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I’d like to tell you about my school. I go to Trung Vuong primary school. It is in Ha Noi, Viet Nam. My school is quite close to my house. My mom takes me to school by motorbike. It takes 10 minutes to go there. My school has 6 floors, my classroom is on the second floor. There is a library, a computer lab, an english room and a lot of classrooms in my school. I like my classroom the most. I like drawing there. I like my school a lot.

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Let me introduce you to my best friend. My best friend is Minh Nhat. He has short black hair and brown eyes. He has a round face. He is tall and thin. Minh Nhat is naughty, he runs very fast. He likes soccer and my paper games a lot. He wants to be a soccer player. Minh Nhat and I are in the same class, we go home together, play together in the park, eat together at restaurant at the weekend. we like playing uno and collecting rubber bands. I hope we are best friends forever.

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I'd like to tell you about my room. I share it with my dad. My room is on the 3rd floor. My bed is near the big window. My table is opposite my bed. It is long, there is a board to pin medals which I achived. It has a lot of lovely handmade boxes. My favorite red sofa is in one corner. There is a bookshelf above my bed. It has a lot of rubiks and books. My TV is on the wall. I like my room very much.

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Bài viết khá tốt, dùng nhiều cấu trúc câu hơn những bài còn lại. Chú ý sắp xếp ý hợp lý hơn, lưu ý khi dùng "It has..." hãy thay bằng những cấu trúc khác để diễn đạt ý này.

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Dùng thêm nhiều quan hệ từ (so, because, ...) các mệnh đề quan hệ (who, where, which) để bài viết được đánh giá tốt hơn.

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Chú ý lỗi ngữ pháp (viết hoa đầu câu, viết hoa tên riêng,...)
Với mẫu câu I hope thì mệnh đề sau chia ở tương lai, nó chỉ là hy vọng một điều gì đó SẼ xảy ra, chưa chắc chắn ở tương lai.

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I'd like to tell you about my room. I share it with my dad. My room is on the 3rd floor. My bed is near a big window. There is a bookshelf above my bed with a lot of rubiks and books. My long table is opposite my bed. Above it, there is a board to pin medals which I achived. I put a lot of lovely handmade boxes on it. My favorite red sofa is at one corner. My TV is on the wall. I like my room very much.

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I’d like to tell you about my school. I have studied at Trung Vuong primary school for 4 years. My school is in Ha Noi, Viet Nam. It is quite close to my house. My mom takes me to school by motorbike. It takes 10 minutes to go there. My school has 3 buildings and each one has 6 floors. My classroom is on the 2nd floor. There is a library, a computer lab, an english room and a lot of classrooms in my school. My favorite place is our classroom because I like drawing there. My school is so amazing.

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Let me introduce you to my best friend. His name is Minh Nhat. He has short black hair, brown eyes and a round face. He is taller but thinner than me. Minh Nhat is naughty, he runs very fast. He likes soccer and my paper games a lot. He wants to be a soccer player. Minh Nhat and I have been in the same class for 4 years. We sometimes go home together, play together in the park, eat together at restaurant at the weekend. We like playing Uno and collecting rubber bands. I hope we will be best friends forever.

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Let me tell you about my family. There are 3 people in my family: my dad, my mom and me. My dad is a developer. He is good at chess and earning money. My mom is a home maker. She is good at cooking and Art. I'm an only child in my family. My favorite subjects are Math, English and Information Technology. My family often eat at a restaurant and come back home town at the weekend. In free time, my family usualy sleep or play games. I am very close to my family. I love my family very much.

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Chú ý các từ homemaker, hometown đều là viết liền. Dùng nhiều mẫu câu khác nhau để diễn tả những ý tương đồng thì sẽ tránh được việc lặp cấu trúc ngữ pháp quá gần. Dùng đại từ để tránh lặp các danh từ đã nhắc đến trước đó. Trước khi giới thiệu môn học yêu thích có thể kể mình là học sinh để các ý liên kết chặt chẽ hơn.

Bài viết có tiến bộ

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Let me tell you about my family. There are 3 people in my family: my dad, my mom and me. My dad is a developer. His hobby is playing chess. He works hard and earns money for all family. My mom is a homemaker. She is good at cooking and Art. I am an only child in my family. I am a student. My favorite subjects are Math, English and Information Technology. My family often eat out at a restaurant and come back hometown at the weekend. In free time, we usualy sleep or play games. I am very close to my family. I love my family so much.

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Last year, I had a great holiday. I went to Sam Son beach. It took 5 hours to get there by car. There are a lot of beautiful beaches, wonderful cafes, cheap shops and a long beach. It was sunny. I played sand with my mom in the morning, swam with my dad in the afternoon and drank coffee with my parents in the evening. I like the swimming pool in my hotel the most. I like my holiday very much.

