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ThS: In the Philippines, the best place to visit is Manila Ocean Park because it offers good services, places for educational opportunities like the Trails to Antarctica and the World of Creepy Crawlies, and fun shows such as the Symphony Evening show and the Sea Lion show. (APPROVED)

TS1: First, Manila Ocean Park offers good services to its tourists. (ok)
TS2: Second, it offers places for educational opportunities like the Trails to Antarctica and the World of Creepy Crawlies. (ok)
TS3: Finally, it also offers fun shows such as the Symphony Evening show and Sea Lion show. (ok)

HOOK: "It's fun in the Philippines" -Department of Tourism (Note: This is approved, but make sure that when you write it in your paper, it is in a sentence form.)

Sources: https://www.manilaoceanpark.com/

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EDITED ThS:
Palawan is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its stunning beaches like the Nacpan and Nagtabon Beach, the Puerto Princesa underground river, and hospitable residents. APPROVED

TS 1: One reason why  Palawan is the best tourist spot in the Philippines is because of its spotless beaches like the Nacpan and Nagtabon Beach. APPROVED

TS 2: A second reason for Palawan being the best tourist spot is because of its Puerto Pricesa or the under ground river. APPROVED

TS 3: A third reason is because of its hospitable residents. APPROVED

Hook: According to Travel + Leisure, Palawan was voted the best island in the world for two straight years. APPROVED

sources:
http://www.stuff.co.nz/travel/destinations/asia/99724286/Palawan-Island-Is-this-oreally-the-best-island-in-the-world

http://ppur.com.ph/5-reasons-visit-underground-river-palawan-summer/

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ThS: Palawan is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because it is known for its majestic mountains such as the Mt. Salakot and Mt. Turing, wonderful caves like Puerto Princesa Underground River and Cathedral Caves, and impeccable beaches such as El Nido Resorts, Pangulasian Island and El Nido Resorts Apulit Island. (APPROVED)

TS 1: One of the best reasons to visit Palawan is its majestic mountains such as Mt. Salakot and Mt. Turing.

TS 2: Another reason to visit Palawan is to explore the wonderful caves such as Puerto Princesa Underground River and the Cathedral Caves.

TS 3 : Lastly, it is also wonderful to visit Palawan and admire its impeccable beaches such as El Nido Resorts, Pangulasian Island and El Nido Resorts Apulit Island.

HOOK : According to detourista.com, Palawan definitely should be on the top of the list.

References:
https://www.tripadvisor.com.ph/Attractions-g294255-Activities-c57-t54-Palawan_Island_Palawan_Province_Mimaropa.html

https://www.oyster.com/palawan/hotels/roundups/best-beach-hotels-in-palawan-philippines/

https://www.detourista.com/guide/philippines-best-places/

https://www.tripadvisor.com.ph/Attractions-g294255-Activities-c57-t66-Palawan_Island_Palawan_Province_Mimaropa.html

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ThS: (Draft 3)
Palawan is one of the best tourist spots in the Philippines because of its beautiful white beaches that have clear blue water such as Banol Beach and Banana Island, locals who welcome tourists with smiles, and amazing underground river called Puerto Princesa. (APPROVED)

TS 1: Banol Beach and Banana Island make the tourists feel relaxed because of their clear blue water. (ok)

TS 2: The residents of Palawan are hospital and helpful to the tourists visiting their place. (ok)

hen arriving in Palawan, you are welcomed with the bright smiles of the locals and when touring around they can give you all kinds of facts about Palawan that you can not find on the internet. (NOTE: do not use 2nd POV, and do not provide supporting details)

TS 3: The underground river called Puerto Princesa ia one of the famous places in Palawan. (ok)

Hook: According to Oprah Winfrey, 'The biggest adventure you can ever take is to live the life of your dreams." APPROVED and that dream can be fullfilled in Palawan

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ThS: Palawan is a must-see when traveling to the Philippines because of its serene forests such as Cleopatra's Needle Forest Reserve, scenic mountains such as Mount Salakot and Mount Thumbpeak, and picturesque beaches such as Nacpan Beach and Banol Beach. APPROVED

TS1: Forests in Palawan such as Cleopatra’s Needle Forest Reserve are tranquil. APPROVED

TS2: Mountains in Palawan such as Mount Salakot and Mount Thumbpeak are exhilarating. APPROVED

TS3: Beaches in Palawan such as Nacpan Beach and Banol Beach are pristine. APPROVED

Hook: According to travelandleisure.com, Palawan is one of the best islands in the world (scoring no. 6 among the 15 islands named).  APPROVED

