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Such a FUN activity! I really enjoyed it and the time flew by! I'm sure your students love this activity and look forward to each day's kickoff! Your slides are so cute, too! :) GREAT job!!

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You were able to give us a perfect little taste of a great tool to expand students' writing. You have such a pleasant presentation style, Michelle! And you provided some quotes of your own that are book worthy: "Writing is hard, but that doesn't mean you're doing it wrong!" and "Joy Write is a...gentler read." Fabulous! -Bob

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What an INCREDIBLE presentation, Michelle!

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What an INCREDIBLE presentation, Michelle!

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So many ideas to implement right away, and so valuable in any writing situation. I love that you gave us time to feel what the lesson feels like from the writer's point of view. Well thought out, super useful, and a great logical sequence! Well done, Michelle!! -Matt

Oh, and I gotta find out how you made that post-it slide!!

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I absolutely love this! I struggle with this, to be honest. The things I have written down as the activities I currently do to help students expand their writing are, well...lame. They don't engage much with them and it does not yield the results that I am looking for...just kind of, meh...
I can't wait to use this in my class! I foresee a new dawn on my ELA horizon! Thank you so much!

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Thank you for the interactive demo. I like the way you broke down the different tools. That made the list of possibilities more manageable and less intimidating. Your presentation style was easy going, which was a great cover for your nervousness.
I appreciate the way you offered  encouragement and gave a positive comment when we shared. I can see how your students learn the power of adding detail.
Thank you for the peek into your  classroom.

Brooke

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I love your calm nature! The clever days of the week names will find their way to first grade this year! You put together an amazing demo and I really enjoyed it a lot Michelle! Thank you so much!
Amanda G

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I will be using this in my 6th grade class next year for sure. I loved all of the ways you give your students to improve their writing. Great job!

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Great demo, Michelle! You have broken down a complex writing skill of elaboration and description and made it so tangible and accessible for students. This was super fun and I can imagine that your students have a blast as they learn a really fabulous and useful set of revision tools. Way to make revision FUN!

I also was reminded of Kelly Gallagher's "Question Flood" revision technique when we looked back at the example sentence that we revised in groups. He has students come up with a flood of questions for a draft in a similar way. Such gold, and I'm using ALL of your demo!

-Jamie

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This gave me a couple of ideas about how to do this with juniors and seniors. Like, exactly the same way, just with any other text or picture we're working with. Also, I had lots of sophomores last year who still give me the "I don't know what to write" excuse when I ask them to add details, so this is something else I'd like to try. That was great! Thank you!

--Eileen

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Great job! You were calm, focused and clear. Great presentation. I love the activities! It was easy to follow and provided a lot of options for students and teachers. I can see this activity working in all grade levels. I can't wait to try this in my classes. Well done!!

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What a great way to teach revision explicitly and with low stakes. The week's framework you outlined is a powerful way to get kids on board. They will leave this week with new tools to bring to their own, more personal writing as the year continues. I love it! It does a great job building certain revision skills from brooke's matrix in her demo. You focused on sentences, here. But you could focus in on word choice more explicitly, or rearranging inside paragraphs with the same tools you developed in your demo. This is soo cool!

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Thank you Michelle for such an amazing Demo! I am totally going to use this! Even the writing notebook and daily writing ideas. Love how organized you are! Great presenter with great resources and experience! Can't wait to use it all!

Kimberly

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Very clear and well-structured. I really appreciated going through the sequence of activities, and it got me thinking about how I could provide students with more specific scaffolding for the types of details they can add to their writing, in very different genres (I'm starting to make connections with Brooke's presentation...). I also appreciated learning about the books.

Thank you! Great work!
-Lisa

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Michelle - this demo was surely just a small slice of all the wonderful ways you encourage your student writers. I saw ways to use this with my college students right away! Your focus on purpose and connection to the readers was completely in tandem with the joy that can come with bringing writing to life with detail. --Kelly

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This was such a fun activity!  Not only was it fun, but I can see so many applications for this in my classroom.  I am going to implement these ideas into my Narrative Writing unit that I presented (just for one example).  A perfect blending of ideas as all good teaching is.  Thank you so much for sharing.  AMAZING, that is what you are!
Kathy

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Michelle, I agree that often our students feel the writing is "done," when really they are just getting started. These tools are not only fun to use in the format you taught us, but they help students see their creative potential, and dare I say, joy in writing. :) I will absolutely use this with narrative writing with my students, and I appreciate your warmth you infused in this process and presentation! Thank you. --Daina