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*Transitions are key!
*Be careful not to use too many transitions.  Use just enough to tie things together and help the reader navigate your writing.
Example:
Veterinarian Louis J. Camuti made some strange house calls to treat cats. One time, he examined 27 cats in one house! Another time, he got a call from a lady who said her cat couldn't move. He knew the problem immediately. The cat was too fat. It weighed 28 pounds! then there was the cat who liked to be vacuumed like a rug. It purred during the vacuuming.

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SHOWING
*Make the reader feel, hear, smell, taste, or touch things through your writing.  Show rather than tell! Read the following excerpt from Charlotte's Web by E.B. White:
It smelled of hay and it smelled of manure.  It smelled of the perspiration of tired horses and the wonderful sweet breath of patient cows...And whenever the cat was given a fish head to eat, the barn would smell of fish.
TELLING
*If the author had decided to tell, not show, his description might have sounded more like this:
The barn was full of interesting smells of many kinds.  The smells came from all the animals and other things in the barn.

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1. Does the writing follow an effective plan?
2. Is all the important information included?
3. Is the writing focused?
4. Do all parts work well?
5. Do all parts appear in the best order?

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1. Look for the strong parts. Put a star next to one or two things that you like in the first draft.
2. Look for the weak parts. Look for the parts that need work. Key details may be missing, sentences may sound awkward or confusing when you read them aloud, or maybe you have too many sentences that are the same length or start with the same word.

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1. After you have finished your first draft, set it to the side for a while and take a break! Read it again later.  Changes might appear that you didn't catch before.
2. Read and share. Read it aloud to yourself, and then read it to a teacher, classmate, family member.

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-add details
-reordering sentences
-taking out information you do not need
-rewriting parts that are not clear
-adding graphics

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*Paragraph: the closing sentence restates the topic sentence.
*Essay: revisits the focus, summarizes main idea, emphasizes a point, & gives a final though.

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*Paragraph: the middle sentences in a paragraph support the topic sentence with facts, examples, and so on.
*Essay: the middle paragraphs in an essay support the focus statement with different types of details. The number of middle paragraphs depends on the number of main ideas you have to support the focus.

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*Paragraph: usually begins with a topic sentence; this sentence names the topic and the focus of the paragraph.
*Essay: the beginning paragraph in an essay has three important jobs...start with an interesting fact or quotation about the topic, ask the reader a question, or share a brief story about the topic.

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-Write while your prewriting is fresh on your mind.
-Use your planning as guide.
-Write as freely as you can, getting down as much as possible.
-Include a beginning, middle, and an end.
-Sound like you care about your topic.