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One sunny morning , John went to the vegetable garden to pick red and juicy tomatoes.

All of a sudden , he heard a growl from the nearby pond . He turned around and saw a big and green crocodile .

The crocodile had sharp teeth that looked ferocious ! To prevent the crocodile from attacking any public , John felt that he should do something about it . (Good connection to the next paragraph.)

John immediately rushed back to call the animal rescue team for help . He nervously called the crocodile catcher for help shortly after , a man wearing gloves , boots and helmet arrived. He carried a long pole with a loop and a strong net. Another man had a cage ready to capture the crocodile for safety.

They caught the crocodile and brought it back to the animal rescue centre safely. John felt happy and excited for rescuing the crocodile.

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One breezy afternoon, after I finished my assignments, my parents brought me to a Korean food shop located at Arab Street to have dinner together.

While we were waiting for the food that we have ordered, I saw a huge, frightening looking moth. I was terrified.

I shouted in shock, "Ah! It's a scary moth! Go away!" Hoping the moth would leave me alone. I wave my arms back and forth as the moth comes flying closer. My father said, "Moths don't bite. Moths are adorable insects. Don't worry." He smiled.

But I am still afraid of the moth flying around me. My father became worried of my reaction and decided to catch the moth and throw it far away.

I thanked my father for saving the day.

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One hot sunny morning, John went out to the vegetable garden to check on his tomatoes. ‘The tomatoes have grown so well!’ A big smile covered his whole face.

Suddenly he heard a strange noise. He looked back and saw a crocodile crawling on the grass. He dashed back into the house and screamed: “ Ahhhh! There is a crocodile in my vegetable garden !”

John quickly called the crocodile catcher for help. John said: “There is a crocodile in my garden!”. The catcher replied: “ Don’t go near it, I’ll be there soon!”.

A few minutes later, the crocodile-catches arrived, wearing helmet, boots and gloves. They carried a strong net and a long pole, Soon, they caught the crocodile into the net. One catcher said to John :” Now the crocodile is safely caught.” John thanked the rescue team and went to check on his tomatoes again.

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One breezy and sunny afternoon, John went to the community garden to check on the vegetables he grew. Many of them were ripe so he took a basket and started to harvest some of the vegetables.

But as he approached the tomatoes , he suddenly heard a low growl that made him stop cold in his tracks. He looked in towards the nearby lake and saw something strange moving in the his direction. When its head got above the water, he realised that it was a crocodile! John let out a loud gasp. His face turned pale as though was a ghost in his house. (I enjoyed this paragraph of suspense! Very well written.)

Then he realised that the crocodile might attack him so he backed away from the crocodile and when the crocodile was out of sight , he immediately sprinted back home. When he got back home ,he immediately called the animal rescue team for help. When they picked up the phone he quickly explained the situation to them. While he was waiting for the rescue team to arrive, his heart pounded so loudly that he could hear his own heartbeats drumming away.

A few minutes later, two men in protective clothing arrived. One of them had a long pole with a loop and a strong net at the end. It took a while but they were able to put the crocodile into a cage. After they loaded the cage into the truck, they waved goodbye and soon disappeared into the horizon.

John learnt to scan for danger before he went to pick vegetables from the community garden.

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One bright morning, John went to his vegetable garden to pick some ripe and juicy tomatoes to make tomato soup and to make sure his vegetable garden has no predators which wants to eat his vegetables or to invest his vegetable garden .

When John went to the river bank with his basket filled with tomatoes. Suddenly,he heard a loud roar near the river bank. John felt that it was very mysterious. It was a crocodile! It had its mouth open very wide. So John thought it was going to attack him.

After he reached home , he rushed into his room and he quickly took out his phone from his pocket to call the animal rescue team for help . John told the animal rescue team : " There's a crocodile near the river bank . " John said, one of the rescue team member said : " Stay indoors . Don't go near the crocodile . We'll be there soon . " one of the rescue team member told John.

Not after long , two men wearing a helmet, boots , and a pair of gloves. The two men brang along a long stick with a loop at the end , a strong net , and a big and strong cage .

" I am finally safe ! " John said to himselfc.

After John faced this unexpected and dangerous moment he was not scared because he knows who to call and knows to scan dangerous creatures in his vegetable garden .

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One bright sunny morning, John went outside,it was finally time to collect the ripe tomatoes.Hehas been dragging to pick the ripe tomatoes for weeks.This looked like an exciting day for John. His face was as bright as a sun.

But little do did he know,things took a turn.When he was about to collect the ripe tomatoes, he saw a crocodile from the corner of his eye. John had a loud gasped. His face turned as pale as though he saw a ghost.

