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1.1. Water-efficient appliances

1.2. Water scarcity

1.3. Water-saving

1.4. Rainwater harvesting

1.5. Water resources

2.1. B

2.2. A

2.3. E

2.4. C

2.5. D

3.1. F

3.2. T

3.3. F

3.4. T

3.5. F

4.1. Water conservation is essential even if it doesn’t have water scarcity

4.2. Water scarcity will happen when we don’t use fresh water efficiently

4.3. Government need to have strategies about sustainable water management for future generations

4.4. Water-efficient appliances are important in the conservation of clean water

4.5. The volunteers hosted a Gala to raise public awareness about water-saving

As everyone knows that fresh water plays an important role for global life. Firstly, water in sustaining life and ecosystems are indispensable. Most daily activities use water like: drinking, cooking, washing, cleaning, taking a shower. If people don’t drink 3 days, they will die. The second problem is that the impact of water scarcity on communities and the environment. The water scarcity occurs due to population explosion, deforestation, environmental and water pollution, improper use and management of water resources. This lead to serious consequences such as: limited access to clean water for drinking and basic sanitation; rising water prices, causing difficulties for people; impact on agriculture, crop quality and children's health; negative impact on economic growth due to damage in agriculture and health. According to the statistical report, Migration due to water scarcity, is estimated to reach 700 million people by 2030. In addition, practical measures individuals and communities can take to conserve water. If every citizen has awareness about water conservation, it will probably prolong the time before a scarcity of clean water appears. What we can do is shorten the bathing time and limit soaking in the tub, reuse used water, check for water leaks regularly, turn off the faucets and drain valves when not in use. At that time, in addition to maintaining a sustainable amount of clean water, it also partly helps reduce pressure on water supply and water treatment systems, protect the environment by reducing pollution and preserving ecosystems. Besides, people can know the long-term benefits of conserving water for future generations. They can get environmental protection which helps reduce water pollution and prevent the depletion of freshwater supplies, and public health because clean water is essential for preventing diseases and maintaining public health. Thereby, let us join our hand to conserve clean water for you, for me, and for our future generations.

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1. On vacation, Phu Quoc is always a major cultural attraction so the tourist income of this city is usually go up in summer.

2. There are a lot of tourists activities for whom are near the beach like swimming, volleyball, building sandcastle.

3. Victoria Fall is one of the most breathtaking natural wonders, so I wish I could see it once.

4. There are not many amusement parks on the outskirts of my city where I live, so I hope in the future there will be built more in here

5. Adventure enthusiasts who love to explore new place usually need to do exercise to be stronger.

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1. Huong Pagoda is a famous cultural attraction in my country, so my family goes there together every Tet

2. There are many exciting tourist activities at Nha Trang such as: enjoy cuisine, play games together near the sea, experience water games, also a relaxing place to rest so my family love Nha Trang City so much.

3. Ha Long Bay is recognized a natural wonder of Viet Nam and I really want to visit its beauty.

4. Sun World Ha Long is a beautiful cultural attraction in my country and there has so many set of activities such as: roller coaster, ferris wheel, haunted house.

5. Adventure enthusiasts often love adventurous trips, exploring new lands and I greatly admire and love such people.

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Literacy skills are an essential part of => are essential in (ngắn gọn và trực tiếp hơn) everyday life. This is a tool They are tools that people can communicate, exchange or trade communication, exchange, and trade (đồng nhất dạng từ) with others in everyday life. From these basic skills With these basic skills, people will can gradually improve their studies and work to higher milestone in life reaching higher milestones. Reading comprehension and writing skills are also help us access to new knowledges ("knowledge" là danh từ không đếm được) and develop ourselves. Literacy skills helped countries in the world have helped countries worldwide negotiate to be able to come up with the most effective solution come up with effective solutions. Thereby Therefore, it can be said literacy skills is it can be said that literacy skills are an integral part of everyday life.

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Sử dụng liên từ và trạng từ chuyển tiếp phù hợp như "Moreover", "As a result", "Therefore" để kết nối các ý.

Chia câu dài và phức tạp thành các câu ngắn hơn để tránh lộn xộn.

Sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và nâng cao, ví dụ "effective solutions" thay vì "the most effective solution".

Tập trung vào tính nhất quán trong việc liệt kê các ý và đảm bảo mỗi ý được diễn đạt rõ ràng và dễ hiểu.

