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Started with a relatable tone
Weird "kitne hi alag"
"trying" to showcase a defined Body Language but struggling in sudden movements
Lovely "sad ke kaale bhi hojate hai"

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Can't think of anything. I was just listening and didn't realise when the monologue ended. Really felt as if having a conversation with the actor.

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Can't think of anything. I was just listening and didn't realise when the monologue ended. Really felt as if having a conversation with the actor.

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Great in starting, ending could've been better. tone was as if there was something missing. didn't look concluding enough

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Great in starting, ending could've been better. tone was as if there was something missing. didn't look concluding enough

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Actions were driven by an awkward body.
The performance was dull because of no changes in the scene

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A bit hesitant delivery - could be a character trait dont know, but still - more confident and open tone might help

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Good job. There was a certain stiffness in your body language which looked a bit odd in some movements but it somehow added to the overall character.

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Good job. There was a certain stiffness in your body language which looked a bit odd in some movements but it somehow added to the overall character.

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Could have done better with her posture and body movements. 

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Could have done better with her posture and body movements. 

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beautiful, just the body movements and the dialogue delivering rhythm wasn't coordinating 

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beautiful, just the body movements and the dialogue delivering rhythm wasn't coordinating 

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I really liked the natural feel added by the eating of mosambis

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I really liked the natural feel added by the eating of mosambis

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Weird start
Sudden expression changes, movements seem awkward
Inactive hand in an uncomfy position
posture could have been improved
Rushed "now please listen to me"

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The posture could have been better, didn't go with the age and the profession of the character

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The posture could have been better, didn't go with the age and the profession of the character

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The voice was pretty comforting, but the body was pretty stiff, hand movements were constant and distracting - should try to be more free body-wise

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the body movements seemed mechanical especially when he was leaning back

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Had a pattern in his voice, stress words looked rehearsed and fake. 0 points for posture. Felt like he's sleepng through the enitre convo with a couple of jumps in between. Could've been much better. Storytelling needs work.
Plus, the body and the voice were not in sync at all. Depicted different emotions altogether.

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Needs to observe a therapist. could do with a few more pauses. the storytelling does not need to be so animated. Body posture was not convincing.

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Unclear voice. try to bring some clarity

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Unclear voice. try to bring some clarity

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Foot movements looking artificial
slight disconnect between body language and dialogues, tone
heavy breathing appears, then goes away and then reappears
looking like a "monologue" (speaking out dialogues)
"is---ka kya karna hai"
pauses too long, feeling disconnected
unclear voice towards the end, message very unclear

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Pauses are too long. Last bit not audible. Couldn't feel the tension in the situation the someone just has been killed

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Need to work on the pauses. All are almost of the same duration. Great lighting and sound effects. Monotone.

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Need to work on delivery, looks like she's trying tor recall dialogues. But great setting and lights. Unable to set the seriousness of the situation through acting

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Very boring, same posture same tone no voice modulation no stress words. Couldn’t pay attention to the performance. Lines looked fake. Should try to be more free and take more chances with voice modulation and body movements

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Wish you could've read more about laxmi's character. even the synopsis would've worked. It's the peak moment of the entire play and had a drastic character revelation. The voice was missing, the anger was missing, the unapologetic laxmi was missing infact.

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Could have used her body better, the whole performance was very stagnant
The facia expressions can be worked on as well.

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loved the tone and color of the setup. monotone made me detach from it for a while but other than a decent piece

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should improve body language and tone.

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Became a bit monotonous in the end, need to work on voice modulation

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Became a bit monotonous in the end, need to work on voice modulation

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Overall: Motive unclear, but decent delivery

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Overall: Motive unclear, but decent delivery

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newspaper reading and laughing looks slightly artificial
Clarity in voice and dialogues is decent
echoed dialogues (repeated words/phrases) seem fake "upward" "reach out with compassion"
the shot in which you had your hands on the bed, should have been  the camera angle originally
mirror act looking good
Sometimes swift movements ; looks like you are actually applying make up

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Can't see her entire face. Actions happenig on the left side of her face are not visible.
Why not use the mirror during the entire performance?? can see the face better.
Could not see how the context helped the monologue. Good voice and voice clarity.

