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Fab research, continue to add and expand as you progress. You have a clear direction as to where you want your film to go which is great! Brilliant secondary research, lots of detail, maybe add more to your primary such as costume and props :)

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Solid idea with a lot of potential to be great and potentially even be sold to Doncaster's tourism board. As there's no plot your main focus needs to be on cinematography and editing. Sources for the former include Black Panther DP Rachel Morrison and The Good, the Bad and the Ugly DP Tonino Delli Colli, while a great example of the latter is the late, great Peter E. Berger.

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Clear structured site. Your idea sounds interesting and different from everyone else's making it interesting to look at once it is done.

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Great work Brian. Have you looked at other videos which are promoting a place. I recommend watching videos for cities as they are often the most professional.

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I'd recommend doing some more secondary research but the overall idea seems fine.

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Your idea to do an advert sounds good, you should probably add more to your research

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Your project could be very visually appealing, could do some more secondary research on different adverts that already exist.

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just need to keep going great so far. :)

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Good clear structured website, you know exactly how your ideas is going and how you want it to look. For research, I'd recommend looking at the film If I stay, may help with your flashback sequences.

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Great work. I will recommend looking into movies that focus on loss.

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i love how well you explained your project as it tackles a serious subject in a serious manner

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Fascinating and diverse range of initial ideas. You backed up your choice of final five and final three ideas, as well as your actual chosen project very well with primary research conducted through interviews.

You've also shown a great range of secondary research from diverse sources to develop your idea. Further watching could involve Pleasantville. As well as this, your research into grief and depression has been thorough already but you could look at the work of Carl Jung.

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Your concept is great and the initial research you have shown is great and very detailed, I would say to do some more development into the secondary research.

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"I understand what's it like to work all week and on Friday night just want to go and leave your brain at the door, buy some popcorn and be thrilled by something"... .

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very clear structure. well presented. need to film ASAP.

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Your idea sounds really good, it'll be good to watch the short film

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Smashed it bro,  nothing to say other than that!

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Fab idea and clear narrative! I love where this is going with your project! Get more research!!!!! Primary use your questionnaire and analyse what your findings are..... Secondary look up some illnesses and write about them and how you want to take that over to your characters... How will they portray this? :)

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Fab site, great idea from what I can see. You have a clear direction and know what you want to do which is great! Keep adding to your research and include other places you might have researched such as Sheffield or York. And answer the question why Doncaster? :)

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Great site and layout is clear, fab research both primary and secondary , should add some more as you never stop gaining ideas from different things and sources. :)

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Great ideas and fab research so far, keep it up and include loads more for you secondary such as emotion which women may carry along with the strength and ability. :)

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Fab research, continue to add and expand as you progress. You have a clear direction as to where you want your film to go which is great! Brilliant secondary research, lots of detail, maybe add more to your primary such as costume and props :)

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Amazing detail, great research so far even if it isn't relevant to your project specifically, like it's inspired you, keep it in and waffle on as much as you like :)

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Great choice and interesting topic! Fab research, but you could look more into the creators of the films and the genre rather than focusing on directors. Expand on your final idea and why you have chose that one :)

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Great explanations, you've chosen something that interests you. A lot of research has been included. I'm pleased it is a psychological thriller as I love this genre as well as it will be a challenge for you! :)

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Great start! Write about your primary research? Your questionnaire. Analyse scenes in films what relate to your project for your secondary research. And include creators of the films as well as why they inspire you :)

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Great idea and structure I like that you have clear direction in where your story is going! You could include emails/ vlogs from fashion/ music departments. Include your audition tapes and state why you have chosen the characters for each actor. Think about and analyse your responses, from your questionnaire and other sources. And lastly how have other films/ short films inspired your idea? :)

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Amazing so far, your primary research needs to be more of a focus and showing your development! You would benefit from reflecting along the way too. :)

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You are going for something that interests you! Personal opinion is great in this industry! Fab research :)

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Amazing so far, brilliant research and great final idea. You have a clear direction and structure and that is excellent! Very well done :)

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Your idea is solid and really good, just improve with your research and go into more detail. And concentrate on your character development.

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i like turtles

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Your basic story concept is very powerful, but as Ollie said it needs compressed down into a better structure. There are various ways you could do this such as cutting out the fight altogether, cutting out the stuff surrounding the fight or intercutting the match with the plot points before and after it.

