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The design of her resumes was nice, and in resume 1 the inclusion of a photo was good. Her putting her achievements was good. However her English, such as her spelling and grammar could have been improved. She could also have elaborated more about her skills in resume 2. Resume 1 was better as it was more formal and included her contact information next to her content, which made accessing it easier. Not only that, she elaborated more about her skills

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We would pick resume 1.
What I like about the resume is that it is a lot more detailed than in resume 2. e.g. In resume 2, "Salesperson - Comet IT show" while in resume 1, she also included what she did there, distributing flyers and helping w sales of Samsung products. There are also less spelling errors (I think.) than compared to 2. Lastly, the portfolio was to the point and did not include unnecessary stuff.

however, i think that her achievements should be arranged in chronological manner

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What do you like about the resumes? What are the 'plus' points of the resume?

Resume 1 included
- her full name
- a photo of her
- her contact information
- the link to e-Portfolio
- things she wants to achieve
- elaboration on her work experiences
- the year of her education achievements (more specific)
- the skills that she has
- her interests (her hobbies)

Resume 2 included
- her contact information
- the date of her work experiences
- the skills that she has
- her interests (hobbies)

improvements
- spelling
- formatting
- spacing
- grammar

Which resume would you pick?
Resume 1 as it has more detailed information about her

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we like the one with her face bc got picture

we suggest that she use grammarly

writings not easy but grammarly can help
this sentence is grammatically correct but its wordy and hard to read

the hobbies section also seems quite useless

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The first resume is more formal, and there is flow of information for the job giver to read.

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We would pick resume 1. We like how she included short descriptions of what she worked on in her prior jobs and attached her picture. She also put the year next to important achievements in secondary school. In resume 2, her hobbies are not relevant to her potential employer. Resume 1 does not include hobbies.

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We would pick resume 1 as it seems more professional. With the addition of a picture, it allows employers to get a grasp of her tidiness and her professionalism.
It also has little to no spelling errors as compared to resume 2, further adding on to it's professionalism. The information is also presented in a much cleaner way

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we prefer resume one as the information is organised well and it also appears more professional. The second resume seems more informal. Thus, if we were to write a resume, we would write it in the first format.

For improvement, she can improve on her grammar and vocabulary.

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Firstly, I would pick annex C2. it has the edited spelling errors and grammatical errors. The format has also been changed.

I like that the resumes clearly state the important things such as her academic achievements and experiences. It is clear and concise. It is very organised. very good. amazing. 超好。

For improvement maybe that would be to use better words. Giving the employer a sense of how knowledgeable you are.

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Which resume would you pick to use for a job application?

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Which resume would you pick to use for a job application?

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What are some suggestions for improvement? 

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What are some suggestions for improvement? 