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“Well done! 😊 We really like your story! It’s creative, well-structured and you describe your adventure very detailed and lively by using a variety of expressions. The reader can experience your emotions and that’s great! However, you should have a closer look at the usage of the tenses, especially when it comes to the difference between past simple and present perfect. Try to work on that and keep up your creative writing!”

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Good job, xy. You came up with a really fun story and managed to describe the setting and your emotions very vividly.  You used the right register and found many descriptors that very nicely support your storyline – you really took us with you on your adventure.

There are a few aspects you need to revise: Try to stick to one tense and help yourself with using the according tense to describe the right order in which the events took place (past perfect for events before past simple).

Remind yourself, that certain words and phrases need the right context to be able to express the meaning you’re intending, often terms that are directly translated from another language mean something totally different in English.

Keep up the good work! We’re looking forward to reading more creative texts from you! Well done.

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Overall it was very good text. The story was exciting and emotions were expressed very well, also, the use of adjectives is another positive feature. Moreover, you used a variety of structures such as the passive. You also used the right register (informal) and the structure of a diary entry. We noticed that you overused really. Try to find some synonyms or leave it out when it is not necessary. Also, watch out for tenses, punctuation and collocations! You regularly mixed up the tenses and misplaced the comma. Lastly, the story got a bit confusing towards the end (the part where the car was mentioned).

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We really liked your story. The conventions of letter writing were followed, it was clear what happened, it was explained logically, and your personality came through. However, we found a few mistakes, but we think that these mistakes are "higher level". All in all, good job. :)

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All in all, very well done! You were able to produce a coherent and cohesive text. However, you should focus on your tenses, especially past tense. There were some minor mistakes but we see you tried. You did very great using a variety of words and phrases.

Good job! :)

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We really liked your creative story. You have written a well-structured and thought-out text. However,  we want to encourage you to keep the following aspects in mind:
- Pay attention to punctuation. Avoid colons and too many commas (less is more).
- Try to be consistent with the tense. Do not confuse past simple and present perfect simple.
- Choose the words wisely. Be aware of their meaning, especially in which contexts their are usually used.
Nevertheless, you did a great job. You got this! 😉🍀

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Hi!

We really enjoyed reading about your adventure. You presented your ideas clearly and structured your story well. We really liked that you used a lot of adjectives and descriptions which made your story more interesting and vivid.

There are a few aspects you have to be careful with:

-          If you refer to something that is in the past, you use ‘that’ rather than ‘this’ to express distance

-          Revise the past tenses and remember:

o   finished actions and descriptions of past events – past perfect

o   finished events connected with the present – present perfect tense

-          Sometimes when we are talking about the past, we want to talk about something which was in the future at that time – to express this, use would be instead of will be

In the future, try to think of these aspects. All in all, you did a great job!

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Feedback Statement - Schober & Schönthaler

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Feedback Statement - Schober & Schönthaler

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In your letter you did a very good job at conveying emotions. Your story was exciting and fun to read. However, you kept on switching the tense. It might be a good idea to review the rules for the past simple and the past perfect tense. You also have to be more careful when it comes to the placement of commas (e.g. no comma before because)

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You followed the rules for writing a letter, which is very good. You have to be careful with the tenses because you use the wrong tense quite often, review the difference between the tenses, especially the usage of the past tenses (past simple or present perfect). Some sentences are quite confusing when it comes to structure and meaning. In general, the letter is quite good.

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Good text! We enjoyed reading it. However, be careful with
- tense mistakes (past simple vs present perfect),
- punctuation (comma)
- and the overall logic (first it was a terrible and then a hilarious day).

In your next writing assignment, try to think of those aspects. Good job 😊