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Thesis Statement:
Revised:
Boracay is the best Philippine tourist spot because of its unique dance called fire dancing, mesmerizing sunsets, and white and lush sand such as the famous White Beach and Diniwid Beach.
APPROVED

TS 1: First, Boracay is the greatest tourist destination because of its unique dance called fire dancing. APPROVED
TS 2: Second, Boracay is the most significant tourist spot because of its very mesmerising sunsets. APPROVED
TS 3: Lastly, Boracay is the most magnificent tourist location because of its white and lush sand such as the famous White Beach and Dinwid Beach.APPROVED

Hook: According to the Department of Tourism, in 2017, 6,620,908 foreign tourists visited the Philippines marking the unprecedented growth of the country's tourism industry. APPROVED

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Thesis Statement: Cebu boasts of its interesting historical landmarks such as Magellan's Cross and the Mactan Shrine, miraculous places for worship such as Simala Church and Santo Nino Church, and fun and relaxing beaches like Bounty Beach and Paradise Beach that make it the best Philippine destination.
APPROVED

TS 1:  Being the oldest city in the country, Cebu has a rich history that is commemorated by its historical landmarks like the Magellan's Cross and the Mactan Shrine. APPROVED

TS 2: As the seed of Christianity in the Philippines was planted in Cebu,  people troop to Cebu for its renowned churches such as the Santo Nino Church and Simala Shrine.  APPROVED

TS 3: Having 167 islands and islets, Cebu abounds with relaxing beaches like Bounty Beach and Paradise Beach. APPROVED

Hook:  Cebu is the epitome of the slogan, "It's more fun in the Philippines." APPROVED

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Title: Great Escape to Baguio
Thesis Statement: Baguio is the best travel destination due to its cool temperature, various farm activities such as strawberry picking and honey making, and rich cultural history like their music . APPROVED

Hook:While many people do prefer to go to the beach during the summer, many do take their travels into the mountains of the City of Pines. APPROVED

TS1:The year-round cool temperature of Baguio has kept tourists coming back for more visits, especially during the summer. APPROVED

TS2: Baguio is famous for its vast strawberry farm. Baguio offers its tourists various farm activities such as strawberry picking and honey making. APPROVED

TS3:Baguio has a rich cultural history especially its music.  APPROVED

EDITED: Music is part of Baguio's has a rich cultural history which is still evident today. APPROVED

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Thesis Statement:

Boracay is an excellent tourist attraction because of its perfect place for water sports such as snorkeling and scuba diving, plenty of adventure activities like playing tennis and volleyball, and famous white sandy beaches namely Puka shell Beach and White Beach. APPROVED

Edited: According to boracaybeachrealestate.com,  Boracay is a tropical paradise of the province of Aklan in the Philippines. APPROVED

TS1: Boracay is perfect for water sports like scuba diving and snorkeling. which offer excellent encounters and close views of marine life. APPROVED
NOTE: Do not add other details. Focus only on the content given in the ThS.

TS2: Secondly, Boracay is an adventure island because it offers activities like tennis and volleyball. APPROVED

TS3: Boracay is boasts of its powdery white beaches namely Puka shell Beach and White beach. APPROVED

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Thesis Statement: Cebu is one of the best tourist spots the in the Philippines because of its breathtaking and overwhelming views such as the Basdaku Beach and Nalusuan Island, kind, understanding and respectful hotel staff, and activities to do such as the Oslob Whale Shark Encounter and the Private Island -Hopping Tour with Lunch . APPROVED

Hook : What is the best tourist spot for you in the Philippines? REVISE

T1: Cebu is famous for having one of the most breathtaking

T2: Cebu also has one of the most kind, understanding and respectful staff.

T3: Third, people always come to Cebu for the unique and exciting activities.

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Thesis Statement:
Batanes is the best Filipino travel destination because of its famous hotels such as Fudacion Pacita hotel and Shanedel's Inn, unique tourist spots such as the Vayang Rolling Hills and the Basco Lighthouse, and the one of a kind restaurants such as the Honesty Cafe and Pension Ivatan. APPROVED

Hook:
The Asian Proverb once said that it is better to see something once than hear about it a thousand times
APPROVED

TS1:
Batanes is filled with famous yet magnificent hotels such as the Fundacion Pacita hotel and Shanedel's Inn. APPROVED

TS2:
Unique and special tourist spots such as the Vayang Rolling Hills and the Basco Lighthouse are found at Batanes. APPROVED

TS3:
Batanes offers one of a kind restaurants such as the Honesty Cafe and Pension Ivatan to its tourists. APPROVED

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Thesis Statement: Palawan is the best tourist location in the Philippines because of its beautiful Puerto Princesa and the captivating beaches such as Nacpan beach and Corong Corong beach and a mesmerizing cave called the Tabon cave. (Note: Observe the correct use of punctuation marks. Avoid wordy statements.)
TS1:Palawan is known around the world for its beautiful Puerto Princesa and its mesmerizing clear blue water, and captivating fresh water animals.