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Chú ý thêm các cụm từ hoặc sử dụng các cấu trúc khác để có chủ ngữ linh hoạt, tránh tình trạng I... I... I... liên tiếp. Chú ý lỗi chính tả. Xem lại câu "There are ..." bị lặp ý linh tinh. Cố gắng k viết câu cụt ngủn chỉ có 3 từ như "Ít was sunny" có thể thêm các ý nhỏ để câu dài hơn, nội dung phong phú hơn. Dùng các liên từ, mệnh đề quan hệ để bài viết được đánh giá tốt! Câu kết bị cụt, triển khai thêm đi.

Bài viết tạm được, dùng thì tốt, không có nhầm lẫn.

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I like many sport but I like badminton the most. In the summer, I play it with my mom every morning for 1 hour. We play it in the park near my school. I am good at running and picking up the shuttercook and bad at hitting the shuttercook. I practice with a shuttercook and my racket which my teacher Huong gave me on Children's Day. My favorite player is my mom because she is very good at hitting the shuttercook. I like batminton so much and I will play it better.

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- Bài viết tiến bộ, đã sử dụng nhiều cấu trúc câu hơn.
- Lưu ý many + N số nhiều. Xem lại mạo từ, vẫn còn nhầm lẫn. Cẩn thận lỗi lặp.

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Last year, I had a great holiday with my family. I went to Sam Son beach. It took 5 hours to get there by car. There are a lot of beautiful restaurants, wonderful café, cheap shops and a long beach. It was sunny and windy. I played sand with my mom in the morning, swam with my dad in the afternoon and drank coffee with my parents in the evening. My favorite place is the swimming pool in a hotel where we stayed. I like my holiday so much.

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I like many sports but I like badminton the most. In the summer, I play it with my mom every morning for 1 hour. We play it in a park near my school. I am good at running and picking up the shuttercook and bad at hitting it. I practice with my racket which my teacher Huong gave me on Children's Day. My favorite player is my mom because she is very good at hitting the shuttercook. I like batminton so much and I will play it better.

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My favorite season is summer. It is usually sunny and hot, sometimes it is rainy and storm. I go swimming every day with my mom in a swimming pool where is not far from my house. In summer, there are a lot of fruits like apples, oranges, strawberries, ... but I enjoy bananas the most because they taste quite cold. Summer has Children's Day, I get a lot of gifts such as toys, clothes, shoes, ... but i like rubiks the most. My mom's birthhday is also in the summer. I and my dad always make a party and give my mom a gift with all love. Summer is so fantastic.

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- Nhìn chung bài viết có nhiều tiến bộ!

- Con cần dùng thêm nhiều quan hệ từ, liên từ trong câu hơn nữa. Không dùng dấu "..." mà dùng "and so on" nhé. Cần sử dụng nhiều cầu trúc linh hoạt để diễn tả các ý tương đồng tránh bị lặp.

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I’d like to tell you about my school. I have studied at Trung Vuong primary school for 4 years. My school is in Ha Noi, Vietnam. It is quite close to my house. My mom takes me to school by motorbike. It takes 10 minutes to go there. My school has 3 buildings and each one has 6 floors. My classroom is on the 2nd floor. There is a library, a computer lab, an English room, and a lot of classrooms in my school. My favorite place is our classroom because I like drawing there. My school is so amazing.

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Let me introduce you to my best friend. His name is Minh Nhat. He has short black hair, brown eyes, and an oval face. He is taller but thinner than me. Minh Nhat is naughty, he runs very fast. He likes soccer and my paper games a lot. He wants to be a soccer player. Minh Nhat and I have been in the same class for 4 years. We sometimes go home together, play together in the park, eat together at a restaurant at the weekend. We like playing Uno and collecting rubber bands. I hope we will be best friends forever.

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I'd like to tell you about my room. I share it with my dad. My room is on the 3rd floor. My bed is near a big window. There is a bookshelf above my bed with a lot of Rubik's cubes and books. My long table is opposite my bed. Above it, there is a board to pin medals which I achieved. I put a lot of lovely handmade boxes on it. My favorite red sofa is at one corner. My TV is on the wall. I like my room very much.

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I like many sports, but I like badminton the most. In the summer, I play it with my mom every morning for 1 hour. We play it in a park near my school. I am good at running and picking up the shuttercock but bad at hitting it. I practice with my racket, which my teacher Huong gave me on Children's Day. My favorite player is my mom because she is very good at hitting the shuttercock. I like badminton so much, and I will play it better.

