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Feedback on Air Pollution Research and Graphic Organizer

Areas of Strength:

You chose good, clear facts about air pollution that help readers understand what it is. I like how you explained that it includes "gases, dust particles, fumes (or smoke)."

Your graphic organizer looks nice with the cloud shapes and central image. The design helps readers understand your topic is about air.

You included important sources of air pollution by mentioning "gases from vehicles" and "gases from factories."

Areas for Growth:

Let's work on writing complete sentences. For example, instead of "Examples=gases from vehicles," try writing "Some examples of air pollution are gases from vehicles."

There are a few spelling mistakes to fix: "brethe" should be "breathe," and "biigges" should be "biggest."

Try adding more details to your facts. For example, when you say "motor vehicles are the biggest threat," explain why or how they affect air quality.

General Feedback on Writing Mechanics:

Remember to start sentences with capital letters and end them with periods. For example: "It is estimated that you breathe 20,000 liters of air each day."

Make sure to leave spaces between words. In "brethe20,000," there should be a space: "breathe 20,000."

Your facts look like they are in your own words, which is great! Keep practicing writing facts in ways that are easy for your classmates to understand.

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Feedback on Your Soil Pollution Research

Areas of Strength:

You picked important facts about soil pollution that help readers understand why it's a serious problem. For example, explaining that "95% of all food comes from the soil" helps us see why soil pollution matters.

Your sentences are clear and easy to understand. You explain complex ideas in a way that makes sense to other students.

You showed good understanding of how soil pollution affects different things like food, health, and the environment.

Areas for Growth:

Try using simpler words that sound more like how you would explain it to a friend from your age. For example, instead of "detected through proper research and testing" you could say "found by scientists doing tests."

Add some examples that help other kids understand better. Like what kinds of things cause soil pollution or how it affects plants.

Make your facts connect to each other better. You could put your most important fact first, then have each fact build on the one before it.

General Feedback on Writing Mechanics:

Your sentences are complete and well written.

Think about starting some sentences in different ways. Right now, two start with "Soil pollution."

You used periods correctly at the end of each sentence. Keep doing that!

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Feedback on Air Pollution Research and Graphic Organizer

Areas of Strength:

You chose an important topic about air pollution and included some interesting facts about pollution in China and the Salween River.

You tried to explain how companies and people contribute to pollution, showing you understand some causes.

You made a connection between air pollution and health effects when you mentioned "persons they get sick".

Areas for Growth:

Try to write clearer sentences by organizing your ideas first. For example, "9 of 10 persons she smoke a air levels of air of danger" is confusing - what fact were you trying to share?

Make sure each fact is complete and specific. When you write "companies throw away smoke," try adding what kind of companies and what happens to people or the environment.

Check that your facts match your topic. The Salween River fact seems to be about water pollution rather than air pollution.

General Feedback on Writing Mechanics:

Watch out for repeated words in your sentences. (like "is is" and "air air")

Remember to end your sentences with proper punctuation. (periods, question marks)

Try to use connecting words (like "and," "because," "which") to join your ideas together and make your writing flow better.

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Feedback on Water Pollution Research and Graphic Organizer

Areas of Strength:

You chose interesting facts about water pollution in the Mariana Trench that help readers understand how deep the problem goes.

Your graphic organizer looks clean and organized with a good central image and clear text boxes.

You included specific numbers in your facts, like "89%" and "11,000 metres," which makes your information more meaningful.

Areas for Growth:

Try to add more details about why single use plastic is bad for the ocean.

Your fact about "10 different polluted rivers" could be stronger if you named some of these rivers.

Consider adding information about how water pollution affects sea animals or plants.

General Feedback on Writing Mechanics:

Remember to capitalize "Pacific Ocean" since it's a specific place name.

Your sentences are clear, but try using connecting words like "and," "because," or "which" to join related ideas

Check the spelling of "strenches" the correct word is "stretches" when talking about how deep something goes

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Feedback on Air Pollution Research and Graphic Organizer

Areas of Strength:

You chose good facts about air pollution that show you understand the topic. Your fact about Byrihat being the most polluted city shows you did research.

Your graphic organizer is visually appealing with a creative brain character, nice colors, and a clear layout.

