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Helpful comments DESCRIBE what they see the writer trying to do, EVALUATE how well the writing is doing that thing, and SUGGEST how the writer can make specific, focused revisions.

Using the explanations of the star system below, rate the comments on this board.

3 stars is the default. 3 stars means "Thank you for the feedback" that uses the D-E-S strategy effectively. If you give more or fewer than 3 stars, you need to be able to identify why.

4 stars means the comment goes above and beyond the basic D-E-S and provides lots of useful detail.

5 stars is the the most useful feedback you could ever imagine receiving.

2 stars means you think the reader could have tried a little harder.

1 star means you think the reader didn't follow the comment instructions.

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I really like how you stated the sources when you analyze your subject's writing style. However, I noticed that you did not indicate any significant patterns besides the fact that Jessica did not like to read. To me, Jessica's perspective on reading is not a pattern, but a fact. I think you can solve this by reviewing your notes and interviews to find any possible pattern that was interesting about Jessica's reading process.

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The author wants to end the paper with something. However, if you could write a conclusion paragraph that sums up the paper, it will be much better.

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I can see that you thoroughly identify the trend and specify the origin of the trend. I also recognized that the subject prefers to read with a physical copy rather than electronic because from doing that she can be more engaged in the reading activity. However, where you are lacking is analyzation. I believe that your claim would be much stronger if you analyze why is her habit of reading a physical text significant. It is very important to identify the significance of the trend that you are describing because, without it, your report would just be a summary of the information gathered which is what you seem to do currently. I would suggest that you really look at how the physical copy benefits the way she interprets the text or at least draws conclusions on how electronic texts can hinder the way she reads it.

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I see that you explained the reading habits of your subject. However, I think that you are trying to convey the importance of these habits by describing them . I suggest that you go more in depth about the significance of these habits and how it affects him as a reader.

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I think that this comment deserves 4 stars. The reason why is because I think that the D-E-S is used perfectly in this feedback. The person giving the feedback fulfills the describe part by talking about the details and information in the writer’s writing. For example, the “when you analyze your subject’s writing style” is an example of describing. The evaluate part is when the reviewer talks about how they notice that the writer “did not indicate any significant patterns” and that is criticism. At the end of the feedback, they also give very helpful advice and suggestions in a non-offensive way.

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I think that this comment deserves 2 stars. The reason why is because I think the reader didn’t follow the proper instructions of DES entirely but did attempt on one part of it. First of all, they did not describe what they saw from writing, which is an important part of DES, instead they only gave a description about how “the author wants to end the paper with something” which is really confusing. Next, they didn’t do a good job of fulfilling the evaluation part either. They didn’t attempt to give feedback on what they saw from the writing and neither did they try to point out what the writer needs to improve on. However, they did provide a suggestion, “however, if you could write a conclusion paragraph that sums up the paper, it will be much better” and this is a poor delivered but practical suggestion. They suggested the writer to add a conclusion paragraph so that they
can improve their paper.

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I think that this comment deserves 5 stars. The reason why is because this response not only meets the requirements of DES, it also exceeds expectations and is very helpful to the writer. The review starts off with a very in-depth description of what the reviewer sees in the author’s writing. They talked about how the writer could “identify the trend and specify the origin of the trend” well and that they could convey what the “subject” in the writing liked doing. The reviewer also evaluated the writing well, saying how the writing lacked analysis and how better analysis could really help improve the writing’s quality by strengthening their claim. They also provided an evaluation that it is very important to identify the trend of the thing that they’re describing. Lastly, the part of the review that really shines and is the most helpful in my opinion is the suggestion part where the reviewer gave a detailed suggestion on what the writer should do to improve their writing, which is to look at how the subject benefits from physical copies and how electronic ones hinder their learning.

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For this comment I think it deserves 3 stars. The reason is because it fulfills all the requirements of DES feedback. However, there is no extra effort shown in this comment.  What they really lack in this comment is the detailed description of the author’s writing. They’re basically just seeing what’s on the surface instead of really going deep into it and provide for descriptions. Secondly, the evaluation comes as very basic and it doesn’t provide as much help and it could have. Lastly, the suggestion of the review is also very basic, it does tell what the writer needs to do to improve their paper and all but it’s not specific and not very helpful at all.

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I would give this a 3 because it just meets the standards of DES but nothing more

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5 because it meets the standards of DES and exceeds because it is super helpful feedback to the writer

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2 because the writer tries to use DES but does not do so successfully/does not meet the standards for it

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2 because the writer tries to use DES but does not do so successfully/does not meet the standards for it

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I would give this comment a 4 star because the D-E-S features in the comment were written and were descriptive about what she did well, but also how she can improve further on her essay. The comment also provided many details and pointed out the issues specifically so that the writer would know what aspects to focus on specifically

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I gave this a 1 and 1/2 stars because although the commenter was not descriptive, they still informed the writer about how they could continue to make their essay better. Also, the the comment does not really give an idea about how the writer could improve the last paragraph which they suggested.