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Last year, I had a great holiday with my family. I went to Sam Son beach. It took 5 hours to get there by car. There are a lot of beautiful restaurants, wonderful cafés, cheap shops, and a long beach. It was sunny and windy. I played sand with my mom in the morning, swam with my dad in the afternoon, and drank coffee with my parents in the evening. My favorite place is the swimming pool in the hotel where we stayed. I like my holiday so much.

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My favorite season is summer. The weather is usually sunny and hot, although sometimes it can be rainy and stormy. I go swimming every day with my mom in a pool where is not far from my house. In summer, there are a lot of fruits like apples, oranges, strawberries, and so on, but I enjoy bananas the most because they taste quite cold. Summer brings Children's Day. I get a lot of gifts such as toys, clothes, shoes, and so on, but my favorite is Rubik's cubes. My mom's birthday is in the summer as well. I and my dad always organise a party and give her a wonderful gift. Summer is so fantastic.

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I like Sundays very much. I don't go to school on Sunday. I always get up late in the morning. In the afternoon, I sometimes go out, visit my grandparents. In the evening, I go to sleep early. Last Sunday was excilent, I went to Tini World with my friends: Duc Khang, Trung Khiem, Minh Hung, and so on. We played Flappy Bird, Pong, Fishing, bear picking game, and so on. My favorite game was Fishing because it was easy. Duc Khang and I got 428 tickets so we used 200 tickets to buy a stress ball which was broken 3 days later by my mom. We had a fantastic lunch with pizza, chicken, pasta, and salad. Then we drank freeze matcha at Highland Coffee. Sunday is so fun and relaxing. I hope I will have a lot of special Sundays with my friends.

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- Bài viết ngày càng dài --> có tiến bộ. Mẫu câu phong phú, phát triển ý tốt hơn rồi.

- Con chú ý sửa lại các lỗi sau:
+ 3 câu đầu chủ ngữ I liên tục, con dùng các cấu trúc khác để diễn đạt cho phong phú. Gợi ý: con có thể ghép 2 câu đầu thành 1 dùng mệnh đề "vì..."
+ Tô đỏ là các tên riêng cần chú ý.
+ Xem các chỗ sữa nhé, có gợi ý các từ khác để con lựa chọn cho không bị lặp.
==> nói chung con gặp chủ yếu là lỗi lặp thôi. cố gắng khắc phục nhé.

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My favorite season is summer. The weather is usually sunny and hot, although sometimes it can be rainy and stormy. I go swimming every day with my mom in a pool which is not far from my house. In summer, there are a lot of fruits like apples, oranges, strawberries, and so on, but I enjoy bananas the most because they taste quite cold. Summer brings Children's Day. I get a lot of gifts, such as toys, clothes, shoes, and so on, but my favorite is Rubik's cubes. My mom's birthday is in the summer as well. My dad and I always organise a party and give her a wonderful gift. Summer is so fantastic.

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My favorite day is Sunday because I don't have to go to school. I always get up late in the morning. In the afternoon, I sometimes go out and visit my grandparents. In the evening, I go to sleep early. Last Sunday was excellent, I went to Tini World with my friends Duc Khang, Trung Khiem, Minh Hung, and more. We played Flappy Bird, Pong, Fishing, Bear Picking game, and so on. My favorite game was Fishing because it was easy to play. Duc Khang and I got 428 tickets so we used 200 of them to buy a stress ball which was broken 3 days later by my mom. We had a fantastic lunch with pizza, chicken, pasta, and salad. After that, we went to Highland Coffee and drank Freeze Matcha. Sunday is so much fun and relaxing. I hope I will have a lot of special Sundays with my friends.

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My favorite book is Con Duoc Sinh Ra Nhu The Nao. My mom gave me it on my birthday last year. It has a lot of pictures which can flip in it. It is about how a baby is born and how much parents love their babies. After reading this book, I know all the babies of the world are priceless presents and they need to be loved. My parents love me very much and I love them very much too.

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- Bài viết đạt yêu cầu tối thiểu về số chữ, như thế sẽ là hơi ít vì khi chữa sẽ bị co ngắn lại. Con thử phát triển thêm ý ví dụ nó to hay nhỏ, dày hay mỏng, lúc nhận được quyển sách con thấy thế nào, hoặc vì sao khi đi mua con lại chọn nó (bìa sách đẹp? màu sắc bắt mắt?...)
- Vấn đề trước and mà mệnh đề sau đủ chủ vị sẽ có dấu câu mẹ đã nói rồi, con k nên sai tiếp nữa.
- Đoạn which can flip là k đúng, fai là bị động, nó k thể tự lật được, hoặc con phải dùng which you can... Ngoài ra, ở đây mẹ thấy sách của con là các hình ảnh ẩn con có thể mở ra nên mẹ đã sửa lại để diễn tả đúng hơn.
- Cấu trúc I know/learn/realize that đúng là có thể bỏ "that" nhưng cũng ở đây k nên bỏ đi đâu. Con bỏ khi bị lặp từ thôi.
- Con lặp từ love quá nhiều lần. Có rất nhiều từ để thay thế nó: adore (yêu chiều), cherish (trân trọng). Cụm very much cũng thế, cùng 1 câu lặp thế khó chịu lắm.
- Hai câu có từ "It" mẹ tô xanh cũng tương tự, con tìm cách diễn đạt khác để đọc bài k bị lặp "nó... nó..."