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Smashed it, think you should look into Ronda rousey. gives you an insight into a failing fighting carer

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i like the idea of a female boxer as that's not shown in many films nowadays i recommend checking out GirlFight 2000

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The research you have completed so far is good especially the color grading you have looked at
One of the few things you can dramatically improve on is the plot of your film, you just got to plan out the beginning, middle and end to be able to have a good structure for the audience to be able to understand your film.
Another thing you can improve on is by simplify the work by changing the location to somewhere you're more familiar with.

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I think your idea has potential to be a really powerful story, I would recommend spreading more time developing the script

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Katie Taylor

structure idea:
start with her in the Gym or training are before a big fight for on of the belts in her division (audience does not know that the fight is a belt match, allowing them to assume she isn't any good at boxing based on what the coach says).
coach "you need to win the fight, otherwise this is the end of your career in boxing"
as she is getting her self ready to fight she self reflects on everything in her life and in her past such as being bullied and the pressure put on her by her parents etc. this shows all the character development that you want to show.
the end will be the commentator saying that it is an important match and that she needs the win otherwise its the end of her career but she hasn't lost a fight yet.
the means she isn't the underdog winning but the audience assumed she was but have now got the full story.
if she wins or loses is up to you.

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Variety of genres a lot of short films with an MV and a couple of docs which is good to see you have thought of a range.  Final idea is a short film called Rose - aiming to challenge representation of female boxers.
Done focus groups and surveys which is good to see
Lighting rig
Primary suggestions
Props
Costumes
Locations
Budget
Practice colour grading
Blocking rehearsals

Secondary suggestions
Make sure you are analysing mess en scene
How are you looking at cinematography and applying it to your style ?

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Your idea sounds interesting, I reckon it will be good to watch, you should watch a new film that's come out called fighting with my family (about a girl who wants to go into WWE)

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You clearly know exactly where your idea is going and have a good structured site.
Focus a lot on your research and I will help you keep track with your reflection because I'm nice like that. Overall really good.

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You have structured it really well and gone into detail with your research which is great.
I also liked that you changed your idea due to the feedback you received on the questionnaire which shows that you took other people opinions in mind with your FMP.
I don't really think you have any aspects to improve on as its looks perfect in my eyes.

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The idea is really good, i like the story of that there is a secret brother. i also think you should watch breaking bad as you could take some inspiration from that with the whole family matter

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Your idea is very solid and you've researched a wide range of sources within the genre, however you could benefit from looking at how other genres have handled crime stories within their narratives, such as Sci-Fi and Fantasy. As well as this, your research is entirely story based and I recommend that you take a look at some visual sources to get ideas from your cinematography.

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I really like your idea and think you could go a lot of different directions with it. I like what you've decided to look at for research, especially Line of Duty. I feel like it will give you a lot of inspiration for your project. Along with Line of Duty, I would also suggest looking at some parts of Bodyguard as you can look more at Jed's writing and how he creates intense scenes and plot twists (and I'm not just saying that because I love Richard)

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Good range of film ideas of varying genres and concepts which is good to see. Final idea is to create a short crime genre 15-20 minutes audiences is 15 and above called assigned.
Good initial research not just looking at the inspiration for the one idea but for all three-  lots a text I recommend you also throw some visuals in to help with breaking up text.
Primary research
Survey feedback - try to introduce what your survey is wanting to achieve at the beginning - why have you selected the questions and what do you predict they would answer ? Then compare the questions results are they similar or not to your predicted answers. What does this mean for your project? what are you going to do next?

Primary suggestions
Props
Costumes
Locations
Scene set ups/blocking/rehearsals

Secondary research suggestions
Watch some further tv / film shows analyse mese  en scene
Cinematography
Costumes
Pacing
Narrative 3 act paradigm

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I thought you have a very unique idea with lots of style, you could look into breaking bad for props and costumes for secondary research

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i don't have that much feeback as the idea sounded good. Check out some crime dramas on netflix preferably on cop dramas

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contact different departments to see if they are willing to help. (counts as primary research)

what we doing Geoff!?

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Your idea sounds really good and interesting, I'm looking forward to seeing it

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Good initial ideas , good range of genres and subtexts  and not on the same genre showing you have not set on one idea from the beginning.  Final idea is to create a trailer for a dystopian future film idea.

