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Overall, this is well written and you have well balanced paragraphs. Let's work on making sure that your topic sentences are more detailed.

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Your thesis statement is really strong, but I think it would be more clear if you flipped it so that it shows cause and then effect.

The unrealistic presentation of idealized body images and the physical requirements of college sports causes eating disorders within collegiate female athletes to be ___.

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Stress about career paths/ future endeavors also contributes to anxiety within collegiate athletes

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Stress about career paths/ future endeavors also contributes to anxiety within collegiate athletes

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Ideas of "ideal" body types impact runners' perception of themselves... eating disorder rates and risk are likely to be affected by these

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Ideas of "ideal" body types impact runners' perception of themselves... eating disorder rates and risk are likely to be affected by these

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Krebs 1

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The number of college athletes that contend with serious mental health issues is notable 

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The number of college athletes that contend with serious mental health issues is notable 

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Walters 8

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A study was performed showing that equestrian athletes perceived their body images as significantly larger than their actual physical sizes and wanted to be significantly smaller

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A study was performed showing that equestrian athletes perceived their body images as significantly larger than their actual physical sizes and wanted to be significantly smaller

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This can be applied to different athletes and how they perceive their own bodies

Torres-McGehee 434

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There is an idealized "thin" body image in Western culture, which is a driver of body image issues and disordered eating in women 

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There is an idealized "thin" body image in Western culture, which is a driver of body image issues and disordered eating in women 

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Robbenson 344

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“cardiovascular, reproductive, skeletal, renal, gastrointestinal, endocrine, and central nervous systems” (Robbenson 344) are  negatively impacted by undernourishment as a result of disordered eating

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“cardiovascular, reproductive, skeletal, renal, gastrointestinal, endocrine, and central nervous systems” (Robbenson 344) are  negatively impacted by undernourishment as a result of disordered eating

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Aside from eating disorders themselves, undernourishment and over training can cause a plethora of medical issues

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Menstrual dysfunction is common in female athletes due to under-nourishment/ stress

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Menstrual dysfunction is common in female athletes due to under-nourishment/ stress

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Ravi 409

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The objectification theory explains the experiences of women who connect their self worth to their physical attributes

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The objectification theory explains the experiences of women who connect their self worth to their physical attributes

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Bailey 87

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Conclusion: The different aspects of collegiate running explained causes the prevalence of eating and body disorders in women 

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Conclusion: The different aspects of collegiate running explained causes the prevalence of eating and body disorders in women 

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Using this information, programs should move forward to create a better environment for female athletes

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Body image is based on a cultural ideology that underlies body satisfaction... and activities motivated by these perceptions and feelings 

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Body image is based on a cultural ideology that underlies body satisfaction... and activities motivated by these perceptions and feelings 

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Television programs include actors with bodies that deviate from the "population average" which can instill a sense of body dissatisfaction within the consumers

Eisend 103

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Paragraph 1: Statistics of eating disorders show the relating health effects

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Paragraph 1: Statistics of eating disorders show the relating health effects

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Paragraph 4: Enduranced-based athletes experience body image challenges due to norms within the running community

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Paragraph 4: Enduranced-based athletes experience body image challenges due to norms within the running community

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It isn't uncommon for runners compare performance and physical shape of athletes

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Paragraph 2: The presence of disordered eating in the general population affects women disproportionately

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Paragraph 2: The presence of disordered eating in the general population affects women disproportionately

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Thesis: Eating disorders within collegiate female athletes is enabled by idealized body image and the nature of the sport.

Hook: Story of sports commentator commenting on pacemakers weight during a race, how that affected her mental health

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many athletes have negative coping strategies for feelings of stress, anxiety, body dissatisfaction

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many athletes have negative coping strategies for feelings of stress, anxiety, body dissatisfaction

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they are expected to have positive coping strategies for feelings of body dissatisfaction, but this isn’t usually the case without help from a coach or mentor

Bailey 87

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academics and finances may lead to increased anxiety in studets

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academics and finances may lead to increased anxiety in studets

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Baghurst 438

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There is a significant difference between lean and non-lean athletes 

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There is a significant difference between lean and non-lean athletes 

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wells 259

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Higher daily activity levels in runners can promote eating disorders

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Higher daily activity levels in runners can promote eating disorders

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Females have an increased expectation to be thinner than males

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Females have an increased expectation to be thinner than males

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“there are different ideal physiques and psychological stressors between not only genders but also sports, and eating disorder rates and risk are likely to be affected by these” (Krebs 1)

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Paragraph 6: Lack of education on proper nutrition and dieting can lead to unintentional eating disorders

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Paragraph 6: Lack of education on proper nutrition and dieting can lead to unintentional eating disorders

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Paragraph 5: External stressors on top of the stress of competing can cause eating disorders

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Paragraph 5: External stressors on top of the stress of competing can cause eating disorders

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Paragraph 3: Idealized body image in social media and television causes body-dissatisfaction in female athletes

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Paragraph 3: Idealized body image in social media and television causes body-dissatisfaction in female athletes

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social media can be a great way for athletes to connect around the world, but can also cause comparisons of body types