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My favorite book is Con Duoc Sinh Ra Nhu The Nao. My mom gave me it for my birthday last year. There are a lot of pictures which can be opened in this book. It is about how a baby is born and how much parents adore their babies. After reading this book, I learned that all the babies in the world are priceless presents and they need to be cherished. My parents adore me very much, and I love them too.

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2 years ago, I had a new friend who came from a different school. I had sat next to her for a year. Her name is Ngoc Linh. She is a very beautiful girl with long straight black hair, big brown eyes, and a round face. Ngoc Linh is taller but thinner than me. She is quiet, gentle, and kind. At school, although she doesn't talk much, she helps me a lot. I never see when she is angry. She tells me that she like dogs but I think cats are lovelier. We play quizzes together and she always win because I condescend her. I love her very much. I hope we will be best friends forever.

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- Không nên dùng số trong bài văn nhé.
- to make friend = kết bạn, k dùng have.
- never là nhấn mạnh vào trải nghiệm, tương tự như lần đầu, lần thứ hai..., con phải dùng thì thích hợp.
- condescend to sb = hạ mình trước ai đó, con phải chú ý giới từ đi kèm. Nhưng ở đây dùng cấu trúc này không đúng lắm đâu, con có thể dùng I give her concessions = tôi cho cô ấy sự nhượng bộ = tôi nhường cô ấy. "concessions": sự nhượng bộ/sự nhân nhượng.
- Ngoài ra, những lỗi mẹ bôi xanh bôi vàng con tự xem và sửa, mẹ sẽ k nói chi tiết ra nữa vì nó là lỗi cơ bản rồi.

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Two years ago, I made a new friend who came from a different school. I had sat next to her for a year. Her name is Ngoc Linh. She is a very beautiful girl with long straight black hair, big brown eyes, and a round face. Ngoc Linh is taller but thinner than me. She is quiet, gentle, and kind. At school, although she doesn't talk much, she helps me a lot. I have never seen her angry. She tells me that she likes dogs, but I think cats are lovelier. We play quizzes together, and she always wins because I give her concessions. I love her very much. I hope we will be best friends forever.

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My favorite food is a burger. It is an American dish. It is made of bread, a tomato slice, salad, cheese, beef, and a fried egg. I eat burgers with tomato sauce, pepper sauce, and fries every weekend at home or KFC. My mom orders at KFC, Lotteria, or King Burger, but I like Lotteria the most because it is faster. My favorite type of burger is a double burger. It has two slices of beef and cheese. I can only eat one burger.  I like burgers very much.

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- Trạng ngữ chỉ thời gian 1 là đứng đầu câu, 2 là đứng cuối câu, không nhét vào giữa câu nhé.
- con chú ý giới giờ "ở nhà hoặc ở KFC" ; "đặt bánh từ KFC, Lotteria" tiếng việt nó cũng là thế mà.
- Thêm các phó từ chỉ tần suất, các tính từ,... vào cho câu văn đỡ ngắn.
- Với câu "Món ăn yêu thích của tôi là..." hay "tôi thích..." con tham khảo thêm các cấu trúc mới để diễn đạt thêm phong phú, tránh lặp cấu trúc khi k bắt buộc.
- Miếng thịt bò (piece) lát cà chua, lát phô mai (slice) chú ý nhé.

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My favorite food is a burger. It is a typical American dish. It is made of bread, a tomato slice, salad, cheese, beef, and a fried egg. Every weekend, I eat burgers with tomato sauce, chili sauce, and fries at home or at KFC. My mom often orders burgers from KFC, Lotteria, or King Burger, but I enjoy Lotteria the most because it is faster. A double burger is my preferred choice. It has two pieces of beef and two slices of cheese. I can only eat one burger at a time. I like burgers very much.

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Let me tell you about my family. There are 3 people in my family: my dad, my mom, and me. My dad is a developer. His hobby is playing chess. He works hard and earns money for all the family. My mom is a homemaker. She is good at cooking and Art. I am the only child in my family. I am a student. My favorite subjects are Math, English and Information Technology. My family often eats out at a restaurant and comes back to our hometown at the weekend. In free time, we usually sleep or play games. I am very close to my family. I love my family so much.

