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Dakota Durr,
Some of your transaction Words are weird

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To whom created “Cerebral Palsy“ please check your use of “&”, but overall I really admire your use of inner thoughts and feeling. Your story was great!
-Hayden

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Dakota Durr,
Your title is confusing

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I think you could have added what happened between some parts, and adding detail into those parts you could add. But otherwise I loved the story of you racing your four wheeler.
-Bobby G

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I really liked your story. I loved how you went out of your comfort zone to talk about something private and important to you. That’s cool.

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I like everyone’s writing they are all so interesting

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Great job to everyone. Well done

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I love everyone’s writing, you all have done very well

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Login Olsen,
I love your beginner

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The story’s are amazing every body was great 👁👄👁

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I think your story is really good and it was really fun to read I can’t wait to read more - Julian

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Carder Davis, I think you could have had just a little bit more detail.

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Lola westadt
Your story was grate but there were some parts that I had to stop and think about what I was reading because it was hard to understand.

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I like the movie and very fun

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To whom created “Cerebral Palsy“ please check your use of “&”, but overall I really admire your use of inner thoughts and feeling. Your story was great!
-Hayden

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Mark olle
Your story fort in the creek was interesting but had a few things in need of working on like the dialogue, spelling And detail

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Lola Westadt
Love your story but next time maybe some internal thought like what were you thinking when you were nervous but overall your story was really good

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Mackenzie Eggering
Your story is great but you need to work on your grammar

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Lola Westadt
You need to and paragons and indenting
Overall it was ok

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John Martin
Your stour is really action packed and is great. I think you could add some more detail though.

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Ryleigh Witt
I thought that it was good but you have some miss spelled words and your missing some words for example, when you said “we hoped side by side” you should have said we hopped in the side by side. But other wise I think it’s good

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Eddie McNees
You had a few spelling errors but your story was good

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Love the lead and the strong theme

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Great job

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Kayleigh Short
I think you could add more details, and use more emotion in your speaker tags. I also think that maybe you could add more action and internal thoughts/feelings.

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Lola Westadt
Add a title and a By:your name but overall your story is really goood

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I think you could add some transition words in your story but other than that your story was good 👍

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all of her speak

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Mark olle
I like your story a lot it has good dialogue and lots of detail, the story really shows what it was like as you were young and as you are now. I don’t have much else to say but it’s great and there’s not much wrong about it.

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Bl I think you did great on your story

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Ryleigh Witt
I think that you should make it more detailed and you just have a random b at the end of one of your sentences. Also you should make it longer and also instead of just saying I said you could say it with more detail and felling cause it sounds like your not wanting to do this and that your having no fun

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Eddie McNees
Your story was really good but try not to say names over and over

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Jasmin Westfall
You had a really good story but you forgot some words if you want you could go back and fix it if you wanted but other than that your detail was good you did a good job!

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Kayleigh Short
I really loved your story! I loved all of the detail, dialogue, and internal thoughts/feelings in your story! I don’t think there is anything that you could really add, good work! 😁

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Kayleigh Short
I really liked your story, but I really think that in the speaker tags, add more stuff like “I/they said excitedly” I think they just need some more emotion😁

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Ryleigh Witt   I think that you have a lot of good detail but I think that you need to finish and at the beginning where it said it was 6:45 the it should have been capitalized because it was the beginning of a sentence

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Logyn Olson~ I really liked your story and maybe try to not say names as much but overall it was great%👍🏽👍🏽

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John Martin
I think your story sounds great and has a lot of detail. I can’t think of anything else that it needs.

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Lola Westadt
I love your story just maybe add a little more internal thoughts and fix your grammar but overall great story.

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I went on the wrong part of the slide... never mind the comment about Layla’s story 😂

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Kayleigh Short
I loved your story Layla! It had a lot of dialogue, action, detail, and internal thoughts and feelings. By what I can see, I don’t think you really need to add anything. Good job!

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I like your bingo board mrs.long

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Step 1- Click the link, click "open new window" and go to slide 4.
Step 2- Click on a link in one of the BINGO boxes.
Step 3- Read the story and make comments using your checklist. Your comments will be posted in this Padlet. Be sure to include your name in your comment and the initials of the person you are leaving the comment for.
Step 4- Continue reading and commenting on stories until Ms. Fortner tells you to stop.

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Kailey Fortner
Your paper was great! I would recommend adding more transitions at the beginning of your paragraphs. I liked your lead.