He quickly ran home and called the animal rescue team. John said"Help me! There's a crocodile in my tomato garden!"The team told him to stay calm and they will be there soon. John took a deep breath to calm down.

One A few minutes later,the crocodile animal rescue team came. and They used their tools. They and managed to catch the crocodile. They said they will would help take care of it.

John learnt to always check the garden before going to pick the tomatoes.

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One hot and sunny morning,John went to check on his beautiful vegetable garden.”My tomatoes look big and juicy.”said John.

But at the corner of his eye he saw a big hungry crocodile roaring at him ! He ran as fast as he could all the way into his house.

He quickly dialed out the numbers on his phone.’’ Stay indoors and is your garden big or small?’’ asked the crocodile catcher.’’big‘’ said John.’’ Okay I’ll be there soon !’’

Not long after two men wearing protective uniforms arrived.They carried a cage , a strong net and a pole with a loop at the end arrived in a truck.They caught the crocodile.John learned a valuable lesson.

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One hot and sunny morning, John went to check his vegetable garden. He smiles d as he saw the bright juicy red tomatoes hanging on the plants, ready to be picked.

All of a sudden, he heard a loud rustle. A huge scaly crocodile crawled out from behind the trees. Its golden eyes staring stared hard and while showing its sharp teeths showing. John's face turned went as pale as a ghost when he saw the crocodile with it's its mouth wide open.

(Where was John when he called for help? Did he escape and hide somewhere before calling? Add in details.)John called the animal rescue team for help and they asked him to stay indoors. The crocodile catcher tell told John not to go near the crocodile and they will would be there soon.

Not long after, the animal rescue team arrived, wearing gloves, boots and helmets. They try tried to catch the crocodile with a long pole, loop, strong net and a cage.

Finally, they caught the crocodile and send sent it back to the wild.

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One sunny morning, John was checking his tomato patch. "Wow!" he said when he saw his red juicy tomatoes. He said, "I can't wait to eat them for breakfast!"

But just then, John saw a crocodile. Its teeth were showing, its gold yellow eyes were glowing. John was as pale as a sheet. Then John rushed inside his house and called the crocodile catcher.

Not long after the crocodile catcher came. Then he caught the crocodile with a net and lured the crocodile into a cage. And they took the crocodile with them.

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One sunny and breezy morning, John went outside to check on his vegetable garden for tomatoes. The tomatoes were red, ripe and juicy.

But then (a little disconnected from the first paragraph), by the nearby pond there was a huge and furious crocodile, he shivered and ran away in fear.

(Where did John run to? Was he in a safe place to call for help?)John quickly called the crocodile catcher for help. The rescue team said to stay as far away as much as you he can could.

(This line is well crafted.)Not long after, a team with nets, a cage and a long pole. The people were wearing gloves, boots and a helmet they used a long pole to push the crocodile into the cage.

What happens after that? Did the rescue team leave the cage with the crocodile in the vegetable garden? How did John feel in the end? A little abrupt on the ending.

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One hot and sunny morning , John went to check on his tomato garden. (Why did he suddenly check on his garden? Was he trying to do something in the garden, example, harvest the tomatoes?)

(Did he hear any sounds before seeing the big crocodile?) Then , John saw a big crocodile beside the tomato garden. (How did he feel? Where did he run to or escape to before he could call for help?)

Quickly , John called the crocodile catcher and there is was a big crocodile beside he’s his tomato garden.

The crocodile catcher came and they were came equipped and prepared with a long stick and a big and strong net . and In no time, they caught the big crocodile.

(How did John feel after the crocodile was caught? Did he do anything or learn anything? There's a lack of a proper ending paragraph.)

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"Wow, looked at the ripe tomatoes!"John exclaimed, on a sunny morning when he went to check on his vegetable garden. The dazzling sun hung in the azure-blue sky. The tomatoes were all so juicy and he wanted to eat it right now! But something approach him and caught his eyes.

Suddenly, John heard a low growl from behind a bush,

a humongous scaly crocodile with blazing eyes stood angrily in rage , as its body was filled with scales. John's face turned as pale as a ghost and had butterflies in his stomach. When the crocodile came closer and closer, his heart was thumping loudly. Perspiration trickled down his forehead,  he shivered and with his mouth hung agape. John trembled like a leaf in the wind and was startled beyond words. John stood rooted to the ground (You continued with him running away which is great, but rather contradicting with him being rooted to the ground. Would you like to relook and edit this line?),

he ran away, but he did not know who to call for help.

