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GO TO TUTORING FOR HELP

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In order to improve my essay I'll need to add more details and be more specific.

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I would add more details on my body paragraphs and my G and E's

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In order to improve my essay I still need to work on my conclusion because it is not complete and i need to do some fixing on it.

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In order to improve my essay i have to do my conclusion and add a little more detail to all of the body

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something that I would do to improve my essay is to get more evidence so the readers can understand more. I would also fix some of my sentences and have better words on my essay to make it better.

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I will add more details to the concluding paragraph.

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something i will do to improve my draft is fix any thing and everything and try to make it better so i wont get a super bad grade

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I can improve my essay by doing my conclusion and putting more facts and details in my body 3.

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Something I would improve in my essay is to add a little bit of extra statements in my conclusion.

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I could improve my essay by making it more detailed and add more evidence to it.

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To improve my essay I would put more details in my G's and E's .

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How I will improve my essay draft before the final submission is to make sure I stick with one thing for each paragraph and not talk about something else so it stays organized and be clear on how I explain things.

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One thing that I will improve with my essay is my final conclusion by adding more details to it and keep reading it over and over and see if I have any mistakes so it makes sense to the reader.

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Something that I will do to fix my essay is to give more information and explain as much as I can from the provided sources

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To improve my essay, I will need to add 2 more G E"s on each of my body paragraphs and do my conclusion.

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Something I will do to improve my draft is I plan to add more details and help make it easier for the reader to understand and make sure that they get where I'm coming from my point of view. Also, making it easier for the reader to find where I got my information from so that they can have a more clear mind of why kids have a big impact in technology today.

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Something I will do to improve my essay is to add more details in my body #2, and maybe even fix and explain my evidence more. I might also need to fix and change some of my concluding sentences in some of my body paragraphs.

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My final conclusion needs improvement because I still need to finish it. I'm gonna come to after school tutoring to improve it.

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To improve my essay, I will need to add more details and information to my E.

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to improve my final essay is to give more details and add more information in my E.

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The one thing that is wrong with my essay is that i need to finish it and how i' going to finish it i going to tutoring to get help with it