Primary research
Genetics
Budgeting your film
Sketches
Case study : lee Jane bennion Nixon - article on the warrior woman

Secondary research
Phillip K Dick short story’s
Film: Gataca
Tv: Black Mirror
Tv: altered Carbon
Film children of men

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the structure of your site is well organised and easy to follow, with lots of in-depth research. very well done :)

I can't find anything to nit pick at. the only thing missing is emailing different departments in college to see if they can help with your project such as actors or musicians

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Your site is managed really well and it's clear where all your different sections are.
Your concept is quite intriguing and something I think you'll be able  to pull off. I like what you did with your primary research and what you chose to look at specifically. Overall I think you have done a great job so far and would just suggest to do some more on your secondary and then start thinking about pre production.

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I am deeply impressed by not only your project concept but the breadth and depth of your research. It's analytical and developmental, informing your film in a way that I can only hope to match. You've cited sources both notable and obscure, taking inspiration from anything and everything to expand your concept.

The only ways I can recommend that you branch out are by looking at foreign cinema, video games and animé. Mass Effect and Warframe are fantastic examples of true sci-fi and hard sci-fi respectively, while Akame ga Kill shows a female warrior overthrowing an oppressive regime.

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You mentioned that the trailer will have a voice over. You could look on Fiverr for a voice actor who can voice over your trailer. I recommend a guy called Deeja14. He does cheap but great quality voice overs and doesn't mind you using his work in your trailer/film.
I also recommend to look into a show/book called 'Code Geass' and especially into the character 'Lelouch' and how he manages to rule his kingdom the wrong way for the right reason. He's a great anti-villain.

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look at films like they live 1980 and equilibrium for good inspiration for your mind control idea

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I think your idea has great potential but needs expansion. Look at other thrillers and what they do with their big twist moments for inspiration, as well as other films and TV shows with psychological elements to get inspiration for your cinematography.

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jean Michaël seri plays for fulham

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Your idea sounds really good, you've done a lot of good research

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sounded interesting i recommend looking up people who suffered with it

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Clear layout with a lot of potential. I will recommend you look into the first case of schizophrenia, and how many people didn't believe it existed. As well as looking into literature which focus on the sanity of the protagonist.

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Good clear site structure and idea.
For secondary research, I would suggest looking into Bandersnatch and the character of Stefan Butler as later on in the show, he thinks someone is controlling him and nobody believes him (thinks he's crazy). If you decide to look at Bandersnatch, I would also look at Colin Ritman, as he is aware of what's happening with Stefan, but doesn't really help all that much (could be seen as manipulating).

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Good clear structure of website.
Ideas sound good and you have clearly thought about each one individually.
Just concentrate on your research and look into Jekyll and Hyde and how it is shown differently through films.  Look at the Ansel Elgort Jonathan trailer

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Good work, to improve you could research how music can effect the tone of your thriller. I'd also recommend catching up to date on your work.

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Good initial ideas , good range of genres and subtexts  and not on the same genre showing you have not set on one idea from the beginning.  Final idea is to create a trailer for a dystopian future film idea.

Primary research
Genetics
Budgeting your film
Sketches
Case study : lee Jane bennion Nixon - article on the warrior woman

Secondary research
Phillip K Dick short story’s
Film: Gataca
Tv: Black Mirror
Tv: altered Carbon
Film children of men

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Good range of ideas and its clear you have not selected one and been set on that from the beginning which is good to see. Some initial research not sure how this has influenced your concept or concepts from the directors and films listed.
Idea is to make a short film- 1 character who hears a voice through the school megaphone

Primary suggestions
Interview with professionals
Props
Locations
Costumes

Secondary suggestions
Billy the kid
Films set in schools  for ideas of locations props costumes
Cinematography
Muse en scene and so on

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I like your concept/idea, there are a lot of different ways you could go with the theme. I would recommend watching Supernatural, specifically looking into the character's Sam and Dean as they both get possessed by demons

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Very good plot Codey and a site that is visually appealing. When your're doing your research give examples of films, directors and break down into elements e.g mise en scene. Also when listing equipment give examples of the equipment you could use with strengths and weaknesses to justify your choices.

