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Dear Lyone, you portfolio is very well structured with good use of images. In the last three reflections,    I would delve a bit deeper and provide more detail in your reflections and how certain experiences contributed to your understanding with a deeper analysis of your experiences. You have very good writing skills and your paragraphs flow very well. Keep up the good work.
Adrienne

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Hi Lyone,
I would like to start by telling you about your journal format, I
love the way you have divided your journal. Making the reader more interested to read through it.
1st Reflection
I totally agree with you  about your point of view towards the role of art in reflection. Specific information and interesting to read and think about. The fact that you have found research from different authors helps your research be strong and more reliable since not only have you found the point of view from one author but have made more research to see different perspectives.

2nd Reflection
The fact that photos are added to this part makes it more interesting to look at. Agree with you on the statement you added in your reflection, regarding the learning outcomes one could have when having an eportfolio. You have also added bullets to specify more on what that particular author said. Helps the reader to understand the discussion better.

3rd Reflection
A very sad experience. Unfortunately all of us will encounter many more of these upsetting situations.

Well done for your journal very interesting. Keep up your good work.

Amy

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Dear Lyone. Well done for your reflective writing and Merry Christmas

Reflection using Art

In this first reflective writing of reflection using art, the information provided is  relevant to the subject. The language used is clear and expressive, with the concepts explained accurately with good examples to support them. You made consistent use of appropriate clear language, with correct use of referencing. I do agree with the statement that you wrote that art is a form of expression from oneself and it leads a way to much deeper thoughts and feelings.

E-portoflio

In the second journal, you explained quite well how an eportfolio can be used for your own benefit, but you did not write how to maintain such an eportofio, except for the first picture provided.

Reflection

In the last journal, you described an experience, which can be stressful on any nurse. however you but you handled it really well. However, in the action plan I would have rather seen something that you could do in the future.

Well done :)

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Hi Lyone,

I would like to start off my comment by saying Happy Christmas & a Happy New Year to you and your family.

I truly enjoyed reading your Reflective Posts, you involved pictures and you have amazing writing skills.

1st Reflective Post: - The Role of Art in Reflection

This really was a great reflective post you provided a lot of reliable information and your opinion regarding the role of art in reflection. Also, your work is referenced correctly, clear and expressive language was used.

2nd Reflective Post: - The use of an ePortfolio

I would have like if you explained what an ePortfolio is in the introduction and discussed more on how it can be used for your own benefit. Otherwise I really liked how you distributed the paragraphs and the bullet points as this makes it easier to understand.

3rd Reflective Post: - Reflecting on Experience

This reflective post shows an excellent understanding of the underlying concepts, with connections to previous learning experience. Appropriate, clear and concise language, with correct use of referencing were used. Reflections are well distributed. In the action plan, I would have liked if you mentioned what would you do in the future if a similar event would happen.

Otherwise keep up the excellent work & Thumbs up 😊

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Dear Lyone. Well done for your reflective writing. I truly enjoyed reading your journal.

What is Reflective Writing?

In this first reflective writing, the information provided is quite relevant to the subject. The language used is clear and expressive, with the concepts explained accurately with good examples to support them. You made consistent use of appropriate clear language, with correct use of referencing.

In the second journal, there is no clear-cut distinction between (1) the importance of reflection and (2) the factors facilitating and hindering reflection. Given the two separate headings, one would have expected the two points to be treated separately. Despite such criss-crossing from one point to another, all important factors influencing the effectiveness of reflection have been included.

In the last journal, you described an experience, were it happens to us on a daily basis in the ward. At the time of the incident you were still a student and that might have hindered the lack of assertiveness. However, now as a qualified nurse, I hope that you have kept with the action plan and become more assertive to give the best care for the patient.

Keep up the good work 😊

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I would like to start by commenting on the way you have divided the sections for your journal. It makes the reader more interested to read it since it is divided into sections. For your 1st post I would like to comment about the explanatory video which helps us the readers understand more what a reflective process in reality is. While reading the 1st post I have realised that you have pointed out some specific words, my opinion would be to make them bold so when one is reading, one can understand your discussion and point out to those specific bold words you have addressed your discussion on. For example when you specified about "reflective writing aids in analysing, questioning and evaluating any experiences or situations one may have encountered so that new insights and perspectives can be developed". Commenting on the referencing part, in your clear and interesting discussion you should have added some references and research in the text to corroborate your discussion, this would have made your discussion more interesting and criticize other opinions on reflective writing.

On your 2nd post I need to comment about Covey’s model, very interesting and very nice to look at it makes your journal more interesting to read. The fact that you have also explained it in a brief way that one can understand. In your discussion I have realised that you added some referencing but I would recommend to also say in your discussion about what you think of what could hinder you or help you in your reflection process. Also in the first part from experience of working as a nurse do you find your own time to reflect and where is the place you prefer to reflect?

In your third 3rd post being the reflection part, the part where you quoted about what the nursing and midwifery 2015 state about the importance of our profession corresponds exactly to the discussion. Enjoyed reading your journal since it was interesting to read and very specific.

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Dear Lyone, well done on your reflective writings. They are very understandable and the paragraphs flow between one and the other...excellent writing skills :)

Your opinions are evident in the reflections, I would go a bit further and questions your own assumptions and try to find new perspectives of thinking, this will provide a broader aspect to your reflections.

You made very good use of referencing with sources that are varied and relevant to the respective reflection. Keep up the good work!

Adrienne

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Hi Lyone,

First of all, I wish you the best of luck and I really do hope we end up graduating all together!

I must admit that your reflections are clear, feelings are described, and expressive language was used, however personally I think that I would have liked to see more pictures and a more colourful journal. It is certain that colours can be very effective when learning and it functions as a powerful information channel to the human cognitive system.

When reading your first reflection; Writing in reflection; I liked the part where you
mentioned that reflection is mostly useful when dealing with a difficult or challenging
situation, I agree with this because as a matter of fact I see this as an opportunity for
us healthcare professionals to reflect more. In addition try to reference/cite these paragraphs The Importance of Reflective Writing & How to Achieve Good
Quality in Writing.

Your second reflection; Finding Time for Reflection shows a
good link to the underlying concept in particular when mentioning Stephen Covey’s
model.

For the last Reflection; Reflecting on our personal experience, I liked the part where you supported your conclusion with a phrase taken from the Nursing and Midwifery Council.

For the action plan besides being assertive, I would have
like if you mentioned what other skills do you need to develop to handle this situation better? For an example Confidence although the doctor did not greet you, I would still greet him with a good morning etc..

Otherwise keep up the good work looking forward to reading more reflections from you!