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what was there on the opposite side of the mirror?
Kept me engaged till the end though. Wanted to know what will the character do with the makeup
The voice was forming patterns but after a while looked like a character trait, some experimentation on the inflections could have looked better. Otherwise a decent piece.

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the pauses in the starting were very long and seemed unnecessary

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Performance wise - not much, just that the pace was too slow and the pauses were too long. Otherwise, couldn’t really understand the angling of the scene as well as who was the piece being addressed to. Also, the monologue lacked progression - same thing was being said through diff examples

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had clarity in her voice
good use of the mirror
camera angles could've been better
voice looked veryyyy animated, know that it was intended but still.

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can improve on the energy, overall nicely done.

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honestly couldn't link the context, setup and the monologue. Expressions were good but again monotonous

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Face reflected sadness, body displayed fear. Could have been in better sync

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could have hidden book cover
weird after waking movements
unclear facial expressions
poetic delivery .. why? not clear ; is it mockery, or some other feeling?, it is looking more Ish centric than Sukhdev centric
need to work a bit on clarity
pauses?
even after the irregular poetic deliveries, it seems monotonous

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Most lines and pauses seem rehearsed. Also, to make the audience believe the performance is happening in the open ( outside) the actor needs to believe the same and could have been pulled of instead of giving a disclaimer. Stop interacting with props just because you had planned something. Also, do not have anything on set taht distracts the audience. During the entire performance I was wondering about macro and micro economics.

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The start was pretty good. The expressions and body language worked wonders for me. But need to work a lot on the speech.

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The start was pretty good. The expressions and body language worked wonders for me. But need to work a lot on the speech.

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If it was supposed to be shot outside and you had to do it indoors ultimately, the adaptation could have been way better. It just seemed like a bedroom to me and since I could probably see the door behind you, at one point I thought you were talking to yourself in the beginning.

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The use of sound was interesting. The monologue felt like a mockery throughout but didn't go anywhere from there. The voice had a lot of patterns.

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Bhai maza aaya

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again the surroundings didn't feel realistic to the characters demand. the rain probably spoiled that
Taking that out, expressions felt a bit forced at times but I enjoyed the piece

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really really nice and interesting. The emotion that came out was somewhere between remorse and cunning pleasure.

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Overall: Great one! could have played with the body language to make it more gripping

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Overall: Great one! could have played with the body language to make it more gripping

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Voice unclear in start
good tone
evident clarity in pronunciation
decent facial expressions
tonal changes were great
could have been more impactful though
after the whole performance, my feedback remains the same except I didn't get exactly how to feel, it seemed there were too many feelings to absorb, wasn't communicated effectively, you never fail to amaze, keep going!

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Great diction. Great voice modualtion. Pauses would make it a really really good monologue. Expressions 100/100

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Great command over voice and diction. Even though couldn't understanding the meaning of the words, wanted to listen more. The intensity of the tone could have been played with.

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Tooo goooooooood. Great control over body, voice - great stability. Amazing

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Great scene, great movements, excellent character adaptation.
Emotions could've been better.
Edit: definitely looked like a father figure but couldnt match the vibe of a king or however fathers are supposed to be in the olden times. They are not much vulnerable, not much expressive, rather authoritative.
Progression was missing imo
Numbness worked for me but spaces were missing. Anger in a father's voice was missing.

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The speech was unclear, the tone at some places fell flat. The body language was overly stiff and didn't work for the character according to me. You have a very specific way of doing all the characters you take up. And you didn't step out of your comfort zone while performing this one. The diction was amazing. The expressions at some places were good. Very less efforts put in the production and the sound design.

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this was not definitely a man speaking, the voice was undertone

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the body language appeared more of a child than a lost warrior. Voice modulation was great but clarity of words was missing.