You kept your writing simple and easy to understand, which is good for sharing information with others.

Areas for Growth:

Your work is incomplete. You only included 2 facts about air pollution instead of the required 4 facts.

Your facts are very short. Try to explain them more. For example, instead of just "Smoke pollutes the air a lot," you could write "Smoke from factories and cars pollutes the air and makes it hard to breathe."

General Feedback on Writing Mechanics:

Remember to write complete sentences that give clear information. "Smoke pollutes the air a lot" needs more detail to be really informative.

Try using connecting words like "because," "when," or "therefore" to explain how your facts are related to each other.

Make sure each fact teaches the reader something specific about air pollution. Your facts should answer questions like "what," "why," or "how."

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Feedback on Pollution Research Assignment

Areas of Strength:

You chose an important topic about plastic pollution in the ocean and the "garbage island." This shows you understand a big environmental problem.

Your facts are connected and tell a story from how trash gets to the ocean, to how big the problem is, to how it affects life. For example, you explain that things we throw away "van a un lugar que se parece a una isla."

You included a good comparison that helps readers understand the size by saying the island is "más grande que nueva york."

Areas for Growth:

Try adding more specific details about how pollution affects animals and humans when you say "puede influir en la vida de los animales o encima en nuestra vida." What specific problems does it cause?

You could add 1-2 more facts about pollution to meet the requirement of 4-6 facts. Maybe include information about how long plastic takes to break down or ways we can help solve this problem.

When mentioning that "China es el país más contaminado," try explaining why or giving an example of the pollution there.

General Feedback on Writing Mechanics:

Remember to capitalize proper nouns like "China" and "Nueva York" in your writing.

Your sentences are clear, but try using connecting words (como, porque, por eso) to link your ideas together more smoothly.

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Feedback on Water Pollution Research and Graphic Organizer

Areas of Strength:

You chose important facts about water pollution that show how big this problem is around the world.

Your graphic organizer is clear and easy to read with good color choices.

You tried to write about water pollution in two countries, which shows you wanted to give different types of information.

Areas for Growth:

Try to add more details to explain why these places are polluted. For example, instead of just saying "China is the most polluted country," you could write about what causes the pollution there.

Make your sentences more complete. For example, "the pacific is the ocean more contaminated" could be "The Pacific Ocean is the most contaminated ocean"

Remember to write complete facts. When you say something is "most polluted" or "second most," try to include what year this information is from or where you learned it

General Feedback on Writing Mechanics:

Remember to capitalize the first letter of each sentence and proper nouns like: "Pacific," "China," and "Mediterranean"

Check your spelling carefully. "Moust" should be "most," and "mediterrranean" should be "Mediterranean"

Work on word order in your sentences. In English, we say "the most contaminated ocean" instead of "the ocean more contaminated"

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Feedback on Water Pollution Research and Graphic Organizer

Areas of Strength:

You chose interesting facts about pollution that show you did research, like identifying specific companies and locations. (Coca Cola, Repsol, Pacific Ocean)

Your graphic design is visually appealing with the sad Earth image that helps show the impact of pollution.

You organized your facts clearly in separate boxes which makes them easy to read.

Areas for Growth:

Your sentences need more details to be complete thoughts. For example, "The pacific ocean more contaminated ocean" could be "The Pacific Ocean is the most contaminated ocean in the world"

Some of your facts need better explanation. When you mention "Repsol" and "Coca Cola", explain how these companies pollute.

Try to use more connecting words (like "because", "when", "which") to make your sentences flow better.

General Feedback on Writing Mechanics:

Remember to capitalize proper nouns. (Pacific Ocean, Mediterranean Sea, Coca Cola, Repsol)

Check your spelling ("mediterranian" should be "Mediterranean", "moist" should be "most")

Add periods at the end of your sentences to show they are complete thoughts.

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Feedback on Water Pollution Research and Graphic Organizer

Areas of Strength:

You chose important facts about water pollution, including major companies and countries that contribute to pollution. This shows good research focus.

Your graphic organizer is clear and includes different types of information about water pollution companies, countries, and specific bodies of water affected.

You included a specific event (The Repsol oil spill in Peru disaster in 2022) which shows you connected current events to the topic.

Areas for Growth:

Some of your sentences are in Spanish and some in English. Let's make all sentences in English.