References
https://www.tripadvisor.com.ph/Attractions-g294255-Activities-c57-t66-Palawan_Island_Palawan_Province_Mimaropa.html

https://www.google.com.ph/amp/s/amp.travelandleisure.com/worlds-best/islands

https://www.travel-palawan.com/cleopatra-needle-forest-reserve/

https://www.travel-palawan.com/the-5-most-beautiful-beaches-in-palawan/

https://m.huffpost.com/us/entry/6193058

https://www.gopalawan.travel/travel-info/top-5-things-to-do-in-palawan

https://www.tripadvisor.com.ph/Attraction_Review-g294256-d4227525-Reviews-Nacpan_Beach-El_Nido_Palawan_Island_Palawan_Province_Mimaropa.html

https://www.tripadvisor.com.ph/Attraction_Review-g729733-d2061970-Reviews-Banol_Beach-Coron_Busuanga_Island_Palawan_Province_Mimaropa.html

https://www.tripadvisor.com.ph/Attraction_Review-g294257-d3539733-Reviews-Mount_Thumbpeak-Puerto_Princesa_Palawan_Island_Palawan_Province_Mimaropa.html

https://www.tripadvisor.com.ph/Attraction_Review-g294256-d4227525-Reviews-Nacpan_Beach-El_Nido_Palawan_Island_Palawan_Province_Mimaropa.html

https://businessmirror.com.ph/palawan-phls-last-frontier-under-siege/

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Ths: Bohol is one of the best tourist spots in the Philippines because of its famous Chocolate Hills, adorable tarsiers, and white sand beaches like  the Alona Beach and the San Isidro Beach. (APPROVED)

TS 1: Bohol is famous for its Chocolate Hills.  (ok)

TS 2: Bohol is not only famous for its Chocolate Hills, but for its adorable and eye catching tarsiers. (ok)

TS 3: Bohol has wonderful beaches such as the Alona Beach and the San Isidro Beach. (ok)

Hook:  Would you want to know why is Bohol considered as one of the best tourist spots in the Philippines and why people love visiting this place? (ok)

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THS: Tagaytay is the best and mostly visited tourist spot in the Philippines because of its friendly residents, peaceful environment, and  good food such as the milk fish and the bulalo (beef stew).

(APPROVED)

TS 1: The residents in Tagaytay are very friendly. (ok)

TS2: Its peaceful environment, provides relaxation to the tourist.

Suggested TS2: Its peaceful environment provides relaxation to the tourists.

(APPROVED)

TS3: Tagaytay is also famous for its delicious milk fish and bulalo.

Suggested ThS: Tagaytay is also famous for its delicious milk fish and bulalo.

(APPROVED)

Hook: Being in Tagaytay is like having Hakuna Matata.

(APPROVED)

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(Draft #2) ThS: Baguio is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because it offers cool weather, delicious delicacies such as strawberry taho and peanut brittle, and captivating museums such as Ben Cab Museum, and the Bamboo Art Museum. (APPROVED)

TS1: Baguio has cool weather to take a break from regular Philippine weather. (ok)
TS2: Along the streets of Baguio, residents sell street foods like strawberry taho and peanut brittle. (ok)
TS3: Museums such as the BenCab Museum and the Bamboo Art Museum have been built to promote Baguio's artistry. (ok)

Hook: Baguio is known as the "Summer Capital of the Philippines" because of the many tourists who come to relax and to enjoy the its beautiful scenery. (ok)

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ThS: Draft 2
The best tourist spot in the Philippines is Cebu because of its beautiful beaches such as Sumilon Island and Paradise Beach, mesmerizing whale sharks in Oslob, and breathtaking waterfalls like Tumalog Falls in Oslob and Dao Falls in Samboan Island. (APPROVED)

TS 1: Cebu has beautiful beaches like Sumilon Island and Paradise Beach that offers relaxation to the tourists. APPROVED

TS 2:People can also visit the mesmerizing whale sharks in Oslob. (APPROVED)

TS 3: And lastly, visitors can enjoy swimming in the breathtaking waterfalls like Tumalog Falls in Oslob and Dao Falls in Samboan Island. (APPROVED)

Hook:(Revised) "The journey not the arrival matters."-T.S. Eliot REVISE: THIS IS TOO SUBJECTIVE AND UNREALISTIC.

