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I notice that I said driveway but I didn't change hill to driveway.

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I noticed that I added dialogue and I had paragraphs. I also noticed that I stuck to the main part of the story and didn't say something that didn't go along with the main theme.  I did a lot of short sentences that made my story more interesting and I did more dialogue.

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I that I left in a tone of stuff in my first time writing, My second time I didn't need all of the stuff that I had in before. I didn't have things like a movie that had nothing to do with my writing.

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My first had to be edited a lot! There wasn't a lot of dialogue, and i didn't explain who someone is.

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I used more describing words like my face got red hot red. I thank my reader got more interested in the story when I added more things like that.

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I added a lot more detail

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I have grown as a writer to be better at describing things and describing my actions.

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I have grow as a writer for my intro In my last piece I had no intro at all. I also had no detail at all and on my Narrative I have about a full page of description. In My first piece I was leaving out a lot of important parts of my story.

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I had to add more paragraphs to my story so then it wasn't a really big chunk of text  and so there was a break in the text

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i need to put spases after .... I have grown as a witter

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I noticed That I made my writing more easier to read and that I had paragraphs

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I noticed that I did not use as much run on sentences. I also noticed that the structure of my writing was way more easy to read.

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so befor i thought

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I noticed that In this writing I have one piece of dialogue. When I made my begging it did not collaborate with the story.

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In my super fanatic writing peicenow I used more feelings and emotions then my last peice !

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I have grown in my writing by adding more dialogue and spacing with commas periods. I break up my writing by using more paragraphs. XD :D

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I was more descriptive and i am i used dialog.

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I NEED more periods I dont have to add McDonalds in my story because its not important I got kinda side track from my story I am adding more descriptive words and attributes. I'm adding too much capitals that's almost all you can see.

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i noticed that i have better hand writing than i did then i added more dialogue

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I noticed that how much I've really grown in my writing because its sad of how much this writing suck, but my other one i think i did really good >3. And other than that i think more of explaining the details and what I or

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Before I had no paragraphs and very little dialog. Now I have paragraphs and lots of dialog.

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I notice that in my on-demand piece, I didn't think about how I could elaborate on my story and add detail.  I tried to add specific descriptions like, "Snuffles eyes looked like two chewed up raisins, but to me, he was still perfect."

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I noticed that in my on demand, I was not descriptive at all and in my new piece I was really descriptive. I also had no dialogue in my on demand and I had

dialogue in my new piece. I was only focused on the main point in my new piece.

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One thing I noticed was a had a really bad introduction on my on demand.Now i have a great intro now