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Write a story of about 125 words on  ONE of the following options.

an exciting (sports) event that you saw

a time you got lost or had a problem travelling

a time you (nearly) missed  something important

Try to use varied linkers and tenses  (simple past, past conmtinuous, past perfect) and include the following information

SETTING: When? Where? Who with?

BODY; What happened ? Why? How did you feel?

ENDING What happened in the end?

Please,

check the number of words with the programme wordcounter

don't forget to write your name, surname and group code

DEADLINE- Tuesday - December 5th 14pm

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Two years ago I had an epic night in Menorca. My friend Tura and I went to Menorca on Summer 2022 TO SPEND , we spent five days in ONthe island.

UNLUCKILY Tura and I were without/ WE HADN'T BOOKED a place to sleep. When we were travelLing TO the north, we spent one night at ON the beach. We had a very bad night because the weather was so cold.

Finally after this THAT day, we went to the airport to TAKE caught the fly to return THE RETURN FLIGHT to Barcelona. But when we arrived the flight was cancelLed. Despite this the airline gave us a night at the Cala Galdana Hotel and the money THAT we HAD spent on the flight.

We couldn't belive where we were sleeping. After all we had had very bad nights in the island. But the last night was incredible. In the end we came back to Barcelona with an expirence EXPEPERIENCE to explain/TELL and a travel TRIP paid by Vueling.

Daniel DT11.3023

text, on the whole, quite well organized

there are varied tenses, although there are more possibilities for past perfect. Some connectors, as well

occasional problems on the choice of vocabulary (trip/travel), inficnitives >(catch-cuahgt) and other

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THIS HAPPENED TO ME ON MY FRIST FLIGHT TO IZMIR, A SMALL TOEN ON THE WEST COAST OF TURKEY TO SEE/ TAKE PART IN A SPORTS COMPETITION

The event that i i would to tell is my first flight . The sport event was in Turkey more precisely in Izmir City the small town in the west coast.

The trip was starting well from Lamezia Terme to Rome, the flight was in ON time and the weather was very good. The problem was starting in Rome here STARTED IN ROME WHEN we had to take a second flight to Izmir, . aAll flights was delay, ERE DELAYED, AND the airport looked like a battlefield: some people were lying on the floor, other some people was WERE discussing ARGUIUNG with the airport workerS because no one explainED what WAS really happening or which was the cause of the delay, children was crying and all airlines lineS had collapseD.

After 6 hours we finally leave LEFT and WE arrived 9 hours late. Fortunately we were a day early BEFORE the start of the competition. I never had NEVER lived an experience like that. i I was very disappointed and tired, IN FACT i I just needed to rest for the next day when i I would have to fight.

Ines Scumace

The text is not organized in 3 praragraphs, so it's difficult to read. There's an excessive numvber oF words 165 FROM TRASLATING DIRECTLY FROM L1

tenses are varied and in general, but the connection singualr, plural is not always correct.

there aren't many connectors between sentences to make the reading fluent

Remember:

The pronoun "I" is always written in Capital letter

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In the end 2020 my family and I were going on holiday to Malaga by plane to celebrate New Year. SOME FRIENDS HAD RECOMMENDED THE VITY BECAUSE THERE ARE BEAUTIFUL MONUMENTS, GOOD MUSEUMS AND THE WEATHER IS USUALLY GOOD,

We had booked an apartment in Malaga. However, But when we went to the apartment, the apartment IT was taken. UNLUCKILY, The owner's phone was not available so we needed to look for anoder apartment. It was not easy because there were a lot tourists.

Finally we took the siut A SUITE in a hotel but the price was extremely expensive. Our mood was spoiled. We reported abOut these THIS case AND IN THE end the owner was fined.

Liudmila 11.30DT

The text on the whole is organized and varied but it needs more connectors to make it more fluent.

There are vaiety of tenses and feelings

It's a bit short, so I have added a few ideas

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A ONE summer IN JULY seven years ago I travelLed with my husband to Mexico in July, .

I was very nervous because the passengers LUGGAGE control could ask me to open my suitcase at random. I was afraid, so I was sweating and warming because I had set PACKED a lot of clothes in my suitcase and it would be very difficult TO closed again. I wasn’t afraid OF FLYING to fly, I wasn’t scared OF turbulance either but the police make MADE me nervous because usually they are very unfriendly and talk to us badly/RUDELY.

Finally everything was fine and I could be fly quiet/CALM and relaxed,. lLuckily the weather was good and I enjoyed my trip and anything NOTHING bad happened.

