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A very well done detailed introduction.

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I used examples and quotes to back up my statements

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Mr Berg said I had a clumsy intro to my first paragraph

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Mr Berg said I had a clumsy intro to my first paragraph

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I used good adjectives, eg. 'disdainful' and 'argumentative'.

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I need to work on my punctuation so my scentences are not too long and unending

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I gave good examples of camera shots and techniques

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I need to work on how to spell beatrice

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I clearly explained the relevance of thee examples used

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I need to work on having an introduction that links into my first paragraph

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I need to work on my spelling, punctuation and grammar better

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I could've included more examples of Film Techniques, Camera angles and shots that the director used in the film.

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I need to mention film techniques in my Introduction, as I need to build on them for later

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I used clear examples from the text to support each point

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I used clear examples from the text to support each point

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the lack of topic sentences in my essay paragraphs

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I used alot of contractions in my essay. And it effected my grade so I need to stop using them.

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I have a need to stop using these. An example is don't. Do not use these in formal essays.

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i need to improve my spelling

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I wrote a clear structure

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I need to strengthen my tie backs

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I need to be mindful of the spaces inbetween paragraphs.

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What I need to improve on- I need to improve on my spelling

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I have used clear and convincing examples to support each point I have made

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I had good examples and explanations to back them up

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I constantly used the word love throughout my essay to remind the reader of how it is the main theme.

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Good understanding of how to structure the essay with an intro, body and conclusion.

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Good understanding of how to structure the essay with an intro, body and conclusion.

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I used quotes and examples to back up my information 

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I used quotes and examples to back up my information 

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I wrote a good introduction that prepared the reader for what is coming in the essay

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Know when to use a full stop instead of a coma

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Know when to use a full stop instead of a coma

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I  wrote three clear and descriptive paragraphs.

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I wrote a sufficient introduction

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tie-back sentences

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I learnt that contractions are informal language and should not be used in a formal essay.

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I wrote from the director/author's point of view, which markers are looking for.

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My evidence was relevant and clear.

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I learnt 'referred' is not spelt reffered. I also learnt 'utilises' is not spelt utilizes.

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I wrote a great introduction

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I need to remember to answer each and every part of the question in the introduction.

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What I did well- showed clear understanding on how an essay is structured

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What I did well- showed clear understanding on how an essay is structured