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In ''Collapse'',Diamond (2005) discusses  that how people destroy the world.People are destroying natural habitats or else converting them to human-made habitats, such as cities and villages, farmlands and pastures, roads, and golf courses.Unfortunately, The author also warns that there  are the certain problems with fossil fuels.Since it is difficult to extract oil, and natural gas from and fossil fuels, it will be deeper, more polluted, more expensive to extract or process, or involve higher environmental costs. Moreover, he stresses that the chemical industry and many other industries pollute our environment by producing and releasing toxic chemicals them in air, soil, oceans, lakes and rivers. People swallow chemicals in their food and water, breathe in airlessness, and absorb through from their skin. This causes birth defects, mental retardation and temporary or permanent damage to the immune and reproductive systems in humans. He warns that If we examine it in terms of sustainability, if our environment becomes polluted and people become ill, our natural diversity lives disappears and people die. Then he stresses that Unhappily, the world is warming because human activities produce gases that damage the protective ozone layer or absorb the sunlight and thus cause the global warming to escape into the greenhouse gas atmosphere. (you need to state the author's idea about population which is the final supporting point) The author thinks that people have the opportunity to learn from the mistakes of distant peoples and the past and work together to create a change peoples.

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Make sure you use linkers so that the readers follow the ideas better.

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MET

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In the article written,"Collapse" by Diamond (2005),the author mentions that global warming is is the main idea that concerns nations, but it is  and makes easy ier to collaborate and fix this problem the main idea  do not to deforstate / deforest and harm habitats or use human made chemicals.The author states the usage of fossil fuels are going to deplete,it will be so hard to reach that kind of resource which will makes it more expensive to extract approach.These kind of harmful human made tools destroys the nature.

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In “ Collapse” by Diamond (2005), the author discusses the growing damages on environment through four main categories such as: habitats, human activities, population rate, and energy sources, and how it affects on nature and mankind health. The writer explains the fast rate of demolishing natural habitats and changing it to human made lands are affecting human, animals and ecosystem. Moreover, Diamond confirms that fossil fuels will not disappear from planet but it will be harder to reach and need more processes to be cleaned which means more environmental damage. Following that (refer to the author and use a reporting verb) the use of toxic chemicals by human, which affects our daily life and causes diseases and death (grammatically this sentence is incomplete).  In addition, the author claims that human activities are the substantially reason for global worming and destruction on ozone layer depletion. Besides that he states about the rising number of population means more consumption of natural resources. He also compares between the developed and the developing countries in  about their consumption ing habits. He adds how the third world countries people are changing  their lifestyles or moving to the first world countries. To conclude, the author is hopeful because the solutions for the environmental problems that we face today are caused by us so we can stop it. Also, jhe believes that people need to learn from the past societies and use new technologies to solve the problems.

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MET

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In the article "Collapse" by Diamond (2005), the author talks about / stresses / highlights the different reasons behind the condition of our environment deteriorating over time. He claims that the environment is losing its natural resources, namely natural habitats, energy sources, biological diversity and soil. He goes on to prove his point by explaining how and why exactly these resources are decreasing like natural habitats due to the increased construction of man-made habitats. Other sources things (avoid the word "thing" in academic writing as it is vague in meaning) like energy sources, biological diversity and soil because the easily accessible resources are running out and in order to access fossil fuels the rest of the sources buried deep within the earth, huge fractions of our environment have to be destroyed. The author also declares that there are several toxic chemicals that are being released into the air everyday in huge quantities that are demolishing the ozone layer and leading to global warming. This release of chemicals is either a result of manufacturing industries or human activities. The author strongly believes that ‘what really counts is not the number of people alone, but their impact on the environment’ (make sure you express the ideas in your own words) and so, even thought the world’s population is increasing rapidly, this doesn’t necessarily mean the environment’s condition has to further decline (you need to clearly state what does he highlight about population?). Hence, he concludes on an optimistic note as he points out that the problems at hand are not impossible to reduce or solve. He also emphasizes on how in today’s modern world, it is easy to access information and solutions regarding these problems and that makes it easier for us to work towards it.

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MET

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In "Collapse" by Diamond (2005), the author mentions that people damaging the world and he categorized them into four chapter. In first chapter author highlights that people damaging and destroying the nature. People do deforestation and build new unnatural habitats. Author states some benefits of forests and the results of deforestation. In second chapter author mentions his worries about capacity of resources. People mostly use fossil fuels to provide energy. Author explains in the future when people consume current resources, finding new resources will be more catastrophic and expensive. In third chapter Diamond discusses that people produce harmful things and release to nature. Author gives some examples to harmful things and states that it causes serious human health problems. Harmful things especially gases also causes environmental problems. Author mentions about how it damages the environment and what is its results. In last part author outlines the effect of high rate of population but he defends high rate of population does not damage the world. What damages the world is communities individual behaves. And author shares some statics and examples about that. Jared Diamond defines himself he is a cautious optimist person about future. He states people causes environmental problems and also they can stop causing problems and fix them. The future is depends their choice.