TS2: The Tabon caves is also a very famous tourist spot in palawan, it is mostly known for its lush forestry and unique cave formations.

TS3: Cornong Corong  beach is a very very famous tourist spot in the Philippines for its amazing sight of the near by islands and the people ways of life

Hook: why is palawan one of the most popular and beautiful toursit location in the Philippines

Edited: Palawan is the best tourist location in the Philippines because of its beautiful Puerto Princesa, captivating beaches such as Nacpan Beach and Corong Corong beach, and mesmerizing cave called the Tabon Cave. (APPROVED)

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Thesis Statement: You should go to Baguio on your vacation because of its unique features that you cannot find anywhere else.(Note: Do not write in 1st and 2nd POV. Add two more reasons for each.)

Revised: Baguio is a unique tourist spot because of its cool weather, horse back riding activity, and its fresh pine cone scent. APPROVED

TS1: Baguio's  cool weather attracts  people to go up the mountains and avoid the tropical weather down in the lowlands.APPROVED

TS2: While feeling the cool breeze of Baguio,  one can go and explore the deep forest of _____  by horse.REVISE: SPECIFY

TS3: While enjoying the cool weather and sightseeing the mountains of Baguio, one can smell  fresh pine cones. APPROVED

HOOK: Come with me and explore Baguio. REVISE: REVIEW THE GUIDELINES.

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Thesis Statement: Subic is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its beautiful sandy beaches such as Subic Bay and Camayan beach, exciting dive sites such as Johan's Dive Resort and Castle Reef, and interesting historical American base like the US Naval Base Subic Bay.   (APPROVED)

TS1: The first reasons why Subic is the best tourist spot in the Philippines are its beautiful beaches such as Subic Bay and Camayan beach. APPROVED

TS2: The second reason is the exciting shipwrecks and diving sites such as Johan's Dive Resort and Castle Reef. APPROVED

TS3: The interesting historical American naval bases like the US Naval Base Subic Bay made Subic a best tourist spot. APPROVED

hook: According to tripadvisor.com, everyone can enjoy Subic's wildlife and city attractions. APPROVED

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Hook: Even in the midst of the many enticing travel spots in the Philippines, Palawan still stands out. APPROVED

Thesis Statement: Palawan is the best travel destination in the Philippines because of its tourist attractions such as Puerto Princesa Subterannean River and Secret Lagoon,  alluring beaches like Nacpan Beach and Corong Corong Beach,  and the exciting activities such as snorkeling and zip lining.  APPROVED

TS1: One reason why Palawan is the best travel destination in the Philippines is because of its naturally astounding tourist spots like Puerto Princesa Subterannean River and Secret Lagoon. APPROVED
TS2: Palawan is also a place of stunning and fine beaches such as Nacpan Beach and Corong Corong Beach. APPROVED
TS3: Lastly, there are many thrilling activities one can do in Palawan like snorkeling and zip lining. APPROVED

Sources:
https://www.viator.com/Palawan-tours/Outdoor-Activities
https://www.tripadvisor.com.ph

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Thesis Statement: Bohol is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its exotic animals such as the tarsiers, relaxing beaches like the Alona Beach and the Dumaluan which are both in Panglao, and the delicious food such as the ube desserts and Calamay. APPROVED

TS 1: The first reason why Bohol is the best tourist spot is because of its exotic animals, the Tarsiers. APPROVED

TS 2:The second reason is because of it's its relaxing and calming beaches such as the Alona beach and Dumaluan in Panglao.

TS 3: The last reason is because of it's its savoury food like ube desserts and Calamay. SPECIFY

Hook: Bohol is like a step into heaven, it is the ideal place to relax your nerves and drive away stress. (SOURCE?) http://www.bohol-guide.com/magazine/panglao-beaches-philippines/

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Thesis Statement: Boracay is the most visited tourist spot in the Philippines because of its Instagram worthy white beaches and its finest sand, its five-star quality buildings and establishments like Discovery Shores and the Lind, and it's fun activities like kayaking and water skiing.