References:
https://bantayanisland.com/listings/how-to-get-to-paradise-beach-on-bantayan-island/
https://adrenalineromance.com/2016/02/26/dau-falls-cooling-off-at-samboans-highest-waterfall/
https://adrenalineromance.com/2015/03/28/tumalog-falls-a-magical-gossamer-curtain-in-oslob/
http://www.everythingcebu.com/attractions/places/sumilon-island/

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ThS: (Draft 3) The best place to visit in the Philippines is Bohol because of its amazing clear beaches such as Alona Beach and Dumaluan Beach, breathtaking Chocolate Hills, and adorable Tarsiers. APPROVED

TS 1: Bohol is the best touring spot in the Philippines because of its amazing clear waters such as Alona beach and Dumaluan Beach.  (APPROVED)

TS 2: Chocolate Hills gives a breath-taking view to the tourists.  (APPROVED)

TS 3: Tarsiers which live in Bohol attract and fascinate many tourists.  (APPROVED)

Hook: "It's better to see something once than to hear it a thousand times" -Travel Quotes
Note: This is approved, but make sure it is in a sentence form when you write it in your paper.

References: https://www.tripadvisor.com.ph/Attractions-g294259-Activities-Bohol_Island_Bohol_Province_Visayas.html

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TS: Palawan is one of the best tourist spots in the Philippines because of its attractive places such as Puerto Princesa and El Nido, colorful mountains such as the Mt. Salakot, and underground caves and rivers  such as Palawan Underground River or St. Paul underground river. (APPROVED)

Note: The order of TS should be aligned with the THS.

TS 1: Palawan has one of the most attractive places in the Philippines  such as Puerto Princesa and El Nido. (ok)
TS 2:  Mt. Salakot is one of the colorful mountains in Palawan.(ok)
TS 3:  Palawan has famous underground caves and rivers  such as Palawan Underground River or St. Paul underground river.(ok)

Hook: According to vigattintourism.com, Palawan is one of the best tourist spots in the Philippines. APPROVED

Sources: https://www.vigattintourism.com/tourism/articles/Top-10-most-magnificent-causesinthePhilippines

https://www.tripadvidor.com.ph/Attractions-g29425-Activities-Palawan_Palawan_mimaropa.html

https://www.tripadvidor.com.ph/Attractions-g29425-Activities-e57-Palawan_Island_Palawan_Province_mimaropa.html

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ThS: The best tourist spot in the Philippines is Cebu because of its historic places like Fort San Pedro and Magellan's cross, stellar food like lechon and barbecue, and  fun activities for families  like Skypark and waterpark.
APPROVED

TS 1: Firstly, Cebu gives a taste of history with its monuments such as Magellan's Cross and The Heritage. REVISE: Specify
TS 2: Secondly, Cebu also has amazing and delicious Lechon and barbeque both for Filipinos and tourists. (APPROVED)
TS 3: Lastly, families have fun with their kids at Sky park and water parks. REVISE: Review the guidelines.

Hook: Did you ever want to relax even if you aren't out of the country?  REVISE: Review the guidelines.

Sources:
https://trip101.com/article/top-10-things-to-do-in-cebu-with-kids

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ThS: (2nd Draft)
Balesin is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its clean beaches such as the Balesin Village and the Bali Village, stunning swimming pools like the ones in Toscana Village and Mykonyos, and different outdoor activities like scuba diving and water skiing. (APPROVED)

TS 1:
One reason why people go to Balesin is because of its clean beaches such as the Balesin Village and the Bali Village. (ok)
TS 2:
Balesin's stunning swimming pools like the ones in Toscana Village and Mykonyos attract a lot of tourists. (ok)
TS 3:
Scuba diving and water skiing provide a great experience to the tourists. (ok)

Hook:
Balesin is the best area to notice the real beauty in nature that really lies in the heart of the earth. APPROVED
URLS:
- www.balesin.com

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ThS: Boracay is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its beautiful beaches such as the Puka Shell Beach, the Bulabog Beach, and the Tambisaan Beach, and various activities to do such as  diving and sun bathing.

Approved ThS:
ThS: Boracay is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its beautiful beaches such as the Puka Shell Beach, the Bulabog Beach, and the Tambisaan Beach, various activities to do such as  diving and sun bathing, and delicious food like chorizo burger and their calamansi muffin.