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My birthday is on September 14th. Every year, although I don't organise parties, I get a lot of gifts like clothes, shoes, and even money, but I like Rubik's cubes the most. I hope I will get a better new Rubik's cube for my birthday this year to play with Duc Khang because I don't have any new Rubik's cube to solve. They are too easy and boring. My Rubik's cubes are also too slow, I can't solve fast. I hope I will get a Rubik's cube for my birthday.

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Có một số lỗi như sau, con cần nhớ kỹ những lồi nãy, tuy ít nhưng khá quan trọng nhé.
- any + Danh từ không đếm được hoặc Danh từ đếm được số nhiều nếu mang nghĩa "KHÔNG CÓ"
- câu bôi màu xanh biển 2 vế là 2 chủ ngữ khác nhau, hoặc là con dùng dấu chấm phẩy ; hoặc là con dùng dấu phẩy , kèm liên từ để liên kết ý. Vì 2 chủ ngữ khác nhau k có liên kết thì nó là 2 hoàn toàn độc lập, chỉ có thể chấm . hoặc chấm phẩy ; thôi.
- câu bôi xanh lá con cần phân biệt fast và quick/quickly:
+ Fast: dùng để chỉ 1 người hoặc vật di chuyển với tốc độ nhanh
+ Quick/quickly: thường để chỉ tốc độ hoàn thành công việc gì đó một cách nhanh chóng hoặc không bị trì hoãn
- I can't solve them nhé, k được cắt tân ngữ.
- slow for me, ý kiến cá nhân đối với riêng con thôi.
- Câu đầu bài thì mẹ nghĩ dùng have hợp lý hơn, bản thân con k tự tổ chức được.

- Một cái nữa là câu cuối bị lặp đấy, con đã dùng câu giống vậy ở bên trên rồi. Con có thể thay thành: I'm hoping to receive a Rubik's cube for my birthday.

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My birthday is on September 14th. Every year, although I don't have parties, I get a lot of gifts like clothes, shoes, and even money, but I like Rubik's cubes the most. I hope I will get a better new Rubik's cube for my birthday this year to play with Duc Khang because I don't have any new Rubik's cubes to solve. They are too easy and boring. My Rubik's cubes are also too slow, so I can't solve them quickly. I am hoping to receive a Rubik's cube for my birthday.

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Con làm bài theo mẫu đề này, lưu ý không tả lại mùa hè nữa.

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Lưu ý, không viết về Minh Nhật nữa.

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My best friend is Duc Khang who is funny like me. He is 10 years old. Although we have been classmates for 4 years, I have been close to him since last year. I like Duc Khang because we both enjoy Math, English, and playing with duck. We achived gold and bronze medals in PhIMO a few months ago. Duc Khang is very friendly, he always tells the truth. We are good friends because we love each other very much. I hope we will be best friends forever.

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Con tự sửa những lỗi mẹ bôi màu xem sao nhé.

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My best friend is Duc Khang, who is funny like me. He is 10 years old. Although we have been classmates for 4 years, I have been close to him since last year. I like Duc Khang because we both enjoy Math, English, and playing with Duck. We achieved gold and bronze medals in PhIMO a few months ago. Duc Khang is very friendly, and he always tells the truth. We are good friends because we love each other very much. I hope we will be best friends forever.

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A few new friends from UMS are having a party to welcome every new friend at school. We will play 2 games: fishing and playing with ducks. We need 25 machines to play fishing, each can play at most 2 players. We catch fish to get more score. Playing with ducks only needs at least 1 player. We need at least 15 ducks. This game is an endless game without score but still fun. These games are perfect for the party because they are very relaxing.

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Mẹ đã phân loại lỗi theo màu.
- Màu vàng, màu hồng: lỗi lặp, con tự sửa.
- Màu xanh biển: ", each" hai chủ ngữ của hai vế không có sự liên kết ý, không thể dùng dấu "," ở đây. Con có thể sửa thành ", each of which" hoặc chấm ". Each"
- Màu xanh lá đậm: score= điểm/ điểm số. Hai cái này khác nhau, ví dụ "Bạn lấy thêm nhiều điểm." và "Bạn nâng cao điểm số của mình." Ví dụ đầu nhiều điểm những điểm là "scores" ví dụ sau là "score" số ít thôi. Điểm số của con (your score) chỉ là 1 con số 160 chẳng hạn, nhưng con phải giành nhiều điểm (scores) 1 điể, 2 điểm, 5 điểm để cộng vào điểm số đó. Ở đây mẹ k rõ con muốn dùng cái nào. Con tự sửa đi.
- Chữ xanh biển gạch chân: đã "chỉ" lại còn "ít nhất" là sao? "only" đã là chỉ duy nhất rồi. Con dùng 1 trong 2 cái thôi.
- Màu xanh lá nhật: game này không có ĐIỂM SỐ hay không có ĐIỂM? Con đã chắc là dùng cái nào chưa? Con xác định lại đi và thêm mạo từ thích hợp!
- Màu ghi: lỗi ngữ pháp về dấu câu đi kem liên từ, tự con xem rồi sửa.