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Your idea sounds really good it will be good to watch when you've

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the plot of your film was really well explained and developed, I think you should watch the Black Mirror film which could open your mind to how a bad mental state can effect someone with their everyday activities. which this can improve how you portray your film in the end.

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Your idea sounds really good, so I'd recommend supporting it with research into some stuff to do with the character's mental state. As well as this, since demonology is part of your plot,  I recommend looking into some classical literature that involves hell and demons. The Divine Comedy, by Dante Alighieri is a good example, as is John Milton's Paradise Lost.

Buffy the Vampire Slayer, which I recommended to Sophie and Hideki Kamiya's breakout work Devil May Cry both involve a lot of demons and supernatural creatures, so that could be helpful. As well as this, my final bit of advice would be to do some concept art or ask someone else to do it for you, as demons are a great chance to be visually creative.

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Since you are going for the possession idea. I can recommend some good shows, and games to look into. Also I can introduce you to some people who can help you make it possible. Game wise you should look into the game NieR: Automata as near the end of the game all the androids get infected with a virus except 2 characters who managed to use that power to become stronger. As well as the ones who were affected becoming super strong and losing their sanity/being taken over.

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sounds interesting as you don't see many possession films especially about demons in a long time and it sounds like a great plot that a girl is secretly evil but he doesnt know it

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Your work seems fine, I think you should be more clear on what your idea actually is (plot/story wise)

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Best one yet

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I really like the idea and the research that you've achieved so far regarding characters is beneficial to your project and done well. I would also consider researching lighting, costumes, props and locations as part of your mise en scene.

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Very well managed site

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I like how your trying to portray the concept in your proposal, try to look into the animation and special effects you can develop on to progress your film further.

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Your idea sounds good and it's good that your doing a character analysis and like taking inspiration from Daenerys

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looks good so far. You could email different departments such as animation, special effects, music etc, as part of your primary research.

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Research as much as possible into lighting, cinematography and costumes. I also recommend looking into real world revolutions as well as fictional ones, since it's a big focus of your plot.

As well, since you've got a female lead with supernatural powers I'd recommend looking into Joss Whedon's Buffy the Vampire Slayer and Hideki Kamiya's Bayonetta.

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Your site is well structured, and includes a range of areas that you have researched. I like the idea of your project and you have really looked at all aspects of your project, i.e. concept art and storyboards.

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You said you wanted to look into women in shows, and films so I recommend looking at Diablo Guardian. Either the novel or the TV show which is on Amazon Prime. I also like how you included Lucifer into the characters to look into as he is a fallen angel who goes to earth. There is the song Angel with a Shotgun by The Cab. Which mentions about a war and the character protecting them even if it means giving up their faith. You could link the lyrics to your angel protecting the person they're tasked to protect.

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You have a clear structure of how you want your idea to go. Your research is good and try to experiment with your characters break stereotypes and show the protagonist's "Deafness" in a new light/way.

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I thought your sites was layed out really well and you've done a lot of work on talking about what inspires. Next time i would talk about what your idea is though

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Your idea sounds interesting and is something different. Your research is fairly detailed and you know where you are going with your project, my only thing to consider is how are you going to film it. (Vlog styled or found footage/archive footage) Maybe include outtakes of the 2 years as a positive thing about the course)

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it reminds me of bruce almighty in a way i really like the idea i'm just wondering how you plan to pull it off

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Your idea sounded interesting and different but you need to have a little more detail in the secondary research section.

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The final idea sounds interesting however the research should be in more detail to aim for a higher grade

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sounds like an interesting concept the two way idea that she is a good guy that end up being bad will be a good twist

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Your final idea sounds very good also your primary and secondary research is good aswell

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Very good work overall. I like the experimentation with the stills. I would recommend that you research the noir genre category of films and cinematography as part of your research to help inspire your project.

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You spoke very fast so i didn't understand what you said but i do respect you doing a black and white film which could be difficult

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Bit too much going on I didn't understand much.

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You said you didn't go for level up as it would require looking into people in the games industry and psychology and it would take too long but we have teachers from professional backgrounds willing to help. also the focus is on the impact it has on people so you don't necessarily need to have professionals just games in general and how it has positively impacted them.

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I really like your idea, If we're talking about blindsiding the audience you should definitely look into 2 episodes of black mirror, white bear and shut up and dance, they are great examples of how the audience changes it's perception on a character.