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In this urban living now In today's urban living (ngắn gọn và tự nhiên hơn), fortunately when people can become more aware people have fortunately become more aware of the importance of a healthy lifestyle. When people , they know how to achieve work-life balance (Ghép câu này với câu trước để tránh câu cụt và tạo mạch văn liền mạch.). The income that people earn is also used for practising physical health practicing physical health activities such as: doing yoga, playing sports, and striving to maintain a healthy eating habits then achieve an enrich life, leading to a richer life. Proof of this problem Evidence of this is more and more developed many popular sport centers, clubs such as the increasing development of popular sports centers and clubs, such as: gym, aerobics, yoga or martial arts.

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With the development of science and technology, there are many changes in people's lifestyle due to their impacts. This discussion below will show These changes have several influences of these changes on people's physical and mental health. First of all, it can not cannot be denied that urbanization has brought about substantial changes in people's lifestyles. It can offer better access to Urbanization offers better access to education, healthcare and employment, but people may have mental problems can also cause mental problems due to its fast-paced environment. Besides Moreover, Technological advancements also have revolutionized the way people live, work, and interact. They can made have made it easier to contact with friends in long distance contact friends over long distances, or it can help us work from home in flexible time flexible schedules. However, technological advancements may bring us negative impacts if we prolong time in front of screen. Moreover, it this can lead to some diseases health issues like obesity, eye strain and sedentary lifestyle. Therefore it can affect on physical health. In conclusion, it is important to take care of your mental health by managing stress and seeking support when needed.

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Sử dụng các từ đồng nghĩa và từ vựng nâng cao để tránh lặp từ và làm phong phú bài viết.

Sử dụng liên từ và trạng từ chuyển tiếp phù hợp như "Moreover", "Furthermore" để kết nối các ý.

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The 21st century has witnessed technological revolutions in many aspects. Technological advancements have made communication faster than the previous ever before. In the past, people connected with others through letters paper, and landline but in the modern-day people use the internet and smartphones that can connect with people around the world with one click but today, people use the internet and smartphones to connect with people around the world with one click. Such as For example, 1 year ago a year ago, when I traveled to Paris, I could call for my mom in Vietnam at the same time that did not have any interruptions => KHÔNG DÙNG VÍ DỤ CÁ NHÂN CHO ACADEMIC WRITING NHÉ. In addition, the development of technology changes has changed how people recreational activities people engage in recreational activities. Before that Previously, we wanted entertainment joined activities outdoors, and went theme parks people sought entertainment by joining outdoor activities and visiting theme parks. In contrast, today people can lie on the sofa or bed completely recreationally for entertainment as sedentary entertainment like video games and streaming services don't need to stay active do not require physical activity. In conclusion, technological changes bring convenience in citizen's life bring convenience to people's lives and people should take care of their lives and not wallon on online life individuals should take care of their health and not become overly dependent on online activities.

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Literacy skills are crucial in everyday life as they enable individuals to effectively communicate communicate effectively (nhấn mạnh hành động) , access information, and make informed decisions. These skills are foundational for personal empowerment, allowing enabling people to understand health information, manage finances, and pursue lifelong learning. In the professional realm, literacy enhances job performance and career advancement by enabling facilitating clear communication and efficient task management. Socially, literacy fosters civic engagement and social inclusion, allowing individuals to participate fully in their communities and appreciate diverse cultural perspectives. Overall, literacy skills are essential for navigating the complexities of modern life, ensuring individuals can thrive both personally and professionally.

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Sử dụng các từ đồng nghĩa và từ vựng nâng cao để tránh lặp từ và làm phong phú bài viết.

Sử dụng liên từ và trạng từ chuyển tiếp phù hợp như "Moreover", "Furthermore" để kết nối các ý.

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I agree this opinion => I agree with this opinion because the increased demand for daily commutes and accommodation has led to air pollution emitted by vehicles => air pollution from vehicles (cho ngắn gọn và rõ ràng), overuse of fuels such as electric vehicles, and instead of using the land to plant trees deforestation to build high-rise buildings, people have cut trees to build high-rise buildings. In addition to, the population growth while people are not aware population growth has led to environmental harm because people are unaware of the consequences of using too many things that can harm the environment in daily activities such as they do not know how to save electricity, water or plant more trees in the house and also pour cooking oil directly into the sink also pollutes the soil => quá dài và lộn xộn, nên chia thành các phần nhỏ hơn. Since then As a result, Vietnam's capital - Hanoi Hanoi, the capital of Vietnam has had serious air pollution as well as a shortage of clean water sources due to overpopulation and excessive water consumption. However, in recent years, groups of students have come together to organize activities to guide the treatment of cooking oil guide the proper disposal of cooking oil or collect plastic bottles, milk cartons and batteries for recycling and when people participate in the activity, they will be exchanged for small potted plants. Thereby => Therefore, let's join hands to protect the environment, improve the quality of life of each person.