TS 1: Boracay is very famous because of its famous beaches such as Puka Shell Beach, the Bulabog Beach, and the Tambisaan Beach. (ok)
TS 2: Boracay also provides fun activities that many people enjoy doing with their families and friends such as diving and sun bathing. (ok)
TS 3: Boracay also has delicious food like the Chorizo burger and Calamansi muffin. APPROVED

Hook : Out of all the other 7, 641 islands in the Philippines, what makes Boracay special? APPROVED

References:
https://www.villacaemilla.com/blog/top-5-foods-and-drinks-in-boracay-island/

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THS: Cebu is the best tourist spot because of its incomparable food like lechon and dried mangoes, breath-taking views such as Temple of Leah and Tumalog Falls, and enjoyable activities for families like Sinulog Festival and Papa Kit's Marina Fishing Lagoon. (approved)

TS 1:  Cebu offers delicious and famous Lechon and stomach filling dried mangoes to its tourists. (ok)
TS 2:  Cebu also has the most beautiful views such as Temple of Leah and Tumalog Falls. (ok)
TS 3:  Cebu has enjoyable activites for families like the Sinulog Festival and the Papa Kit's Marina Fishing Lagoon. (ok)

Hook: Fun and pleasure in Cebu makes the statement, "It's more fun in the Philippines," real.  APPROVED
https://www.google.com.ph/destination/map/topsights?q=best+tourist+spots+in+cebu&site=search&output=search&dest_mid=/m/01p_ly&sa=X&ved=0ahUKEwieho_G-ancAhWBfX0KHRj7A00Q6tEBCCsoBDAA

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ThS: Coron, Palawan is one of the best places to visit in the Philippines because of its beautiful and clean beaches such as Malcapuya Island and Banana Island, towering limestone cliffs like the one in twin lagoon, and picturesque remote islands such as Majika's Island Resort and Busuanga Remote Islands. APPROVED

TS 1: Coron has beautiful and clean beaches such as Malcapuya Island and Banana Island. (ok)

TS 2: It also has gorgeous towering cliffs located in twin lagoon. (ok)

TS 3: The remote islands of Majika's Island Resort and Busuanga Remote Islands have a very beautiful landscape. (ok)

Hook: According to thejoysofjourneying.wordpress.com, the Coron limestones cliffs were formed 260 million years ago by tectonic movements. APPROVED

Sources: https://www.clubparadisepalawan.com/10-things-to-do-in-coron-palawan/
www.choosephilippines.com
www.tripadvisor.com.ph

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Ths: Mactan island in Cebu is the best tourist attraction in the Philippines because of its seaside resorts such as Nalusuan Island Marine Sanctuary and Lantaw Native Restaurant,  snorkeling, and scuba diving spots like The Kontiki Reef and Agus Bay.

Edited: Mactan Island in Cebu is the best tourist attraction in the Philippines because of its seaside resorts such as Nalusuan Island Marine Sanctuary and Lantaw Native Restaurant,  fun activities such as snorkeling and scuba diving, and mesmerizing places like The Kontiki Reef and Agus Bay. (APPROVED)

TS 1:The seaside resorts in Mactan ar amazing such as Nausuan Island Marine Sanctuary and Lantaw Native Restauran. APPROVED

TS 2:Snokeling and scuba diving in Mactan has the ability to make the trip more fun!
Edited: Snorkeling and diving are some of the fun activities tourists can do in Mactan Island.

TS 3: Mactan has mesmerizing places such as The Kontiki Reef and Agus Bay. APPROVED
Hook:
"It's more fun in the Philippines", as said by The Department of Tourisim.  APPROVED

(Source: https://www.thecrazytourist.com/15-best-things-mactan-island-philippines/

http://news.abs-cbn.com/focus/11/24/16/how-its-more-fun-in-ph-slogan-fared-from-2012-to-2016)

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ThS: "Baguio is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its unique souvenirs such as dream catchers and straw bags, strawberry farm called La Trinidad, and boat riding activities in Burnham Park. (APPROVED)

Note: Make sure that the order of topic sentences  is aligned with the ThS.

TS 2:  Another exciting thing the tourists can do is to pick fresh strawberries at La Trinidad strawberry farm. (ok)

TS 1: In Baguio, tourists can buy unique and exotic souvenirs. such as dream catchers and straw bags. (ok)

TS 3: Lastly, Burnham park offers its tourists nice and relaxing experience of both riding. (ok)

Hook: There are many places in the Philippines that are great for tourists, but  Baguio is the place that surpasses all the other tourist spots. (ok)

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ThS:  Boracay's  White Beach is the best tourist spot that everyone can enjoy because of its beautiful views such as Mount Luho and the clear seawater, delicious food such as buttermilk fried chicken  and curry crab, and safe environment. (APPROVED)
TS 1:

Boracay's White Beach is known for its beautiful views such as Mount Luho and the clear sea water. (APPROVED)