Susi B1 11:30DT

text quite structures and fluent. However, I grouped ideas differently and I've separated some long sentences

There's some varierty of tenses, but not always correct and there's no past perfect

Occasinal mistakes but varied language of feelings

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I 'VE likeD to fly FLYING since I was child because my father love planes and he told me his experiences with planes/ HE USED TO TELL ME HIS EXPERIENCES WITH PLANES WHEN I WAS A CHILD.

A Few years ago, I took the opportunity to fly with a helicopter. It was the first time experience with this unsual means of transport and I was excited!!

I met with Maria. She's WHO IS a good pilot because she has flewn lots of hours during her professional career.We flew from Barcelona to mountains of PYRENEES Pirineus. At the beginning of flight was incredible. Suddenly the sky started to get dark because we had been WERE near of PirineusPYRENEES . It ALSO started raining HEAVILY hardly. Water entered inside the helicopter because A window had been broken. For a moment I thought it was a nightmare.

Despite this, we arrived well in Barcelona and this experience hasn't changed my desire to fly again by helicopter.

Natalia Freitas. DT11.30

The text is varied and well structured

Variety of tenses and vocabulary describig feelings and the weather.

Be careful with the number of words

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THIS HAPPENED 3 years ago WHEN I was traveling from Barcelona to Palermo. I traveLled/WAS TRAVELLING with Moni, a woman who I was dating at the/THAT time.

It was stressful because we had short DIDN'T HAVE MUCH time to get to the airport, and then when we arrived to check in the baggage I forgot to take it out my personal belongings of my suitcase.

WHEN we arrived to AT the airport in Palermo and we were waiting a lot of WAITED FOR A LONG time to get my baggage but it never arrived. I lost my suitcase and I felt very disappointed because I hadn't ANY clothes to ware. But mainly it was terrible because I had lost my favorite camera.

Finally it was a good trip where I had learned that sometimes we need to travel lighter. And that the best photos are the ones you don't take.

Roman LE

11.30DT

Text well structured and quite fluent. It just needs a better introoduction

use of tenses and vocabulary is rich and varied

occasional mistake

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My history happened when I was 19 years old. At that time I was a rugby player in a very good team and we won a lot of games, for that reason we had classified to the National rugby cup.

All my teammates and I were so excited when we arrived there but we realized that all the teams were very good with very big players. We won the first match but we lost the second one.

Finally, at during the halftime of our second match the things turned a little bit more aggressive and the ambulance came at to the field like ABOUT 4 times. One of my teammates had broken his leg and the other had hurt in the back. It was an exciting and hard game.

Adria Torrero DT11.30

Text well developed and structured

varied tenses and feelings

Good autocorrection

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This is my story...... This happened six years ago when I was going by plane to San Francisco with my husband. Three days before I had bought a new trolley that I dreamed of having because my older trolLey had problems with the zip. I was very anxious because it was my first trip in TO the United States.

When we arrived at the airport the flight was On time. UNLUCKILY, three hours later, we were having problems with serious turbulence INSIDE THE PLANE.

Finally, after having a bad flight I took my luggage, I realized it was broken in the corner and had a lot of damage/IT WAS REALLY DAMAGED. At this THAT moment I decided that I would never spend SO much money again for ON a trolley.

Aina Bosch 11.30 Dt

Remember that word order in English is very strict: Subject + verb + complement

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This happened when I went to Guatemala . IT was the first time that I arrived a I TRAVELLED BY plane .

I was nervous, BECAUSE the people had told me that I should HAD TO be around two hours before AT THE AIRPORT, but I was four HOURS IN ADVANCE. , While I was meeting WAITING the airport I saw a cafe and I sat to take a coffee. iIt was the most expensive coffee that I HAD EVER TAKEN have took! SUDDENLY,I realized that I didn't have my passport, I looked for IT , but I couldn't FIND found it.

I called my mom, I had time so someone could TAKE IT TO THE AIRPORT carried me, but my mom said it wasn't anywhere. I was stressed, I looked for again and surprise! it had been in my jeans all the time.

Now it's a funny experience.

Scarteth 9 DT

Text quite well structured, although some sentences are a bit long and ohters need better connectors.

varied tenses but no always correct with imprtant errors (could found, have took) and vocabulary choice not always correct (carry me)

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Seventeen years ago I had a big problem in Sevilla. I remember that my mother and I were in the airport. We were waiting TO BOARD THE FLIGHT to return to Barcelona, but the weather was horrible: it was raining a lot with thunder and lightning and very strong wind.

