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A Poem for Maeson. Think of what feedback you would give me as a performer.

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A Poem for Maeson. Think of what feedback you would give me as a performer.

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Very good job on your projection and energy with this piece. I could actually hear you having a little fun with it which was fantastic. Looking at your performance map there a few moments that I think can be brought out even more in your performance. For example, the emphasis you put on "nothing" in the first line really helps set the tone for the rest of the piece, you have a good standard emphasis on the word in this recording but see what happens if you really make it over the top. In your analysis you mentioned thinking the intended audience was other men which made me think: what if this poem was performed in a more modern context? Someone hanging out with their buddies kind of ragging on the woman he loves but then coming to the conclusion that he loves her no matter what. If you'd like to play around with that idea I think it could create a really great twist on the piece.

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Again, I so love hearing the joy in your voice when you perform! The little bit about Willie thinking he was cooking peas is so nice and playful. When you talk about Mae being kind and this name being a sign of hope I would suggest giving a slight pause before each of those words. Kindness and Hope are huge parts of this emotional journey so use those moments as a time to let the audience breathe. For the Emile repetition I would suggest either changing the pace so that it's faster like you're trying to drill it in, or have each one be distinctly different (changing pitch, tone, or volume for each). Your delivery of the last line right now gives us a little bit of assuredness but I would like it to radiate with pride. It's the thesis of the poem, it's an affirmation of the self, it's the last line of the piece; don't be afraid to put your full self into it.