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One day, two boys, Lucas and her HIS friend Tomy, they were bored, Lucas was Reading a diary of mysterys MYSTERIES from his city. Lucas was reding a “THE MYSTERY OF THE LIGHT” it was in the Woods.

The Woods was to 10 km to FROM  their house  , they THEY  went to the forest at 12 P.M,  .they THEY were walking hours and hours when get GOT dark, they were very tired and thought about going home because it was too late when they see  SAW a bright light behind the trees. Lucas took a diary to look at the photo, Lucas said “IT'S HERE”.

They were very scared because they found a  HEARD strange sounds, They start STARTED  to walk closer but but they saw that only peopleWERE  dancing and singing around the fire, they solved a mystery and joinED at the dance.
Very good job, Facu!
. Title: Good
.Paragraphs: Good
. a good intriguing story.
Mistakes:
Use Past verbs.
MARK: 90

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last year two friends, josh Josh and tom  Tom they walking in the forest because they were looking for mysteries, they walked and walked when...

Josh stopped because hey saw a bright light behind the trees and they heard strange songs, they had thought that there was storage  ???animal but they were scared.

they  THEY hid behind the trees, when saw people dancing and singing around fire, they saw LOOKED  very strange but fun, then they decided to went GO AND  made MAKE  friends to do the same. Finally they all finished up very happy.
Tiziana maria serra

GOOD job Tizi!
title: Good
3 paragraphs: Good
Order in the story : Good
Mistakes:
. Use capital letters for names.
. decided TO GO
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The mystery of the forest Wilso n It all started one night when two boys were exploring the Wilson forest. Their names wereRichard and Stuart, they were in the woods looking for their friends. they walked and walked until they they saw a light, Richard and Stuart they got scared thinking it was something bad.they went to the light... and saw the worst 5 GUYS WHO DANCED at the campfireWILL IT BE THE END?...Creator:  Timoteo Rigo

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The mystery of the forest Wilso n It all started one night when two boys were exploring the Wilson forest. Their names wereRichard and Stuart, they were in the woods looking for their friends. they walked and walked until they they saw a light, Richard and Stuart they got scared thinking it was something bad.they went to the light... and saw the worst 5 GUYS WHO DANCED at the campfireWILL IT BE THE END?...Creator:  Timoteo Rigo

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Timo, . write the title at the top. .Make 3 paragraphs.
. Richard and Stuart( they)
. something bad.They
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The last year, two teens, Marcus and Petter went at TO  the forest. While the two boys areWERE  talking, the dark was got.IT GOT DARK.

While they were walking, saw a bright light behind of the trees. Marcus looked and  TO his friend and say SAID:
- DID You SEE  this light???
-yes!, I tought that we are WERE  alone
-yes me too
But the boys didn't take care of this mistery, because they had so muc WEREh hungry, so they stopped and ate some sándwiches, but when areWERE  walking to back home. Petter heard a stange sounds behing of the trees, he was frightened. And Marcus say:SAID
-I  HAVE an Idea! No, a GREAT idea we can go to the side where came COMESt he light and the strange sound!!
-no!!! You are so Crazy.
- come on Marcus is only go and look
-mmm ok DO. You promise?
-yes I promise.

When the boys was WERE behind of the trees, they saw people dancing and singing around of fire. And the boys remembered:
-Marcus today is the Sping day!!! The school organized a camp to " welcome Spring".
-oh yes, my aunt tell me something of these.
-Ok so the mystery is solve
Valen, Very nice story, Well written, with a lot of feelings and adjectives.
MARK: 95

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A year ago Enrique and Antonio walked together, while the day began to darken  GET DARK through the thick forest of London.

While they were talking, Antonio saw that in the middle of the tres there was a very strong light, which was rare, they aproached scared,
when they were close they heard strange noises.

-antonio: Enrique look at that light
-enrique: are we getting closer?
-antonio: come on

they They approached slowly and a little scared,
the The road was not short, after walking a long time, aAntonio and eE nrique were hesitant to look, afraid that it might be something bad, when they finally looked, they saw that a group of people had WERE HAVINGthrown a party in the forest.
-Enrique: wow it's a party
-Antonio: yes
-Enrique: let's go
People welcomed Enrique and Antonio happily, they stayed at the party, after a year AFTER, they are MADE  all friends and they have a great party in the forest once a year.

end
Coco, good sory!  Title, 3 good paragraphs, adjectives, feelings and good use of different verbs.
MARK: 90

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One day in the night in halloween,HALLOWEEN NIGHT two  boys called  John and  Gorge   decided    went TO GO   to walked  WALK in a   forest very  dark. VERY DARK FOREST.

