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I need to keep working on adding dialogue, specifically dialogue that reveals information about the speaker and the meaning in the moment.

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The activity that was most helpful for me was the "first, last, and times I realized something" activity. It helped me remember small meaningful moments I had forgotten!

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"The bus crawls to a stop, the worn down brakes screeching as the momentum slows. Grabbing my large backpack - the one that I’ll be living out of for the next month, filled to the brim with layers of clothes to protect my warm Texas skin from the harsh Scottish winter - I lumber down the aisle and step off the dusty steps of the airport transit bus."

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Adding small detail and small actions to my writing are some ways that I grew in my craft. By zooming in one the small details and movements, I'm able to help the reader picture the scene more.

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These are my plot story mountain and my emotion story mountain. I really enjoyed chunking up the events in my story and figuring out how I was feeling!

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i want to keep working on making transition words and keeping it smooth

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One day in Plano,pitch black, me and my friends were walking around my neighborhood for fun.As we were laughing and having a great time,a creepy figure came out of the floor.Me and all of my friends were in shock.I felt as if i couldn't move.One of my friends ran off and left me and Ryan alone(my friend).The creature walks towards Ryan.When he gets into arms reach he ate Ryan.I was standing their not being able to move he walks towards me,about half he whispers our next.Once it gets to the point where i could smells it breath I was all of a sudden in my room,drenched with sweat.I was sitting there asking myself was that real.I realized it was dream.The next day I got up to get some water at 3.00 A.M ,As i was filling the cup up the lights start flickering.I yell “Who's their!’’ .Then it stops ,after about 5 seconds I start walking upstairs to get back to my room,and then I see the same figure I saw in the dream the night before.It says “I'm coming for you.”,I have the same feeling I had in the dream.Then the creature teleports behind and I feel it touch me,then I wake up drenched in sweat again.After those two terrible days I didn’t experience any dreams like those again.

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I think the lead/beginning stuff was the most helpful

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making the story a tiny bit more smoother and keeping in the story and not writing about something else so staying on topic

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It was the day that punched me in the heart. The cold feeling that I fell down. I really thought this was going to be the end of humans. It was  march 13th 2:54 as I walked out of my class room not knowing that I would never see my teacher and my friends again. That's when it hit. It was like when your favorite football team lost and you found out you had cancer and your girlfriend left you. That was just 1% of what it was like to happen to the world. A Lot of people died that day and the reason why was because of COVID 19 a very deadly virus. It affected me in a LOT of ways. It made were i could not hang out with friends

And also affected me and my mother's friends. At that point in time I felt like there was no happiness in this world. I knew that  we were not going to die to COVID 19 but we were going to die by us. All the debates

And choices that the people were making. being hypnotized in some evil way. Not having a family anymore but having war that would never end. Seeing the ones i love gorw apart and fight about somthing that is dumb. It tore me apart seeing what happiness faded away in the pills of sorrow.

Will sims

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the partner reading with a new set of eyes.

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the lead and beginning stuff was the most helpful cause when i was writing over the summer i thought that the beginning was really boring so thats why its helpful

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When we finally arrived at The Cove, the parking lot was CROWDED!  And by crowded, I mean we didn't see one spot open in the parking lot. My mom told me to start looking for a parking spot in the crowded parking lot. Since there were a lot of cars trying to get in, we were probably stuck for about 30 seconds in one of the rows of parking spots. Well, we were really lucky, because when my mom drove into the front row of the parking lot, a car pulled out of a parking spot.

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I started using better grammar and punctuation

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focusing on tiny events too, not just big events

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Writing in general

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I would like to keep working on my beginings

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I was in my room doing plain old homework when i heard my moms footsteps and i new that she was coming to my room so then i heard a knock and it was my mom and she said "can i come in," and i said  ok then she said i have good news and i said ok what is it and she said that we are going to arkansas

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I liked the part when my mother came home because it gave me a safe and secure feeling

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the place with memories

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I grew as a writer is when I was 5th grade and started to really love writing

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I wanna get better with my hand writing and being really fast with writing story's

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i think the dilog because somthimes people dont really know when somone is saying somthing in a story so that is hopeful.

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the part in the picture when it talks about the creepy bloody stuff i like hearing scary things but not so much about seeing scary things except my drawings are not that scary

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my favorite part is when my mom killed the spider

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i grew as writer by learning to write the story more intresting so the reader feels that its intresting and that they will read more.

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to write faster.

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my favorite part is when bella got bit be the bad guy.

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when she loves edward in the movie.

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when bella is in love with edward

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to write faster

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i wake up at 6:00 in the morning and i make me some breakfast and sit at the table after i got my water ready and i put it inside of my backpack and i give my mom and dad a hu and i ride my bike

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my first draft of my Personal Narrative

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I am now more inspired by others!

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A soft breeze traveled through the campgrounds. While me and my cousins ate our pancakes the mouth watering smell wafted through the clear morning air.

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have you ever played volleyball or been on a volleyball team?

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final copy work

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i think it was the morning grammar activity's before class time started

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I want to work on my stories being more interesting!

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I loved writing when i was in 2nd grade!

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I grew by putting more dialogue in my story.

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think of more things to write about and so on and so for

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I want to keep working on my spelling.

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music