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Sentence 12 needs some help. Rewrite sentence 12 to make it clearer.

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Write a detail sentence to go after sentence 25 that will help the reader understand how the race ended.

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Things get a little choppy between paragraphs 4 and 5. Rewrite sentence 28 to help things flow better.

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This paper just kind of... ends. Write a better conclusion for this paper. (1-2 sentences)

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Realizing that she hadn’t recovered from her previous race her pace slowed to a jog.

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Realizing she haven't recovered since the last run she jogged.

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Realizing that she hadn't recovered from her previous race she pace slowed to a jog.

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The media was eating this story up asking for interviews and statements!

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Meghan let McMath cross the finish line first.

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Vogel made Mcmath finish the race first, and then Vogel finish the race.

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Realizing that she hadnt recovered from her previous race her pace was slowed to jog

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The media was overflowing with viewers.

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Meghan Vogel was an amazing athlete who displays great sportsmanship and is a true hero.

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Meghan Vogel was honored for being a amazing athlete and good sportsmen ship.

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Vogel became a hero because she help Mcmath so the media want to know how she feel.

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She crossed the line frist and they was trying to defend that about her race.

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Meghan Vogel got the award because she help Arden when she got a cramp. She deserves the award for kindness.

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Realize that she hasn't recovered from her lastest race

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Realizing that’s haven’t recovered from her pervious race, her pace slowed to a jog.

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Jay_     The thesis statement have less sentences in the paragraph

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Jay_     The thesis statement have less sentences in the paragraph

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McMath crossed the line first.

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The media was chewing up the story with many viewers

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She didn't recover from her last jog

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She crossed the line first but she got defended when the race was over

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The media was questioning and on her about the time she had

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Meghan Vogel got the award because she helped Arden when she got camp she deserves the kindness award

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the media was overflowing with views.