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A few new friends from UMS are having a party to welcome every new student to school. We will play 2 games: fishing and playing with ducks. We need 25 machines to play fishing, each one can be played by at most 2 players. We catch fish to get more scores. Playing with ducks requires at least 1 player. We need 15 ducks. This game is an endless game without scores, but still fun. These games are perfect for the party because they are very relaxing.

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Với những lỗi cơ bản đã nêu ở V1 con đã sửa được. Còn bản này sẽ sửa kỹ hơn về diễn đạt.
- Con cần chú ý logic và liên kết ý. Ngay từ những câu đầu tiên, bạn con tổ chức tiệc thì sao câu sau con lại bảo "chúng tôi"? ít nhất cũng nên thêm việc con sẽ tham dự bữa tiệc vào.
- Trạng ngữ chỉ thời gian là nên có để câu văn hay hơn. với việc đề bài là con miên tả game để có thể chơi trong bữa tiệc thì con nên dùng "will be able to V". Cấu trúc này tương đương "can V" nhưng để diễn tả 1 khả năng ở tương lai (có thể làm gì và có thể sẽ làm gì)
- Dùng từ cho phù hợp, chơi bóp vịt, máy câu cá đều có, k nhất thiết viết kiểu dịch từ sang từ chơi với vịt, máy để câu cá đâu.
- Hãy dùng nhiều liên từ so, since, because, and, but, although, ... để bài viết được đánh giá cao hơn.
- Phải rất cẩn thận với những cấu trúc có vật làm chủ ngữ, nó rất có thể phải là bị động, con có thể dùng câu bị động, hoặc con đổi thành người làm chủ như mẹ sửa bên trên, tham khảo xem.
- about 15 ducks: ở đây, about là "khoảng" có thể ít hơn hoặc nhiều hơn, không chính xác 100%
- Cuối cùng, con cần chú ý sự hòa hợp của các thì trong mỗi câu văn.

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Look at the photo. Describe an amazing place in your country. Explain why this place is so unusual and important to you.

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Look at the photo. Describe an amazing place in your country. Explain why this place is so unusual and important to you.

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A few new friends from UMS are having a party to welcome every new student to school. I am planning on attending it. During the party, we will be able to play 2 games: fishing and playing with ducks. We need 25 fishing machines because each one can be played by at most 2 players. We catch fish to get more scores. Playing with ducks requires at least 1 player, so we will need about 15 ducks. This game is an endless game without scores, but still fun. These games are perfect for the party because they are very relaxing.

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My interesting country is China because it is very close and cheap, and it also has beautiful places like Great Wall, Forbidden City, Imperial Palace, and Summer Palace. China is in Asia. Its area is about 9000000 km². The capital of China is Beijing. A famous monument in this country is the Great Wall. It is a long wall all around China. Some popular food in China are Sichuan Pork and Wonton soup. My mom's idols are chinese so I will go to China wth her.

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My interesting country is China because it is very close and cheap, and it also has beautiful places like the Great Wall, the Forbidden City, the Imperial Palace, and the Summer Palace. China is in Asia. Its area is about 9000000 km². The capital of China is Beijing. A famous monument in this country is the Great Wall. It is a long wall all around China. Some popular dishes in China are Sichuan Pork and Wonton Soup. My mom's idols are Chinese, so I will go to China with her.

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Đây là bài chữa về diễn đạt, con tham khảo và tự sửa lại thành V3 cho hoàn thiện nhé. Con cố gắng dùng nhiều mệnh đề quan hệ, k nên dùng toàn câu đơn thì bài viết sẽ được đánh giá cao hơn.

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I am quite interested in China because it is very close and cheap, and it also has beautiful places like the Great Wall, the Forbidden City, the Imperial Palace, and the Summer Palace. China is located in Asia. Its area is about 9 million km². The capital of China is Beijing. A famous monument in this country is the Great Wall, which is a long wall that surrounds China. Some popular dishes in China are Sichuan Pork and Wonton Soup. My mom's idols are Chinese, so I will accompany her to China.