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The acting felt a bit mature and natural. So I appreciate that. I think I would've wanted to see this live

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Good delivery, but seems confusing what the character is feeling

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Could've shown anger as well along with grief

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Isko pauses ki ek ek goli subah shaam agle ek hafte ke liye.

Needs to work on his body language.

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Overall: Improve on your energy and voice

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Overall: Improve on your energy and voice

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low voice, can't hear much
body language inconsistent (seems weird sometimes, okayish in general)
can't comment much on tonal differences due to feeble voice
lacking energy
expressions decent

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body language and energy, need more confidence, keep practicing

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needs to work upon his body language, his voice. Consoling and reaffirmation, both should be there.

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body language established the maturity and age of the character but it seemed a little off because he was loosing it sometimes. Change in voice was great but some modu lation could have make it better.
Considering how far he reached from himself, it was definitely one of the best to watch.

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Could have pushed the emotional range a bit to show the frustration. The monologue otherwise has a good flow, had my attention throughout. Liked the contrast between the spiteful character and the not so spiteful looking actor playing the character.

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A bit rushed, otherwise it was very nice

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as most have pointed the body language was an issue. But a decent try!

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Production - the teal and the faded pink of the curtain, the cool undertones do a good job at creating the space.

Sounds - The echoing voice somehow added to the feeling of being enclosed in a sterile space.

Performance - Seems like spoken word poetry.
The pacing of the dialogues is kinda working for me.
almost sounds like an actress from black and white english movie.

I know it's not a typical Sarah Kane piece, atleast not performed that way, but overall this sort of made the entire writing feel more layered and subtle which I personally liked. This piece definitely has potential. If you maybe work a little on your delivery of dialogues, this can infact be a good performance piece.

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good start
expressions good
some movements seem artificial and rehearsed
character's feeling being communicated

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dramatic water drinking.

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the colors were definitely speaking, apart from the delivery of dialogues that was a bit off , the performance seemed quite natural and was definitely a treat to watch

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Some actions like drinking water seemed unnecessary. The rushed delivery somehow sounds good.
The setting complimented the tone of the monologue.Overall an engaging piece.

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can be more creative with the movements and expressions, don't make it look like a slam poetry, good attempt still

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She's known for her hysterics, for the drama that lies in every bit of her scene. Directly looking at the camera didn't work for me, maybe could've had some objects at your disposal to fiddle with, maybe roam around in your space, dance and whatnot.
otherwise great expressions, voice looked poetic but worked for me. needs to remove the monotone though

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best ..

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Production and sounds - I didn't see a lot of efforts put in the sounds. The setting and the slight shabbiness to it again gave me at least some information about the character and the current situation, which was not expected by me.

Performance - It was a nice piece overall, things were synchronized pretty well. all the elements gelled in pretty well together. There are definitely places where you can work a bit. But overall I liked the piece. Your performance was the only one where I got the most information about the character in the given time. And you held onto the character pretty well. There were some spaces where you can work on the delivery and the monotone. But overall great efforts.

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what a growth man! keep it up
great character adaptation, your voice smh didnt work for me but you were successful in creating the drama, the tension, basically everything that this scene needed.
just work in your voice and you'll be good.

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It was really good. Engaging. There were moments of silence which were lovely. Just wanted to keep listening. The heavy breathing seemed a bit off though could have found a better alternative to show anger or frutration

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Felt a bit overdramatic initially but it evened down eventually. at a few moments it felt as if the actor was trying a bit too hard but yeah all in all I think it was a pretty good one

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The fact that not a single feedback was given between the performance is a testimony to how engaging the performance was. Absolutely brilliant. The breathing could have been toned down a little. same goes for the transition between the emotions as well as movement

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try to do something about the jaw man, overall it was well executed, and the door slam and screech was ninja

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The tough hindi words dint appear so while they were used because they were so excellently said and uttered. Transition from anger to vulnerability was really good. Loved it. The BEST...