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use this board to help you bump up your writing for paragraph 1 (introduction) of your persuasive English assessment.

There are tips and tricks to help you with;

Hooking in your audience

Stating your opinion

Connecting with the audience

Using persuasive language

Sentence starters

Ideas on how to write an introduction

Modelled response to check your work against - written and spoken

A place to share your work to get feedback from other students

A success criteria that you can use to see if you have everything you need to achieve your learning goals!

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Grab the principals attention!

Mrs Worthington or Mrs Paitai

Ask a powerful question (e.g. “Have you ever wondered what could make our school even better?”)

Use an interesting or surprising fact (e.g. “Did you know that schools with a student garden program improve wellbeing and teamwork?”)

Try an emotional statement (e.g. “Every day, students walk past a blank space that could be a hub of fun and learning.”)

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Clearly say what you think should be added to the school.

Use persuasive, positive language.

Examples:

“I believe our school needs a student-run café.”

“We must add a bike track to promote health and fun!”

“It’s time to build a makerspace for creative problem-solving.”

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Why Should the Principal Care?

Explain why this idea is good for students, teachers or the whole school.

Use inclusive language like “we”, “our”, “everyone”, “students like me”.

Examples:

“This would give all students a safe space to relax and connect.”

“It would improve learning and help students feel excited about coming to school.”

Tip: Show how this idea helps the whole school community.

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Power Words and Persuasion Tools

Emotive language: "amazing", "essential", "exciting", "unfair"

Alliteration: "fun, friendly facility"

Repetition: "We need it. We deserve it. We’re ready for it."

Rhetorical questions: "Don’t we all want a more exciting playground?"

High Modality: "You must install colder water bubblers within the school immediately!"

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Need Help Getting Started?

“Have you ever imagined a school where…?”

“Our school is great, but it could be even better if…”

“I believe that adding ___ would make a huge difference.”

“This idea isn’t just exciting – it’s necessary because…”

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Start with a Hook

Use a rhetorical question, bold statement, interesting fact, or emotive language to grab attention.
Example: “Why are we still forcing students to sit through five long days of school every week?”

State Your Position Clearly

Make your opinion obvious and strong.
Example: “I firmly believe that Australia should move to a four-day school week.”

Briefly Outline Your Main Arguments

Give a hint of the 3 points you’ll explore in the body.
Example: “This change would improve student wellbeing, boost learning outcomes, and reduce school costs.”

Keep It Focused and Persuasive

Don’t try to argue yet—just introduce your stance and get the audience interested.

Use persuasive tone and emotive language.

Use PEEL (lightly)

P (Point): Your opinion.

E (Evidence): Quick fact or reason.

E (Explain): Very briefly why it matters.

L (Link): Lead into the speech (“Let me explain…” / “Here’s why this matters…”)

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Good Morning/Afternoon members of the Minimbah P&C Committee. I am here on behalf of more than 300 frustrated senior school students, with the task of convincing you that a new, exciting ninja obstacle course for the upper school must be built. Throughout my speech, I will discuss the following benefits for both students and staff; an increase in student enjoyment and engagement, a decrease in behaviour problems with increased space to play as well as the physical benefits of being active. Now take a seat like a ninja; stealthy, silent and ready to spring into action.

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Upload your introduction paragraph to share with the class and get some awesome feedback

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Upload your introduction paragraph to share with the class and get some awesome feedback

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Upload your introduction paragraph to share with the class and get some awesome feedback

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Upload your introduction paragraph to share with the class and get some awesome feedback

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