John and Gorge   were  walking when  Gorge   and  John  THEY saw  a  white bright  light behind trees, they  got a lot  scared, they  wanted   saw  TO SEE  what   was  that  white  bright light.

When  they  saw  there  were  peoples danced DANCING   and sang SINGING  around fire , it  was  very  strange STRANGE r  because sang a  song in other   language.

They were  so scared that  they  ran  away and   they  never came back.

MYSTERY SOLVE!!!!!

🤔🤔🤔

Marti, .Good title.
3 paragraphs: good
Good order of the story.
Mistakes:
.sentence order: in a very dark forest.
decided TO GO
Good use of adjectives!!!!
MARK: 88

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One friday afternoon, 15 year old brothers Felipe and 14 year old Bruno were walking through the forest, they watched the plants, trees, flowers and insects.

As they walked they began to see a light that shone like flashlights. They were a little scared, but out of curiosity they peeked behind the trees to see where that bright light was coming from. Five minutes later they heard strange sounds behind that light.

They saw a group of children who were around a campfire dancing.
Suddenly the boys invited them to participate in their dance, since it was a tribute to the Ant King, they accepted. They had a very warm afternoon and became very good friend. 🐜🌱      Geraldine Tolosa
GERAL, Excellent your story!!!
. Good title.
. 3 Good paragraphs.
. Good order of events and different past uses.
. good use of vocbulary.
MARK : 100

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Two boys in the forest

One day two boys decided to go out to explore the forest her THEIR  name is  WERE Luis and Matias, they THEY  left at 5:00, they paid attention to every detail.    the  THE forest was large with many trees, they were amazed, the hours passed and they were still there .it IT  began to get dark and one of the boys When the time was set, it was already 8 o'clock, they were astonished and there they decided to hasted HAST the pace.
At one point they stopped their step since Matías had noticed something behind the trees ... a light ?! (they wondered) they began to walk slowly to see better, they were scared so they went slow, SLOWLY each time.they THEY  got closer they heard more strange noises.
When they were very close they could see better what they were ... people dancing and singing around the fire, Luis started to laugh and said "Could you say that it is a solved mystery?"

Rena, Good title, and story events in 3 paragraphs.
Mistakes:
Very LOOONG sentences. A LOOOT of commas.
Mark: 80

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One day two friends called Manny and Luke went fishing in the Missouri River in the Unitede States, and they decided to go for a walk in the forest.

It was night and they had  walked a long time when  they saw a bright light behind trees, they were very frightened so they started to investigate.

They weren´t finding anything when they heard strange noises near there, they walked a little more and saw people dancing and singing around the fire, it was a camp. The mystery was solved.

Avril, Excellent job! 3 paragraphs, ordered events, good use of Past vervs, feelings.
MARK: 100

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One year ago, two friends called Esteban and David were walking in a very terrifying forest of the United States when they realized that they were lost in the middle of the forest and it was getting darker and darker.

Esteban and David decided to keep walking, and when they were walking, they saw a strange light behind the trees and they decided  THOUGHT to walk closer, they . THEY were walking to the light when they heard strange sounds behind the tree, they were very frightened so David looked over the side of the tree. IT.

When David looked he saw people dancing and singing, they were camping!, when the boys saw that ,  they felt very relaxed and they walked closer and asked if the could join the camping
Tomás Excellent job!
Good title, 3 good written paragraphs, use of adjectives to describe place and feelings.
. Try not to repeat words.
MARK: 95

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Last summer, I was walking with my friend Agustin, we were looking  for apples.

While we were talking, Agustin saw a cave, we went to see what there was, and we were surprised with what there was. There were many people dancing and drinking, we got scared because we thought they were going to atack ATTACK us.
Agustin said:
- I very scared alex. Alex
- Dont worry, said alex.
They hid behind some trees.

In the end they saw them, the boys were scared, but the people who were dancing treated them well. In the end they became good friends.

Bautista Rios
Bauti, Very good story. I has a good title, 3 good written paragraphs, feelings, good use of Past verbs.
MARK : 93

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one  One day ago in the nigh One night ago t my friend Pepe and his friend German were walking trougt a forest called perone that it  was located in California but it was very dark so they walked carefull.  CAREFULLY

After walking a lot  they saw a brihgt  light behind a  SOME trees they are  GOT confused so they got closer  and hear  HEARD strange noises they thougt there were ghosts since they did not know what it was they were very scared.