EDITED: Boracay is the most visited tourist spot in the Philippines because of its Instagram worthy white beaches such as White beach and Puka beach,  five-star quality buildings and establishments like Discovery Shores and the Lind, and fun activities like kayaking and water skiing. APPROVED

TS 1 : Boracay is the most visited tourist spot in the Philippines because it has Instagram worthy white beaches such as White beach and Puka beach. APPROVED

TS 2: Secondly, Boracay has five star quality hotels like the Lind and Discovery Shores. APPROVED

TS 3: Lastly, Boracay has fun activities like kayaking and water skiing. APPROVED

Hook:” The journey of a thousand miles begins with a single step" - lao tzu APPROVED

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Thesis Statement: Boracay is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its breathtaking beaches such as the White Beach and Puka Beach, mesmerizing sunset, and the mouthwatering seafood restaurants such as  D’ Talipapa and Sea Breeze Cafe. APPROVED

TS 1: Boracay is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its breathtaking beaches such as the White Beach and Puke Beach. APPROVED
TS 2: Boracay attracts a number of tourists because of its mesmerizing sunset.  APPROVED
TS 3: Boracay is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its mouthwatering seafood restaurants such as D' Talipapa and Sea Breeze Cafe.  APPROVED
Hook: According to www.skyscanner.com, Borcacay is is a must-see place to visit in the Philippines in 2018.

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Edited: Bohol is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its Chocolate Hills, famous animals called the Tarsiers, and fun activities for kids and adults such as decorating cookies and jet skiing. (APPROVED)

EDITED: First, Bohol is famous for its beautiful Chocolate Hills. APPROVED

EDITED: Second, Bohol is known for its famous animal called the Tarsiers. APPROVED

EDITED: Lastly, Bohol offers fun activities such as cookie decorating for kids and jet skiing for adults. APPROVED

HOOK: According to justonewayticket.com, Bohol is a perfect getaway. APPROVED.

SOURCES:
https://www.justonewayticket.com/2013/05/31/falling-in-love-wonderland-bohol-panglao-philippines/

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Thesis Statement: Vigan is a good tourist spot because of it's savoring & delicious food like Bagnet and Empanada, historical places such as Calle Crisologo and Bantay Bell Tower, and the beautiful & past way of life such as their transportation. (Note: revise the 3rd reason.)

Edited: Vigan is a good tourist spot because of its savoring and delicious food like Bagnet and Empanada, historical places such as Calle Crisologo and Bantay Bell Tower, and _________________.

EDITED THESIS STATEMENT:

Vigan is a good tourist spot because of its savoring and delicious food like Bagnet and Empanada, historical places such as Calle Crisologo and BantaBell Tower and its traditional arts like Burnay making and coloured yarns. APPROVED

TS 1: Vigan's savouring and delicious food like Bagnet and Empanada are known for its mouth-watering taste and exotic fusions.
APPROVED

TS 2: Historical places such as Calle Crisologo and Bantay Bell Tower are known for its unforgettable history and unique architecture. APPROVED

TS 3: The traditional arts of Vigan such as Burnay Pottery Making and coloured yarns are known for its desired colour and shape and its surprising quality. REVISE: Do not provide supporting details.

Revised topic sentence  3:
The traditional arts of Vigan such as Burnay Making and colored cotton and yarns are known for their captivating pre-colonial designs. APPROVED

Hook: "Once you have travelled, the voyage never ends, but is played out over and over again in the quietest chambers. The mind can never break off the journey."
- Pat Conroy
(Note: This is approved, but make sure that when you write it in your paper, it is in a sentence form.)

Sources:
http://8list.ph/vigan-seven-wonder-cities/

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Thesis Statement:

Boracay is one of the best tourist spots in the Philippines because of its high quality resorts such as Shangri-La's Boracay Resort and Discovery Shores Boracay, delicious and appealing food like backyard barbecue and steak seafood, and lively white sand beaches namely White Beach Boracay and Puka Beach. (APPROVED)

TS 1: Boracay is one of the best tourist spots in the Philippines because of its high quality resorts such as Shangri-La’s Boracay Resort and Discovery Shores Boracay.

APPROVED

TS 2: Secondly, Boracay is also known for its delicious and appealing food like backyard barbecue and steak seafood.

APPROVED

TS 3:  Lastly, Boracay is also known for its lively white sand beaches namely White Beach Boracay and Puka Beach.

APPROVED

Hook: According to adventurousmiriam.com, the White Beach of Boracay stands without comparison, and they have excellent food. APPROVED

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Thesis: Balesin is the best tourist spot it’s the Philippines because of its beaches around Lamon bay, the friendly staff, and the many different themed locations such as Mykonos and Toscana.

EDITED: Balesin is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its beaches around Lamon bay, friendly hotel staff, and different themed locations such as Mykonos and Toscana. APPROVED

Hook: According to manilastandard.net, Balesin placed 2nd in the UN World Tourism excellence awards. APPROVED

REVISE: REVIEW THE GUIDELINES FOR TOPIC SENTENCE.

