need this practice now

# data[].attributes.body
Culturally less competent people are sometimes terrified as they have to communicate with others who could be very different from them in culture and worldview.However, there is a growing number of contacts at work with people of different linguistic and cultural backgrounds.
(Varshini)

Since there is a growing number of contacts at work with people of different linguistic and cultural backgrounds, culturally less competent people are sometimes terrified as they have to communicate with others who could be very different from them in culture and worldview.

With the growing number of contacts at work with people of different linguistic and cultural backgrounds, culturally less competent people are sometimes terrified as/ because they have to communicate with others who could be very different from them in culture and worldview.

# data[].attributes.body
With some effort, people who come from different cultural backgrounds can live in harmony, there is no question about that.

Error Type: Sentence Fragment x (run-on sentence)
Correction: With some effort, people who come from different cultural backgrounds can live in harmony. There is no question about that.

OR

harmony; there is no question about that.

# data[].attributes.headline
Task 1 Qn4: when we plan to study or work abroad; we should always get as much information as possible. 

# data[].attributes.subject
Task 1 Qn4: when we plan to study or work abroad; we should always get as much information as possible. 

# data[].attributes.body
error type: comma splice (punctuation)
correction: when we plan to study or work abroad, we should always get as much information as possible.

# data[].attributes.body
The teacher is angry with Peter as he is more than half an hour late for the test, he went out for a late night movie yesterday.

But I do prefer this manner: (unsure if that is allowed, let alone if it is correct😅)
Peter went out for a late night movie yesterday, thus, he is more than half an hour late for the test, making his teacher angry.

The teacher is angry with Peter for being more than half an hour late for the test because he went out for a late night movie yesterday.

# data[].attributes.body
The Japanese mono-ethnic cultural identity may be threatened.
The forces of globalisation have had a profound impact on the nation.
Japan needs to consider how it would respond to such a situation.

The Japanese mono-ethnic cultural identity may be threatened due to the forces of globalisation have had a profound impact on the nation as such, Japan needs to consider how it would respond to such a situation.

Japan needs to consider how it would respond to the profound impact of the forces of globalisation which is threatening its mono-ethnic cultural identity.