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The most relaxing place is my room. It has a soft sofa and a long table. The soft sofa is very comfortable, I usually sit on it and play rubik. My long table has a computer to search things, 2 bookshelves which have a lot of books, a printer to print stickers that i design, and an easel, crayons, color pencils, water color pencils, and papers to draw beautiful pictures. My room is so relaxing, I like it a lot.

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I can relax in many place, but my room is the best. First, it has a soft sofa and a long table. The soft sofa is very comfortable, so I usually sit on it and play Rubik's cubes. My long table has a computer to search for information, two bookshelves which have a lot of books, a printer to print stickers that I design, and an easel with crayons, colored pencils, watercolor, and paper to draw beautiful pictures. Because my room is so relaxing, I like it a lot.

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The most interesting person who I know is Ms Linh, my English teacher. Her nickname is Dui Thut Lo. She has taught me Speaking for 2 months. I like her very much because she is exciting. First, she is a good teacher. She is very patient. She explains things without getting bored. In addition, she is worth helping students love English. Second, she is so funny. She often tells many jokes and laughs a lot. Finally, she is not strict, so I can give my opinion comfortably. I believe Ms Linh is the most interesting teacher.

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- Hạn chế viết số trong bài luận, trừ số liệu.
- Ms. A; Mrs. B; Mr. C (sẽ có dấu chấm liền sau danh xưng)
- Tô màu xanh: Con dùng thì hiện tại hoàn thành tiếp diễn đi, thì HTHTTD dùng cho các hành động có tính chất lâu dài như work, study, learn, live... để nhấn mạnh tính liên tục và kéo dài của hành động.

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THE MOST INTERESTING PERSON WHO I KNOW V2

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THE MOST INTERESTING PERSON WHO I KNOW V2

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The most interesting person who I know is Ms. Linh, my English teacher. Her nickname is Dui Thut Lo. She has been teaching me Speaking for two months. I like her very much because she is exciting. First, she is a good teacher. She is very patient. She explains things without getting bored. In addition, she is worth helping students love English. Second, she is so funny. She often tells many jokes and laughs a lot. Finally, she is not strict, so I can give my opinion comfortably. I believe Ms. Linh is the most interesting teacher.

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Bài làm của con tốt rồi, nhưng đây là một vài gợi ý về diễn đạt, con tham khảo thêm để có vốn từ và cách viết đa dạng hơn.

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THE MOST INTERESTING PERSON WHO I KNOW V3

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THE MOST INTERESTING PERSON WHO I KNOW V3

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The most interesting person who I know is Ms. Linh, my English teacher. Her nickname is Dui Thut Lo, which is quite funny. She has been teaching me Speaking for two months. I like her very much because she is exciting. First, she is an excellent teacher. She is really patient. She explains things without getting bored. In addition, she is worth helping students love English. Second, she is so amusing. She often tells many jokes and laughs a lot. Finally, she is not strict, so I can express myself freely. I believe Ms. Linh is the most interesting teacher.

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My name is Duy Cuong, and I lived in a small house which was located in Tran Khat Chan street. I was the only child in my family. My parents weren't rich, but they were happy. My dad was a hard worker, and my mom was a gentle woman. When I was 6 years old, my family moved to a new bigger house. It had 4 floors with a living kitchen room, 3 bedrooms, 2 bathrooms, a terrace with lots of plants. Everyone was excited and comfortable when we lived here.

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- Màu hồng: lỗi viết hoa: Street phải viết hoa, Tiêu đề con cần viết hoa đúng quy tắc, chỉ viết hoa chữ cái đầu và những từ quan trọng thôi.
- used to V: đã từng làm gì đó, dùng cái này sẽ hay hơn, còn dùng lived cũng được, nhưng k hay bằng.
- Chuyển ý sang vấn đề tôi là con 1 hơi đột ngột, con có thể thêm nhà tôi có 3 người vào rồi mới giới thiệu từng người (con, bố, mẹ)
- worker: công nhân. bố làm coder/developer (lập trình viên)
- nhà rộng hơn (larger) thì đúng hơn là bigger.
- không có từ gộp cho phòng khách bếp, nên con tách ra nhé.
- ý liệt kê cuối cùng con cần có "and"
- Câu cuối nên đảo When lên trên, để phần cảm xúc ở dưới cùng để làm câu kết.

==> Bài này khá nhiều lỗi, con cần sửa lại bài cho hoàn thiện, chú ý các lỗi để k mắc lại nữa.

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My name is Duy Cuong, and I used to live in a small house which was located on Tran Khat Chan Street. My family had three members, and I was the only child. My parents weren't rich, but they were happy. My dad was a hard coder, and my mom was a gentle woman. When I was six years old, my family moved to a larger house. It had four floors, a living room, a kitchen, three bedrooms, two bathrooms, and a terrace with lots of plants. When we lived here, everyone was excited and comfortable.

