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Revise claim: When times are tough, it helps to remain hopeful.

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1.Parvana goes through a tough time when her father is taken to prison.

2.Parvana doesn't give up hoping her father will come back.

3.Liza went through a tough time because Liza had no men to take people outside safely so her family had to stay inside

4. Liza didn't give up because she didn't give up and wanted to think of happier things, so she started painting.

Fantastic work! This looks great!

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when there both not able to go to school

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when there both not able to go to school

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BP1:Parvana goes through tough times when her father gets taken

BP2:Parvana persevered when she goes into the market as a girl and gets stopped by the soldier

BP3:Aman Went through a tough time after his family was killed

BP4:Aman persevered when he didn't like his job but still did it

This looks fantastic! Well done!

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Even when there is tough times stay hopeful

1:  Parvana had tough times when her father got taken away.

2: Parvana stays hopeful when she tries to get her father.

3: Liza faces a hard time when she did nothing just sat inside

4: Liza shows hope when she paints the ocean.

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Even when times are tough, always have hope.

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Even when times are tough, always have hope.

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Body paragraph 1: Parvana went through a tough time when her father was taken to prision.

Body paragraph 2: Parvana remained hopeful when she believed her father would come back from prison.

Body paragraph 3: Liza went through a tough time when her father died.

Body paragraph 4: Liza remained hopeful because she believes that she will be a famous artist and see the ocean one day.

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Even in tough times, there is always hope

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Even in tough times, there is always hope

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Paragraph 1: Parvana had blisters on her feet and could barely walk.

Paragraph 2: Even though Parvana is working hard everyday and probably extremely exhausted, her hope of creating a better future for herself is driving her to earn money.

Paragraph 3:Aman is working his absolute hardest in the tough times her is in.

Paragraph 4: Aman thinks of his future and hopes for a good one.

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when both of their father is took away when there bothe not able to go to school

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when both of their father is took away when there bothe not able to go to school

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When times are tough, try to stay hopeful

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When times are tough, try to stay hopeful

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Paragraph 1: Parvana went thorough a tough time when her dad went to jail and her family depended on Parvana to carry the family and get them food and money.

Paragraph 2:
Parvana is hopeful when she hopes her father will come back home.

Paragraph 3: Liza goes through a tough time when her father dies

This looks great so far! Make sure you have a topic sentence for your 4th body paragraph.

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Even if there are rough times, you can still plan for a better future. 

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Even if there are rough times, you can still plan for a better future. 

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A1: Shauzia living a very tough life when her family keeps arguing.
A2: In the breadwinner Parvana’s mother and siblings go to Mazare sharif to get a better future.

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A3: In Kids of Kabul Liza is having a tough time with her life, especially when her father dies.
A4: So Liza plans to make art to make people have a good feeling again. She is planning for her future.

Overall, this looks great!

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When times are tough, it helps to have hope.

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When times are tough, it helps to have hope.

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Parvana goes through a tough time when her father goes to jail.

Parvana remains hopeful when she leaves the light on for her father.

A time when it is toughest for Liza is when her father died.

She is hopeful when she is painting the ocean.

Revise: A time when it is toughest for Liza is when her father died to A time that was tough for Liza was when her father died. Besides this, it looks great!

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Even if there are rough times, you can plan for your future.

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Even if there are rough times, you can plan for your future.

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Shauzia had rough times when her family always argues.

Shauzia planned her adventure to get to France and have a good life in her future.

Liza has rough times when her father died and she can't go to school and sits at home bored.

Liza plans and dreams of her bright future and being an amazing artist.

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When you are at rock bottom there is nowhere to go but up  🎈

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When you are at rock bottom there is nowhere to go but up  🎈

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when Her family was at her worst, when her mothers at her worst and her father in jail they had no way of living without a man. They were running out of things

When Parvana thought they were at their worst her father walked up the stairs. Their family was almost repaired and back to a bit normal.