TS 2:

Buttermilk fried chicken and curry crabs are the famous food among the tourists. (ok)

TS 3:
Boracay's White Beach offers safe environment to its tourists. (ok)

Hook: Have you ever wondered if there is a beautiful paradise in the Philippines? (ok)
https://www.google.com.ph/destination/map/topsights?q=best+tourist+spot+in+the+philippines&rlz=1C1RLNS_enPH708PH709&site=search&output=search&dest_mid=/m/05v8c&sa=X&ved=0ahUKEwjKh7bM-ancAhXPb30KHWcQA9AQ69EBCCcoADAA#trifp=skpm%3D/m/01yqwg

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ThS: Bohol is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its  natural wonders like the Chocolate Hills, tarsiers, and the Loboc River, magnificent heritage sites such as the Baclayon Church and the Sandugo Shrine, and gorgeous white sand beaches like Alona Beach in Panglao Island. (approved)

TS 1: Bohol is well-known for its natural wonders like the Chocolate Hills, tarsiers, and the Loboc River. (ok)
TS 2:  Bohol has many heritage sites such as the Baclayon Church and the Sandugo Shrine. (ok)
TS 3:  Bohol is famous for its gorgeous white sand beaches like Alona Beach in Panglao Island.  (ok)

Hook: "Wherever you go, go with all your heart," said Confucius. (APPROVED)

References:
http://www.bohol-philippines.com/chocolate-hills.html

https://www.bohol.ph/article15.html

http://www.bohol-philippines.com/baclayon-church.html

https://www.bohol.ph/article8.html

http://www.bohol-philippines.com/blood-compact-site.html

http://www.boholtourismph.com/floating-restaurant/

http://www.alonabeachguide.com

https://www.infobohol.com/5-interesting-things-to-do-at-alona-beach/

https://www.philstar.com/other-sections/starweek-magazine/2018/06/03/1820989/another-look-bohol

https://www.brainyquote.com/quotes/confucius_161594

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ThS: Bohol is the best tourist spot because of the captivating view of the Chocolate Hills, clear and clean beaches such as Bolod Beach and Doljo Beach, and fun activity such as visiting the adorable Tarsiers in the Tarsier Conservation Area in Loboc, Bohol. (APPROVED)

TS 1 : Bohol is well recognized for its captivating view of the Chocolate Hills. (ok)

TS 2 : The stunning beaches in Bohol such as Bolod Beach and Dolijo Beach are clean and clear. (ok)

TS 3: In Bohol, one of the best places to visit is the Tarsier Conservation Area. (ok)

Hook: Alexandra Stoddard once said that when you leave a beautiful place,  you carry it with you and wherever you go. APPROVED

References:
http://www.bohol-philippines.com/tarsiers.html
https://www.bohol.ph/article6.html
http://www.bohol-philippines.com/bohol-beach.html
https://www.theintrepidguide.com/ultimate-inspirational-travel-quotes-list/

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1. ThS

Draft 3:  Cebu is a very wonderful place to visit because of its very hospitable residents, the Sinulog Festival, and fun activities such as snorkeling and swimming. APPROVED

TS 1: First, People in Cebu are very enthusiastic.

TS1: Cebu is known to tourists because of its hospitable residents. APPROVED

TS 2: Second, the Sinulog Festival is very exciting and enthusiastic.

TS2: Sinulog festival is one of the reasons Cebu became a famous place for tourists.   APPROVED

TS 3: And third, Sayaw Beach offers many activities to its tourists such as snorkeling and swimming. APPROVED

TS 3: Beaches in Cebu such as Sayaw Beach  very beautiful.

Hook: Have you ever considered visiting Cebu to have a relaxing vacation? (REVISE: Kindly review the guidelines.)

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Thesis: The best tourist spot in the Philippines is Cebu because of its clean beaches such as Mactan Newtown Beach and Nalusuan Beach, kind hotel servers, and fun activities to do like snorkeling and fish feeding. (APPROVED)

Topic Sentence 1: Cebu provides its tourists clean beaches such as Mactan Newtown Beach and Santiago Bay.  APPROVED

Topic Sentence 2: The tourists enjoy their stay in Cebu because of kind services provided by hotel servers. APPROVED

Topic Sentence 3: Snorkeling and fish feeding are the fun activities tourists can do during their stay in Cebu.  APPROVED

Hook: "Do something today that your future self will thank you for" -Sean Patrick Flanery APPROVED

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ThS:(Draft 2)

The best tourist spot in the Philippines is the Puerto Princesa Underground River because it was declared a World Heritage Site by UNESCO, it is one of the New Seven Wonders of Nature, and it provides very educational and thrilling experiences such as seeing certain endangered and rare species like the Palawan Hornbill and the Palawan Scoops Owl. (APPROVED)

Note: Do not include supporting details in the topic sentence.

