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put it in word

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BY LAMISHA 7A

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Peer mark my work Ayaan

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Grade:C-E

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Please peermark my work

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 Describe the perfect day. It was a chilly Saturday morning it was the day me and my family were going to Cadburry’s.I was so excited that i could barely sit.I was think of all fun that we would especially the rides.I have heard that they had amazing VR(virtual reality)rides. Also wanted to try a bit of their chocolates.We were in the car ready to go to Cadburry’s. While we were going me and my brothers started to think of scenes of Cadburry’s which we saw in google.We were both thinking of all the fun we would have in the chocolate factory.We both had a different idea for fun.All my brother thought about was stuffing chocolate down his throat. After that it was a long ride back home but all in all it was a great day.

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 Describe the perfect day. It was a chilly Saturday morning it was the day me and my family were going to Cadburry’s.I was so excited that i could barely sit.I was think of all fun that we would especially the rides.I have heard that they had amazing VR(virtual reality)rides. Also wanted to try a bit of their chocolates.We were in the car ready to go to Cadburry’s. While we were going me and my brothers started to think of scenes of Cadburry’s which we saw in google.We were both thinking of all the fun we would have in the chocolate factory.We both had a different idea for fun.All my brother thought about was stuffing chocolate down his throat. After that it was a long ride back home but all in all it was a great day.

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Ridhima Singh

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Peer marked by Fatima Kheiri 7A

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Peer Marked by Anne Marinette H. Sta.Ana 7B

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Peer Marked by Anne Marinette H. Sta.Ana 7B

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PM BY SHIFA 7B

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Peer marked by Zainab Zaheer 7b grade c-e

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Peer marked by Zainab Zaheer 7b grade c-e

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the second peer marked work with grade

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Peer marked by Lamisha 7a

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Peer marked again by Gabriel

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journal entry extended writing

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Peer if your reading you marked the wrong work , this is the completed first draft. Please mark.

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Use punctuation. Spellings are all correct

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Ridhima Singh 7A

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Miss Amanda I added a new paragraph

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Peer marked by Gabriel

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1. Add more paragraphs
2. Add more personification

I like the way you used lots of metaphors and similies and I loved the way you added your imagination into the writing

PM : Aymen Asad

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Strength: you describe things nicely and you also have a good expression.

Target: try to add more details on your best day and try adding more of the experience you had.

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Marked by Xylene 7A

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Grade:A-E

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Strength: You have very well, written the punctuations in the journal, and it definitely fits in really well.

Targets: The idea of the journal is more of a single event, so I would  say that you should’ve tried to write in a more detailed manner

2nd Target: You should use more adjectives, and great vocabulary, because that makes a journal very understandable.
Grade: C-D

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edited ritviks work peer marked by kashish

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1-peer marking 1st draft
marked by keith 7a
weekness
bad grammer
strengths
you have a lot of ideas

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Peer marked by Fatima Kheiri 7A

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TARGET: Add on your grammmar
STRENGTH:: good use of past link

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From :P.M-Ayaan Farooqi 7-B
ON:20/04/20-

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miss the peer marked work
-kehan

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journal writing 1 draft
objective to further enhance journal writing skills
outcome:students will be able to
1. explore the writing techniques
2. demonstrate the skills learnt
3. evaluate and comments on the photo

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Need to focus on figurative speech
focus on effective vocabulary
I liked the opening paragraph by starting it by beautiful day
Grade - CE
Peer Mark- Ahmed Eid

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On the thrid of January , I went to one of my best friends house her name is Noor she is in my class . It was a special day. My and some more of our friends were there . We really enjoyed the day ,I wish that it happen again.
My, kidica,moesha,jouri and some other friends were there first we went to her house ,we spent some time in her house then we went to the swimming pool we were there for like four hours we really enjoyed it. After we went out the pool everyone took a shower we went to eat some pizza then we went to the Central Park,we played a lot . The last thing we did is that we went back to her house we were watching a movie it was like a movie night. I really enjoyed this day