I thought IT would be imposible TO FLY AND, just at the moment I heard that all the flights were cancelLed.That day was the first that my Mmother traveled by plane. I could see the fear on her face, AND I felt very bad/ SAD.

Three hours later the weather was worse, I though about changing the plane for the train, but these were also cancelLed.

Finally 10 hours later we were able to catch the flight and we arrived in Barcelona SAFELY.

Fina Beltran 9DT

Text well organized and fluent

Tenses and weather description and feelings is varied , although the word "bad" is a bit basic.

Good autocorrection

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Last summer , in August, I was planning fly to Vigo ON MONDAY EVENING one Monday in the evening. The weekend before I had arrived from Lyon ON Saturday night after a lot of problems , so I was very stressed. When I had arrived to AT the airport , after checking and watching the board door on the screen, I sat for waiting the TO board. The times passed and AFTER SOME TIME I didn't see anyone at the queue. I thought something wrong HAD has HAPPENED passed. I realized I was waiting on BY the mistake WRONG door and my fly had taken off with my baggage.

The rest of the evening I spent the time at the various windows officeS for information. Luckily, I could pay FOR a traveler's check A NEW TICKET for the next day.

Finally, when I arrived to IN Vigo , I asked for my baggage and the next day I must HAD to wait in the house a lot of times FOR A LONG TIME until one employee brought it to me.

M. Esther Rodríguez

9DT

Text well structured, although sometimes sentences are a bit long

Varied conjugation with occasional problems

Tendency to translation at times. Remember word order is Subject + verb + complements

Good autocorrection

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My story happened when I was 16 years old. I travelLed /WAS TRAVELLING alone to Manchester to study English for a month.

When I got off the plane, I took de bus to go to my students resident. I got on the bus and left my backpack with all my money and my laptop on top.

I was distracted whatching the city from the window. So, the driver called my bus stop for ON the speaker and I got off the bus quickly to take the suitcase that I had left in the trunk. Suddenly, the bus started TO LEAVE and I realized that I had forgotten my backpack inside the bus.

Quickly, I called the bus company and they told me that the next bus stop was the last stop. I started running very fast with my suitcase until I found the bus at the last stop.

Finally, I recovered my backpack because the bus HAD was stopped for a long time. I was very happy but very tired!

Sergio Sendra 9DT

Text well structured and fluent

Varied tenses and description of actions and feelings

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Last summer I went with my family to Tenerife. When we came back to Barcelona, at the airport, we had to LEAVE the bags in the control AREA and some people put it THEM on the plane. Everything was very well, we had much A LOT OF time before WE took the plane. Finally, we had to get on board and we sit SAT on our seats.

Then, at time, we arrived at El Prat and we disembarkED. When we went to take the bags, all our bags were there except mine. At that moment I was very nervous because in the bag there were much MANY things: my clothes, my sneakers...

It was 1:00 a.m. and my mother's phone rang, it was the customer service of Vueling who told us that the bag was in Tenerife and IT WOULD RETURN at the next flight returned to Barcelona ON THE NEXT FLIGHT

Ariadna Lopez 9DT

text well organized and fluent

varied tenses, but sometimes conjufgation is in present

Vareid vocabulary of feelings and describing action

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This is happened when I was studying third year of high school. The teacher of technology had proposed/ SUGGESTED a travel TRIP to Toulouse .I PREPAPERD was preparing all of the document that was WERE necessary.

The day was arrived. The day when we went ON THE DAY OF THE TRIP I did not find my passport, and I was looking for my passport that morning. But the hour of the travel TIME OF OUR TRIP arrived, I din not found DIDN'T FIND it. I went to high school to took LOOK FOR a teacher AND EXPLAIN what happened. They responded/SAID THAT if I did not have a passport, the travel will TRIP WOULD be impossible. So I could not go to TOULOUSSE a travel. I felt sad because I HAD SPENT was spending a lot of time to preparING THE documents.

In the end I went back to home and I found where was my passport WAS AND I COULD JOIN MY CLASS ON THAT FANTASTIC TRIP

YuFei Zhang 9DT

Tetx well strucutured but not always fluent because of the mistakes.

Conjugation is varied but not alwyas correct, with important mistakes (didn't found) so the reader get a bit lost

Rmember word order is Subject + verb + complement

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My first trip I was doing after the COVID was to Friburg, on summer 2021. I traveLled by plane alone and I had to meet some friends in this German city. The trip had been well, but the problemS appeared when I arrived at the airport.