(Not appropriate in usage)At last, John knew who to ask for help. He went home and took his phone out from his bag. John quickly called the animal rescue team for help and told them what had  happened while he was in his garden. The rescue team heard what had happened and told him to stay calm. They ask him not to disturb the crocodile, told him and to stay indoors and they will would be there as soon as possible! As they spoke, John listened carefully and tried not to miss out any information or making to ensure he would not cause any inconvenience for them. As After the rescue team hung up the phone, John felt very nervous and kept on fidgeting all around.

Not long after, the rescue team arrived. They were wearing gloves, boots and helmets to make sure that they would be safe from the hungry predator. They carried a long pole with a loop and a strong net at the end. They marched into the vegetable garden and not knowing that the crocodile was behind them. When the predator was about to eat the rescue team, they scurried away and captured the crocodile that wanted to live in John's garden. (Check in with me on how we can edit these lines to make the actions clearer in an orderly manner.)

The crocodile tried to escape but the net was too strong and was held firmly in their hands. Finally, after the rescue team were about to leave John gave them a wave as he said "thank you" for helping him.

Through this incident, John learnt to check his surroundings before going to pick his ripe tomatoes.

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One bright and sunny morning, John went outside to check on his big and juicy tomatoes which were growing. He was happy that he saw his fresh tomatoes. He took some of his tomatoes. While he was taking harvesting his tomatoes, he heard some noise behind him. and went When he turned around, he saw a crocodile! John quickly ran back home and called the crocodile catcher.The crocodile catcher said to stay away from the crocodile.John wait until the crocodile catcher arrived.Luckily the crocodile catcher arrived just in time.The crocodile catcher carried a long pole with a strong net the crocodile catcher lock the crocodile in a cage to stay safe.

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One sunny morning John went outside to check on his tomato garden.john saw the tomatoes and he thought the inside was juicy.

After that John want to a pond and then he saw a bigcrocodile behind a tree John was scared.

And then he run back to his house and he called the animal rescue team for help.

The animal rescue team came soon and arrived with a glove,boots and a helmet and put the crocodile in the cage.

And John was very happy.

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It was a perfect day for John to check on his vegetable garden. The sun was shining brightly as white clouds drifted across the clear blue sky. As he strode through his vegetable garden, he stopped by the tomatoes to check if they were ready for harvesting.

Suddenly, out of nowhere, he heard a low rumbling sound. He looked tirelessly high and low where the sound was coming from. His jaw dropped and he screamed in horror when he saw a crocodile right beside the pond.

He sprinted home hurriedly and called the animal rescue team for help. The animal rescue team tried to calm John down and replied, “Stay indoors, don’t go near it. I’ll be there soon!”

Before John knew it, a team of two men wearing gloves, boots and a helmet arrived to catch the crocodile. The crocodile tried putting up a fight, but the men used a pole and managed to lure it into a metal cage.

John was grateful for the team and he thanked them profusely. What a frightening incident but John was relieved that he was not hurt to enjoy his tomatoes!

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one (One) cold morning,John went to check on his ripe tomatoes in the vegetable garden. John wants to make tomato soup to eat. (Great information to connect on the "why was John in the garden". Well done.) John took a basket to pick his tomatoes.

John came back (to where?) with the basket filled with his harvested tomatoes. He then walked away to wash his hands. A ll of a sudden When he returned,to his horror, the tomatoes were gone! All of a sudden, John heard a growl near by. John was scared when he saw that and it was a crocodile!

John ran back home to call the crocodile catcher. John said, ’’There is a crocodile in my garden! " The catcher told him to stay indoors till they arrive.

Finally after half an hour, the catchers arrived. The catchers wore helmets and gear. After some struggling, the crocodile was finally caught.

While John was glad, he was also sad as he couldn't make tomato soup because the crocodile ate the tomatoes. So John made something else for lunch.

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“Wow!”my tomatoes are red and fresh as he walked around the vegetable garden looking at his fresh and ripe tomato tomatoes. Yum ! “ I will have tomatoes for breakfast” said John.

All of a sudden, saw a crocodile it opened up it’s great big mouth ready to eat “it looks hungry I don’t want to be eaten by that crocodile over there I better get inside in the house to call the crocodile catcher”said John.

John quickly get in the house to call the crocodile catcher. The crocodile catcher said “Don’t get near it . I’ll be there soon”

Not long after, a man wearing gloves, boots, and a helmet arrived.He carried a long pole with a loop and a strong net.Then, caught the crocodile with the net.

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One day in the morning, John, went to the vegetable garden and to pick tomatoes.

