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I thought she followed the structural prompts well and was able to outline her argument well with strong topic sentences and solid reasoning. She was able to put herself into the narrative and appreciate the perspectives of the "characters" and had clearly undergone a cultural and intellectual journey while reading this and creating her response.

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You've obviously put a lot of emotional labour into this assignment and I want to share with you the impact that your writing had on me

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Jessica used relevant evidence throughout her essay and was able to connect each piece of evidence back to her argument. Jessica also did a good job of understanding the power dynamic between Abina and the Important Man.

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The feedback I would provide is: Think back to the story and explain to your reader who were the Important Men? Why were they important to Abina? How did they lie?

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Would inform Jessica to challenge her claim more. Get more in depth with Abina, show the reader the struggles a slave or anyone powerless can go through. So we can understand why she ran away.
She used clear evidence throughout her essay on being powerles, also supported her claims well with quotes from the text.

Get more in depth with the question, Has society always been this way? Does money and power run our society?

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I believe Jessica did a great job following the guidelines. I was able to fully follow the structure of her response. Not finished -Sean

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I liked the connection she made in conclusion. Also, how she connected evidence to her argument.

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It's only small, but AdC went into depth about the experience of reading and reflecting on the book

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AdC didn't dedicate a lot of time to discussing structure or sequencing of ideas

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It's like a mini version of a thesis defence

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Encouraged to think critically (civil inquiry) as opposed to only recalling facts. Focus on the larger question being asked and use the details to support it but not shift focus to the details

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Had a focus on analysis - deepen critical thinking

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more clearly defining the task, she didn't really attack it correctly

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Putting the student in the proper mindset what type of paper she is writing.

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I like the idea of rewarding bringing concepts and idioms from other languages and dialects and using them as analytic or communicative tools

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Language is the mechanics of a statement or claim. It's important but not as important as the argument or 'big idea'. I wouldn't have it be a part of my rubric.

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Be as comfortable as possible, Clear ideas, and try to use vocabulary from the class that we discussed.

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To be more flexible with the students regarding grammar and give them feedback to make them aware of what they have to work on.

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I'm wondering more about how much of standardized tests actually focus on structure/ grammar and how much on substance. I feel like there's a notion that white mainstream english is necessary to do well on the exam, but it seems like that doesn't necessarily bear out in the rubric. I'm curious if this is the case across. Maybe focussing on ideas actually is way more aligned?

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Make sure that the students know that their grade will hinge on the content of their work and effectiveness of their argument, so they don't have to obsess over little mistakes.

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To be more understanding, make sure students have clear insight. Give good feedback.