It was AT night and aren’t THER WEREN'T ANY workers at the airport For information for tourist. I needed some information because THERE WERE TWO EXISTS AT the airport had been two exits and I didn’t know what WHICH of these exits WAS THE CORRECT ONEwere correct for me.

The question was that the airport had one exit to Germany and one exit to Swiss. I had to leave for Germany, which here it was where my friends were waiting for me, and I left for SWTIZERLAND Swiss.

I needed to ENTER entry to airport again and this wasn’t easy, BECAUSE it had WAS forbidden to enter through the exit doors. Finally, I could enter THE BUILDING , and I LEAVE left to Germany.

Isabel Muntané

11:30DT

Text quite well organized and structured

There is variety of tenses, and some connectors

There are occasional problems with the order of elemnts in a sentences and the use of relative sentneces

There's a tendency to reapeat concpets and words, which leads to an excessive and unnecesary number of words.

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Friburg ( Fribôrg en arpità, Fribourg en francès, Freiburg o Freiburg im Üechtland en alemany) és una ciutat suïssa, capital del cantó de Friburg a l'oest del país. És en un meandre del riu Sarine. Friburg té una població de 32.000 habitants (94.867 amb l'aglomeració urbana) i és una ciutat bàsicament francòfona i de tradició catòlica. La ciutat va ser fundada pel duc Berthold IV de Zähringen el 1157 i es va integrar a la confederació suïssa el 1481. La ciutat antiga és un dels notable exemple d'arquitectura medieval a Europa. És un punt de pas a la ruta Lausana - Berna. La seva universitat que funciona des del 1889 acull uns 10.000 estudiants. L'ensenyament es dona en francès i en alemany.

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Three years ago I was at the airport with my parents and two friends because we were planning to go to Mallorca, but we had a problem and we missed the flight.

To arrive to the airport we had to take the tube, but we had a problem because the tube stopped working so we had to wait. Two hours later we arrived to AT the airport and we saw at ON the screen that the flight HAD LEFT was go. In AT that moment we felt bad angry with the tube because of that problem so we asked to the staff for a solution.

In the end we have WERE lucky because the staff told us there were free sits SEATS for the next flight but we had to pay 100 euros, .fFinally we felt happy AND RELAXED.
Maria Pallicer

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Text fluent and correct with occacionla mistake

Varied use of tenses and feelings

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Last summer, I went to Lituania because I had a performance with my theater company.

We took a lot of planes because it's a physical theatre company and we went around the wold. Why I'm AM I telling you this? Because, normally, we meEt at the airport with just LITTLE time.

This THAT morning, I had met with some colleagueS in Sants station BECAUSE we had to take a train TOGETHER. When we WERE IN THE PLATFORM stayed in the rail train we saw THAT the train arrived WOULD ARRIVE late.

At that moment, some colleagueS were feeling really nervous but we were trying to keep calm.

After,LATER, we went to speack with information service and he said TOLD us that we has worred DIDN'T HAVE TO WORRY because the train arrived/ WOULD ARRIVE immediatly.

Finally, we came back to train PLATFORM tracks and we could see how the train came in.

Xavier Palomino 9DT

Tetx well structured and quite fluent, but some errors make the reader get lost

Varied tenses and description althouhg not walwyas correct

Good autocorrection

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I am going to write about a problem travelling. Five years ago we wanted to travel from Barcelona to Beirut . , wWe were waiting in the airport for our flight ,AND everything it was ok . We EVEN boarded at ferfect ON time . After that we had flown for an hour , suddenly something bad had happened on the plane: the flight attendants began to working quikly and spoke to the passengers to calm them down . tThen the captain told us that there is WAS a problem in the plane , and we must lHAD TO land at the nearest airport , so after half an hour the plane landed at Rome airport safely.

Finally we spent the night in the hotel near the airport and the next day we had flought FLEW to Bierut and landed very happy and safetly.

Yamam ndrous 9DT

Tetx welll strucutured and quite fluent, but some sentences tend to be long

Varied tenses, although not always correct and quite correct on the whole

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Last summer I went to Mallorca with a friend to visit another friend who was there with her family. We had planned to stay there 4 days in Mallorca, but we lost MISSED the boat to Mallorca.

It was at night AND we had the boat THE BOAT WAS LEAVING at 22 o'clock. The problem was that the port of Barcelona is very large, and there are three terminals, and we went to the wrong terminal. When we realized OF OUR MISTAKE that we ran with the suitcases through the port. We EVEN took a taxi, but likewise WHEN went we arrived AT THE RIGHT TERMINAL it was too late.