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Nhận xét nội dung:

Bài viết đã nêu rõ vấn đề ô nhiễm môi trường do sự gia tăng dân số, nhưng cần cải thiện cách trình bày và sử dụng từ vựng.

Nội dung cần được tổ chức lại cho mạch lạc hơn, chia nhỏ các ý và sử dụng cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn.

Đề xuất để cải thiện:

Sử dụng liên từ và trạng từ chuyển tiếp phù hợp như "Moreover", "As a result", "Therefore" để kết nối các ý.

Chia câu dài và phức tạp thành các câu ngắn hơn để tránh lộn xộn.

Tập trung vào tính nhất quán trong việc liệt kê các ý và đảm bảo mỗi ý được diễn đạt rõ ràng và dễ hiểu.

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Today, I will describe Giraffe’s life in their natural habitat. Giraffe is an animal has special shape, with long neck and feet. They live in a grass-covered ecosystem with canopies and bushes, this habitat provide foods to them - the flat-leaved acacia trees. Giraffes consume hundreds of tons of food weekly from the flatleaf acacia trees characteristic in their habitat.  The long neck makes it possible for giraffes to reach higher tree floors in search of food. Otherwise, in natural environment the reports showed that 94% of the giraffe sex behaviors they observed were homosexual. In addition to, the natural environment plays an important role in sustaining the life of giraffes and other species. Therefore, protecting the environment is our responsibility, to ensure that giraffes and other creatures have healthy and balanced habitats. Let’s join your hand to protect our natural environment.

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In today's world, protecting animals's natural habitat has become abroad issue to general public. Therefore people should know about how their natural habitat are to protect them. Discussion below I will describe pandas' life in their natural habitat. First of all, it is known that there are a huge number of pandas in Chinese. Moreover, the majorities of them do not live together, they also have their own place, so they will attack another one who try to get in their own place. Then, pandas also have their diet which may be bamboo. Some study showed that they spend 16 hours eating per day. Furthermore, unlike other bears, pandas do not sleep in winter, as pandas animals in tropical area are alike. Therefore, they prioritize to migrate to warmer place. It may be a feature making them more special. Finally, they often contact with each other by smell or sound. Unfortunately, pandas are endangered animals, so they must take more meausre to protect them. In conclusion, panda is a cute animal and it is also is a symbol of a country. Thus, we should protect them from being extinct.

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Intelligent and fast are the adjectives common people use to describe the monkey. Most of the monkeys live in tropical forests and primarily in trees and ground. They live with a group of monkeys. In addition, they have a leader monkey. Monkeys spend a lot of time climbing up trees and swinging to other trees.

Moreover, the foods of monkeys are fruits, nuts, vegetables, and insects. Monkeys various have 264 types. It is to know that the longest age in the animal world.

In conclusion, many types of monkeys are endangered, and the government needs have protect diverse monkeys

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https://ielts.idp.com/vietnam/prepare/article-ielts-what-are-formal-and-informal

https://zim.vn/cautious-hedging-language-ngon-ngu-than-trong-trong-ielts-writing-task-2

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Bài viết này sẽ tổng hợp và phân tích chi tiết về các từ liên kết và từ nối có thể áp dụng trong phần thi IELTS Writing. Cùng IDP tìm hiểu nhé!

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Its key benefit is convenience. (câu topic sentence chấn động vậy Linh :v vừa bước vào đã It là sao? It là cái j?) First, we can easily connect and interact with friends and relatives via social networks without being hindered by geographical distance. It is also a place to meet and make friends with strangers everywhere, people can even find soulmates through it. Not only that, whenever there is something difficult, we can research and look up immediately without having to go anywhere to find the answer. For example, when I don't know how to make a dish, I can look it up and it will give me the ingredients and steps (Không lấy bản thân làm ví dụ). Second, in addition to helping each individual, it also contributes greatly to economic development. Thanks to automation technology, human labor will be reduced and productivity will also increase. In addition, people can also work and earn extra income online. It not only reduces preparation time when going to work outside but also helps people improve their skills in using technology devices.