TS 1: The Puerto Princesa Underground River was declared a World Heritage Site by UNESCO. (ok)

TS 2: The Underground River that was declared a World Heritage Site was also voted in as a a part is also one of the New Seven Wonders of Nature according to Bernard Weber, the founder-president of the New7Wonders Foundation in Zurich, Switzerland. and b eing part of the 7 chosen ones is prestige enough for tourists to visit.

EDITED: According to Bernard Weber, the Underground River is considered one of the 7 Wonders of Nature. (Note: This is approved. The other details should be part of the supporting details.)

TS 3: A thrilling and exciting experiences await those who go to the Puerto Princesa Underground River. A thrilling and educational experience Palawan can offer to its tourists is to see the Palawan Hornbill and the Palawan Scoops Owl.  APPROVED

Hook: According to expertvagabond.com, we travel not to escape life, but for life not to escape us. (APPROVED)

Sources:

https://whc.unesco.org/en/list/652
https://nature.new7wonders.com/wonders/puerto-princessa-underground-river-philippines/
https://about.new7wonders.com/2011/11/11/the-new7wonders-of-nature-are/
http://ppur.com.ph/5-reasons-visit-underground-river-palawan-summer/
http://undergroundriver.puertoprincesa.ph/?q=basic-page/about-us/biodiversity
https://expertvagabond.com/best-travel-quotes/

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Draft 3: Cebu is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its clean beaches such as the Logon Beach Malapascua and Tingko Beach, delicious food like Danggit and Letchon Cebu, and  green environment. APPROVED

TS 1: Tourists can visit Cebu's clean beaches such as Logon Beach Malapascua and Tingko Beach. APPROVED
TS 2: Cebu has delicious food like Danggit and the very well-known Letchon Cebu. APPROVED
TS 3: Lastly, aside from the clean beaches and delicious food, Cebu has green and healthy environment. APPROVED

HOOK: As Nathan Philips said, "If you are in a beautiful place where you can enjoy sunrise and sunset, then you are living like a lord." APPROVED

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THS: Coron Palawan is the best place in the Philippines because of its clean environment, beautiful beaches such as the Black Island Beach and the Banana Island Beach, and relaxing ambiance. (APPROVED)

TS1:The blue clear water, clean  surroundings and fresh air will surely impress the guests who will be visiting the island . ⁽REVISE: Kindly review the content of your ThS.)

TS2: According to tripadvisor.com, the beauty of the rock formations in Black Island and Banana Island leave visitors in awe.

⁽APPROVED)

TS3: The peaceful sound of the sea, still blue water, powdery white sand, and the cool breeze  are perfect for guests who want to de-stress and unwind.APPROVED

HOOK: According to www. sayingimages.com, “The tans will fade but the memories will last forever."  APPROVED

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ThS: (Draft 2) Ilocos Norte is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its beautiful attractions such as the Kapurpurawan Rock Formation and the Cape Bojeador Lighthouse, enjoyable activities for families such as walking along the white sand beach and sand boarding down the sand dunes.

EDITED: Ilocos Norte is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its beautiful attractions such as the Kapurpurawan Rock Formation and the Cape Bojeador Lighthouse, enjoyable activities such as walking along the white sand beach and sand boarding, and museums such as the Marcos Museum and the Toaid. APPROVED

TS 1: The most popular tourist spots in Ilocos Norte are the Kapurpurawan Rock Formation, and the Cape Bojeador Lighthouse. APPROVED

TS 2: A few of the most enjoyable activities in Ilocos Norte are walking along the white sand beaches and having a blast while sand boarding down a slope. APPROVED

TS 3: Amazing historical facts about Ilocos Norte can be found by visiting the Marcos Museum and the TAOID. APPROVED

Hook: Saint Augustine once said, "The world is a book, and those who don't travel read only a page."     APPROVED

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ThS: The best place to visit in the Philippines is Bohol because of its beautiful landscapes such as the Chocolate Hills and Mahogany Man-made Forest, clean environment, and white and clean beaches such as Alona Beach and Dumaluan Beach. (APPROVED)

TS 1: A must-see places in Bohol are the Chocolate Hills and the Mahogany Man-made Forest. (ok)

TS 2: Their Clean environment is another reason why Bohol is an amazing tourist spot. (ok)

TS 3: Alona Beach and Anda Beach is are two of the many beautiful beaches travelers must see in Bohol. (ok)

Hook: Gustave Flaubett said that "Travel makes one modest. You see what a tiny place you occupy in the world.   REVISE: CHECK ITS MECHANICS. Kindly review the guidelines.