We felt very angry, but the company could change the tickets in the AT THAT moment to the next boat to Mallorca, without paying anything else. It was fortunate, we only lost one day.

Eulàlia Barrera B19DT

text well strucutred but not alwyas fluent because of the msitakes

varied tenses and vocabulary, with occasional mistakes

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The first weekend of September I travelled with my partner to Menorca and we spent two days there.

When we arrived at the airport at 22pm to come back to Barcelona, we saw on the screen that the flisght had been delayed but WE didn't know for how long. The reason for the delay was the weather was bad, there was a lot of wind and A storm. I was stressed because I worked the next day very early and I needed TO sleep. And we were very tired.

In the end, we could catch the flight at 3am and finally I arrived at home at 5:30am and I didn't sleep anything because I started work at 7am. It was my worst day at work I don't recomMend this experience.

Alba T. 9DT

text well structured and fluent

varied tenses and vocabulary, and correct

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Three years ago, I was in 3RD OF eso. One day, I was very happy because my parents they HAD bought me my first mobile phone.

It was Wednesday, and I OVERSLEPT fell slepped. At 9 o’clock my mother came to my room and she wake WOKE me up and I left to school very fast.

When I arrived, I crossed the street in red. In this AT THAT moment, there were a lot of cars and all of my material of school they fell out of my backpack. Then, all of the cars they took me? (sorry I don't understnad) because It was in red. And I had to pick it all up, I thought they were going to die KILL me.

Finally, I arrived at school very late and very scared.

Later, at playground time, I realized I didn’t HAVE my mobile phone, it had been stolen. I will always remember this THAT day.

Irene Domenech 9DT

Text quite well stuctured but not alwyas correct, so it's difficult to read at times

be careful with double subjects : My parents they

tenses are varied bUt not always correct, with important mistakes (sleepped). Varied feelings and descrition of action, again occasionally with problems

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This last summer I travelLed with my boyfriend and two close friends to Italy. We are WERE in Palermo and we needED to take a boat to Filicudi, an island near Sicily. Once we are WERE at the port, the company said to us that all boats are WERE cancelled until next day, because of bad weather conditions.

After all, we are WERE In Palermo, with our luggage and no hotel room reservation to stay and TO SPEND an extra night IN on the city. But we had a producer on the team and she found a room in a hotel near the port.

With the extra time we decided to visit some monuments and museums that we hadn't HAD time to visit the day before.

Next day WHEN we woke up THE WEATHER WAS calm and sunny and we can COULD finally take the boat.

Maria Campañá 9DT

Text well strucutred but difficult to read because of the mistakes

Tenses are mixed present and past so the reader gerts lost. things get better at the end although sometimes the subject of the sentence is missing

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Last summer, specifically at the end of August, I went to WITH my best friend to Rome because we really like the artISTIC monuments there.

The first way we don-t DIDN'T have any problemS to travel. We arriveD more before the time and all WAS excelLent.

The return trip WAS quite the opposite. We arrived 20 minutEs before and we GOT lost for AT the airport. We were in a hurry and we sadness WERE SAD because tomorrow THE FOLLOWING DAY we will WERE GOING TO have an important examen and we lost the we missed the flight. We had to buy another ticket and it cost us twice as much.

But finally, we arriveD at IN Barcelona, and OUR own parents we WERE waiting at the airport TO PICK US UP.

Aina Juan Bartroli 9DT

text difficult to follow cecuas eof the mistakes

Tenses are not under control: conjugation is not complete (parents waiting) or mixes present and past, or sentences don't have a verb (we sadness)

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One day, when I was A teenager I had to travel by plain along PLANE ALONE. I was in north Germany, the weather was very bad and I arrived at Frankfurt airpoRt late.

The airport was IN COMPLETE CHAOS a perfect kaos.BECAUSE all the flights were/HAD BEEN cancelLed.

I was frightened , I was along ALONE and there were a lot of difFerents people and I didn´t know ANYBODY nobody.

It thought that I had to slepp SLEEP at the airport, because all the plays PLANES were delated DELAYED or canceled.

After a few hours the weather was changed. They airport recopier the normal traffic. (Sorry, i don't understand)

I saw that my fight was DELAYED delated, AND I thought that PERHAPS I could fly. I felt better and ALTHOUGH I had to wait four hours more.

FINALLY I arrived at the BCN-airport at night. Nobody was waiting for me, but I was at home.

Lali Coll 9DT

1. The text is difficult to read because of spelling problems and other mistakes: you are using the owrd theatre play to talk about the means of tranport "plane"

2. The text is quite organized but it needs more connectors: finally, then , later.