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I think this comment deserves 5 stars because they provided so much detail and description about how the writer could improve their essay. They used the D-E-S on point by describing exactly what they could do to improve, evaluating their essay, and lastly suggesting different ideas about how the writer could continue to add on more details to their essay. This comment was outstanding and well written.

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I gave this comment 3 stars because it did D-E-S, but not to its full capabilities. They did provide some important information for how to help the writer improve the essay, but not in a lot of details.

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I would give 4 stars for this comment. First, the reader followed the D-E-S structure when giving the feedback. In the description section, the feedback contains a specific detail that tells the writer what need to work on. For the evaluation, the reader gives their opinion that Jessica does not like to read is a fact instead of a pattern. Then, the comment suggests some potential methods that can help the writer understands the text better. Overall, the correction and suggestion not only help the writer to improve this assignment, but also play a positive role in the future writing tasks.

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I would give this comment 4 stars, according to the D-E-S the reader does follow the structure to given feedback. Where the reader describe and find out the problem from the text, which was lacking of certain element and also does give suggestion where to help the writer to improve. And the commons full of positive atmosphere to help the writer to do better in certain categories.

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I would give this comment 2 stars, it does point out where the writer could improve on, but I think the commenter could pay more effort on D-E-S. To read it more deep, and try to find more area that's more specific, and describe more also give more detail suggestion on how to actually to improve the problem.

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I would give this comment 5 stars, because this comment would be very useful for the writer, and let the writer really understand where to improve and how to do so. And based on D-E-S, the commenter did a great job and reach to all aspect of the comment structure, and still maintain a positive mood while providing useful suggestion.

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I would give this comment 3 stars, because follow the structure of D-E-S the commenter meet the basic level of the structure, but didn't go it depth. And really describe and evaluate the writer's lacking, I would suggest the reader could pay more attention on how to describe it more detail and create a more positive feedback.

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I would give this comment 1 1/2 stars. For starters this comment is too short to give helpful feedback to the person who wrote the paper. While the comment does describe what they see the writer trying to do, it doesn't explain why they see it that way which would help the writer so they know what their audience is thinking, allow the writer to reflect on how they want to end the paper, and for the reader to explain what that "something" is. The comment doesn't give any evaluations on how well the writing is accomplishing it's goal/follows the rubric. The comment does give a suggestion to how the writer could revise the paper. However the suggestion is very short and doesn't explain how it will make the paper better, give other options for the writer, or explain what is the most important thing to highlight/summarize/focus on in the conclusion of the paper. If I got this comment as feedback, I would be very confused on what the person meant and wondering how else I could improve the paper since it only described and suggested a way to end the paper via a conclusion.

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I would give this comment five stars. This comment is long and from everything I read the person who wrote it put in a lot of detail and thought. The comment describes in great detail what they see the writer trying to do, evaluates how well the writing is doing that "thing" which is analyzing a topic, and gives a suggestion on how to revise including explanations on what to revise and how it will improve the paper. Overall the comment seamlessly moves from DESCRIBE, EVALUATE, and SUGGEST by being specific on one area to improve on and what was strong in the paper. If I got this as feedback, I would find it very useful since it gives me something that I'm strong in which I can try to apply to other areas and something I need to improve on.

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I would give this comment three stars. The comment describes in detail what they see the writer trying to do. However I think that the evaluation of the writing is lacking or mixed with describing. The suggestion that the comment gives is helpful because it gives a detailed suggestion for the writer to use. But the comment doesn't explain the benefits that the suggestion will provide to the reader, paper, and rubric/criteria. If I got this comment I would find it helpful since it gives a suggestion, what was good, and what to improve. But I would want more writing for EVALUATION and their thoughts on how the suggestion would help readers if the writer implemented it.

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I will give the comment 4 stars because this comment has clear features of D-E-S. Also, the reader follows the instructions of feedback and describes in detail which can help the writer to edit his/her work. In addition, this comment gives a nice suggestion for improving this work.

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I will give this comment 2 stars because it literally does not give detailed or clear instruction and does not follow the D-E-S. The writer cannot improve his/her word depend on this comment because it is too rough to do that. It needs to be more clear and more detailed.

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I would give this comment four stars. The response is an appropriate length to give the writer enough feedback on D-E-S (Describe, Evaluate, Suggest). The comment goes over describing what they see the writer trying to do, evaluating their writing, and giving a suggestion. The three seem to flow together, since it took me a while to figure out if all three were in the comment. Even though everything was covered in D-E-S, it doesn't go into as much detail or thought as comment #4 did. Though if I got this feedback, I would find it more helpful then comment #5 since it gives what is good, what to improve, a suggestion, and how that suggestion will help the writer.

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I will give this comment 5 stars due to its has very clear DES and detailed suggestions. Suggestions in this comment are very useful and clear to the writer. The writer can largely improve his/her word by editing the work in the comments way. For example, the reader points out that the writer lack analysis and needs to add more analysis part in his/her work.