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One of my memorable successes in my life is joining a lot of competitions and achieving many medals. I started taking part of competitions when I was in grade 1. They were about Math and English. I got a gold medal in the first competition, and I was happy. For 3 years after that, I have achieved lots of medals, like ASMO gold medals, SEAMO silver medals, WMI bronze medals, and so on. I have just completed an IT competition for kids, and I have got second prize. All of the competitions are my excellent memories because they give me more knowledge, more exprience, and make my parents and my teacher proud of me.

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1. Thêm "most" memorable
2. Con bỏ bớt my ở my life cho đỡ lặp, trong đời là được, k nhất thiết phải trong đời tôi.
3. join = gia nhập (vào một câu lạc bộ, 1 tổ chức) join in mới là tham gia vào một sự kiện ĐANG diễn ra. ở đây con có thể dùng "have participated in" hoặc "take part in" để thể hiện ý nghĩa trang trọng hơn, và những cuộc thi này đều ĐÃ diễn ra rồi.
4. thay "competition" bằng "tournament" tránh lặp
5. Grade viết hoa.
6. math ở đây chỉ là toán, không phải tên môn học Toán nên k viết hoa.
7. get a medal thay bằng win a medal cũng được, nó sẽ hay hơn.
8. Trong thời gian 3 năm, nhưng việc giành huy chương đều ĐÃ XẢY RA XONG RỒI nên chỉ cần chia QK đơn.
9. ký ức tuyệt vời là được, có tính từ rồi, k cần thêm tính từ sở hữu nữa, bản thân tính từ tuyệt vời đã thể hiện quan điểm cá nhân của riêng con rồi.
10. Sai chính tả từ kinh nghiệm, mất hẳn một âm tiết experience /ɪksˈpɪərɪəns/

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One of my most memorable successes in my life is having participated in a lot of competitions and achieving many medals. I started taking part in tournaments when I was in Grade 1. They were about math and English. I won a gold medal in the first competition, and I was happy. For 3 years after that, I achieved lots of medals, like ASMO gold medals, SEAMO silver medals, WMI bronze medals, and so on. I have just completed an IT competition for kids, and I have got second prize. All of the competitions are excellent memories because they give me more knowledge, more experience, and make my parents and my teacher proud of me.

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I have saved some lucky money. I will spend twenty percent of it on a watch for my dad, fifteen percent of it on some chocolate for my mom, ten percent of it on Rubik's cubes for my best friend, Duc Khang, and fifteen percent of it for gifts for my girlfriend, Ngoc Linh. I will save the rest to buy a male cat.

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Tet is a traditional holiday, which I like the most. It is the Vietnamese New Year. Tet is in the spring and lasts for the first three days of the first lunar month. On New Year's Eve, there is a firework. People usually place bamboo trees covered with many red and yellow lanterns in front of their house. Tet's traditional dish is Chung cake, which is square and made of rice, meat, and bean. In addition, sugar-coated fruit is also a popular dish on this holiday. It is so delicious and has many colors because it is made from coconut, squash, or cranberry. The best parts of Tet are no school, visiting my grandparents, and receiving a lot of lucky money. I like the Tet holiday very much.

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We will meet a lot of important people in our lives, but the person that we love the most is our mom. My mom's name is Nhung. She is a beautiful woman with straight long black hair, white skin, and brown eyes. I adore my mom so much because she is always on my side. She takes me to school, helps me handle hard problems, cooks lots of delicious dishes, and buys me many beautiful clothes. In addition, she teaches me a lot, like Math, English, Vietnamese, and so on. My best memory of my mom is her care when I was sick. I love my mom very much.

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Family is always more important than friends. First, blood is thicker than water, so dad, mom, grandma, and grandpa are closer than friends. Second, my friends come and go, while my family is always on my side. My mom teaches me every day; my dad works hard to earn money for me; and my grandparents cook delicious food and take me to school. I have a great influence from them, like I get a lot of love and attention. They always listen to me and help me handle hard problems. I am also more caring and less selfish. Finally, they help me fell less lonely. Family, in my opinion, is the most valuable thing in my life. Appreciate them while you can.

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Write about ways to protect the environment

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Write about ways to protect the environment

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Protecting the environment is very important. We should plant trees because they give off oxygen and absorb carbon dioxide. Plastic packaging is so hard to decompose, so we should recycle it. We need to save water and stop using air conditioners, cars, and motorcycles and instead use bikes and fans to decrease the greenhouse effect. Protecting the environment will give us a better future.