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Topic: Health Science: Tell the story of an illness that you had. What symptoms did you have? What happened to you? How did you recover? What did you learn about the causes, symptoms, and/or treatments?

1. Introduction

Hook: I believe that all the people have had an illness that they found it hard to forget. Just like them, I also have an experience of having an illness that causes me a lot of time to recover and money to heal, too.

Background information: Influenza, commonly known as the flu, is an infection caused by a virus that affects the nose, throat, and lungs.

Thesis Statement: I thought this illness was not serious, so l took it easy until I cannot walk by myself and I realized I made a mistake about my health.

2. Body Paragraphs

Walking around and near sick person

start to feel sick

The symptoms were like the cold

Was not thought much

it were terrible

Check-up and results in influenza

Rest and exercise

Recover and more careful

3. Conclusion

In conclusion, having a serious flu that time has taught me that do not take something that easy because sometimes it can lead to a waste of our property that includes time, money, energy and mental health.

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Health Science: Tell the story of an illness that you had. What symptoms did you have? What happened to you? How did you recover? What did you learn about the causes, symptoms, and/or treatments?

I believe that all the people have had an illness that they found it hard to forget. Just like them, I also have an experience of having an illness that causes me a lot of time to recover and money to heal. I thought this illness was not serious, so I took it easy until I cannot walk by myself and I realized I made a mistake about my health.

One day, as I jogging around the park with my friends, I noticed that there was an old men who walked near me and squeezed. I was not careful much and continued my walk. After that day, I started to feel  utterly exhausted, headache, shortness of breath, stuffy nose, sore throat and eye pain. For first, I still think it just a simple fever because it was rain last night. But it started to make me feel like I cannot breathe and I was hurt the entire body especially achy all over my muscles. I can’t stand with this anymore, so I have a check-up and the results in influenza. I couldn’t believe myself that it can happen that easily. I spend the whole week staying at home, stay hydrated, a little bit of exercise because I don’t have any energy, get plenty of sleep and some medicine that the doctor had given me. After recovering, I am more careful about staying near people who had a cold because the influenza virus causes an infection in the respiration tract. Even though the influenza virus can sometimes be compared with the common cold. It also can cause a more severe illness or death. I try to watch out for what I eat, exercise and try to avoid some medicine that might cause some stomachaches.

In conclusion, having a serious flu that time has taught me that do not take something that easy because sometimes it can lead to a waste of our property that includes time, money, energy and mental health.

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Peer Editing by Sen phiry

Put a check (✅) as appropriate.

✅ 1. Is the essay correctly formatted with indented paragraphs?

✅2. Does the introduction include a hook, background information, and a thesis statement at the end that focuses the topic and prepares the reader for the main action event?

✅3. Do the paragraphs give enough specific details about the main event?

✅4. Are the details well organized in a clear sequence?

✅5. Does the conclusion show what the writer learned from the experience?

❌6. Does the essay contain a variety of vocabulary?

✅7. Does the sentence structure support the flow of the story with time adverbs and subordinating conjunctions?

✅8. Are all the verbs in the correct form?

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Topic :Retell the plot of a story, novel, or movie. Who were the characters?

What problems did they face? Describe the events. How were the problems solved? What made the story interesting to you?

1. Introduction

Each of us always has our favorite stories, such as sad stories, love stories and jokes, so watching movies is a common pastime when they are bored.

•Background information

My favourite movies of all time is avatar.I like it because the story is heart touching, and the plat is interesting.

-This movie Directed by James

Cameron, the movie tells the story of a paraplegic marine named Jake Sully.Avatar.

what I know about this movie is that there are a bunch of blue"people" that are fighting against each other or against one thing.

2. Body Paragraph

-In other words, Avatar has very good quality pictures and the 3D is very good as well.

-﻿In addition, I also learned that the main character, Jake, is the hero of the movie.

-﻿In Avatar Jake becomes the top and the guy that the movie is revolved around. - There is a direct relationship between people's perception of each other and their relationships.

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Topic :Retell the plot of a story, novel, or movie. Who were the characters?

What problems did they face?

Each of us always has our favorite stories, such as sad stories, love stories and jokes, so watching movies is a common pastime when they are bored.. have seen many movies; however, my favourite movies of all time is avatar. I like it because the story is heart touching, and the plat is interesting.

Firstly, This movie Directed by James Cameron, the movie tells the story of a paraplegic marine named Jake Sully.Avatar, what I know about this movie is that there are a bunch of blue"people" that are fighting against each other or against one thing. In other words, Avatar has very good quality pictures and the 3D is very good as well.

In addition, I also learned that the main character, Jake, is the hero of the movie.

In Avatar Jake becomes the top and the guy that the movie is revolved around.