Ưu điểm: idea rõ ràng và có supporting ideas

Cần cải thiện:

Câu topic sentence chưa đạt: (1) Tự nhiên nhảy vào bài viết sao đã It rồi vậy :v đây k phải bài nói nha (2) câu đơn quá ngắn và convenience chỉ bao quát được idea đầu tiên

Ngôn ngữ diễn đạt informal (phù hợp với speaking), cần cải thiện để diễn đạt formal hơn(phù hợp vs academic writing), nhiều chỗ dùng "it" k phù hợp

hạn chế tối đa dùng you, we => thay bằng people hoặc từ đồng nghĩa của people trong ngữ cảnh (vd Internet users) + KHÔNG LẤY VÍ DỤ QUÁ CÁ NHÂN :((((

có secondly rồi thì k có in addition to (và ngược lại) => lặp diễn đạt

Chưa có câu tóm lại ý chính của đoạn

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There are many advantages on the development of the technology. Firstly, We can communicate with anyone in the world. Developed internet provides us with the information of people on the global. Bussinesses Businesses in the world can organise online meeting meetings when the weather is bad and drawback on moving. People will meet each other, be able to get acquainted and exchange knowledge online. Secondly, technology development makes us having a lot of different forms on entertainment. We can watch talk shows, reality television shows, comedy, romantic films, or even cartoons, etc every night after tired-work day. Besides, the artists can self-promote their careers but don't need through their managing company by , and do not need to be managed by their company through social media platforms such as: Tiktok, Youtube, Facebook, Ingstagram, etc. Thereby Therby, wish you have exciting experiences on internet.

Ưu điểm: ứng dụng được topic vocabulary, có topic sentence và supporting ideas

Cần cải thiện:

Thiếu các từ nối (linking words) làm các câu rời rạc thiếu liên kết

Trong academic writing, lúc đưa ra và giải thích luận điểm, hạn chế tối đa dùng you, we => thay bằng people hoặc từ đồng nghĩa của people trong ngữ cảnh (vd Internet users)

Kết đoạn là tóm tắt lại ý chính đã khai triển (chứ không có wish gì hết ở đây nhé)

Không dùng ...,ect. Kết câu luôn hoặc dùng so on, không liệt kê kiểu : ....

Cẩn thận khi dùng các từ will, hoặc khẳng định mà k có hedging words (đọc thêm trong link)

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In today's world, with the development of science, modern technology plays an important role in our lives. The reason making it essential in society is that it has many benefits. (Ngắn gọn 2 câu này thành 1 câu topic sentence thôi nha) First of all, The first advanatage is advanced technology can help us form more new relationships. For instance, you can communicate with other people through many social media such as Facebook, Instagram,..(thêm 1 câu giải thích supporting idea 1 vào đây nữa để làm rõ positive impact tới đối tượng nào/ positive impact của việc communicate through many social media là gì/ form new relationships thì sao?) Secondly, it can allow us to work wherever and whenever we want by accessing to the internet, so it can also help us save time to travel, For example, nowadays, many young people choose to study online rather than study face to face like in the past. Last but not least, technology allows us to broaden our knowledge, because there are a wealthy sources of information on the internet. For instance, if you don't know how to cook a meal, the best solution to this problem is surfing the Internet, and there will be a lot of answers to your questions. In conclusion, technology is a wonderful invention of humans, and if we know how to use it precisely, it can bring us many benefits.

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Ưu điểm: Từ vựng + ngữ pháp khá ổn, idea rõ ràng, đạt tiêu chí viết 1 đoạn academic writing

Cần cải thiện:

Đôi khi diễn đạt còn hơi dài dòng

không dùng dấu 3 chấm trong academic writing

*face-to-face

Trong academic writing, lúc đưa ra và giải thích luận điểm, hạn chế tối đa dùng you, we => thay bằng people hoặc từ đồng nghĩa của people trong ngữ cảnh (vd Internet users)

In conclusion thường là mở đầu kết đoạn cho cả 1 bài, dùng kết trong 1 đoạn mình nên dùng therefore, ... / thus, ... thì ổn hơn