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Observations after reading your email:

1. Task Completion (4/5)
✅ Great job answering Francis' questions:

What's the best place in your town to meet? Cinema or park

What to do? Watch a movie

What to bring? Drinks and food
⚠️ SUGGESTION: A little more details could make your response stronger, not only answer the questions.

2. Organization & Structure (3/5)
✅ Your email has the right structure, it has a greeting, a body, and a closing; however, it looks like one big paragraph, you need to set some punctuation marks.
⚠️ SUGGESTION: Punctuation marks in conditionals, for example: " if you want, you can bring some drinks and food."

3. Grammar & Vocabulary (3/5)
⚠️ There are some small spelling and grammar mistakes:

"In mi town" → "In my town"

4. Register & Tone (4/5)
✅ The email is friendly and appropriate for an informal message.
⚠️ The closing "XOXO" is ok but always include "See you soon!"

Suggested corrections, I highlighted the punctuation marks and ideas I added:

Hi Francis,

How are you? I'm happy because I can meet you this weekend.

In my town, one of the best places to meet is the cinema, but the park is also a good option.

I don't know what you think,but I would like to watch a movie at the cinema, there's a new action movie that I really want to see, what do you think?

In case you want to go to the park, you can bring some drinks and snacks or we can buy something there, is 3pm a good time to meet?

Let me know what you think.

See you soon!
Vega

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Your story:

firstly, some people was waiting to the bus in the bus station to go to the train station

secondly, one girl and one boy that were wait started two talk and they said : no more trains we will go on foot.

finally, they went home on foot while they were talked.

Evaluation:

Grammar & Accuracy: 2/5 (Several errors in verb tense, sentence structure, and prepositions)

Coherence & Cohesion: 3/5 (Clear order but lacks smooth transitions)

Vocabulary: 3/5 (Basic but appropriate)

Task Completion: 4/5 (Fulfills the requirement but could add more details)

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Rewrite your story.

Before you start writing your story, answer these guiding questions to help you organize your ideas.

Setting the Scene:

1. Where were the people in the first picture?

2. What were they doing?

3. Why were they waiting at the bus station?

4. How did they feel?

Developing the Story:

5. What happened when they arrived at the train station?

6. What did they see when they got there?

7. How did they react to the sign that said, "No trains today"?

8. What did they decide to do next?

Ending the Story:

9. How did they get home?

10. What did they talk about on the way?

11. How did they feel at the end of the journey?

2nd Version of your story:

Firstly,two boys were at the bus station with other people, They were waiting for the bus because they needed to go to the train station, they were staying there for an hour, this means that they were very bored.

Secondly,they arrived at the train station but they saw a sign that said '' no trains today'', they were surprised and sad, but they thought that they could go home on foot .

Finally, they decided that they would go on foot. During the path they talked about what things they need to do at home.

Correction system:

📍=A word is missing.

🔍=Time tense error.

⚠️=Incorrect word.

👥=Word repetition

🪬=Punctuation mark needed