T1: First, Balesin is the most ideal vacation spot because of its friendly and helpful staff. REVISE: Kindly review the guidelines. The order of TS should be aligned with the reasons stated in the ThS.

T2: Second, Balesin is packed with several different themed locations such as Mykonos and Toscana. REVISE: Kindly review the guidelines. The order of TS should be aligned with the reasons stated in the ThS.

T3: Finally, the majestic beaches around Lamon Bay are also one of the many things Balesin has to offer.

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Thesis Statement: Palawan is the best tourist spot in the Philippines for it has breathtaking islands such as Bulog Dos Island and Starfish Island, unique landmarks such as the Underground River and the Tubbataha Reef National Marine Park, and inspiring tribes such as the Batak tribe and the Tagbanua tribe. (APPROVED)

TS1: Palawan is known for its breathtaking islands such as the Bulog Dos Island and the Starfish Island.

APPROVED

TS2: Palawan has unique landmarks like the Underground River and the Tubbataha Reef National Marine Park.

APPROVED

TS3: The tourist spot is incomplete without its inspiring tribes like the Batak tribe and the Tagbanua tribe.

APPROVED

Hook: Marcel Proust once said that the real voyage of discovery consists not in seeking new landscapes, but in having new eyes. APPROVED
Sources:
https://www.preview.ph/culture/8-of-the-clearest-bodies-of-water-in-the-philippines-a1810-20180322
https://www.islands.com/travel-quotes#page-2
https://www.travel-palawan.com/indigenous-people/

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Thesis Statement: Batangas is beautiful because it has delicious food, great beaches, and beatiful resorts. (Note: Provide two examples for each reason.)

Example: Batangas is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its  delicious food such as bulalo and batangas lomi, great beaches like Fortune island, nasugbo and pulo island,nasugbo , and beautiful resorts such as lima park resort and club punta fuego. ⁽REVISE: Kindly check its mechanics (capitalization).

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Kindly indicate in the comment section your CN and the statement that you want me to check AGAIN.            For example: CN36 - Hook    

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Thesis Statement:
Bohol is one of the best tourist spot  in the Phillippines because it's the only place  where you can see the smallest apes, Tarsiers, another reason is because the famous Chocolate hills is located in Bohol, and lastly because one of the oldest Church was built there, the Baclayon Church,  but was destroyed by an earth quake Note: Do not provide supporting details in the ThS. Also, use 3rd POV only.

Edited: Bohol is one of the best tourist spots in the Philippines because of its amazing animals such as small apes and arsiers, famous Chocolate Hills, and oldest church called the Baclayon Church. (APPROVED)

TS 1: Bohol is one of the best tourist spot because of its amazing animals such as small apes and Tarsheirs.  APPROVED
TS 2: Secondly, Bohol is also famous for its Chocolate Hills. APPROVED
TS 3:  Lastly, Bohol has the oldest church called the Baclayon Church. APPROVED

Hook: According to wayph.com, Bohol has fine beaches, breath taking views, magnificent landscapes, and hospitable people. APPROVED

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Thesis Statement: Hundred Islands is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because it has lots of different beautiful islands to visit such as the Marcos Island and the Lopez Island, it is affordable and worth the experience for it has wonderful sparkling water and clear blue skies, and it houses the biggest bivalve mollusks which are giant clams also known as "Taklobos" in the world. (Note: Do not include supporting details.)

Edited: Hundred Islands is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because it has lots of different beautiful islands to visit such as the Marcos Island and the Lopez Island, relaxing environment, and the biggest bivalve mollusks called 'Taklobos'. (APPROVED)

TS 1: Hundred Islands has lots of different beautiful islands, about a hundred or more, that's how it got its name. R EVISE: KINDLY REVIEW THE GUIDELINES.

TS 2: Hundred Islands has a tranquil environment. APPROVED

TS 3: Hundred Islands houses the biggest bivalve mollusks called 'Taklobos'.  APPROVED

Hook:

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Thesis Statement:
Subic Bay is the best tourist destination due to its vast clean ocean water, Ship Wreck Vessels, and Protected Hectares of Forest such as the Subic Watershed Forest Reserve and Bataan Natural Park. (Note: specify the 3rd reason

TP1:Subic Bay is known for its vast clean ocean water.
TP2:Some of the scenic views of Subic Bay includes shipwrecks of Spanish American Warship,the San Quentin and L2D "Tabby" airplanes.
TP3::Some of the protected hectares of forests can be found in Subic Bay such as that of Subic Bay national Park and tbe Subic Watershed Forest Reserve.