But when they got closer they saw people dancing and singing around fire  there was no ghost, the noises and the lights came from the party, mistery solved.
Santi, Good title for the story, 3 good written paragraphs, good use of Past tenses, feelings.
MARK: 88

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One day in a forest there were 2 boys walking.

It was getting
dark, but they weren't scaried,  SCARED they had a big smile on his THEIR  face :).

In one moment, the boys saw a bright light behind the trees.
they were walking WALKED  to the light, slow SLOWLY  and frightened.

when they were closer, they heared strange souds.

WHEN THEY SAW THE THING THAT WAS DOING THE SOUND, THEY WERE SURPRISED!!!

They saw 5 persons PEOPLE  dancing and singing around the fire.

Mystery solved...
Good job EZE! , Good title, 3 good written paragraphs, use of feelings
MARK: 89

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One day in the morning Mateo and her HIS  friend Lucas were walking in the forest , Mateo said
_Is a beatiful morning no ISN'T IT Lucas ?
_Whait a minute Mateo saw this mistery  MYSTERIOUS cave
_OH MY GOOD IS VERRY VERY SCARY , AND DARK.

Mateo and her friend LUCAS  were very surprised and confused because in the other part of the cave were THERE WERE  five boys dancing and singing . Mateo said
_There are THEY  LOOK verry curius no ?
_Yes of corse.

_Hey boys .SAID THE STRANGE KIDS
_Hey were what you doing her { boys} WHAT ARE YOU DOING HERE?
_My  ME  and my friend walked in the forest and discover  DISCOVERED  this cave . {Mateo.}
_OOO!! okey didn't DON'T  worry, came  COME whit my  ME and my friends {boys}
_Okey what were ARE  theirs name {Mateo} YOUR NAMES ASKED MATEO
_My name is Ale and my friends theyr  ARE  Gaston , Alejo , Santiago and Mike .{ boys}
And their THESE  boys two years later were verry  VERY good friends Good  order of event in paragraphs.
Mistakes:
. When dialogues, use PRESENT
. VERY
.Attention: HER  or HIS
MARK: 73
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EMMA AVILES.

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Yesterday with my friend Tom, we decided go DECIDED TO GO  to the forest to exploring. When we were walking, we saw that was getting dark and we were scared, because at the night,the forest it was scary.

And we started to hearing noises, they were wolves, but for our luck they heard WE HEARD THEM AT a distance,and later we saw a strange light behind the trees, . at  AT first we were surprised,because songs were heard too

We started to walking in silence, we saw some boys dancing around a fire, and we ask  ASKED them to CONTINUE  dance DANCING  and singing, and we decided to ask for dance with them, and later we went to our house
Valen Medina
Valen, Title: Good
. Good order  of the events in 3 paragraphs.
.Good use of feelings.
Mistakes:
Remember DECIDED TO GO
MARK: 86

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the noise in the forest rights reserved to andres chañapi

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the noise in the forest rights reserved to andres chañapi

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sech Sech and pepe  Pepe are very good friends.ne day they decided to take a walk in the fores THEY WERE t ivan talking about life xd they were having a great time having fun like every day of their life until suddenly the setch began to hear a deafening noise they were both calm but the fear that it was something serious and that their lives would be in danger was more and more intense, until Pepe, along with the courage to go to DECIDEDTO DEdiscover what that noise was. oth did not know what awaited them when they saw what was happening. pepe and sech gathered up their courage and ......... it was a party, pepe and sech looked at each other and laughed at the scare he had given them and decided to go to the party where they had fun at the end
Andrés, Good title, good order of events.
Mistakes:
. 3 paragraphs????
.Names in Capital letters.
.MARK: 66

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The IT WAS THE  Halloween day, my best friend Francesco  and I were went  GOING to a scary forest to know if the ghost legends were true or a joke ,  . we  We were very scary SCARED  because was starting to getting  GET dark and we didn´t had HAVE  a light.

We were walking a lot of time, when we saw colour light  LIGHTS and heared sounds ,  .IT was very strange, we wanted to know what happened in this place and we beging BEGAN  to walking to the lights.

When we was  WERE walking to the lights, we thought they were  ghosts SO , the legends are true, but when we were walking close,  CLOSER we saw a lot people dancing and singing around the fire, they had WERE HAVING  a Halloween´s party and we stayed.
Very good idea of the story Thiago!!
.Good use of feelings.
Mistakes:
I was SCARED
.didn't HAVE
. We WERE
. Try NOT to make too long sentences.
MARK: 88

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. P.1:  WHO? WHERE? WHY? DOING?
. P.2: WHAT HAPPENED?
. P3: At the end?
Use adjectives to describe feelings in parag.1 and 2.