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This piece of writing is the first page of one of my English Language Learners in First grade.  I used the lens of structure/organization.

Area of strength - H.Y. used an upper case letter at the beginning of the sentence and he wrote the rest of the letters in the lower case.

Area of growth - H.Y. could improve the spacing between his words to help make his writing more readable.

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This piece of writing was a final draft from our fractured fairy tale unit. I used the lens of structure/organization.
Area of Strength: Paragraphs are used in the writing and there is a strong lead to hook the reader.
Area of Growth: Using paragraphs when dialogue is used.

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Lens: Structure/Organization, 1st Grade Student

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Lens: Structure/Organization, 1st Grade Student

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My class has just started our informational writing unit.  I used the list starters from one of our previous modules to help students generate lists of things they knew how to do and topics they were experts in.

Area of strength: Identifies steps for making a cake
Area of growth: Adding the step of combining ingredients

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Strength: explanations are included for each detail (item that she'd bring with her) and include WHY she would bring these items
Area of Growth: This is a very strong paragraph in general. The student could work on a "hook" to really pull the reader in.

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Area of strength: Using transitional words nicely.
Area of growth: Editing writing to clarify the setting and characters.

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Area of strength: I need help with this one! The writer is great at expressing his frustration! His message seems to be desiring simplicity in one's wants, but I do not really understand the outcome with the father and all of the children.
Area of growth: Coordination of Subjects with Meaning of the Story

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4th grade rough draft realistic fiction- 

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4th grade rough draft realistic fiction- 

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Lens: Elaboration/Detail: One strength: Added thoughts and feelings. One area of need: Descriptive detail/setting.

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Lorena Hurst 10d
One strength: Imagining Stories from an Ordinary Moment (meaning) One area of need: Sticking to the heart of the story (adding important details and deleting details that don't matter)/ elaboration/detail.
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