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Thesis Statement:
Hundred Islands is the best tourist spot to visit because of its beautiful islands such as Governor's Island and Cuenco Island, affordable price of tour, and fun activities such as cliff jumping and ziplining. APPROVED

TS 1: Hundred Islands is the best tourist spot to visit because of its beautiful islands such as Governor's Island and Cuenco Island. (Revise: Make it aligned with the content of your ThS.)
TS 2:The tour of Hundred Islands is very affordable. APPROVED
TS 3:The activities,such as cliff jumping and ziplining are fun and enjoyable. REVISE: Spevify the activities.
Hook: Someone once told me that I would never have to leave the country to see the most beautiful place in the world, but I never took it seriously until I saw Hundred Islands.

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Thesis Statement:
Palawan is the best travel destination in the Philippines because of  its clear waters such as Banol Beach in Coron and Nacpon Beach in El Nido, relaxing environment, and high class resorts such as The Birdhouse in El Nido and Sunset Beach Resort in Coron.  APPROVED

TS 1: Palawan’s clear waters such as Banol Beach in Coron and Nacpon Beach in El Nido make it unique and admirable. APPROVED

TS 2: Palawan has a cozy and relaxing environment that tourist will surely love.  APPROVED
TS 3: The Birdhouse in El Nido and Sunset Beach Resort in Coron are two of the most dazzling resorts in Palawan. APPROVED
Hook:  According to palawan-philippinesbeach.com, outstanding geographical features dot Palawan's Landscape. APPROVED

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Thesis Statement: Tagaytay is the best tourist destination in the Philippines because of its cold weather, accessibility, and famous restaurants such as Leslie’s and Breakfast at Antonio’s.
(APPROVED)

TS 1: One of the things that made Tagaytay famous is its cold breeze. APPROVED

TS 2: Another reason why people flock to Tagaytay is because of its easy accessibility. APPROVED

TS 3: Lastly, tourists take a trip to Tagaytay for its famous restaurants such as Lesilie’s and Breakfast at Antonio’s. APPROVED

HOOK: Henry Miller once said that one’s destination is never a place, but always a new way of seeing things. APPROVED

Source:https://www.roughguides.com/gallery/50-inspirational-travel-quotes/amp/

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Thesis Statement: Boracay is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because  can do different activities, restaurants and the dances. ⁽REVISE: Specify the beach and food, and provide one more activity.)

TS 1: The reason why Boracay is the best tourist spot in the Philippines is because food there is great for of its smell, variety and looks. REVISE: Review the guidelines.

Revised:
TS 1:The reason why Boracay is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because there food has this sweet and delightful smell. REVISE: Review the guidelines.

Revised:
TS 1: Boracay is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of the restaurant called Vintana at Shang-rila's resort and spa.

TS 2: The second reason why Boracay is the beat tourist spot in the Philippines is because of scuba diving, when you go scuba diving you can see different kinds of things like sea anemones, fishes and lots of different types .REVISE: Review the guidelines.

Revised:
TS 2: The second reason why Boracay is the best tourist spot is because of its amazing views when you do scuba diving. REVISE: Review the guidelines.

Revised:
TS 2: Boracay is the best tourist spot because of the dance called fire dance.

TS 3: The last reason why Boracay is the best tourist spot in the Philippines is because of its clear beaches like there is no trash anywhere, clean white sand and a relaxing view.REVISE: Review the guidelines.

Revised:
TS 3: The last reason why Boracay is the best tourist spot in the Philippines is because of its clean environment. IT IS NOT STATED IN THE THS.

Revised:
TS 3: Boracay is the best tourist spot in the Philippines for the  activities like scuba diving.

Hook:  What do you think about Boracay being the best tourist spot in the Philippines? Well i can tell you why Boracay is the best tourist spot in the Philippines.REVISE: Review the guidelines.

Revised:
Hook: Boracay is the best tourist spot in the Philippines. REVISE: MAKE IT CREATIVE. THIS IS ALREADY YOUR STAND STATED IN THE THS.

Revised:
Hook: Why is Boracay the best tourist spot in the philippines?

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Thesis Statement:

Bohol is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its unique animals called the Tarsiers, famous tourist attraction which is the Chocolate Hills, and beautiful coral reefs located at the Danajon Bank. APPROVED

NOTE: Do not provide supporting details in the TS. Kindly review the guidelines.

TS1: Bohol became famous a number of tourists because of its  unique animal called the Tarsier. It is famous for its small size and large eyes. It is an endangered species and cannot be found anywhere else.

APPROVED

TS2: Bohol is also famous for Chocolate Hills
which in the dry season gets a milk-chocolate color.

APPROVED

TS3: Lastly, the beautiful and colorful coral reef are located at Danjon Bank. It is full of many diffrent kinds of fishes in all shapes and sizes.