All of a sudden, he heard a growl from the nearby pond. He turned around and saw a crocodile.

John immediately ran back home to call for the animal rescue team. He quickly called the animal rescue team for help.

Not long after, a man wearing boots, helmet and gear arrived. He carried a long pole with a loop and a strong net.

They caught the crocodile and brought it back to the animal rescue centre.John felt happy.

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One beautiful day John went outside to look at his vegetable garden.He saw his ripe juicy looking tomatoes growing and the trees were growing taller. Then he thought he should grow more plants so he went back to the house.On

his way he saw a crocodile standing right next

to him.He was shocked and scared his bones were shaking he was afraid he might get eaten up so he took a deep breath and quickly

dashed to his house. When he arrived he quickly jumped to his phone and called the Animal Rescue team to come over help catch the crocodile in his vegetable garden the rescue team arrived they had a net, some boots, two pairs of gloves and a cage and they caught the crocodile. John felt relieved and was happy.

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One bright sunny morning, John went outside to check on his garden. He smile as he saw his tomatoes plants were loaded with ripe and red tomatoes. “Wow these are perfect , I can make some marinara sauce from it!” said John. As he was about to pluck the tomatoes he heard a fiercely growling sound come from the pond. To his surprise, he saw a large crocodile was crawling towards him. John’s eyes widened in disbelief. He was scared.

Panic rising he run as fast as he can to his home. Upon reaching his home he shut the door and quickly called the animal rescue for help. “ There’s a crocodile in my garden!” he exclaimed in trembeling. The crocodile catcher told him to stay indoor and not to go near it.

Not long after, a man wearing gkoves, boots and helmet arrived. They carried a long pole with loop and strong net. Finally they managed to catch the crocodile. John then feel relieved.

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One sunny morning, John went vegetable garden to pick tomatoes. All of a sudden, he heard growl form the nearby pond. He saw a crocodile. John immediately ran back home to call for help. He quickly called the crocodile catcher for help. Not long after, a man wearing gloves, boots and helmet arrived. He carried a long pole with a loop and a stong net. They caught the crocodile and brought it back to the animal rescue. John felt happy.

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Wow ‘that wonderful John went to his vegetable garden .my tomatoes and vegetable are very yummy.

After a long time john saw a green big crocodile and John called the animal rescue team for help .john waited and animal rescue come to his vegetable garden to catch the crocodile

they caught the crocodile .John is happy and he go home and tell his mother about it.

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One beautiful sunny morning,when the sun shone. John went outside to check on his vegetable garden。He went to his tomato farm。Suddenly a fierce and scary crocodile jumped out of the pond and ate his ducks

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One warm morning,John went to his tomato garden and said "wow my tomatoes are growing well".But then he turned around and saw a crocodile near him and used a bit of his courage to run back home. After he ran back home, he called the animal rescue team to get the crocodile. A few minutes later, two men wearing,gloves, boots and helmets arrived ,one carried a long stick with a loop on the end another carrying a net and a cage.

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One bright and hot afternoon, John went outsideto to check his vegetable garden. when he arrived he saw lots of big, red tomatoes which are ready to be pick. He felt happy when he thought he could cook some new food with those tomatoes

he walked past the pond when he was on the way back home. he saw a crocodile resting under a tree. john's face turned white as paper, he was scard that the crocodile might bite him. so he dashed back home.

he thought the crocodile might hurt children so he decide to call the animal rescue team for help.before long, two men arrived, dressed in gloves, boots, and sturdy helmets. One men carried a long pole with a loop at the end, while the other held a strong net. They moved slowly and carefully toward the crocodile, ready to trap it !

With quick and skillful moves, the men caught the crocodile using the loop and the net. They placed it into a strong cage and carried it away. John let out a big sigh of relief- his garden was safe once more.

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One hot morning, John went to the vegetable garden to pick tomatoes. The tomatoes looked so red and juicy! He was very excited to bring them home for his breakfast.

All of a sudden, he heard a growl from the nearby pond. He turned around and he saw a huge and ferocious crocodile, growling fiercely at him! He started shivering all over and his face turned as pale as sheet.

With beads of perspiration falling from his forehead, John took up his last bit of courage and dashed swiftly back into his house. He picked up the phone and called the animal rescue team for help. As he waited patiently for help to arrive, his heart pounded so loudly he could hear his own heartbeats drumming away.

A few minutes passed and finally, the animal rescuers came with a long stick with a hoop and a huge net. After some struggle, they caught the huge ferocious beast. John heaved a sigh of relief.

"I am finally safe!" he said as he finally let his guard down. What an expected and dangerous encounter!