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Have you ever tought about why poverty exists? Proverty is a global danger that humanity facing. There are individual and collectivist actions that causes poverty.

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Tuğçe your hook is great, it grabs the reader's attention. Background information are too general and I think you could give more information. In thesis statement you should be more spesific about effects of poverty and hunger. We need to know what you will talk about.

Ayça your hook is great and grabs the reader's attention. Also you can try to ask rhetorical question. Background information could be more spesific, you could add data. Also I think you shouldn't start the background information with "for example" it looks like supportive sentence. You used three topics in thesis statement but you should talk about what will you talk about. Are these effects or causes of extreme poverty?

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Did you know that 2 billion people still do not have access to safe, sufficient and nutritious food? Hunger is one of the main problems in today's world. According to the data, while hunger in the world was on the decline until 2015, it started to increase again in 2015. According to estimates, 8.9% of the world's population is struggling with hunger. While the problem of hunger in the world increases due to reasons economic crises, climate change and wars, it causes millions of people to die of hunger and to death from food insecurity.

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Duru, I liked your hook sentence and the reason of your topic, but you could make your sentence structure better. Also I couldn't get your last sentence, it looks complicated because of comma mistake.
Cansu, your hook sentence and content is great. But, you could mention that what will you type about your topic in your thesis statement.

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to tuğçe's paragraph:
her hook starts with "did you know..." and that arouse curiosity of readers. i liked it because this way is effective one to start a paragraph.

to ayça's paragraph:
her paragraph includes statistics that related with her topic. i appreciate her because this way is useful to corroborate the information.

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feedback from lalayn to ayça and memedan

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feedback from lalayn to ayça and memedan

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ayça:
The hook could be more interesting.
We cant eunderstand which of the reasons will you continue explaining in the next paragraph. You can point out which one. Its good that you gave examples, but you can add more background info.

memedan gold
Again, your hook is not interesting enough, but thats okay. Your background info is informative. Lastly, maybe you can provide more reasons at the end of the paragraph.

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cansu, started her paragraph with an interesting sentence. She used the question method and it looks good.

ayça, gave examples related to her topic. Also she expand the topic poverty this was great to read.

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What causes extreme poverty?

More than 700 million people is still live in poverty. Have you ever wondered why so many people are starving in the 21st century? More than 700 million people can not reach basic needs like education, health and clean water sources. Because of this 30 million children growing up poor in the richest countries.

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Feedback to Mustafa Ali and Lalin from Ali Kaan

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Feedback to Mustafa Ali and Lalin from Ali Kaan

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Mustafa Ali's introduction: Your cause and effect introduction paragraph was good enough but your thesis statment is not good. because its a normal sentence not a thesis statement.

Lalin's introduction: your hook is too long 7-8 word would be enough, and thesis statement is not a question you should rewrite it. but rest of your paragraph is good.

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Feedback to Mustafa Ali and Ali Kaan Okutan

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Feedback to Mustafa Ali and Ali Kaan Okutan

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Mustafa Ali
You should make your hook more interesting.  Also your thesis statement (which cannot be a question) is a question. If you fix them you are good.

Ali Kaan
Your hook has caught my attention. But your thesis statement is in question form. Additionally, you should use more academic language and review the use of conjunctions. However, the points you mentioned are good.

~Abdurrahman

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What are the effects of poverty and hunger?

Did you know how many people in the world live in extreme poverty? 11% of the population still live in extreme poverty. They are struggling with health, harbouring and educational needs problems. There are 2 major effects of poverty and hunger.

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What are the causes and effects of hunger?

Nearly 2 billion people don't have a access to regular food and because of that hunger people might die. One of the biggest reasons for hunger problem is poverty. But if we can solve poverty will hunger and too?

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Do you know why there is still extreme poverty in the world? Poverty is the biggest problem in the world. There are almost 35 milions of people that are dying or will die because of extreme poverty. Also, there are many reasons of poverty buy main causes are inequalities of income distribution, over population and over useage of sources and little or no access to livelihood or jobs. One of the reasons that should be focused on more is inequalities.

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What are the causes and effects of hunger?

Do you know that one child dies from hunger in every 10 seconds? So, hunger is a global danger. One of the reason of deaths is food shortages. Biggest effects of hunger are physical and mental health problems. Being sure is not possible about stopping food shortages would enough. Because other factors exits too. But, at least saying, doing that can reduce a major of hunger, is possible. Then, people face to face physical and mental health problems less.

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The percentage of people who still live in extreme poverty is 11% of the world population. The statistics show that extreme poverty is one of the major problems.  Social exclusion and unemployment are the main two reasons of for extreme poverty.

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One in nine people sleep hungry every day. According to The Food and Agriculture Organization of the United Nations report, about 10% of people facing hunger. There are many reasons why people are in this situation. Two main causes of hunger is war and poverty. Hunger is also leads consequences, such as people dying and diseases increasing.

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Did you know that %11 of the world is facing with extreme poverty? What is extreme poverty? the World Bank has defined extreme poverty as people living on less than $1.90 a day, measured using the international poverty line. Strict government pressures and anti-globalization actions are the main reasons of extreme poverty in the world.

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Due to the lack of adequate health conditions, many people die every day in the world. Diseases that are normally seen as simple in developed countries are fatal in areas where the necessary health conditions are not available. The reason for this is already inadequate conditions.

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Worldwide, 41 million people are starving and 600 million are at risk of starvation.  Hunger problem is one of the biggest global problem.  It is very pathetic that people are not able to meet their most basic nutritional needs. Governments have to start working about it.

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What are the causes and effects of hunger? /  Cenk Eren Açıkyer

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What are the causes and effects of hunger? /  Cenk Eren Açıkyer

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Did you know? 2 billion people in the world do not have regular access to safe, nutritious and sufficient food. Many adults and children die due to nutritional problems and unable to complete their physical development, there is no development because they are hungry. There are effects of the hunger.

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Effects of Extreme Poverty: Homelessness  (İmge Bulut)

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Effects of Extreme Poverty: Homelessness  (İmge Bulut)

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The homelessness is a serious problem in nearly every major city across the country.
According to the US Department of Housing and Urban Development, there are over
lots of people experiencing homelessness on any given night. It’s a difficult challenge to
tackle precisely because it is so multi-faceted, both in terms of its causes and its far-reaching
effects. Homelessness affects not only the people who must struggle to survive on the street,
but also the business owners or residents in the neighborhoods.

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More than 700 million people live in extreme poverty. For example, they are struggling with finding basic needs, education and sanitation due to poverty. Poverty can be examined as three topics: unemployment, social exclusion and high vulnerability.

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What are the causes and effects of hunger?

People are facing hunger in some places of the world. Nearly 41 million people are at risk of starvation in the world. One of the reasons for hunger is poverty and one of the effects of hunger is death. So if we end poverty do we stop the hunger problem?

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What are the causes and effects of hunger?

Did you know that every year nearly 13.7 million people die pecause of hunger. Hunger is one of the biggest problem of humanity. because of hunger even childrends are dying and we should stop it. one of the biggest reason of hunger is poverty. if we stop poverty is hunger will end? and without hunger world is better.