There is a direct relationship between people's perception of each other and their relationships. How people perceive and evaluate each other other and their relationships. How people perceive and evaluate each other depends on the images that they form about each other.

On the other hand, I am not sure exactly what the story line is except that Jake runs away and lives with some other type of people and then he falls in love with the guys daughter and I think I have also learned that that there are two villains in this movie. One being a bureaucrat, Parker, who wants to rule everyone and everything and the second one is Colonel Quartich, the only thing that I really got about him is that he seems bigger than life, which I am assuming means the big mean guy.

Finally, Avatar has a few underlying themes and points that aide in telling this majestic story .It also focuses on many ideas. This movie has a very "green" tone.It is eco-friendly and shows the complexities of even the tiniest ecosystems. This movie is meaningful to me because I agree with the themes of this movie.

In conclusion, the movie shows the importance of the balance in nature.

The balance between any species and nature is a major theme in Avatar.Also I really like to watched this movie so much.

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Topic: Tell the story of an illness that you had. What symptoms did you have? What happened to you? How did you recover? What did you learn about the causes, symptoms, and/or treatments?

I believe that all the people have had an illness that they found it hard to forget. Just like them, I also have an experience of having an illness that causes me a lot of time to recover and money to heal, too. I thought this illness was not serious, so I took it easy until I cannot walk by myself and I realized I made a mistake about my health.

One day, as I jogging around the park with my friends, I noticed that there was an old men who walked near me and squeezed. I was not careful much and continued my walk. After that day, I started to feel  utterly exhausted, headache, shortness of breath, stuffy nose, sore throat and eye pain. For first, I still think it just a simple fever because it was rain last night. But it started to make me feel like I cannot breathe and I was hurt the entire body especially achy all over my muscles. I can’t stand with this anymore, so I have a check-up and the results in influenza. I couldn’t believe myself that it can happen that easily. I spend the whole week staying at home, stay hydrated, a little bit of exercise because I don’t have any energy, get plenty of sleep and some medicine that the doctor had given me. After recovering, I am more careful about staying near people who had a cold because the influenza virus causes an infection in the respiration tract. Even though the influenza virus can sometimes be compared with the common cold. It also can cause a more severe illness or death. I try to watch out for what I eat, exercise and try to avoid some medicine that might cause some stomachaches.

In conclusion, having a serious flu that time has taught me that do not take something that easy because sometimes it can lead to a waste of our property that includes time, money, energy and mental health.

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Put a check (✅) as appropriate.

✅ 1. Is the essay correctly formatted with indented paragraphs?

✅2. Does the introduction include a hook, background information, and a thesis statement at the end that focuses the topic and prepares the reader for the main action event?

✅3. Do the paragraphs give enough specific details about the main event?

✅4. Are the details well organized in a clear sequence?

✅5. Does the conclusion show what the writer learned from the experience?

❎6. Does the essay contain a variety of vocabulary?

✅7. Does the sentence structure support the flow of the story with time adverbs and subordinating conjunctions?

❎8. Are all the verbs in the correct form?

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Topic :Retell the plot of a story, novel, or movie. Who were the characters?

What problems did they face?

Each of us always has our favorite stories, such as sad stories, love stories and jokes, so watching movies is a common pastime when they are bored.. have seen many movies; however, my favourite movies of all time is avatar. I like it because the story is heart touching, and the plat is interesting.

Firstly, This movie Directed by James Cameron, the movie tells the story of a paraplegic marine named Jake Sully.Avatar, what I know about this movie is that there are a bunch of blue"people" that are fighting against each other or against one thing. In other words, Avatar has very good quality pictures and the 3D is very good as well.

In addition, I also learned that the main character, Jake, is the hero of the movie.

In Avatar Jake becomes the top and the guy that the movie is revolved around.

There is a direct relationship between people's perception of each other and their relationships. How people perceive and evaluate each other other and their relationships. How people perceive and evaluate each other depends on the images that they form about each other.

On the other hand, I am not sure exactly what the story line is except that Jake runs away and lives with some other type of people and then he falls in love with the guys daughter and I think I have also learned that that there are two villains in this movie. One being a bureaucrat, Parker, who wants to rule everyone and everything and the second one is Colonel Quartich, the only thing that I really got about him is that he seems bigger than life, which I am assuming means the big mean guy.

Finally, Avatar has a few underlying themes and points that aide in telling this majestic story .It also focuses on many ideas. This movie has a very "green" tone.It is eco-friendly and shows the complexities of even the tiniest ecosystems. This movie is meaningful to me because I agree with the themes of this movie.

In conclusion, the movie shows the importance of the balance in nature.

The balance between any species and nature is a major theme in Avatar.Also I really like to watched this movie so much.