APPROVED

Hook: According to https://www.thecrazytourist.com,/25-best-things-bohol-philippines/ when you are in Bohol, you expect a vacation filled with picturesque jungle adventures that will get your heart pounding and endorphins flowing!

APPROVED

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Thesis Statement: Boracay is a good tourist spot in the Philippines to visit because of it's fun activities such as sky diving and scuba diving, It also has a beautiful fishes lining the beaches in Boracay such as the beautiful clown fishes with unique patterns peeping their heads out of sea anemones saying hi to you, And lastly it has beautiful coral reef in all sorts of colors in Boracay's beaches such as Bulabog Beach. (Note: Do not provide details in the ThS.)

Edited: Boracay is a good tourist spot in the Philippines to visit because of its fun activities such as sky diving and scuba diving, fish with unique patterns such as the clown fish, and beautiful coral reefs located at the Bulabog Beach. (APPROVED)

TS 1: The activities in Boracay such as scuba diving and sky diving are fun, exciting, and relaxing.

APPROVED

TS 2: The marine animals in Boracay has have unique patterns and is vibrant such as the clown fish.

APPROVED

TS 3: Boracay has beautiful and eye catching corals lining the bottom of the Balubog sea.

APPROVED

Hook:
According to Loui Lapat, Boracay, where moments of serenity and sensory overload go hand in hand, when life was and breezy in the island, people must have thought they were in the bosom of paradise.

APPROVED

Boracay, where moments of serenity and sensory overload go hand in hand. When life was easy and breezy in the island, people must have thought they were in the bosom of paradise.
By Louie Lapat

Link
https://www.google.com.ph/amp/s/amp.rappler.com/life-and-style/travel/ph-travel/129753-boracay-sunset-beaches-philippines-photos

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thesis statement: Boracay is a memorable travel spot in the Philippines because of its beautiful beaches such as the White Beach and the Puka Shell Beach, fun activities people can do like Banana Boat Riding and Scuba Diving, and interesting places to see such as the Morang Museum and the Ariel's Spot. (APPROVED)
TS#1
The first reason why Boracay is a memorial travel spot is because of its beautiful beaches like the White Beach and Puka Shell Beach.
TS#2
The second reason is because of its ejnjoyable enjoyable activities such as the Banana Boat Riding and Scuba Diving. wich is loved by both forgein and Filipino people.
TS#3
Lastly, There are interesting places that cannot be seen in any other country except in the Philippine, there are the Boracay offers interesting places to its tourists suvh as Morang Museum and Ariel's Spot.

NOTE: Stick to the content provided in your ThS. ALL the topic sentences are now approved.

HOOK:
According to neverendingfootsteps.com travelling to dreamlike places can make us recover from mental sickness, give us peace in our minds and reduce stress.

Links:
neverendingfootsteps.com
boracaycompass.com

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Thesis Statement:

Boracay is one of the most popular tourist spots in the Philippines because of its beautiful beaches such as the White Beach and Diniwid Beach, mesmerizing sunsets, and the jaw dropping scenery. APPROVED

TS 1: Boracay is famous for its magnificent and fresh beaches such as White Beach and Diniwid Beach. APPROVED
TS 2: Boracay is well-known for being one of the most favored places to watch or take photographs because of its mesmerizing sunsets by the beach descending into the ocean. APPROVED
TS 3: The scenery of Boracay is stunning and the fresh scent of the ocean while walking on the beach by the shoreline is a wonderful experience. APPROVED

Hook: According to lonelyplanet.com, Boracay is the Philippines' top tourist draw, fuelled by explosive growth and a tsunami of hype. APPROVED

Source :
https://www.lonelyplanet.com/philippines/the-visayas/boracay

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Thesis Statement:
Palawan is the best tourist destination in the Philippines because they have beautiful sparking corals in Smith Coral Garden, and in Sea Coral Lodge, their food in Palawan is also very good they have restaurants such as  Le Terrasse and Rene's Saigon Restaurant, Palawan is very known for their wonderful beaches their beaches are very nice because you can see what is beneath such as blue Palawan beach club and Sea view resort.

(Run-on sentences)Do nOt use 2nd POV.
Do not include supporting details.

Edited: Palawan is the best tourist destination in the Philippines because of its beautiful sparkling corals in Smith Coral Garden and Sea Coral Lodge, very good restaurants such as Le Terrasse and Rene's Saigon Restaurant, and wonderful beaches such as Blue Palawan Beach Club and Sea View Resort. (APPROVED)

Hook: Palawan is a nice beautiful place to go to because of it’s beautiful marine creatures and places to go there REVISE: Review the guidelines.

