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I noticed she/he didn't skip lines, and I enjoyed this because it's funny that his mom failed to catch him😂.

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I think you can add how you felt when you were falling and WHAT your mother threw when you were falling. I think you could have said I will TRY again not JUST GIVE UP.

P.S. the word perfect you spelled it perfict.

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third grade writer's make their writing easy to read. I noticed that she made a drawing of the boat.

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I noticed that she/he didn't skip lines.

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I agree with terry because I liked how she/he did the beginning

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I like how they described their mother screaming but I think they can add waaaaay more details

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It’s funny because you fell out of the kayak 😂

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I liked that because it is very mysterious.

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I liked your story but I think you should remove the in your title because it isn’t so interesting to readers because a lot of people use it and it’s not that exiting.

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It was a nice story I like your doodle at the end but I think you could be more specific

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Therd graders do not say The end Only first graders and Katie too and KG one Says the end but third graders do not say the end.

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I loved the story but I feel like you could make the title more specific.

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I think that you should write a little more and add more detail

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I like the detail in your story and how you were describing the black spot and cockroach.

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I loved the drama and the dot reminds me of a story about the big dot and I love that it was night time and that you woke up it is so hilarious 😂😂

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Very nice story I like the part when you thought the black spot was a cockroach

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There was no beginning, middle and end. There were some spelling mistakes like coulded.

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I agree  with Walter and the rest it was good

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This book was nice because it had good handwriting and had a great ending but didn’t put the end

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I really like your book because I really like the detail and how you show how you felt when you woke up

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I disagree. Because  at the part And my mom screamed you should have put a full stop.
And when dad said he will by a new one you need to write this: we told dad about moms ring. That would make it much better but in all it was a good story

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Good gob explaining how it was warm in first of the story

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It was a really interesting story but you should not say I will never do the monkey bars agin you should practice like first time a tried to that monkey bar trick I fell to but I did not give the next day I tried and tried until I successfully finished the trick and you should to that to!

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I love the story but maybe you can add more details to the end.

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I like your story but there’s one problem from your handwriting you didn’t leave space still words and make it a little bit bigger

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I like your story ,the ending was really nice. Next time add more details

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You did have a good piece of work like it made me think of pictures in my head. Maybe next time you can add “dialogue” in your writing

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I think you can add an better ending

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I think they wrote her mom lost her ring in the sand they just ca not find it and just left it there, so I think it's not that good to cant find it okay buy a new one.

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The story was a good idea but I think you should be more specific on the ending instead of saying ,and then my dad bought her a new one maybe write , and my dad couldn’t find it eaither so my dad had no choice but to by her a new one.and that was the time we lost my mom’s wedding ring 😁

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You could have put a lot more emotions

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I like your story but you cloud have added instead of sad add depress

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I think it was a really good story but I think you should add more detail and be more specific next time

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I liked how you putted in juicy word in your writing. Maybe the next time you can be more a little bit more detailed in your story.

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She use punctuation!.?

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I like the doodling and drawing of this story and I liked how you started with a "warm sunny day"

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I love wen used the word suddenly

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Your story is nice but don’t say it was a new more summer more details that’s just it was a normal summer and I like at that Sending you put a boat for next time don’t say thend say something like It was a good day.

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If you add more detail to your story it is very interesting and I like the drawing at the bottom

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I loved the story but maybe you could add a little bit more to your writing like where your dad bought your mom  another ring you know stufff like that

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You could have put a happy ending

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I think you need to make sure that your story has been happy and you can put more experience into your story

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There were spelling mistakes and the sentences were too long. He or she used too many I’s.

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I disagree because her dad push her in the water and she said it was cold 

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I disagree because her dad push her in the water and she said it was cold 

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I liked wen you said used the word swing great gob

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I like the juicy words in your story but I think that you can make the story a little longer and skip lines

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I agree with Mohammad because he or she can write a little bit more and be more detailed in the last part.

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I agree with Lucia

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It was funny when her dad pushed her in 😂

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I like this book guys it learned me not to do that and she said the end

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I like your title was the little drawing but next time make some space in the words I can’t read properly

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I love your story because it has a lot of filings

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I agree with Anthony because he went kayaking with his dad but he didn’t made his trip so much fun things like he just finished with “we went back to the sand safety”

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I like that you still tried to do it good job I like how you tried your best

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Good job , you write very neatly and your hand writing is nice but if you add more discription to story it will be nicer

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This Third graders Title is to Messi what he shod bo next time is right Nicely.

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I like your story but I think you can check your work for instance. You were trying to spell taking and you spelled it tuking that is wrong so check your work next time thanks.

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I loved the story because there is lots of details and talking

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I agree with ayla who disagrees with xiofan because it is the publishing stage.

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Overall I loved your story it was really kind for the dad to get a new ring for the mom

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I disagree with Mohammad because you're not really being that specific because you said you can add more details but you didn't say add what details, so next time you can be more specific

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I like the story because there are lots of Details to describe the setting

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That is funny it’s just a bug😂

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But we don’t know if the kid is a girl or a boy matey should add that.

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I know it’s funny too and when her dad push her 😜

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It was a creepy 🧟‍♀️Story

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This Other third grader olso seid the end but you shod add finally.

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I agree with Laith

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It’s nice details

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It’s not creepy

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I agree with Anthony

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I liked how you told how she lost her ring

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I liked how you tried

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You need to add more detail

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It is funny that you fell out of the kayak

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I like the story to be mysterious

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I like that you learned your lesson