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2) Making sure there is solid, peer-reviewed support FOR the argument
3) Bringing it back to the audience - Furman students.

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Substantiate your claims, take a stance, double check your bib

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1. Let's make sure the introduction paragraph has a clear thesis
2. Peer reviewed articles needed
3. Make sure body of paper supports thesis

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1) Clear thesis statement; 2) Need to add at least 2 peer reviewed sources; 3) Improvement of logic, the points identified in the comments.

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Thesis statement. Then revise to make the argument toward that stance.

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This is close to a thesis statement needs to be more direct. I infer that this is the position taken in the paper (that it is fine for students to use Aderall). Two points: 1) the thesis needs to be more direct and 2) the thesis needs to tie in to life at Furman (see the assignment description above)

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Define! Are these “sources” substances? People? Where are you getting these data?

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We can tie this paper together a bit more if we include your thesis which you reach at the end to your introduction

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How do we know that is the case? Maybe there has just been an uptick in ADHD cases?

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This paper flowed well and drew me into the issue as a reader

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It does not have a concise and clear enough thesis statement. At points the logic is unclear.

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Redo bibliography. It looks like everything was copied and pasted (quotations are all wrong). What style book was used?

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Is this a reference to Adderall? It is unclear to a general audience.

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Is this a reference to Adderall? It is unclear to a general audience.

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As a reader, I sense a disconnect between your argument and the support you're using with it. At the end of page two paragraph one, for example, how can you finish making the connection between the difficulty of proving cheating with the feelings John is expressing here? How are these things related? 

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As a reader, I sense a disconnect between your argument and the support you're using with it. At the end of page two paragraph one, for example, how can you finish making the connection between the difficulty of proving cheating with the feelings John is expressing here? How are these things related? 

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Hedging language in the first paragraph; thesis opaque.

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incomplete. Specificity could strengthen the draft. Not meeting the peer-reviewed criteria.

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but didn't answer them as a final product.

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presenting provocative questions

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The research aligned with topic and had a sufficient amount of sources.  Some were better than others but met the requirement.