T1:First, Palawan is very beautiful place because of it’s beautiful sparkling corals.

T2:Second, Palawan has very good and delicious food there.

T3:Lastly, Palawan has very good beach resorts hey have blue and sparkling water.

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Thesis Statement: Palawan is the ideal tourist spot in the Philippines because of its one of a kind landmarks such as the Underground River and the St. Paul Subterranean river, beaches in El Nido and Langogan, and scuba diving experience in Puerto Princesa. APPROVED

https://www.detourista.com/guide/palawan-best-places/

TS 1: The majestic one of a kind Underground river and St. Paul Subterranean are part of the UNESCO world herritage. APPROVED
TS 2:  Palawan offers its tourists coastal beaches in El Nido and Langogan. APPROVED
TS 3: The unforgettable scuba diving experience in Puerto Princessa is indescribable. APPROVED

Hook: According to tourismprof.club, Palawan's gates were open and up to 1 billion people spent their vacation there.

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Thesis Statement: Boracay is a beautiful and relaxing tourist destination because of its blue and clear seas such as from, Bulabog beach and DIniwid beach road , delicious food like Mang Inasal and Smoked BBQ, and high quality services for the tourists. (Note: Specify the seas. White and soft sand are not seas.)

EDITED:

Boracay is a beautiful and relaxing tourist destination because of its blue and clear seas such as Bulabog beach and Diniwid Beach Road , delicious food like Mang Inasal and Smoked BBQ, and high quality services for the tourists. APPROVED

TS1- Boracay provides its tourists blue and clear seas such as Bulanog beach and Diniwid Beach Road. APPROVED

TS2- Secondly, Palawan not only has gorgeous beaches but, delicious food like Mang Inasal and Smoked BBQ. REVISE: CHECK THE CONCTRUCTION OF SENTENCE.

TS31- And finally, Palawan has nice and cozy hotels with very high quality services for the tourists. REVISE: CHECK THE CONCTRUCTION OF SENTENCE.

Hook- According to www.gopalawan.travel Palawan has many enjoyable amazing things to do (snorkling and etc.) and Palawan has amazing food that you cant compare to (Smoked BBQ and Mang Inasal , etc.)

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Thesis Statement: Boracay is one of the most visited tourist spots in the Philippines because of its clean and white sands, clear and blue beaches such as Puka Shell Beach and Bulabog Beach, and fun activities like parasailing and snorkeling. (APPROVED)

TS1: Boracay is famous for its bizarre clean and white sand.

APPROVED

TS2: Another reason is Boracay's phenomenal clear and blue beaches like Puka Beach and Bulabog Beach.

APPROVED

TS3: Lastly, Boracay is famous because of its marvelous fun activities like parasailing and snorkeling.

APPROVED

Hook: acording According to www.lonlyplanet.com, the party will go on in Boracay.

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STEP 1: Post your thesis statement and wait for teacher's approval. STEP 2: While waiting, research on the important details for your chosen tourist spot in the Philippines. Take note of the WEBSITE/S for your essay's reference/s. STEP 3: When you receive an approval, construct your topic sentences (1, 2, and 3) based on your thesis statement. Wait for teacher's approval again. Then, continue your research.

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STEP 1: Post your thesis statement and wait for teacher's approval. STEP 2: While waiting, research on the important details for your chosen tourist spot in the Philippines. Take note of the WEBSITE/S for your essay's reference/s. STEP 3: When you receive an approval, construct your topic sentences (1, 2, and 3) based on your thesis statement. Wait for teacher's approval again. Then, continue your research.

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The TITLE
>is creative and not a common one.
>has no quotation marks and is not underlined.

The INTRODUCTION
>has a creative hook.
>has a statement that connects the hook to the thesis statement.
>has the approved thesis statement.

The HOOK
>has a specific source if it is a quotation or statement.
examples:
According to touristspot.com, Palawan is _____.
Mother Delia once said that ____.
>is in 3rd POV unless it is a statement given by other person or a quotation. Then, provide the source.
>is CREATIVE and not just a simple statement or question. (Note: This is a challenge for everyone.)
>Avoid questions that are answerable by YES or NO.

The THESIS STATEMENT
>follows the correct format (PLACE + STAND (the best tourist spot in the Philippines) + 3 REASONS with specific examples.
>has no supporting details.
>uses only 3rd POV such as residents, people, they, their, them, it, and its.

EACH BODY PARAGRAPH
>has indention.
>has a topic sentence that is related to the thesis statement.
>has at least 4 supporting details that are directly related to the topic sentence.
>has a concluding sentence that summarizes the content of the paragraph
>has creative descriptions, sensory details or imageries to make a clear picture of the place/people/animal

The TOPIC SENTENCE
>is aligned with the approved thesis statement in terms of its content and order.
>has no supporting details.
>focuses only on the content of the ThS.
>is direct to the point and specific like the ThS.
>has 3rd POV only.