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MET

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In "Collapse" Diamond (2205) dramond discusses the most critical environmental problems on society which are natural habitats,energy sources,toxic chemicals and human-made habitats like roads villages and cities.Also,the writer mentions that extraction and damages of fossil fuels. Moreover, the author discusses toxic chemicals which cause to low concentrations, birth defects and mental retardation and also the writer stress that there are several problems involve the increase in human population. More people require more food and space.The writer concludes by arguing that we have opportunity to learn from the mistakes of past and this opportunity to make a difference.

Make sure you state all the supporting ideas and stress the important points the author states.

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MET

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In "Collapse," by Diamond (2005), he explains the impact of people on the destruction of nature. The author describes the harm to the environment under in four main titles. These are habitats, human activities, population rate, and energy sources. According Accounting to the writer humans are destroying natural habitats. And they are converting them to human-made habitats. Nature is our source of life but we prevent sustainability by destroying unnecessary habitats. Refer to the author here - the author also stresses that One of the worlds major energy resources is fossil fuels. But we use too much and then these kinds of fuels can make us sick and they can destroy the balance of nature. Since fossil fuels are not renewable resources, they will run out after a certain time. The writer strongly suggests using sustainable and less toxic energy resources because if we continue to use this much fossil fuel we will break the circle of life. We already cause global warming. We produce so many gases and these gases damage the zone layer. The author thinks  (use a reporting verb that makes the author's attitude clear) that we will need more natural resources due to the increasing population. (refer to the author -  the author warns that ...) That's why we need to be careful. And lastly, this article is for people to learn from past mistakes and make the world a better place. The author looks at the issue positively because if we have made this world this way, we can restore it to its former state (how can we do? what does he suggest?).

Thank you for the task. Good attempt, make the population and lifestyle idea clear and use reporting verbs.

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MET

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In the article ''Collapse" by Diamond (2005) the author claims that we should be realistic for the global warming  that concerns everybody whom is destroying natural habitats. He criticizes the usage of the energy sources, especially fossil fuels which is deeper, dirtier and more expensive than other resources, and it will involve higher environmental costs. Also toxic chemicals in our  environment, by breathing or eating  they get into our bodies and destroy our reproductive and immune systems.
Also Diamond states that world's population will be growing too fastly. If it's our consumption and destruction continue like this, people will require more food, clean air, space, water and these will cause it' increase lots off new problems. For conclusion the ideas of Diamond, he is optimist and hopeful for the future because only human can be control, change and solve the problems they have created in the world through collaboration and learning from the past mistakes.

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MET

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In "Collapse", Diamond (2005) discusses that humans are destroying natural habitats and causing global warming while there is a chance of reducing it as much as possible.  (The author first starts with destruction of the ecosystem and deforestation then moves on with fossi fuels.) The author states the usage of fossil fuels is not going to be easy as it is like our generations (language hinders meaning). The main problems with fossil fuels are stated (language hinders meaning) as natural gas and oil will only last for few more decades. Additionally it will be really harmful for the environment because the reserves are going to be dirtier and more expensive to extract the fossil fuels in few decades. Also Human beings destroy natural habitats by converting them to human-made habitats such as cities, villages (this idea is presented first by the author, make sure you follow the order of ideas the author presents) and etc. (avoid "etc." in academic you need to be specific) The author also highlights that the effects of toxic chemicals on humans are causing birth defects, mental retardation and permanent damage to our immune which can cause to death. (you need to mention his last supporting idea which is about population?) In conclusion, The main idea of the text is that the world is in our hands (The author claims that we are the reason of all these problems but we also have the potential to solve them).  In conclusion, the purpose of the writer is that the number of people doesn't matter, the impact they put in our world matters (this is a supporting idea that needs to be mentioned earlier. The problems that are getting bigger and bigger everyday such as global warning and fossil fuel problems as i mentioned (this is summary writing, the ideas are stated by the writer), Diamond (2005) tries to force our generations (to do what?) so that the problems that happened before our generation will not wont happen again (but the problems are the ones we have created not our grandparents?)

Thank you for the task. Go over my comments. The order of the ideas is problematic and main argument statement needs to be rewritten.

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MET

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In 'Collapse' by Diamond(2005), the author argues that people cause global warming and people destroy the natural habitats to open up spaces for cities, farms and factories. In this fast consuming decades people consume more fossil fuels and many sources and its cause global warming which means rapid rising world temperature. Writer warns us to be careful about using sources and he is hopeful for the future.

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In "Collapse" Diamond (2005)  explains  people's effects to on nature with make by making a connection between from the past to the future.

Since people notice their power over nature, they do deforestation to create their own living spaces and  meet their unnecessary needs.