References:
https://www.journeyera.com/bohol-adventure/

http://www.bohol-philippines.com/bohol-beach.html

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WHITE - if the the ThS is not yet approved

PINK - if the ThS is approved already

YELLOW - if you are ready with your topic sentences

BLUE - if all the topic sentences are approved already and if you are ready with your HOOK

VIOLET: turn it violet if you're done.

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ThS: Cebu is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its many beautiful beaches such as Bounty Beach in Malapascua Island, Roman Catholic churches such as Basilica Minore Del Sto. Nino and Cebu Metropolitan Cathedral, and historical sites like Magellan's Cross and the Fuerza de San Pedro. (APPROVED)

TS 1: The beaches in Cebu like the Bounty Beach in Malapascua Island are breath-taking and spectacular. (ok)
TS 2: The Roman Catholic churches located in Cebu being Basilica Minore Del Sto. Nino and Cebu Metropolitan Cathedral are very grand and give a sense of the past. (ok)
TS 3: Lastly, the historical sites in Cebu such as Magellan's Cross and the Fuerza de San Pedro show the rich history of the province during the Spanish period.
(ok)

Hook : According to the Travel + Leisure Travel Magazine, Cebu is one of the best islands in the world scoring number 8 out of 15 of the islands. APPROVED

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ThS: (Draft 2) Puerto Princesa Subterranean River is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its fun boat ride activity, clear waters such as the  underground river and Sabang Beach, and green environment. APPROVED

TS 1: (Draft 2) Puerto Princesa offers a fun boat riding activity to its tourists. APPROVED

TS 2: (Draft 4) Another reason why Puerto Princesa is the best tourist spot is the clear water in its underground river and in Sabang Beach.

Edited: Another reason why Puerto Princesa is the best tourist spot is its clear water in the underground river and Sabang Beach. APPROVED

TS 3: (Draft 2) Puerto Princesa has many kinds of flora and fauna that makes it a healthy and green environment. APPROVED

Hook: (Draft 2) According to nature.new7wonders.com, Puerto Princesa was claimed as one of the New7Wonders of Nature last January 28, 2012. APPROVED

References:
http://ppur.com.ph/general-information/
https://nature.new7wonders.com/wonders/puerto-princessa-underground-river-philippines

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ThS:

Boracay is one of the best tourist spots in the Philippines because of its the breathtaking beaches with pristine white sand such as The Puka Beach and The White Beach, great shopping centers like The  City Mall and The D Mall, and hospitable locals. APPROVED

TS 1: Firstly, Boracay is well-known for their its breathtaking beaches with pristine white sand such as The Puka Beach and The White Sand Beach. (ok)
TS 2: Secondly, Boracay offers great places to shop like The City mall and The D Mall. (ok)
TS 3: Lastly, Boracay becomes one of the best tourist spot because of its hospitable residents. (ok)

Hook: Boracay is the best place to unwind and feel the breeze of happiness in our surroundings.  (APPROVED)
Sources:
https://www.tripadvisor.com.ph/Attractions-g294260-Activities-c26Boracay_Malay_Aklan_Province_Panay_Island_Visayas.html

https://boracaycompass.com/beaches-guide/

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ThS: Cebu is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its luxurious resorts such as Shangri-La's Mactan Resort and Crimson Resort, breath-taking beaches like Bakhaw Beach and Paradise Beach, and extravagant delicacies such as Lechon Cebu and Dried Mangoes. APPROVED

T1:  Cebu has the best world-class resorts in the Philippines such as the Shangri-La's Mactan Resort and Crimson Resort. (ok)

T2 (Draft): The last reason is because of the astonishing beaches where you can snorkel to see Whale sharks and other elegant marine creatures, relax by the seaside, and swim until your heart's content. (REVISE: Do not use 1st or 2nd POV and do not include supporting details.)

TS2: Another reason is because Cebu offers astonishing beaches to its tourists such as Bakhaw Beach and Paradise Beach. APPROVED

T3: Lastly, Cebu is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its savoury delicacies and favorful delights like Lechon Cebu and Dried Mangoes. (ok)

(Draft) Hook: Imagine the perfect vacation anyone could ever have, and you get the chance to enjoy your summer there. (REVISE - consistency of POV)

Hook:  According to detourista.com, Cebu is an awesome jump-off point and base to explore the Philippines. (APPROVED.)