Try to add more details to explain your facts. For example, when you mention "China and United States pollute the most" explain what kind of pollution or how much they pollute.

Consider adding numbers or statistics to make your facts stronger. For example, how much pollution does Coca Cola or Pepsi create?

General Feedback on Writing Mechanics:

Remember to capitalize all words in titles. (Water Pollution)

Work on consistent capitalization in sentences. Some of your sentences are all capitals while others are lowercase.

Make sure to spell check company names. (for example, "LECHA" should be "LECHE" or "milk" in English)

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Feedback on Water Pollution Research and Graphic Organizer

Areas of Strength:

You chose interesting facts about ocean pollution that show you did research on this topic. I like that you included information about specific places like "the north pacific ocean" and "carpallo peru."

Your graphic organizer is clear and easy to read with good spacing between each fact. The green bubbles and fun character in the middle make it visually appealing.

You focused on different aspects of pollution locations, chemicals, and affected animals which shows good variety in your research.

Areas for Growth:

Try to write complete sentences that start with capital letters. For example, "The more polluted ocean is the North Pacific Ocean" instead of "the more polluted ocean is the north pacific ocean."

Add more details to explain your facts. For example, when you mention "pm2.5", explain what this chemical is and why it's harmful to water.

Make sure to proofread place names - "Carpallo Peru" should be "Callao, Peru" (there seems to be a spelling error in the location name).

General Feedback on Writing Mechanics:

Remember to use proper punctuation at the end of each sentence and to add periods to all your statements.

Proper nouns (names of places and specific things) should start with capital letters like "North Pacific Ocean," "Peru," and "Beluga Whale."

Try to connect your ideas with transition words like "because" or "which" to explain how your facts are related to ocean pollution.

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Feedback on Air Pollution Research and Graphic Organizer

Areas of Strength:

You chose important facts about air pollution that shows you understand how serious this problem is. For example, you included the fact that "2.4 million people die EACH YEAR of air pollution" which helps readers understand why this topic matters.

Your sentences are written in your own words in a way that is easy to understand. You didn't copy from websites, which shows good work in making the information your own.

You included different types of information about air pollution, from health effects to natural causes like "volcano eruption," which shows good research variety.

Areas for Growth:

Try to write complete sentences that start with a capital letter and end with a period. For example, "Less or more 2.4 million people" could be "More than 2.4 million people die each year from air pollution."

Add more details to explain your facts. For example, when you say "Air pollution causes problems of healthy and global warming," you could explain how it causes these problems.

Make your graphic organizer more visually appealing by adding pictures, or organizing your facts in a clear pattern.

General Feedback on Writing Mechanics:

Watch out for spelling and grammar. "Healthy" should be "health" when you're talking about health problems.

Make sure to use connecting words like "and," "because," or "which" to join your ideas together and make your writing flow better.

Keep working on using proper punctuation at the end of each sentence.

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Feedback on Air Pollution Research and Graphic Organizer

Areas of Strength:

Your graphic organizer is visually great! I love how you used a creative character with butterfly wings and colorful bubbles to present your facts about air pollution.

You included important facts about air pollution that show good research. You talked about different sources like factories and cars, and explained effects like health problems and global warming.

You tried to explain the facts in your own words, which shows you're thinking about what the information means.

Areas for Growth:

Some of your sentences are very long and complex. Try breaking them into shorter, simpler sentences. For example, your fact about fossil fuels could be split into: "Fossil fuels come from decomposed plants. When we burn them, they release greenhouse gases. These gases trap heat and cause global warming."

Check your spelling carefully. I noticed some words that need fixing:

"cuning" should be "causing"

"tarns" should be "turns"

"heath" should be "health"

"heart" should be "heat"

"resicling" should be "resulting"

"belived" should be "believed"

"critation" should be "irritation"

General Feedback on Writing Mechanics:

Remember to use periods between complete thoughts. For example, in your second fact, you could write: "Factories release toxic smoke. This turns the air we breathe dirty and causes health and environmental problems."

Double check your spelling of important words. Having correct spelling helps readers understand your message better.

Your facts show good understanding of the topic, but try to make them more kid friendly (for your classmates) by using simpler words when possible.

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