Her father died and they couldn’t go to school and she thought it would always be like that forever.

But she stays hopeful and remains happy after

Your last topic sentence is too vague: But she stays hopeful and remains happy after
You should have a specific example of how Liza stays hopeful as your topic sentence.

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During tough times it is helpful to be hopeful.

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During tough times it is helpful to be hopeful.

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BP1: Parvana and her family really struggle when her family is taken to prison by the Taliban.

BP2: Parvana is able to remain optimistic that her father may return home.

BP3: Liza goes through tough times when the schools are shut down.

BP4: Liza still keeps going and carries hope when she's painting that her dreams will come true.

Excellent! This looks good!

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In tough times there's almost always hope, just persevere until  you find it.
Answer 1: When Parvanna's father is taken away, her and her mother go to the prison in hope of finding her father.
Answer 2: Parvanna preserves until she finds her farther by working in the Market and making money
Answer 3: When Liza's father is killed and she can't go to school her hope is lost. Then Liza starts painting
Answer 4: Liza persevered when she stayed hopeful that she in the future would see the ocean.

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Never lose hope, even when times are hard.

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Never lose hope, even when times are hard.

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1. Parvana doesnt lose her hope and tries to help her family to make money.
2. Parvana doesn't give up even when she loses her father.
3. Liza doesn't lose her hopes about her life and wanting to see the ocean.
4. Liza's family is struggling with the Taliban since her fathers death.

Claim looks good!
Body paragraph #2 Topic Sentence should be about times being hard for Parvana. Make sure you have text evidence in your essay that really supports your topic sentneces/answers.

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Even during tough times, it’s important to stay hopeful.

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Even during tough times, it’s important to stay hopeful.

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Body Paragraph #1: Parvana went through a tough time when her father went to jail.
Body Paragraph #2: Parvana is hopeful when she wanted to light the lamp.
Body Paragraph #3: Liza went through a tough time time when her father died.
Body Paragraph #4: Liza is hopeful when she is painting the ocean.

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paragraph one: Parvana has a tough time when her father gets arrested.

Paragraph 2: Parvana stays hopeful when she goes to the prison to get her father, and reconnect there family.

Paragraph 3: Liza has a tough time when her father dies.

Paragraph 4: Liza stays hopeful when she paints the ocean because one day she wants to be an artist.

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When times are tough, it helps to have hope.

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When times are tough, it helps to have hope.

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Answer #1: A specific time that was tough was when the Taliban soldiers took Parvanas father to prison.

Answer #2: Parvana has hope about her father finding a way home

Answer #3: Liza has a tough time when she is not able to go to school and go see the ocean for the first time.

Answer #4: Liza is hopeful about being a painter and seeing the ocean in real life.

This looks great! Awesome job so far!

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Even when times are tough, it helps to have hope. 

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Even when times are tough, it helps to have hope. 

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Paragraph 1: Parvana went through a tough time when the Taliban took her father.

Paragraph 2: Parvana showed she was hopeful when she wanted to light the lamp for her father.

Paragraph 3: Liza went through a tough time when she had to watch her father die.

Paragraph 4: Liza remained hopeful that Afghanistan will change into a better place.

Awesome! This looks great.

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Even when times are tough, you can always find hope

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Even when times are tough, you can always find hope

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Answer 1#: parvana is hopeful because she hopeful that she will see her farther again
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So far, so good! You are missing your second answer.

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Even when times are tough, you can still find hope

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Even when times are tough, you can still find hope

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Body P1: Times are tough for Parvana because her father is in prison, so now she has to do all the work no that she is a boy
Body P2: Times are tough for Liza because her father died when she was seven, so she couldn’t go outside with any safety
Body P3: Parvana finds hope when she begins making more money by digging up peoples bones.

Body P4: Liza finds hope when she thinks hopeful thoughts about the painting, and the ocean.

Excellent! This looks good!