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The TITLE
>is creative and not a common one.
>has no quotation marks and is not underlined.

The INTRODUCTION
>has a creative hook.
>has a statement that connects the hook to the thesis statement.
>has the approved thesis statement.

The HOOK
>has a specific source if it is a quotation or statement.
examples:
According to touristspot.com, Palawan is _____.
Mother Delia once said that ____.
>is in 3rd POV unless it is a statement given by other person or a quotation. Then, provide the source.
>is CREATIVE and not just a simple statement or question. (Note: This is a challenge for everyone.)

The THESIS STATEMENT
>follows the correct format (PLACE + STAND (the best tourist spot in the Philippines) + 3 REASONS with specific examples.
>has no supporting details.
>uses only 3rd POV such as residents, people, they, their, them, it, and its.

EACH BODY PARAGRAPH
>has indention.
>has a topic sentence that is related to the thesis statement.
>has at least 4 supporting details that are directly related to the topic sentence.
>has a concluding sentence that summarizes the content of the paragraph
>has creative descriptions, sensory details or imageries to make a clear picture of the place/people/animal

The TOPIC SENTENCE
>is aligned with the approved thesis statement in terms of its content and order.
>has no supporting details.
>focuses only on the content of the ThS.
>is direct to the point and specific like the ThS.
>has 3rd POV only.

The CONCLUSION
>has a restated thesis statement. (Rephrase the ThS creatively. Add descriptions. Make your reader feel that your chosen spot is really the best for the tourists.)
>has no statement that is not supported in the essay.
>has a strong statement that will leave a strong impression about your chosen tourist spot.

The ESSAY
>has reliable references. (It could be printed.)
>is not plagiarized.
>has at least 5 descriptions, sensory details or imageries. (Kindly underline.)
>follows the 4Cs in writing: Content, Coherence, Correctness, and Clarity.

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ThS: Boracay is the most relaxing and enjoyable tourist spot in the Philippines because of its beaches such as White Beach and Puka Shell Beach, hospitable locals, and luxurious resorts such as Two Seasons and the Lind. APPROVED

TS1: Boracay has the best beaches in the Philippines such as the White Beach and the Puka Beach. APPROVED

TS2: The island itself is not only nice, but the people who work there are very friendly and hospitable. (APPROVED)

TS3: Boracay is also famous because of its luxurious resorts like Two Seasons and The Lind. APPROVED

Hook: Would you want to know why Boracay is the best and most enjoyable tourist spot in the Philippines? (REVISE: Kindly review the guidelines.)

Sources:
http://www.ladyironchef.com/2014/04/boracay-travel-guide/

https://boracaycompass.com/beaches-guide/

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Thesis Statement:
El Nido, Palawan is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its clean environment, fun activities such as diving and island hopping, and mouth-watering food like Filipino Tocino and Garlic Rice.  (APPROVED)

Topic Sentence 1: First, El Nido has a clean and eye-catching environment that attracts tourists. (ok)

Topic Sentence 2: Second, El Nido hosts fun activities such as island hopping and diving.  (ok)

Topic Sentence 3: Lastly, the restaurants in El Nido serve mouth-watering food such as Filipino tocino and Garlic Rice. (ok)

Hook: "It is more fun in the Philippines.", says the Phlippine's tourism slogan.

Edited: "It is more fun in the Philippines," as stated in the Phlippine's tourism slogan. APPROVED

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ThS: Coron, Palawan is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its clean surroundings, kind services, and beautiful sea creatures such as tresher sharks and pygmy seahorses. (APPROVED)

TS 1: Coron, Palawan is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its clean surroundings. (ok)
TS 2: Its residents offer kind services to the tourists. (ok)
TS 3: Lastly, Coron, Palawan makes the tourists enjoy their stay because of the beaches' beautiful creatures such as tresher sharks and pygmy seahorses, according to underwaterasia. (ok)

Hook: It is time for you to take a vacation, visit Coron Palwan right now!  It is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its clean surroundings, kind services and beautiful sea creatures such as tresher sharks and pygmy seahorses, according to underwaterasia. NOTE: A hook is only one sentence. After the hook, all the sentences should be in 3rd POV. Kindly revise

EDITED: According to underwaterasia.com, Palawan is the best tourist spot in the Philippines. APPROVED