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I will give this comment 3 stars because it meets the DES standard. However, this comment does not content anything more than DES. It does not provide very detail suggestion or clear advice. It is not very useful for writer to edit or improve his/her work.

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I give this comment four stars out of five because it uses the D-E-S well. It describes the part of the essay that they are talking about. It also evaluates it by saying they did not indicate any patterns. It also suggested reviewing the sources to find more possible patterns.

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I give this comment one and a half stars out of five because it suggests the writer to write a conclusion paragraph. The comment provided some kind of help. It does not have the describing and evaluating aspect from the D-E-S. It can also give a bit more details on how to improve the writing.

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I give this comment a five stars out of five because it utilizes the D-E-S really well and it is also very descriptive with the feedback. The reader describes what they saw and what the writer did in the essay in full detail. The evaluation focused on improving the writer’s essay with a better analysis. The suggestion tells the writer to explain how texts on paper and devices affect her reading, which will help her improve her essay. Overall, it is very descriptive and it includes all the D-E-S.

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I give this comment three stars out of five because it uses the D-E-S but it is not very descriptive. It describes how the writer explained the reading habits. It evaluated that the writer was trying to convey a message. It suggested that the writer go more in depth.

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I would give this comment 2 stars. It did give a constructive idea of writing the conclusion. However, the comment is missing details and reasonings of how and why to do that. For the D-E-S method, the comment does not have an evaluation.

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I would give this comment 4 stars because you hit the basic D-E-S. You not only gave them a helpful correction with detail, you also gave them a compliment

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I would give this comment 2 stars. I would give it this rating because you did give them helpful advice but you gave it with no detail and you could have given more of an evaluation for their text.

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I would give this comment 5 stars because you not only gave them a compliment on what they did right, you also gave a solid evaluation of what they did wrong and added helpful advice on how to solve their problem. This comment shows that you truly did read their writing and took the time to evaluate and access what they could of done better.

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I would give this writing 3 stars because it hits the D-E-S and does what it is supposed to do, but nothing more. There is a correction and a suggestion but it doesn't show too much effort or evaluation in what the author wrote.

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I think the comment is worth 5 stars. The comment not only follows the basic D-E-S structure but also included more details from the writing assignment. The description spots the part that the writer is missing. With the evaluation, the writer is able to know why to include the analysis and why it is important. The following suggestion makes the writer revise their work easier.

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I would give this comment 3 stars since the comment followed the D-E-S structure but no other details included that can help the writer revise their work.

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I think this comment should be given 4 stars because the D-E-S strategy was excellently applied. The evaluator described how they noticed what the writer was doing by analyzing the subjects style, evaluated that it could be improved by selecting a better significant pattern. Then, the evaluator suggested to the writer to look at their notes and interviews to find any significant problems. Because these 3 strategies were followed by the evaluator, the writer now has a better understanding of what they need to improve on and how they can do that.

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I would give this comment 2 stars. I see how the reader is trying to to pinpoint where the issue of the paper is (the conclusion), but they could've tried harder. For example, they could've given the reader some tips on how to start the concluding paragraph or some key ideas that could be written in the paragraph. These details would make it easier for the writer to improve their writing.

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I would give this review 5 stars. Not only did the writer excellent implied the D-E-S, they also described to the writer WHY thee suggestions they gave should be made and the importance of it to the writers paper. Their response shows they have carefully evaluated the reader's work and articulated a thorough response to ensure the reader will improve their writing.

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I would give this evaluation a 3, because although they did hit the D-E-S, they did not explain it enough to help the reader. Their suggestion to the writer was vague. I feel like they could've give the reader some tips on how they could go more in depth and where they could find this information.

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I would give this comment 4 stars because it effectively uses the D-E-S strategy and provides some detail. The reader provides a description of what they see (and what they did not see). They pointed out the negatives and positives of the writing. They also provided their own input on the topic and suggested a way to improve their writing.

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I would give this comment 2 stars because the reader included some feedback, but it was not much. They included a very small description, stating that the author wants to end the paper with something. They also included some feedback, saying they could write a conclusion to improve their writing. Although not very helpful, they did include the description and suggestion. However, they completely left out the evaluation.

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I would give this comment 5 stars because they include a lot of detail and definitely go above and beyond the basic D-E-S. The reader includes a thorough description of what they see the writer doing. They also give a great evaluation and explain what and why something needs to be done. Finally, they give a very detailed suggestion. This comment was extremely helpful and gives plenty to work with.

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I would give this comment 3 stars because they use the D-E-S strategy effectively. They give a description, evaluate, and suggest something. However, it is basic feedback and the reader could have added more.

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I'd give this remark three stars because they effectively employ the D-E-S method. They describe, assess, and provide a recommendation. However, it is only basic comments, and the reader might have provided further information.