The CONCLUSION
>has a restated thesis statement. (Rephrase the ThS creatively. Add descriptions. Make your reader feel that your chosen spot is really the best for the tourists.)
>has no statement that is not supported in the essay.
>has a strong statement that will leave a strong impression about your chosen tourist spot.

The ESSAY
>has reliable references. (It could be printed.)
>is not plagiarized.
>has at least 5 descriptions, sensory details or imageries. (Kindly underline.)
>follows the 4Cs in writing: Content, Coherence, Correctness, and Clarity.

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>Your assignment is to construct the approved ThS, TS1, TS2, TS3 and Hook. Writing of your final essay should be done in school. Please be guided accordingly.

>You will be given the whole period on Tuesday to write your essay. Make sure to finish the introduction, body 1, body 2, and body 3.
>You will be given 10 minutes to finish the conclusion on the following meeting.

>Don't forget to print the sources. (ARIAL, 10)
>Also, kindly post here the sources.

>Please inform the others about this announcement.

Love,
MS. AGUSTIN :*

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WHITE - if the the ThS is not yet approved

PINK - if the ThS is approved already

YELLOW - if you are ready with your topic sentences

BLUE - if all the topic sentences are approved already and if you are ready with your HOOK

VIOLET: turn it violet if you're done.

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>Your assignment is to construct the approved ThS, TS1, TS2, TS3 and Hook. Writing of your final essay should be done in school. Please be guided accordingly.

>You will be given the whole period on Tuesday to write your essay. Make sure to finish the introduction, body 1, body 2, and body 3.
>You will be given 10 minutes to finish the conclusion on the following meeting.

>Don't forget to print the sources. (ARIAL, 10)
>Also, kindly post here the sources.

>Please inform the others about this announcement.

Love,
MS. AGUSTIN :*

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Boracay is the best tourist spot in the Philippines bacause it has (insert an adjective) beaches such as --- and ---, because of its white sand __________, and fun activities such as banana boat for adults and snorkeling for kids there is snorkeling.

Edited:
Boracay is one of the best tourist spots in the Philippines because of its inviting white sand, gigantic swimming pool, and fun activities such as banana boat riding for adults and snorkeling for kids. APPROVED

hook: ''Travel as much as you can as far as you can as long as you can lives not meant to be lived ''.
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REVISE: Provide the website.

ts1: Boracay has a wonderful and soft white sand. APPROVED

ts2:Boracay has a gigantic swimming pool some places has hotels with the gigantic pool such as Ambassador in Paradise and etc.
EDITED: Boracay has a gigantic swimming pool located at the Ambassador in Paradise. APPROVED

ts3: Boracay's beach has many activities so adults and children won't get bores such as banana boat riding for adults and snorkeling for kids. APPROVED

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Thesis Statement:   that cannot be seen anywhere else but in brilliant Bohol. (Note: Do not add supporting details.)

Edited: Bohol is definitely a must when travelling to the Philippines because it has a unique landmark which is the Chocolate Hills,  great beaches like  Panglao Beach and Balicasag coral reef, and the Philippine Tarsiers. (APPROVED)

Hook: "Travelling - it leaves you speechless, then turns you into a storyteller.",  Ibn Battuta once said.

TS1:  According to justonewayticket.com, the Chocolate Hills is the greatest pride of Bohol.
APPROVED

TS2: The Panglao beaches and the Balicasag Reef in Bohol should not be missed because of their calming and crystal blue waters, and the diversity of marine life.

REVISE: SPECIFY

TS 3: These adorable and unique Philippine tarsiers sure want to be visited but not touched.

APPROVED

References:
https://www.pinterest.co.uk/pin/408560997438072610/?lp=true

http://www.bohol-philippines.com/bohol-beach.html

https://www.infobohol.com/10-reasons-why-you-should-visit-bohol/

https://www.justonewayticket.com/2013/05/31/falling-in-love-wonderland-bohol-panglao-philippines/

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>Your assignment is to construct the approved ThS, TS1, TS2, TS3 and Hook. Writing of your final essay should be done in school. Please be guided accordingly.

>You will be given the whole period on Tuesday to write your essay. Make sure to finish the introduction, body 1, body 2, and body 3.
>You will be given 10 minutes to finish the conclusion on the following meeting.

>Don't forget to print the sources. (ARIAL, 10)
>Also, kindly post here the sources.

>Please inform the others about this announcement.

Love,
MS. AGUSTIN :*