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-transitions
-support thesis

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- Use more sources
- Break up points into more sentences

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work on transitions
better wording

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- transitions
- word corrections

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-Commas
-Need more in-text citations.

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Include in-text citations
More details in body paragraphs

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Only one space in between paragraphs

Make sure in text citations are mla format

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-Put commas in right spots
-Fix conclusion

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U KNO I GOT THE FLO, AND IM BOUT TO DROP IT ON THE FLOOR, MAKE EVERYONE RUN OUT THE DOOR, U KNOW YO GIRL WANT SOME MOR, YEA BECAUSE SHE A HOR, YEA I GO HARDCORE, SIKE IM REALLY HONESTLY POOR,

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-better flow
-better wording

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-Try not to do run on sentences
-keep your paragraphs around 5 sentences

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-Support thesis in paragraphs better
- use more word variation

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make sure to indent

give details about important events

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Need more of a thesis statement.

Break up your points into paragraphs.

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Support thesis statement a little more
Use more sources and quotes

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Write more information
unsupported thesis statement

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A little more information needed in the paragraphs
fix run-on sentences